You pivot on one heel, your hair damn near standing on end as you swing your full attention to bear - - on a bathing-suit clad Tenryuu. She's striking a pose, her sword laid over one shoulder, other hand on her hip. The natural carriage of a swordsman means her chest is thrust out a little, making the dark fabric of her one-piece stretch over her impressive bosom enticingly. The dark fabric blends well with her purple hair and eyepatch; hugging her torso tightly enough to showcase her thick torso and wide hips, but modest enough to strike one as functional. As she shifts her stance the fabric drags over her belly just right to reveal the solid muscles in her core, her firm thighs flexing like spring-steel. She's still got that confident, smirking grin on her face by the time your examination reaches her eyes. “Aahahahahaha!” she says, clearly pleased. “Scared, aintch-” Her one visible eye widens as that confident smile freezes and cracks. “S-s-sss-s-s-ssssettt-” You just keep staring, arms stiff at your side, waiting for her to spit out something worth listening to. “B-bbut-” she stammers, taking a step back. “K--k-k-kkkkHAAAKIS!?” You look down at your pants.You look back up at her.“Yeah. Khakis.”
The shattered pieces of her smile are trying to rearrange themselves into something friendlier looking, but are having a hard time getting past “terrified.” “Aaaahahaha, I was just joking with yaaaa, ahah, ah... ha.... haha......” she's edging backwards now, eyes daring around wildly for help. Tatsuta, however, is directly behind her, giving you a small, amused smile over her mess hall cup as her sister ship backs right towards her.“Ah, we gotta get going, I don't wanna miss a big battle soOOOOOAH!” she squeals as she backs into Tatsuta. She whips around at lightspeed, her sword coming off her shoulder and swinging low for a bottom-to-top diagonal slash - - only to grind to a halt on the sole of Tatsuta's flip-flop before it can generate any power. “What's wrong, Tenryuu?” she asks gently, brushing a stray strand of hair out of her sister's face. “You look like you've seen a ghost.” Tenryuu's settled for a small, fixed smile to augment her wide, nervous eyes. “Could you get me a refill, hon?” Tatsuta hands over her glass, and Tenryuu takes it without question, striding away for the drink machine. You hear the table creak as Hate leans on it, no doubt watching Tenryuu's ass work through her swimsuit, but your gaze simply meets the next interloper, waiting silently for her to get the fuck on with it.
Tatsuta's outfit is a rather daring two-piece; the top is that hang-from-the-neck style, drawing the eye to her graceful neck and slender shoulders, then down to the gentle curvature of her ample breasts. Some lacy thing like a sarong wraps her hips, keeping the attention on the gentle taper of her waist and her long, shapely legs; emphasizing a body more slender and elegant than her sister's ample assets. “Like it?” she asks sweetly, turning her face to let her bangs hide one eye coquettishly. “It's new.”“Sokay,” Hate says nonchalantly. “The fuck,” you reply, “are you doing in that when you're supposed to be flying out to Semarang in-” you check your watch- “twenty goddamned minutes?” “Java's rather far south,” Tatsuta admonishes you. “It's winter down there, so the nights are long. It's about eight hours sail to the strait, so...”You just keep staring her in the eye, waiting. “We're hoping to get some beach time when we get down there,” she continues. “After the battle. Went shopping, realized we didn't have time to change~” “That's very nice,” you reply. “You might want to dine and dash, you're running out of time.”Tatsuta clucks her tongue, stepping closer to you. “But Admiral Settle, we haven't seen you since last week, and so much has... happened since then.” You shrug, completely uninterested in where she's going, only how long she'll take to get there.
“Tenryuu seems to be taking her time,” Tatsuta observes, twirling her hair around one finger idly. Tenryuu is indeed bending over the drink dispenser, and you can hear something liquid running... and running, and running, probably straight down the drain. “She's always spoiling for a tussle... suppose she doesn't want to endanger the Admiral.” She gives you another of those small smiles, pleasant to look at but worrying to contemplate. “I'm sure that's what she'll say.” Somehow you doubt this visit was accidental - or Tenryuu's idea. “She likes Movie Night, huh?” “Especially reality TV,” Tatsuta says with another small smile. You hear a chair being pulled out as Hate sits down to sulk, once again invisible behind your gargantuan flagfucking bulk, as he's no doubt framing it. You're dredging your mind for a polite reply when something hits the door like a cannon ball. The glass door shivers in its frame as it hits the wall, the pneumatic cylinder unable to stop it. You turn to see Harder storming through the room, heading for the closest food, the stale breakfast bar. Mogami is hovering near the rewarmed eggs, tongs dangling indecisively in her hand. She starts a bit as Harder snatches a tray off the pile and slams it onto the bar. “Harder-sa-” He flicks his eyes at her and she jerks away like they're striking snakes. Path thus cleared, he stares at the offerings for a few seconds. Then he stares at his tray.
He flips it, sending it flying several feet before it hits the floor. The short, brief motion of his arm revealed something savage lunging to the end of its chain. He strides for the drink area, the crowd parting to let him pour a cup of coffee. He storms towards your table, the scalding-hot liquid sloshing over his hand, bereft of sugar or cream. He's almost in conversational glaring range when Tatsuta pivots neatly on her heel and interposes herself between you two. The short submarine grind to a halt, staring at Tatsuta's svelte midriff. “Hello, Harder.” Harder lifts his chin just enough for his glare to clear his furrowed brows.“How are you doing?” He tilts his head. “Geee,” - the other way, “wow,” -back again, “I dunnoooo, what do YOU think, oh wise and mighty nip?” Tatsuta doesn't blink. “I think you've had a bad day.” Harder just keeps staring. “You might want to-” “Get out of my way,” Harder says. Tatsuta's graceful, flowing body seems to solidify before your eyes, like the supple, flexible resiliency of a yew tree. “Or what?” she asks quietly. “What will you do, little boy?” “Or I will drop you like Little Boy,” Harder replies quietly.You hear Hate slowly rise as the tension sizzling between their eyes rises towards the breaking point.
>>45127102>“Or I will drop you like Little Boy,”Shots.Fucking.Fired.>captcha is boats WTF?
>>45127102>"Or I will drop you like Little Boy"
>>45126979Only officer wear Khakis?Or does she not recognize the admiral?
>>45127173She might not have recongized him from behind.
>>45127102>“Or I will drop you like Little Boy,” Harder replies quietly.
>>45127102I think Harder is angry about Naka being deployed.And will probably demand to be deployed as well.
>>45127192Everyone on base recognizes her from behind though.
>>45126979>>45127000Hahahahaa>>45127102>“Or I will drop you like Little Boy,” Harder replies quietly.god DAMN, son.
Finally all caught up. Nice to see chunnimomboat around!Tenryuu-themed writeup incoming after nakatime!
>>45127102>"Or I will drop you like Little Boy,"
>>45127173Settle was wearing undress khakis when he julienned those two Yakuza. Seeing him in them again tripped Tenryu's "I done fucked up" alarm, so she bugged out.
>>45125506"THIS IS MY SHIP, THIS IS MY BUTT, THIS IS FOR FIGHTING, THIS IS FOR FUCK" the extent of his thought processesi wish i could drink you to death, like, drink so much booze that you fucking puke to death somehow
Your misadventure with the leaf blower done, you run it up to your room before you head back (passing Jintsuu coming the other way, taking care of her own last-minute prep), and finally you enter the CIC, makeup refreshed and disguise in place. Settle is missing by the time you get there, leaving the place mostly full of command staff. You see Goto in the back, suppressing another pang of guilt over how hard you've kept him out of the loop. Next to him, though, a small figure, curling her hair around her finger, looking away wit the same kind of shame you feel. Shigure.Instantly, you know something's wrong. You find your feet moving before you realize it, crossing the way and seeing her--suppressing a wince at the way Shigure flinches away when she sees you. There's tension in the air--more and different than the pre-battle excitement the base silently hums with before every engagement. It clicks. "They went after you again," you whisper quietly. Shigure nods mutely. "They called. For me.""Called? Like--" You look up at Goto, by the phone. You see what he thinks is mutual understanding in his eyes, and he lowers his head very slightly in a nod, before turning back to the screen he's working off. "They can talk," you murmur. "She called herself the HMS Terror," Shigure says. "Jintsuu--Jintsuu was here, up until a moment ago.""Are you okay?" you ask. "...I don't know," Shigure admits. "She said--she said the sea hadn't given up on me, or forgotten me. But..." she looks over at Goto, blinking away faint tears. "Goto-san... shut them down. Hard." You smile at that. "Of course he did."
>>45127173wore my white around bae firste few days, dumbitch only saw me in them and i was dark in the vidoewho is this bitch and wha y is hate's computer full of this shit
>>45127227>Settle was wearing undress khakis when he julienned those two Yakuza. Seeing him in them again tripped Tenryu's "I done fucked up" alarm, so she bugged out.Didn't it get mentioned that the "Settle vs Yaks" video got passed around the shipgirls (most of whom found it entrancing)
>>45127245oh fuck we're hotswapping buckle up lads
>>45127102......................There is so much I would like to say, but it would be unbecoming of me to say about Harder.
>>45127102>TatsutaGenerally she's scared of subs, and for good reason.
>>45127245Goto speaks up, then. "Naka, I just got off the line trying to organize this clusterf--mess," he corrects quickly. "This is going to be a logistical nightmare. We're looking at elements of three navies, not counting us. I gave Jintsuu the word, but I'm going to ask you too--Sendai has been operating on her own since she got here. This is going to be her first joint operation, and there's way too much up in the air..."You nod. "I understand. I trust her. She'll keep a cool head.""Keep an eye on her, just the same. She's a big unknown--she hasn't even sortied with other kanmusume, much less a conventional force. Much less three. Any questions?""I've got one," you hear from behind you. "Why the hell is SHE not in a cell right now?"You turn around to see Harder, pulling the last string of paper off his shoulder, his eyes hard flints locked on Shigure. "She's already put one hole in Naka, are you gunning for two?" Your eyes widen as you feel the stunned, betrayed tremor run through Shigure, the bewildered glance from Goto landing on you. "Who told you?""You told him?" Shigure whispers, at the exact same time.Harder scoffs. "She didn't have to. Did you know guns are loud? Half the fucking base must have heard it, and then Naka leaves your little bunker with her shoulder opened up.""Harder--" you start."What the hell is wrong with you?" He finally snaps, rounding on you."This isn't the time or place--""When IS, Naka?" he spits. "When's good to ask about your complete lack of fucking common sense?"You hear Goto stand behind you. "Just a moment. Shigure, is this true? Did you really...""It wasn't like that," Shigure says, pleadingly. "I--she--""Stop," you say firmly. "Admiral, I can explain what happened. It's not Shigure's fault.""Not her fault? Not her FAULT?" Harder snaps, cutting you off again. "What, is it his? If your dog bites people you put a fucking muzzle on it or you put it--"
>>45127252Because hate is a secret weaboo.
>>45127252Lt.Hate likes Touhou. Noted.
>>45127257Exactly. That's why Tatsuta made that comment about reality TV.
>>45127284Ah, yeah that might do it
>>45127252Goddamit admiral, stop getting drunk!Also that's Marisa, aka Miss SHROOMS FOR BIGGER BOOMS!
>>45127252That explains a lot.>>45127284Oh shit.
>>45127284"HARDER!" Your voice explodes from your lungs before you can rein it in, whipping around to glare back at him. "Why don't you let the Japanese navy handle their own business?""Why are you PROTECTING her?!" he shoots right back--the room around you has gone very, very quiet, your voice and his the loudest noise you've ever heard. "Anything for your destroyers, is that it? Anything for your fucking precious little girls. But fuck me, right? Big mean smelly Yank here to kick over all their sand castles.""This isn't about you," you seethe, talons slicing through bloodless flesh as you ball your fists. "No, it's about YOU, Naka. You knew how I felt about you, and you used it to get me to leave 'your people' alone. That's cool."You feel a cold, heavy weight in your stomach, your anger pitted with the sickly guilt of knowing he isn't completely wrong. "I just wanted you," you press on, "to see us as people. All of us. Not just the ones with NICE ASSES!"He flinches at that--but just a moment, before he replies, his voice deadly low and quiet. "You used me, Naka. I guess I should have expected it.""I guess so," you answer coolly. "Just another Jap, right? We're all the same."Shigure stammers, trying to fill the razor silence in the room. "I-I--""Save it," Harder interrupts. "Both of you. I don't care any more. Go shoot someone in the back. It won't be me.""Thanks, Harder," you growl. "All this time I'd been laboring on under the delusion that I could get through to you. I guess I was deluding myself. Thanks for showing me I can't convince anyone of anything."You turn and walk past Goto, no longer giving a fuck about protocol, about appearances, about anything. "I'll be in the plane."
>>45127278bitch he'd endz you like you don;' even knowlike that's hwat he does, he's up close in front of you? 'ur already dead' and he' dsay 'ur' he'd pronounce it because he can't fucking text he's just, that's fuckign what he fuckin does, don't, like, seriously, don'talso look at this weebshit look>HROOMS FOR BIGGER BOOMS!fucknig retarded who came up with that line
"Wealth means power: the power to subdue, to crush, to exploit, the power to enslave, to outrage, to degrade." - Emma GoldmanLokasenna: http://pastebin.com/z1TYFCKd
>>45127344Naka is the most whiny little bitch in fucking existence
>>45127284>>45127344The fuck is this shit, nigger?Why has everything gone to shit again.I refuse to accept this bullshit.
>>45127344Did I miss a step between Harder leaving his jacket so Naka could sleep apparently for the first time, and Harder (somewhat understandably) losing his shit?
Is there a pastebin for relevant info in this quest?
Project E: Case File #3From: FBI Director ████████████ ████████ █████████████@█████.gov Subject: Fwd: Please helpBCC: JCS: DoD ██████████████ Taskforce Director ██████████████ ███████ ██████████ █████████████@█████.govSent on July ██ 20██ Mayor ███████████ █████████████████ ████████████████@████████.fl.gov said:Dear Director: My chief of police recently brought this to my attention, the entire Miami PD is stumped, so at this time I would ask for your help. I have attached the relevant file to this case. Sincerely, Mayor █████████ Attached: █████████.flv ---------I am forwarding this onto you due to the specific nature of the case, I know it will not go over well with my own people that I am passing this by without giving them a chance, however I feel that a case such as this requires the specialized experience of your taskforce.
>>45127413Well it seems he heard about Shigure shooting Naka, but I think it was also hinted that Erebus was gonna fuck around with his dreams
>>45127413Yes. Yes you did.
>>45127344Sunda Strait is gonna end in tears for everyone involved at this rate.
>>45127413Yeah I wonder what happened as the whole Shigure incident was before that. If I wanted to see bullshit resets I'd watch modern anime.
>>45127413No more than the rest of us.
>>45127417 "So what'dya think?" Asked the policeman standing over Foxx for what seemed to be the third time. "I could probably answer that a lot quicker if you weren't standing in my light." "Sorry." Foxx got down on his hands and knees, almost putting face in the damp wood of the pier. Right where the missing person had been abducted there were marks, large linear gouges running from the opposite end of the dock, then down and into the water. Foxx sighed. This was completely out of his experience. He had a forensics degree, and plenty of field experience, but this, this was new. The security camera on the bait and tackle shop had captured the event, but that was it. A few marks on the wood and some low quality footage was not much to go on. The victim had been wearing a large sunhat which had obscured his face from the cameras. No personal effects left at the scene, and the harbor bed had been churned up after the event, rendering any search impossible. "There's not much here to go on. It's obviously not an event of human origin, but there is very little evidence to follow. We'd have less questions if the man just walked off the pier and vanished." Foxx muttered under his breath as he started back towards the parking lot. "That's kind of cold," remarked the officer. "A man is missing and you're wishing him dead." "No I..." Foxx sighed. "Never mind." He pulled a small black cigarette case from his pocket. He pushed a button, edjecting a cigarette, he could draw it out with his lips and light it with the inbuilt lighter in one motion.
>>45127437Awesome. Thank you. I figured I'd had to have missed a step there somewhere.
>>45127230See, here I am, explaining this fucking shit to you, since as far as anyone can fucking figure, I'm the first US Serviceman to have contact with one of the girls, and your ass is turning it into the same shit the rest of this lot is and making it all about sex. Fuck, see how often I try to get this shit unfucked for you now.
Why can't we have cute Shigures doing cute things?
>>45127413You forgot the part where Erry and Terry manipulated Harder's mind.
So Planefag is done for the night?That is unsatisfying.
>>45127417oh great, more utter shitglad I can just hide it and not miss fucking anything of importance
>>45127453 "Look I'm sorry about the comment, but it would really help me out if you could contact the company that owns the dock and get me a list of the people who rent space there and their contact information, as well as any missing person reports that came in since this guy disappeared." The officer nodded as Foxx handed him a slip of paper with his cell number on it. "I'm staying at the Double Tree off Biscayne, Room 205. If I'm not there call me."
>>45127354Anarchists pls go
>>45127471Because no one else tries to write it. HINT HINT.
>>45127483 Frank Siegel kicked his legs up for another graveyard shift. 12pm to 7am on bank security was about the most boring shift possible. No criminal robbed banks these days, it was all about electronic theft these days. He took a swig from his coffee mug and took a bit of his sandwich. The hours slowly ticked by as he watched the camera feed. Inside, outside, nearly two dozen monitors. *bleep* *bleep* the radio chimed. "What's up Lawrence?" "Hey Frank, can you check the outside east number two feed? I think Dwayne might be camping outside again." Frank's eyes darted upward to one of the corner monitors. Sure enough there was a man with a backpack sleeping in a small alcove of the building. He pressed the button on his radio. "Yeah he's there. Could you take care of him?" "Yeah, alright. Christ this is like the third time we've had to tell him to piss off." Lawrence grumbled. Frank settled back in, watching the monitor as Lawrence came into view on monitor and began conversing with the homeless man. Both black men were fairly heavy set, but Lawrence easily had six inches over the other man. The two began a long conversation and Frank went back for another bite of his sandwich. His eyes flicked to the feed from east one which was directly above the two outside. He paused just as he was about to take a sip from his coffee. The manhole cover was missing. "Hey Lawrence. Was the sewer cover behind you there earlier?" Lawrence paused as he turned behind him. "Yeah, it was. What the fuck?" He slowly inched toward the open entrance. From below it sounded like someone was down there banging, rattling or messing with a lot of metal.
>>45127437>Well it seems he heard about Shigure shooting Naka, but I think it was also hinted that Erebus was gonna fuck around with his dreams*sigh*
>>45127354>Enterprisewat>>45127502YES PLEASEGIVE ME SOME CUTE corruption SHIGURE TIME
>>45127518"Hello?" he called down. There was no reply but the metallic noises. "Damn, I think some kids may be fucking around in the sewers." "Probably. Really sneaky of them though. Just call it in after Dwayne fucks off." Frank replied. "Yeah he's getting his stuff together. He'll be gone in a few-" Lawrence's sentence was cut off by a metallic clattering, a wet crunch and the sound of static. Frank's eyes shot up to the monitor. Lawrence was lying face-down in the street, with a growing pool of what Frank really hoped wasn't blood. There seemed to be a length of something that looked like chain wrapped around Lawrence, "Oh shit. Frank smashed the alarm button and bolted out the door. He turned the corridor left, and sprinted down the hallway. He turned right, clipping a filing cabinet with his shoulder. In one clear go he vaulted over the teller's desks, scattering papers and stamps. He fumbled with his keys to get through the door, and nearly tripped as he clipped the door with his shoulder on the way out. Lawrence was gone, a long red smear leading to the open manhole betrayed his fate. A scream drew his attention to his right. Another length of what now obviously chain was strangling Dwayne and rapidly dragging him to what was likely the same fate as Lawrence.
>deme just fucking stops right in the middle of a scenenicereally classy
>>45127531>>45127495I'm taking feedback if you're offering.
>>45127531That hint was for you to get off your ass and do it yourself!
>>45127354I love that crying look on her face.
>>45127544>>45127518>>45127453man what the fuck>>45127550...and then we immediately go to an interlude that explains what just happened in said scene
>>45127479BUT I THOUGHT YOU LIKED CLIFFHANGERS :<
>>45127544 "Holy shit help! Get this off me!" Screamed the bum. Frank sprinted as hard as he could, now wishing that he had kept up with his new year’s resolution. Dwayne reached out, and Frank jumped forward grabbing tight. His shoes skidded across the road as the two of them were pulled closer and closer. Frank fumbled with his sidearm, the Glock came free and he pulled the trigger. Once, twice, three times he pulled it. Nothing. He pressed the slide against his leg and pushed. A satisfying click let him know it was time to rock. He brought up his pistol and dropped it immediately, as Dwayne was pulled over the lip, Frank's grip on him his only lifeline. "Shoot it! Shoot it! Shoot!" Dwayne screamed. Frank scrambled for his gun. His fingers brushed the trigger guard once, then again. Purchase! He pressed the pistol against the chain and fired once, and then again. He fired again, and again and again, the pistol rocking in his hands. He pulled the trigger until the chain snapped with a horrendous screech of metal on metal as the remainder of the chain fell into the blackness. Frank grabbed Dwayne's other hand and slowly pulled him back up. The homeless man quickly tossed the vestiges of his bindings off. "Thanks man. Thought I was a goner. Man what dafuq was da-" Dwayne was cut off as a second chain shot out of the hole and coiled around his neck with a sickening crunch. Frank scarcely had time to leap forward before a third chain leapt from the darkness straight toward him.
>>45127582But I want to see a fight.
This constant stream of suffering without any nicethings.jpg is seriously beginning to wear on me.The shenanigans don't feel that fun anymore, and everything just seems to be set to dark all the time now.All the fun and light stuff is getting totally overshadowed by all the suffering and dark stuff.It's getting pretty tiring.
after all the shit in this thread got a nigga felling empty as fuck like i need to lay down and find my self fuck
>>45127344I like how Harder comes barging into the CIC, and rants about how Shigure should be shot and/or abandoned right after Goto tells the Abyssals that Shigure is staying with the humans, and had everyone pumped to defend Shigure.He really was being the big Yank who comes in and breaks everything, even to the other USN personnel in the room.
>>45127606I mean, last batch definitely had some nicethings
>>45127596 Foxx's face turned sour as he took a puff of his cigarette. Menthol, which meant Elly had switched them out again. He sighed as he took a long draw. It was better than nothing, and he didn't feel like running out to the store for a new pack at this time of night. He dropped the remainder of the horrid thing in the ashtray next to him just as his phone rang. Rather than a little tone a voice called out. "The right man in the wrong place, can make all the difference in the world. So wake up-" Foxx swiped his finger over the screen. "Foxx here." "Agent Foxx? This is forensics expert Peterson from the Miami PD. Uh Officer Mathis had your number. Anyways we had another incident tonight. Except we have some evidence. A piece of chain about two feet in length." Peterson paused. "What makes you think it's related to officer Mathiss' case?" Foxx asked "Well sir. I took a look at it under the microscope in my kit. Sir this chain is made of iron." "What's strange about an iron chain?" Foxx asked. "It looks like bone sir, healthy living bone tissue, and a quick chemical analysis suggests the presence of hemoglobin. We're going to need to run some more extensive tests on this material, but I've never seen anything like this. Come down to the station when you can." Foxx swiped on his phone again ending the call. All of a sudden he felt like making that trip for those cigarettes.
>>45127479Well, he did screw up Tatsuta's personality. He'll probably need to rework the scene next time (or steam ahead as if nothing happened).
>>45127582I do like the cliffhanger.I assume next thread is either "Fuck it, to the battle." or "EMERGENCY DC ON THE NAKA/HARDER SITUATION!".>>45127606I'd take a nice, straight, simple battle to relax, at this point.
>>45127606Welcome to the Somme, recruit!
>>45127606welcome to planefag threadswhen he doesn't know what to do, he just goes full grimderp
>>45127582wasnt a cliffhanger, just an abrupt stop
Can we just time skip to the battle please next time?
>>45127562>pirate Enterprisehttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QB8C8awaBhcI don't know if this is better or worse than an Abyssal Enterprise. But I'd love to find out. Maybe she meets up with the AWOL crew.
>>45127562It reads like some teenager's first youtube soapbox after reading marx or something for the first time.Not in the sense that it would be unrealistic for a ship to come back feeling that way (Though out of all possible ships to feel like that, Big E feels like quite a stretch), but in that i've actually heard more eloquent manifestos from preteens on youtube.It's less menacing and terrifying as it is petulant.
>>45127647>"The right man in the wrong place, can make all the difference in the world. So wake up-"NEEEEEEEERD
>>45127606Welcome to KCQ, population: Tears.>>45127640But a chunk of which were offset by the writeups in this thread.
>>45127606You have to believe anon. Believe that we will eventually rise out of the abyss.
>>45127354I'm disappointed in you, Enterprise-chan.Instead of doing the right thing and being part of the solution you did the easy thing and became part of the problem. For shame.
>>45127582So are we done for the night?
>>45127649what>captcha asking for lighthouses
>>45127582That was not a cliffhanger, that was a scene cut short.And knowing you next thread will be right into the battle and what the fuck happened in between who the fuck knows.
>>45127653Ah, I knew there was a familiar feeling about all of this.The despair, the blood, the death.
>>45127582"THEY WERE DOING THING, AND THEN ANOTHER THING HAPPENED AND THEN-"SORRY FOLKS THAT'S ALL)))LOOK AT MY EBIN CLIFFHANGER WHICH TOTALLY ISN'T JUST AN ABRUPT STOP BECAUSE I RAN OUT OF SHIT TO DO.
>>45127354Of all the ships, why Enterprise?
>>45127605>GIMME BLOOD FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT>>45127606>FUKKIN GRIMDARK BULLSHIT I WANT SOME NICE THINGS PLANEFAG
>Harder somehow knowing >not mentioning it even once before now.>Snapping back into default that quicklyContrived as shit
>>45127675>Tatsuta confronting a subHa HaNOsorry that's not a thing that she does.and for good reason
So can we start taking bets on who's gonna bite it in the upcoming battle.
She was the front page story in the news. Again. There was a major fit being thrown by a pair of senators, a governor, and a solitary member of the house over why back in ’61, she’d been scrapped instead of saved alongside her sisters as a museum ship. CNN (whatever that was), had no less than twelve separate articles about her arrival and some fear-mongering about what this could mean about future Abyssal attacks. Record gun sales were being reported within 24 hours of her popping up in the middle of nowhere to the time when the cargo plane had transported her to the nearest naval base. South Dakota had to admit she was rather flattered by the outpouring of attention and calls to give the enemy hell she was reading on this new-fangled tablet thingamajig an officer had left her with. “BB-57? Can you please divert your attention from the screen and answer the damn question?” The spook in front of her – she assumed he was a spook, ONI had always wanted to keep her as top secret as possible – was an Oriental motherfucker, and about as exasperated as Nagato’s crew when her boys were rifling through her for souvenirs. South Dakota kept paging through article after article on everything she could find out about the world since she’d disappeared, but she still found enough time to respond. “I don’t know.”
>>45127740A whole lot of abyssals.
>>45127732Whatever it is, I just want more, ya dig?
>>45127732Theres a big fucking difference between "grimdark, haha look how edgy I am, I totally had such a hard life" and a fucking actual battle.You fucking know this you hack.
>>45127740Whoever makes this quest more depressing.
>>45127697basically save for some more write ups.
>>45127732Those two have absolutely nothing to do with each other.You set up a fight scene you fucking finish the damn fight scene.And, on a higher level of story planning (insert >implying here), we need more overall "nice" scenes.
>>45127713>My feet hurt from trench foot>Arty's too loud>There's rats everywhere>My battle buddy's lying dead in the trench with me>I wish I was at home drinking stout with my mates at the pub
>>45127669Trust me, I want to get to the battle too. Unfortunately, this scene here, with Harder, MUST happen before I can do that.You'll see why.Think I'll just write up the OP of the next thread tomorrow in full, complete with... huh. Complete with the transition to the battle... that might be kinda long. Oh well fukkit nobody complained about the LA one so yeah that works.
>>45127740Naka. Hence the excuse to make Harder go back to hating everyone again.
>>45127739Or maybe she projects just as much of a front as Tenryuu.
Can we just fucking kill Naka so Dan will fuck off already. This got boring a long time ago.
>>45127746The Spook seemed about ready to either explode or collapse into a heap of tear filled rage. “That’s not an acceptable answer.” “Acceptable? I was minding my own damn business and just having a gay old time before suddenly I’m in bumfuck city in the state of who gives a shit, have a body, and find out I’ve been scrap metal for 57 years!” South Dakota finally looked up from her searches, a short ball of barely contained fury. “I know less shit than you egghead chucklefucks about why I’m back besides that I didn’t want to go any deeper!” A gargling noise of restrained insults and angry words inherited from generations of old Chinese landladies flowing through Chang’s blood was his only response before he regained control of himself. “Fine. Fine. I’ll give you that. We don’t know the metaphysical garbage of how or why either. But you’re back, and I need to know what side you’re on.” South Dakota raised an eyebrow. “On the side of baseball, mom’s apple pie, and shooting communists in the balls while singing the national anthem and waving an American flag. Did the Soviets pull some crazy shit and y’all needed me back?” “The Soviets collapsed in ’91. We’ve also had a black president.” “What.” “If you’d read the fucking briefing I gave you instead of that fucking screen then you’d know that already!” The girl scowled. “I wanted to know if we had flying cars, give me a break Chop Suey…” Chang buried his face in his hands. This was going to be a long, long day.
>>45127732Man, that ain't what it is.I like the grimdark, but it just feels like there ain't enough of a balance, it's just the same stuff going after the same emotional response every time.I dunno, call me a weak bitch, I guess.
>>45127708Like Ghost did?>>45127783Well taht was a flashback, not the present.
>>45127783Well yeah, the scene with Harder happened. It just did, we all saw it. I thought you were just, doing a Naka cut-in before resuming the scene from your end.
>>45127723Enterprise - specifically, CV-6 - was part of the New Deal. Her /existence/ was a blow against poverty and grinding, relentless desolation. From that initial success she became /the/ hero of the Pacific.And then she comes back to a nation that seems, to her, hell-bent on returning to the problems she was supposed to solve. And it makes her feel like everything she did was for nothing. Why did she bother? Why did she care? It's a hard thing, to be an idealist and watch your heroes sell out. So she sold out too. Having the sea whispering in her ear the entire time certainly didn't fucking help matters, mind.
>>45127783I think what happened with Harder makes sense, and I don't dispute that, but you gotta have at least one writeup that gives us some hope at the end of the tunnel.I think the Enterprise writeup could have been saved for another day, as well as gone through the editor a few more times.None of it is bad on its own, but all together it leaves everyone exhausted and a little salty.
>>45127801Crix, shut the fuck up.
>>45127803Ostfriesland strolled down the sidewalks, enlisted and officers alike giving her a wide berth and a long salute as she passed, her dignified expression doing nothing to hide the fury in her blazing blue eyes. Suggesting she join the British, really? Had manners disintegrated this low since she’d been gone that an upstart officer in an upstart navy could even dream of a German dreadnaught sailing alongside a British force? The nerve of that… that… a myriad of German curses filled her mind that defied translation to English and certainly wouldn’t have sounded as angry or intense. Why didn’t they just send her to the scrapyard like her sisters already if they didn’t need her. Surely their aircraft carriers would be more useful than an outdated bucket of bolts like her. Ostfriesland’s bitter mumbling tirade was interrupted by a tap on her shoulder and a telephone screen shoved in her face with a message in the Kaiser’s German. “You seem upset.” “Why, U-1105, would you think that?” Ostfriesland said, turning to look down on the newfangled U-boat who was her only countryman on base. “You slipped into that weird Dutch of yours,” was the quickly typed reply, the submarine’s ‘Gutentag Miezekätzchen’ case briefly visible while she composed her response. “It’s kind of a giveaway.” “It’s not Dutch…” Ostfriesland mumbled. “I don’t care.” The battleship looked down on the submarine, giving her a long piercing stare. Still, the U-boat held her ground, silent as the grave. Finally, Ostfriesland caved.
>>45127817>Like Ghost did?I don't know what are you talking about.
>>45127732I'm fine with Grimdark if it makes sense.This... doesn't
>>45127562>I'm taking feedback if you're offering.I expect Enterprise to be a better person, not that.The girl that made that video is like a teenager throwing a temper tantrum because the world isn't fair. Only that teenager has extreme firepower.If it had been someone else maybe I could say "oh well, another abyssal expressing mindless and useless anger at the world," but since that is Enterprise I'll have to reject that characterization out of hand.
>>45127836>>45127808Welcome to Bastogne!Where the coffee breaks are seconds longAll the happy thoughts are merely afterthoughtsand the defensive emplacements don't offer a lot of protection
>>45127801Ya anally annihilated about anything in particular?
>>45127855“Fine. Fine. He said that if I didn’t want to serve here, the British would be more than happy to have me.” U-1105’s fingers flew over the keyboard onscreen. “The Fatherland doesn’t want us to serve them right now. I’m sorry I didn’t tell you before this.” “I wouldn’t have believed you.” The battleship admitted, starting to walk back towards her chair on the dockside. “I don’t even know why they want me at all. It’s not as if they are short on stronger vessels.” U-1105 followed her in silence like a shadow, her jet black bodysuit and clothes contrasting brilliantly against her extremely pale skin and near white hair. “Then again, I suppose we could perhaps go home sometime, at least to visit if we help.” Ostfriesland continued to the quiet companion in her wake, her skirts billowing up slightly in the wind. “Ah, did you wish to go home when you came back?” The garishly pink phone once again was shoved into Ostfriesland’s hands. “No. I like it here. They have so many big submarines here, and I enjoy playing around with them.” The little giggle was left unstated or made, U-1105 still as silent as the grave when she pulled the phone back to herself. “These ones don’t even have props! Tracking them is hard.”
>>45127858in SW89 he'd skip time between the end of one thread and the beginning of the next, making for a jarring shift at times.
>>45127682Yeah Foxx is actually a HUUUUUUUGE nerd. He even wears ties with anime characters on the inside, He think I don't know but. I TOTALLY KNOW
>>45127783>Think I'll just write up the OP of the next thread tomorrow in full, complete with... huh. Complete with the transition to the battle... that might be kinda long. Oh well fukkit nobody complained about the LA one so yeah that works.Next thread *tomorrow*?
>>45127827I guess it must be the name of Nakafag.Crix is just being a salty bastard because he hates the Naka stuff.
>>45127858I had a major problem with pacing and tended to timeskip over things some of the guys really wanted to see. Fortunately, fap angel is rather better about that than I was.
>>45127827Butthurt writefag who does naka.Basically his edgy self insert character as he goes on and on about how hard of a life he had.>>45127854>you'll ever actually know
>>45127886Shine on, you crazy diamond.
>>45127649I am a bit unsatisfied with it. I would not egg on a fight in the middle of the Mess Hall with the Admiral watching on.
>>45127831Yep. Preteen youtube tantrum drivel.
>>45127732Hey planefaggot, when are you going to stop waffling and get to the battle?Pay debts.
>>45127783No stream? Awww. Oh well, it's the way it has to be.>>45127808It's the lack of Catharsis that makes it grind you down.>>45127878Such a familiar feeling. Like the trenches.>>45127896PF maintains temporal consistency well. However, it does make the Catharsis long in coming.
>>45127881U-1105 was known on base already as a sort of anomaly, and was part of why Ostfriesland’s arrival was greeted less with fear and more with curiosity. Nobody really knew why a ship came back on its own, especially so far from home. Speculation was that it had to do with the location of the wreck, but even that wasn’t too well collaborated. Even the die-hard investigators knew when to leave well enough alone, and didn’t question too much. “Just try not to irritate the amerikaner’s too much, ja?” The battleship’s chair and stack of books were just as she had left them. Ostfriesland suddenly found her space less enjoyable a spot to relax and enjoy the sounds of the Atlantic. There was just too much in the way now. Like the Atlantic fleet. “Help me carry a few of these back Kätzchen.” U-1105 let out a soft sigh, picking up a few of the lighter volumes of history the larger ship had dragged with her out to the waterfront. Ostfriesland herself hefted a rather impressive stack, carrying them back towards the recently converted hull barracks. She would have a lot of catching up to do before she would feel totally comfortable sortieing once more. Besides, it wasn’t like she was going anywhere else any time soon. ---- Deep below the Atlantic, she waited. She could hear the songs of the propeller shafts far far away, she and her feral sisters stalking them from below the waves. She had peeked above the surface at their quarry, before slipping back down into the depths, telling everyone just exactly what she’d seen. It was something that made her salivate, and the rest of the wolf pack howl for a chance to attack. Some of them distantly remembered a happy time where this sight was oh so common, and their thirst for blood had been sated time and time again with the sound of a merchant ship sinking into the depths bleeding oil and men.
>>45127889I fucking wish I could shitpost as hard as Crix with as little effort.
>>45127881>U-boat playing with Virginiascute
>>45127909Let's not lie, yes you would. I was sitting right fucking there, and we both know you want to see me in action. You saw Settle, now I'm the great fucking unknown.
>>45127901You're just salty because once upon a time there was only naka and torpedosluts and planefag chose naka.
>>45127836>I think what happened with Harder makes sense, and I don't dispute that, but you gotta have at least one writeup that gives us some hope at the end of the tunnel.>hopeI can tell you this: The Hope? That scene is already written. I really wanna post it. The Bad End...? That's... outlined. I hope I don't ever have to write it.
>>45127783We're getting a new thread tomorrow? Is this some kind of greek miracle?
>>45127920To an extent, yes. But have /any/ of these ships been emotionally mature? Functional, maybe, but mature? The closest we've got to people with their shit together are Naka (hahahaha, ha...ow...), Hamp, & Arizona. All of whom are blatantly insane.
>>45127948I will do everything in my power to get the Bad End
>>45127831>It's a hard thing, to be an idealist and watch your heroes sell out. So she sold out too. Nope. Not accepting that. Especially not in the manner it was delivered.Selling out is unworthy of her.
>>45127948I'm not talking about the Harder storyline's resolution, I'm talking about the selection of writeups.Have at least one happy one to balance things out. Get what I'm saying?
>>45127943>now I'm the great fucking unknown.Jesus fuck, Hate, build a bridge and get over yourself already.
>>45127945Nobody ever fucking liked torpedo sluts, and Naka has devolved into pointless edgefest.
>>45127956I think he's just gonna be responsible and write it early
>>45127927>No stream? Awww.Actually, me and Ghostdivision are going to stream Memelands tomorrow afternoon. I'll be using my morning to write, like I usually do - so I may as well write that, eh?
>>45127969Emotional trauma =/= emotional immaturity.
>>45127831If that's what you plan to do with Enterprise, it's disappointing.Enterprise is the one ship that never gave up. She's Captain America. When America seems terrible, Captain America is there to be the America we deserve.
>>45127975You might have to write it yourself or wait for teh next Alabama piece (which is a generally happy thing.)
>>45127970Have fun pretending Planefag won't ignore deliberate attempts at a Bad End.
>>45127831Sounds like bullshit.Enterprise was also remembered fondly for the heroic actions of her crew in the Pacific campaign.
>>45127975Sadly, 'bamafag isn't around right now, or there probably would be. IIRC he's at AIT for a while, so we may not have too too much outta him for the duration of that, either.
>>45127929An unprotected convoy. They’d been told to expect one eventually, one of theirs not of the pack having spotted it hours earlier, miles upon miles away. That didn’t slake their anticipation though, or their appetite. The hunt was on. Dusk was falling, the sun slipping behind the horizon. It was going to rise blood red the next morning. The Hunter slowly rose to the surface, her sisters behind her – the pack needed to get into position, and traveling on the surface was far faster than below. It would take time, but they were patient hunters. Extremely patient. The attack was started by one of her sisters, a torpedo in the dark, all of them silently tracking it through the water. She shook her head. It was going wide. They all made an adjustment, computers clicking up the required target data and configuring the solutions needed. Then, she and all four of her sisters fired. The fish raced through the water, electric motors not even showing a trail as it swept up under the first freighter, a brilliant explosion shattering the quiet night in the North Atlantic. A plume of water and fire erupted into the air, the cargo ship breaking in half as the magnetic pistol properly triggered, breaking the ships spine. The sound of a ship ripping itself in half as it went down was music to the ears of the wolfpack. She could smell the fear in the air, the quiet panic and stunned reaction of a small animal having come face to face with a large predator. Confusion reigned in the convoy as they tried to figure out if it was an accident or not; the second explosion though though sealed their fate.
>>45127993>Typhoons>they aren't repeatedly bombing Shermans and ignoring pre-established friendly markersUnhistorical.
>>45128007If I knew something about Naval history, I'd gladly contribute.
>>45128025>as the magnetic pistol properly triggeredOk I am calling fucking BULLSHIT here
>>45128004That's it exactly, what I couldn't put my finger on that bothered me.It's Captain America having a tantrum and going all Jesse James on shit instead of Saving the world.Those are exactly the words I was looking for.
>>45128025A tanker went down next, two torpedoes hitting it in the nose, the ships own momentum sending it screaming down below the waves. Another pair of cargo ships exploded, impacts in the back halves killing their engines as secondary explosions soon followed. Oil spread like blood over the surface of the choppy ocean. Men drowned in the waves as the wolfpack opened fire with the few deck guns it had, attempting to cripple the few stragglers who were desperately trying to escape. As they drew away, the hunters slipped away under the waves, the last things visible were the patterns on their backs, emblems of the time before they rose again to terrorize the waves.---High above the atmosphere, a solitary satellite watched the wolfpack dive deep into the abyss once again. The images it captured would soon be picked over by the intelligence community of NATO, in hopes of discovering more information about Abyssal tactics and behavior. That however, wasn’t what would captivate them. What would catch their attention was the simple image of one of the Abyssals’ looking up, searching the air for something with like a smile on her face. That message couldn’t be misinterpreted.
>>45127943Oh, yes. Yes I have seen you in action. I have had in my possion a number of 'thin books' that have been passed around the base of you, Settle, and others. But I would not lie and say I would pass up see you in action live. With you, Settle and now Hamp in on the action. It would be quite something! Don't let me down. ;-)
>>45128050It'd be one thing if Enterprise was a Robin Hood type character or tried to fix a very broken world, but trying to break it further is out of character with everything about the ship itself.
>>45128056Please stop. Your roleplay is shitty as hell.
>>45128041I don't think most of these people do have knowelge; they either wing it or focus on stuff that doesn't require it.Ships aren't Planefag's strong point either.
>>45128052“Come and get me.”Whoops, fucked up the end of the last post.
>>45127948Hope remains? Good. Good.I too hope to not see the Bad End.>>45127993I'll try to be there, but family concerns might make me late.Good luck and may the Muses guide you.
>>45127354You know, given that Planefag basically confirmed that he believes much of the suffering american ships experienced was unnecessarily inflicted by american strategy, I really shouldn't be surprised by this.(Expecting that all ship spirits have to put down by seaside anti-ship missiles now)
>We used to get Deutschland, Spee, Bama and Bongsluts>now we get meme boat that can teleport through space time for some reason>and ass ravaged SoDak fag who just shitposts constantly and leaks sensitive infowow
>>45128078Well there's SOME research you can do online, if not completely rigorous.Just go wiki-trawling every term you see and don't understand. Things like Dreadnought, All-or-nothing armor, etc. Reading battles to get an idea of things is also good.
>>45128113>now we get meme boat that can teleport through space time for some reason>doesn't know about the Philadelphia experiment
>>45127992this. I got used to only getting through half of the planned content, on average, in SWQ (writing is hard and takes time,) but god dammit I want to write shit blowing up already. Nothing you saw today was filler - it's all important and was rewarding to write - but to round out the chat with Harder? I don't really need vote options offered for that. Which means we could lose a good hour of questing time on a weekday if I use normal time to grind through it, so - yeah, everything up to the first vote for the battle is a candidite for prewriting. Which would be the completion of the Harder scene, the timeskip, the scene setting/tactical layout, and then the actual scrap.Gives me time to get a CMANO map set up as well.
>>45128113Welcome to what happens when a quest circle delays under the writer's own unchecked hubrius.
>>45128113To be fair bama is still posting.Who's the sodak fag, though? I don't pay much attention to the not-directly-related writeups.
>>45128056You genuinely need to stop now, dude.It's getting pretty bad.
>>45128113Hey crix. Lay off the salt.
>>45128130>The Philadelphia Experiment is an alleged military experiment that is said to have been carried out by the U.S. Navy at the Philadelphia Naval Shipyard in Philadelphia, Pennsylvania some time around October 28, 1943. The U.S. Navy destroyer escort USS Eldridge (DE-173) was claimed to have been rendered invisible (or "cloaked") to enemy devices.>The story is widely understood to be a hoax. The U.S. Navy maintains that no such experiment was ever conducted, that the details of the story contradict well-established facts about the USS Eldridge, and that the alleged claims do not conform to known physical laws.The experiment itself is literally a meme and is absolutely zero justification for dr who bullshit.
>>45128113It's like the old writefags had perfectly legitimate reasons for leaving!
>>45128070I'm not liking how Enterprise was portrayed here either
what the fuck planefag you can't leave right after that burn what the fuck hap->Think I'll just write up the OP of the next thread tomorrowALL IS FORGIVEN THANK YOU BASED PLANEFAG
>>45128132I'm curious why you aren't just continuing the Harder converation right now- just too late in the night for you?And yeah I poked around at cmano earlier today, it's a pretty constricted strait
>>45128070>>45128050>>45128020>>45128004>>45127831You know what would be interesting?Enterprise playing pirate against both abyssals and regular governments, then distributing supplies to people stuck on remote islands under constant abyssal attack.Better than "rage against the world". That's the Abyssal's M.O. and if Enterprise bought into it, she'd have joined the abyssals.
>>45128130>doesn't know about the Philadelphia experiment>literally didn't happen>literally no proof at all, the ship was still out doing patrols the whole fucking time according to the navy, the ships logs, and the crewand in other news, the SHIELD Helicarrier is our newest shipslut :^ )
>>45128205>>45128169Shipgirls aren't real either.
>>45128130>>45128169Honestly if you wanted to use the philadelphia experiment then you should be writing some body horror shit, not le wacky meme girl who can jump through time.
Did somebody order something fun?- - - - - - Light Cruiser Tenryuu let out a long, wheezing gasp as she fell back into her bunk. Literally every part of her body hurt. Her arms burned as muscles she didn't even know she had screamed at her in furious soreness. Her stomach... well, the less said about the new and interesting kinds of agony going on down there, the better. "Owwwwwwwww," the cruiser moaned a pathetic cry as she shifted in her bed. She was too tired to even bother trying to get her sweat-soaked workout clothes off. And no, it wasn't because she'd worked her shoulders so hard she couldn't physically lift them high enough to get her bra off. That was a totally disingenuous rumor being proliferate by... some... fucker. Tatsuta, probably. It had to be Tatsuta's fault. The light cruiser squirmed in her bed, shimming with the handful of muscles not in open revolt towards the half-finished protein shake sitting on a her bedside table. Well, not *on*, Tenryuu had to keep up a good example for her- for the girls of DesDiv six that were most certainly *not* her kids. The light cruiser used a coaster like a fucking lady. A coaster that did double duty as a crappy shonen Manga, but a coaster regardless. Tenryuu scowled at the bottle sitting just outside of her reach and grit her teeth in concentration. She was a cruiser of the Imperial Japanese Navy, she refused to be outplayed by an inanimate fucking object. She would not be bested by a few scraps of plastic and a little metal whisking ball. No way. Not in this life. She rolled over onto her belly, her tie catching on one of the... floaty... horn... thingies that constantly followed her head around despite not being attached to it by any means. The delicious sort-of-but-not-really-chocolate elixir was within her grasp. She just had to reach out and- Oh shit.
>>45128216She's obviously more unstuck in time than anything else.
>>45128216>IT'S TOO DARK AND GRIM PLANEFAG>MAN FUCK THIS WHACKY MEME BOAT GO AWAYtime for bed
>>45128210Figured as much. Cheers boss, fun thread....Heavy as shit thread, but that's fun too.
>>45128219Tenryuu felt the world grind to a halt. Reality around her flowed like molasses as she *slooowly* overbalanced. Her hip was the first thing to fall off her bed, and the sudden loss of a sturdy object to rest its weight on sent the cruiser's body rolling along her keel. It wasn't unlike capsizing. Only somehow more humiliating. "OW!" Reality suddenly snapped back to its normal pace as Tenryuu landed ass-first on the dorm floor. Jets of pain shot though her already sore stern as it slammed into hard wood. A split second later, the cruiser saw her shake come toppling off her table. The half-full bottle flipped end over end as it angled straight towards her one-eyed face. Tenryuu had barely enough time to mutter a resigned "fuck my life." before the bottle smashed home an inch from her nose. "Way to fucking go, Chunniboat." Tenryuu scowled and attempted to look up at the critic, but her sore abs simply refused to answer her helm's commands. Not that she *needed* to see, mind you. She'd know that tone anywhere. "Fuck you, Maya. It's not chunni, it's cool." "Ah huh," Maya rolled her eyes as she walked into Tenryuu's field of vision. "Need a hand?" "Nah," said Tenryuu, "Thought I'd lie here and try and catch upskirts."
>>4512823638 posters in this thread, mate. 38 people with 50 opinions
>>45128236Yeah, it's the way it is.Depressing, isn't it?Good Night, man.
>>45128238Maya rolled her eyes again, this time somehow *harder*. It was a skill she'd picked up from Lieutenant Hate that Tenryuu herself had yet to master. "You've been spending too much time around Iku," said the heavy cruiser, offering her hand to her friend. "Any time around her is too much," said Tenryuu, forcing her arm to answer her long enough to grasp Maya's by the elbow. "Fair 'nuff," said Maya, her eyes raking down the light cruiser's body. Her workout outfit of gym shorts and a purple sports bra wasn't the lewdest thing on base--especially considering Shimakaze--but it wasn't that prudish either. "Been working out?" "You can tell?" said Tenryuu, a sly grin on her face as she shuffled over to her bed. This time, she *sat* on it instead of just flopping down like a dead fish. "Hell yeah I can tell," said Maya, giving the light cruiser a slap on her sore belly, "No more momboat tummy, eh?" Tenryuu scowled. She was never found of the 'momboat' moniker. She wasn't nearly old and... uncool enough to be a mom to the DesDiv six torpedo lolis. If anything, she was a bigsister boat. But despite her best efforts, that term just hadn't stuck. But, there were things Tenryuu hated more than being called a momboat. And one of those was being told she had a "momboat belly." A, she wasn't even that chubby. It was just a swimsuit that was... cut a little unflatteringly. That, and she'd been running patrols all month with barely enough time to grab a snack, let alone something healthy. B, how would that even work? The four Akatsuki sisters weren't her kids, shipgirls can't get pregnant! It was all a big stupid joke at her expense. "Lemme guess," said Maya. The cruiser made a show of fixing Tenryuu in her smirking gaze, one hand held open while a crew of faeries slowly lowered a frosty beer into it with one of her boat cranes, "Kitty swimsuit?"
>>45128210You did well enough fap angel. go crash out and get some sleep.
>>45128236If le wacky meme girl is literally the only recourse against the grim darkness of planefag there is only edge then yes I'd rather take the edge
>>45128212Yeah, well we don't have a fucking Death Star shipslut either, do we?Part of the whole fucking appeal of this quest is that the characters and history are fairly realistic. For example, Yamato has yet to turn into a fucking space ship, which would be more plausible than the fucking shit going on in that writeup.
>>45128258Tenryuu felt her brain hard-crash. "I- Kitty- what?" "Kitty swimsuit," said Maya, "It's the new *thing*, apparently. A bikini with a cat cutout over the tits." The heavy cruiser bounced her eyebrows suggestively as her eyes hovered over the light cruiser's substantial topside displacement. "That's a thing?" "Of course it's a thing," said Maya, "Have you see this country?" "Fair point." "Look, if it's not a kitty swimsuit..." Maya paused for dramatic effect. Tenryuu didn't know why, but she suddenly felt an aura of doom surround her. "It's for a guy, isn't it?" concluded the heavy cruiser. "C'mon, spill. it better not be Settle." "Wait, Settle, why?" said Tenryuu. "'Cause I've got five hundred yen that says he and Shoukaku start dancing the vertical tango before the month's out." "Vertical?" "Fuck." Maya glanced at one of her faeries who obligingly slapped her in the forehead. "Horizontal tango. Sex. And quit changing the subject." Tenryuu scowled, her one remaining eye narrowing to a slit. "Fuck you, Maya." "Ha!" Maya let out a triumphant laugh, "Ha! I knew it! You're hot and heavy for Hate!" "Hey! I never-" Tenryuu stalled mid sentence, "How'd you get *that* from 'fuck you, Maya.'?" For a moment, the two cruisers stared at each other. Then Tenryuu let out a quiet, "ooooooooh." She blinked. "C'mere, Maya..." "Hmm... why?" said the heavy cruiser with a teasing smirk.
>>45128236Grimdark is fine if not taken to excess.Comedy and lighthearted stuff is fine when it doesn't clash horribly with everything else in the story/setting so far.
>>45128236OH LOOK SOMETHING THAT'S NOT COMPLETE TRIPE BUT ISN'T EDGY JUST WHAT THE DOCTOR ORDERED>>45128219
>>45128236Hey Planefag.Different people have different opinions, you know.
>>45128279"I'm gonna cut you," said Tenryuu, her face set in a scowl while she tried to get her hand to wander in the general direction of her sword. "Hate and Tenryuu sittin' in a tree..." sing-songed Maya, stopping only to take a long sip from her dink. "I'm..." Tenryuu scowled, her exhausted arm only responding to her commands in the most general of ways, "I'm gonna... I'll cut you later." "Uh huh," said Maya. She kicked her heels up on the chunk of horribly mangled bedding beside Tenryuu, "Seriously though, you're looking good." Tenryuu would've blushed if her face wasn't already flush from her workout. "Thanks, Maya." "You'll get that Marine aboard in no time." "MAYA!" Maya bounced to her feat, dodging the light cruiser's lazy swipe like it wasn't even there. She didn't say a word as she turned on her heel, but her eyes glinted with mischievous light. "I WILL FUCKING CUT YOU!" Maya rolled her eyes. On her shoulder, two tiny faeries slowly unfurled a string of... signal flags. Kilo, India, Sierra, Third substitute, Second substitute, Fourth Substitute, Golf. "MAYA, GODDAMMIT!"- - - ->>45128261Ahem.
>>45128236>there is no fucking middle groundgo to sleep you dumb fuck, maybe you'll become less retarded in the morning
>>45127938Fun fact - U - 1105 can sort of be considered one of the Virgina classes great grandmothers. She's equipped with Albrecht coating, a predecessor of the rubber coating like material that's now standard on modern day submarines.
So since the first Enterprise writeup was so crap, I guess we can put that squarely into the not canon bucket.It's nice when it goes easily like this.
>>45128281Shit I forgot to post this during the corgi scene>HE LOOKED AT ME!>HE LOOKED AT YOUR OUTFIT!GOOD NIIIIIIGHT>>45128290BUT THAT WAS LITERALLY THE SAME GUYCONSPIRACY CONSPIRACY EVERYWHEREBRB SHOWERKNIFE
>>45128257How does that planefag cock taste, m8
>>45128258>shipgirls can't get pregnant!We have yet to determine this, Tenryuu.
>>45128302Nice little read; makes me wish we had more of those two.
>>45128274The answer to your question is: in this universe, what allegedly happened to the USS Eldridge is legitimate.There is nothing fictional about it in the confines of this quest. If you dislike the fact this quest is a work of fiction that seeks to make its character interesting through addition of rumor and legend, well, I'd like to remind you this is basically one giant ghost story.>>45128314Yeah, I'd rather Planefag himself do a ship as important as Enterprise. Even if it means she's final boss abyssal.It'd be like a writeupfag doing Arizona or Iowa. Some ships are too important to let someone else screw up.
>>45128302>>45128279>>45128258>>45128238>>45128219Tenryuu a cute
>>45128314's a learning experience, yes. Feedback thus far has been helpful, and I appreciate the folks that stopped to give it a read.
>>45128302"KISSISG"? Did... did Maya just typo her attempt at trolling Tenryuu?
>>45128212I'm hoping the Chinese put up an ion cannon network because they thought C&C was actually western propaganda, and just didn't bother telling anyone.
To the guy who offered to write Edwards AFB radio chatter during LA, i sure hope you deliver next thread.
>>45128283>OH LOOK SOMETHING THAT'S NOT COMPLETE TRIPE BUT ISN'T EDGY JUST WHAT THE DOCTOR ORDEREDWhy thank you!
>>45128302Yep, that's why I posted this afterwards: >>45128283
>>45128316>BUT THAT WAS LITERALLY THE SAME GUYIn a room with 3 humans you'll find 5 opinions.
>>45128362I think the worst thing about it is that was where you started the story.Start the story from the beginning. Not the middle. That leaves people unable to accept where the character is at that moment.Also, you yourself as a writer might have the character lead you down paths you weren't expecting.
>>45128351>The answer to your question is: in this universe, what allegedly happened to the USS Eldridge is legitimate.BRB, conjuring up all of the Tosa class battleships, the Lexington class battlecruisers, the 1920's South Dakotas, Every single fucking Tillman design, Montana, and every other god damn paper ship ever made, just because I can. Fuck history, we're going for memes.
>>45128402>just because one historical fact is changed, all historical facts are changedBy your logic, because abyssals exist, aliens exist.You're an idiot troll.
I heard something about a shipgirl being boarded and captured by the abyssals or something, can someone point out to me when that happened? In pretty sure I missed that.
>>45128363Um... shit. Yeah. Should be fifth substitute.
>>45128316>BUT THAT WAS LITERALLY THE SAME GUYWhat are you talking about I'm not bitching it's too grim.
>>45128412>>45128402If the Martians show up in-quest I'm blaming you guys.
>>45128412Aliens almost certainly exist. It would be the utmost hubris to assume we're the only sapient beings in the universe.Whether we ever meet them or not, that's another matter entirely.
Wow, I'm not understanding the hate for the Enterprise thing at all. I mean it seems like everyone has this fetishized idea of what the Big E should be, and ignoring that people hide behind their own masks all the time. People have their own reasons for things all the time and feel hate and anger for the most irrational goddamn reasons. I don't think it's so infeasible that Enterprise is just so goddamn pissed that she's ready to throw away everything she stood for. People make weird decisions based on irrational anger all the time.I think that's more what the dislike is about. Could the writing itself be better? Sure. But Enterprise is clearly not in control of her anger, she's obviously pissed, and she's not conforming to expectations, and it seems to me *that* is what a lot of the dislike is about.
>>45128412>By your logic, because abyssals exist, aliens exist.Hey guess what, they do nowI'm sure somebody will w ite shipslut space battleship Yamato fighting them in space any day now. It would actually be more interesting than "le wacky time travel meme boat".
>>45128362>'s a learning experience, yes. Feedback thus far has been helpful, and I appreciate the folks that stopped to give it a read.Sorry anon, but when it comes to Enterprise you've got much bigger shoes to fill. She's too significant and well known. Many people already have their own ideas of what she should be.You also have stories like The Greatest Generation that featured her.Having your Enterprise be compared to a teenager raging on Youtube about the world not being fair is not a good sort of personality to be compared to.
>>45128422Radio Free Vengeance. The most terrifying kiss of your life.That don't mean Erry and Terry aren't adorable little scamps, though.
>>45128422The writeups featuring Terror and Erebus, though I don't have a link handy>>45128442>Flying Abyssal ore carrier
>>45128394>Start the story from the beginning. Not the middle. That leaves people unable to accept where the character is at that moment.VIRGIL CALLEDHE SAID FUCK YOU
>>45128351Which is why I'm sticking with a class of ship nobody really gave a fuck about, an old OG Dred that got blown to shit, and a buncha U-Boats nobody really cares about. On the other hand I'm learning a kind of almost autistic level of knowledge about all the horrible ways German submariners died, and the boats they lived in. It's really sobering how many of them carried emblems.
>>45128339Now I have a rather lewd scene of faerys screaming about closing watertight doors and preparing to repel boarders. Thanks for that...
>>45128435Uh, no, it should be 'November'. 'Fifth substitute' would get you KISSIIG.
>>45128355It's Tenryuu. Her cuteness is directly proportional to how badass and not-cute she's trying to be.Hope ya'll enjoy it, thoughts?
>>45128459ARE YOU VIRGIL? HOW ABOUT A PUBLISHED AUTHOR?NO?OKAY, WRITE LIKE A NORMAL PERSON.
>>45128274>Yamato has yet to turn into a fucking space shipYou rang?
>>45128454Damn, can't you fuck off already with that shit.Fuckin' exhausting.
>>45128422Here you go anon. Full set to date.RADIO FREE VENGEANCE: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vYtKQ_mY3EmNekAR2LgFsxM5FMFOMLWbIKoMuiXPiq8/edit?usp=sharingBEST SERVED COLD: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X5E-vb-w9X7zyZpoV4-TkFDgYxghyxvyTNdrINcHb9E/edit?usp=sharingFRATERNIZING WITH THE ENEMY: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Y6_bsb_jVGPB_MYT9JVZilZ8LVNo4wtHSkzV1L9Hfj8/edit?usp=sharingMADAME GUILLOTINE: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W-iqu3zcPGY2N9RSdQKjbKTPYcFomNSMHQQb7hvpKkQ/edit?usp=sharing
>>45128444Because things being written in contrary to what people expect for the sole purpose of being contrarian, is just stupid bullshit that makes people angry.
>>45128279"I'm gonna cut you," said Tenryuu, her face set in a scowl while she tried to get her hand to wander in the general direction of her sword."Hate and Tenryuu sittin' in a tree..." sing-songed Maya, stopping only to take a long sip from her dink."I'm..." Tenryuu scowled, her exhausted arm only responding to her commands in the most general of ways, "I'm gonna... I'll cut you later.""Uh huh," said Maya. She kicked her heels up on the chunk of horribly mangled bedding beside Tenryuu, "Seriously though, you're looking good."Tenryuu would've blushed if her face wasn't already flush from her workout. "Thanks, Maya.""You'll get that Marine aboard in no time.""MAYA!"Maya bounced to her feat, dodging the light cruiser's lazy swipe like it wasn't even there. She didn't say a word as she turned on her heel, but her eyes glinted with mischievous light."I WILL FUCKING CUT YOU!"Maya rolled her eyes. On her shoulder, two tiny faeries slowly unfurled a string of... signal flags. Kilo, India, Sierra, Third substitute, Second substitute, Fourth Substitute, Golf."MAYA, GODDAMMIT!">>45128484fuuuuck my liiiife... flags are hard.
>>45128494Erry and Terry~Best ships in the sea~
>>45128444The dislike is because Enterprise, while being angry at the way things went, decided to start blowing shit up and become part of the problem instead of doing the HARD thing and actually trying to make things better.In short, that Enterprise took the easy route, instead of the right one.>>45128475Picture for you.
>>45128490LUCAS CALLEDHE JUST LAUGHED A LOT AND ROLLED IN WHAT SOUNDED LIKE MONEY AND THEN SAID FUCK YOU
>>45128489I do wish you didn't go with ChubbyRyu and that damn kitty outfit, but you're offsetting that.Also glad to hear that someone doesn't have arizona as the center of discussion.
>>451285054chan is hard too... fuck it. GOOD ENOUGH!
>>45128505>fuuuuck my liiiife... flags are hard.http://www.navy.mil/navydata/communications/flags/flags.htmlThis might make it easier.
>>45128453This would be one of the things I'm learning, yes.
>>45128351Jesus christ you're retarded. Do you have any fucking idea what suspension of disbelief mean.The story was based around spooky ghosts coming from the deep, not fucking dr. who ripoff adventures. So long as it sticks to spooky ghosts coming from the deep, it's all A-fucking-OK. But then you had to pull this bullshit and GUESS WHAT IT SMELLS LIKE BULLSHIT.
>>45128444I don't mind Big E went pirate, it was how she did it and the fact it doesn't benefit anyone.AWOL is a better example of how to write a shipgirl going pirate. Not Anonymous!Enterprise.
>>45128505Substitutes do what they say on the tin - so you only use them if you've already used that letter previously in the sequence.
>>45128519but no one considers him a good writer, not after the prequel trilogy.
So when is the Nimitz going to go back in time and stop Pearl Harbor from happening?
>>45128523I'm not going with Chubby Tenryuu. She *was* chubby, but is working it off to get fit. I debated having them discuss Ari shipping, but it makes so much more sense that IJN girls would root for the 'home team' as it were.
>>45128535OK I'm stealing that one.
>>45128519GOOD THING NOBODY IS MAKING A CENT FROM THIS THEN
>>45128456Thanks, I suspected as much. I'll check them out. Hopefully spacebattles or sufficient velocity have them handy.
>>45128570Must have done a hell of a job if the main thread is anything to go by (as Settle notes fitness)
>>45128535I feel like Arizona would wear a shirt with these flags if she ever resolves things with Settle.
>>45128412>>45128402You're both sort of missing the point.Tone is critical to things like this. Tone and internal consistency. Something can be incredibly stupid and wacky, but if it fit's the setting's tone, it works. If it doesn't, well, it's shit.I strongly suspect the problem most people have is not necessarily that you're using Philadelphia experiment stuff in a writeup, it's that it's reading like a Dr. Who radio serial, and not like, well, KCQ.
>>45128456>>Flying Abyssal ore carrier
>>45128510Acknowledged. Absolutely true that it's taking the easy road. But that still requires a rational perspective. Enterprise is clearly not terribly rational and doesn't have a good grasp on her anger. So it shouldn't be surprising at all. While I understand that people do hate that, I fail to understand why. Since that Enterprise is clearly characterized as having shit emotional control, it should be more unexpected for her to do what's strictly rational and take that perspective, shouldn't it?
>>45128578Or you can see here, anon. >>45128501Not that I don't appreciate Chains transcription but I feel they lose something with the formatting shift.
>>45128549>But then you had to pull this bullshit and GUESS WHAT IT SMELLS LIKE BULLSHIT.Do I look like Foxx to you? Because I'm pretty sure that when I namefag, it begins with an S and not an F.And until Elly does something like do temporal kung fu, I think her being unstuck is an adequate superpower. Especially since she NOPE'd right out of Naka's dream instead of acting even slightly tough.
>>45128592It'd better happen.
>>45128508Not when theirs a Wolf on the waves!
>>45128593I'm finding Foxx more interesting than Elly herself, desu. Good old xfiles shit. And if you ignore the dreamwalking with Naka Elly herself isn't too bad
>>45128587As far as I know, the image of her in the kitty bikini is what Chunnibote looks like now (more or less.) She's had all fall and winter to work off her Summer CG weight. (Without making her tits any smaller. Somehow.)
>>45128593The tone and everything else in it is shit. It feels like someone trying to force an MLP character into the story or something.Plus, everything else in this quest has been pretty much historically correct when it comes to these ships backgrounds, and this just kinda shits all over that by using a well known hoax and treating it like historical fact.
>>45128600People are pissed because Enterprise acted totally different than what they (and I) expected. So kinda a Game of Thrones moment. Fine. I don't think that's what Enterpise would do...but my opinion on the actions of a fixtional ship spirit in a fictional corollary to a fictional quest based on a fictional game written in a language I don't speak means exactly...shit.
>>45128671On the one hand, you're right, your opinion doesn't mean shit. On the other hand, neither does the opinion of the bloke who wrote it
>>45128501Thank you based namefag.
>>45128600>Enterprise is clearly characterized as having shit emotional controlThat's one of the things people are objecting to - that Big E has been characterized as having terrible emotional control.It doesn't fly with, well, *anything*, whether her historical record (and that of her crew), her depiction in other KC-derived media, etc.
>>45128600If you want to make someone go wildly outside of reasonable expectations, you're gonna have to do a damn good job grounding it within the story and making her motivations really damn clear.Any explanations outside the story are just ass-covering, like you're doing now.
>>45128600>Since that Enterprise is clearly characterized as having shit emotional controlI think the problem here is that you don't understand that I dislike your characterization entirely.I don't want to read about an Enterprise with shit emotional control that leads her to doing what she did in that snip, especially when people have already written interpretations of Enterprise that are much more compelling than that.
>>45128693He'd have to be the author to be covering his ass. My ass remains uncovered and I'm kinda just watching the discussion and taking notes to study later for the next time I write something.
>>45128687No problem. I wrote 'em; if you've got feedback or critique I'm on deck to field it.
So much salt, so little content in these threads. I'm starting to wonder why I stick with this quest.oh right because i need my shipwaifu fix, and in spite of all the bullshit, planefag still writes more interesting characters than 99% of kancolle doujin or fanfic writers.
>>45128489I enjoyed it (although I've always imagined Tenryuu as more of a berzerkerboat than a chuuniboat)
>>45128694>especially when people have already written interpretations of Enterprise that are much more compelling than that.Not in this Quest they haven't.
>>45128747Yeah, the shit in the rest of the thread doesn't usually detract from the good shit planefag puts out
>>45128694See >>45128729...I really don't wanna have to take a name for this, since it's. Y'know. Gonna be permitted to die once the thread is dead. I'm appreciating the discussion and feedback in the meantime though.
>>45128747>dat spoilerTry Belated Battleships some time. Great story, wonderful characters.
>>45128784Mind linking it?
>>45128766Not as a writeup, but we've shot the shit enough times to make a coherent Enterprise.
>>45128762Oh, when she drops the act and gets dangerous (like if one of her kiddos gets threatened) *then* she's terrifying. But otherwise, she's a bit of a dork.Regardless, thanks! Glad you liked it!
>>45128686Yep. So I for one don't feel the need to beat them over the head for it. I'd rather try and figure out how to avoid the bad end Planefag so thoughtfully teased for us. I think we need to hunt down some of Shigure and Naka's old crew. Their should still be some around. Perhaps they can find the words that we are doing a marginal job of finding for Settle and Harder to speak to them...a survivor of the other ships in Southern Force would be very helpful too if they could explain to Shigure that they don't blame her for leaving them behind...
>>45128593I'm gonna intercede here and actually say that I despise Dr.Who. Took a tour of the best of a long time ago and really didn't like it. >>45128607Elly has the ability to teleport and travel through time, but one it's like playing temporal lawn darts while drunk, and two have you seen the specs of a cannon class DE? She has smaller guns than Sammy, and she's as fast as Ari. She's an undergunned lightly armored slow submarine hunter with a REALLY bad time machine. Remeber that in the first test they tried to make her invisible and she teleported 200 miles and ten minutes back, and telefragged the crew.
>>45128766>Not in this Quest they haven't.I wasn't talking about just this quest.There is more Kancolle-based fiction than just the quest, anon. I've already cited The Greatest Generation.
>>45128689Okay, that actually makes sense. I'm only familiar with KC through this quest and some story threads.>>45128693Ass-covering? Not the writer here fellow Anon. Just another Anon who doesn't get the hate. FWIW I don't think it was entirely well-written, and I don't care for villains who are all "I'm hurting inside and I'm going to lash out at everyone!" You see it far too often in movies, and I've had enough villain NPCs as a D&D DM for near 20 years now to have done that and moved beyond it. I'm not saying I loved it or even liked it, but I don't think it deserved the absolute hate it's gotten.But if you were going to go with a villain like that, one who's just hurt and lashing out, Big E's portrayal in that story isn't bad. She has anger issues, can't even stop herself from snapping at her cameraman, and she has just enough 'reason' to justify her anger to herself.
>>45128784>Try Belated Battleships some time. Great story, wonderful characters.Aww, thanks!
>>45128826Greatest Generation Enterprise is awesome.
>>45128815>She's an undergunned lightly armored slow submarine hunter with a REALLY bad time machine. Remeber that in the first test they tried to make her invisible and she teleported 200 miles and ten minutes back, and telefragged the crew."no"
>>45128766No, but in other KC-derived media they have.And despite that Pf changes up a lot, a *huge* amount of most ships' basic nature and characterization is derived from that preexisting media.It's why the Kongou sisters have their established fanwork personalities, why Fubuki is basically her anime persona, why Ise and Hyuuga are the walking punchlines from that one 4koma, etc.The stuff that deviates, like Shimakaze, has so far generally gotten a pass because it's well presented and compellingly written. Which this version of Enterprise certainly is not.
>>45128872>I don't like the thingWell too bad, other people do. You want a super realistic ship writeup? Go write your own.
>>45128815>I'm gonna intercede here and actually say that I despise Dr.Who.Congratulations, you have become exactly that which you hate.
>>45128815Nobody's complaining it's a power fantasy, so that's a strawman you're setting up there when quoting her power as a ship. The problem here is that it's wildly dissonant.It's the time travel "let's meet all the important people like a 14 year old's self-insert story" thing that's bullshit.
I have a solution.Enterprise was scrapped, therefore she's in lots and lots of pieces everywhere. Stupid Evil Enterprise is made from the parts that ended up being used for shitty purposes. This leaves the possibility of a not full retard Enterprise in the future.
>>45128869>>45128826I haven't checked up on it since the thread became inundated with irrelevant omakes and the author stopped because of self-esteem issues.Is it still going?
>>45128843Thanks. Sounds cool.
>>45128892Or maybe you could be less of a shitty meme writing shitter who has to invent stupid quirks for his character instead of working with what really happened.
>>45128920"no"That's dumb, and also, Essex
>>45128922rewrite in progress not sure when it'll be ready to go though.
>>45128882There's a difference between a deviation and "no longer Enterprise"Again, it's not her piracy that's the problem, nor the fact she dislikes the US, but how she acts and goes about her scheme.>>45128920I'd rather send Stupid Evil Enterprise back to the drawing board, but the idea of multiple Enterprises is a neat idea.>>45128922It's indefinite hiatus, but allegedly the cabal there is working on it.>>45128932You're not helping your position when the actual author is literally right here >>45128815This is the second time you've yelled at a non-writefag.
>>45127993who the fuck would want to watch that game let alone play it
>>45128920You could pull off a Naka. Say Abyssals are interfering with the summon and have a first person view of Big E being metaphorically pulled apart until it really does happen and now you have Good E and Bad E.
>>45128956That is the plot of a dozen Star Trek episodes...
>>45128920>>45128956That said you'd need to write it carefully and definitely dump the previous writeup.
>>45128948>This is the second time you've yelled at a non-writefag.And I give a fuck why? This isn't SB.
>>45128956Cribbing elements from other stories as a bandaid for fundamental complaints about one's writing isn't the best remedy, sorry m8
>>45128953Somebody far less salty than your puckered ass?
>>45128970Which means it makes even more sense!
>>45128953Crix, I know being molested by a pepper shaker as a child was very traumatic for you, but being salty isn't the answer. We're all here to help, y'know? I can drive you in to the counselor, and after we'll all go get some ice cream. Or you could grow up and stop being a whiny piece of shit. Whatever fits your budget.
>>45128948>There's a difference between a deviation and "no longer Enterprise">Again, it's not her piracy that's the problem, nor the fact she dislikes the US, but how she acts and goes about her scheme.That's... exactly what I was saying, m8.That Big E is disillusioned and wants to make change isn't the problem. It's the fact that she's gone preteen edgelord about it instead of Captain America.
>>45128970Yes it is, I never said it was a particularly original idea. So long as the base idea is not pants on head retarded you can pull almost anything off with good enough writing.It was just an off-the-cuff suggestion, anyways.
>>45128992memelands is pretty shit desu senpai
>>45128973Well maybe you should go back to SB if you want to yell at specific people instead of recognizing I could be anyone, from your whore of a mother to Planefag.Talk about the subject matter. Not "you".
>>45128953Still salty that noone in the IRC will play CoH with you?
>>45129002no one claimed they were exceptionally high art, then again if people were looking for that, they wouldn't be reading this.
>>45128913Well so far she's only met Naka and that was a coincidence. It wasn't her saying "Gee I want to go visit person X today" but I get what you are saying.
>>45128956How about we just have a good, upstanding Enterprise and leave the... creativity... for others, m'kay?
>>45128988>>45128992Why are you defending borderlands? Is this how shit /tg/ is now? That game is complete garbage. It's an awful FPS combined with grind.I'm glad to see that the term salt has pretty much been killed and butchered like cuck was.
>>45129005again, I care whygive me a reasonuntil then I will continue to yell at shitters, and they'll keep replying
>>45129002Why the "desu sempai"?
The biggest problem I have with this version of Enterprise being the evil Enterprise is that an evil Big E could actually be a huge threat to Settle. Bigger than Erry and Terry.Not in a "oh gosh, Wo-chan is so hot and cute" way. But in a ruthless and cold enemy general way.
>>45129007Let's play coh is pretty much a meme honestly, the people who even had it stopped playing because I was better than all of them.
>>45129031Having to actually try to generate uproar now, crix?
>>45129036wordfilter. "t-b-h", "f-a-m" and "s-m-h" are rendered as desu, senpai, and baka
>>45129030I'd rather Captain America E, anyways.I just like throwing ideas off the cuff. It's a habit from chatting a lot with a writer friend.>>45129031When all you do is complain, what else do you expect?
>>45129042>crix>better than anyone at anythingIt's so easy to tell when you're making shit up.Just like>anyone actually playing anything with crixIt's so far out of reality it's laughable.
someone archive the thread
>>45129063Everybody knows that already. Why the "desu senpai"?
>>45129089Why "weeaboo" instead of "wapanese"?
>>45128994We have videos about that in driver's training, related to 'road rage'. One of the favorite pop-psychology sayings that gets thrown around in training videos is that 'hurt people hurt people.' It's not preteen edgelord, so much as something people just do, on a different scale. And it seems as though people expect a lot more maturity and self-awareness of Enterprise. I'm not sure how I feel about that because people in general aren't mature and self-aware, but we do generally expect our heroes to be better than us.>>45129039This would be awesome. Not necessarily Enterprise, but any big name who could fill this role. Erry and Terry make a threat of themselves with magic sparkley bullshit. It'd be nice to see an enemy make a threat of themselves by just being that goddamn good.
>>45129089From the timing I assumed it was the new 4chan owner (who's japanese) adding them for the keks.
>>45128302>Maya, stopping only to take a long sip from her dink....Huh.
>>45129031> Defending BorderlandsNah. Game's not my cup of tea either, though its vast success provides an easy answer to 'who would watch it', considering. Mostly I'm just tired of watching you throw your fit up and down the thread because you asked to come back in to the cabal if you would be a good boy and got told that no one likes or trusts you at your word. I mean, it's nice to see my total lack of respect for you validated, in one sense, but in another sense it's mostly just kinda sad. Door's over there if you're that mad. Hell, the [start a new thread] button's not too far either. Plenty of places to show off your writing instead of shitting the place up. You think /I/ haven't had ideas that have been shot down? That all of us haven't? Sometimes, as an author, your ideas are bad. Sometimes your good ideas are presented badly. Sometimes you need a helping hand and real critique. We've got folks on deck who maybe don't have a lot of technical skill but they're eager and professional, and they're improving every time they post something new. But, hey, you do you. It's 4chan, you can deface and slander what and whoever you like. But that sword cuts both ways, don't it? Throw your tantrum all you want. Expect it to be called what it is. Enjoy your evening.
>>45128953>>45129031>>45129042Man, you're sounding really defensive tonight.
>>45129119Shhhhhhh. This doesn't need to be spread around, eh?
>>45129111>This would be awesome. Not necessarily Enterprise, but any big name who could fill this role. Erry and Terry make a threat of themselves with magic sparkley bullshit. It'd be nice to see an enemy make a threat of themselves by just being that goddamn good.Eventually we gotta get to the "and now you must defeat my four demon generals" stage. Erry and Terry, as much as I love to hate them, are low tier in the grand scheme of things. They are an errant radio station that does psyche damage to our ships. A thorn in our side, but they are not commanders.If abyssals got organized they could have a general for every ocean. Not saying that they should, but we could easily have major abyssal characters to be OPFOR.
>>45129111>pop-psychologyThat basically *is* preteen edgelord-tier stuff, though.You won't find any actual psychologists simplifying it to that level ever.
>>45129146To be entirely honest I preferred when it was some weird spooky semi-conscious hivemind thing, but we're already too late for that.
>>45129111I think there's an irony in there somewhere when you're trying to apply an extremely cynical view of humanity to a character who keeps getting described as Captain America - i.e the ur-example of golden age hope and idealism in the face of cynicism and the modern world.
>>45129111>And it seems as though people expect a lot more maturity and self-awareness of Enterprise. I'm not sure how I feel about that because people in general aren't mature and self-aware, but we do generally expect our heroes to be better than us.Agreed. If Enterprise was a shiny new carrier who never saw any actual combat and was a living symbol, I could understand the characterization. But in real life, it was Enterprise vs. Japan at one point. There needs to be a lot more going on in her head than just "I got scrapped for financial reasons". There are her sisters to think about, her ideals, her crew, her grudge against Japan, etc.Enterprise can and should be a colorful character.>>45129195That's boring and overdone.
>>45129123What the fuck are you talking about, like everything after the first sentence of your post?
>>45129204Maybe it's just the difference in the media we consume but I've always felt the whole "demon king and his minions taking over the world" thing to be more prevalent. Eastern vs Western fiction, perhaps?
>>45129221tl;dr: "If all you're gonna do is bitch and moan why not go somewhere else instead of shitposting here.".
>>45129221Crix, you shouldn't talk about your borderline illiteracy in public.Even if mommy told you it's okay for you to not understand big words.
>>45129228>>45129195Let's not get ahead of ourselves.What we know ooc is that there are two named abyssals with all-out sentience, who answer to a higher power that is also capable of speech. Iwo Jima was capable of communication, but not proper speech we're pretty sure, and she's dead now anyway. Most of the abyssal forces are rendered feral and mindless. There's a weird shirtless guy on the ocean floor, maybe, it was a dream so Naka might have just been tripping balls.
>>45129228>Maybe it's just the difference in the media we consumeYou might be right. I suppose it is preference, but I'd rather have a name and a face to fight against than Ambiguous Hivemind #21046.I find a rational enemy far more threatening than an animalistic or inhuman one. We cannot understand the latter, so we abstract it and it just becomes something easily killed. But when Naka turns abyssal, it isn't because she's being lost to a hivemind, it's because their ideals are winning. That side of her is winning.
>>45129267Or they're just cheating.But yeah.
>>45129266>Most of the abyssal forces are rendered feral and mindless. This is very much true. Not all abyssals are sentient, only a few of the more recent ones who haven't lost themselves.>>45129283What's happening with Naka and Shigure isn't cheating.
>>45129249All I did was shitpost borderlands and then everyone starts going crazy over it, I'm not really sure what's going on.
>>45129299You literally arrived just to shitpost. The Borderlands part is irrelevant.
>>45129299> Implying it wasn't you cutting his wrists and sobbing about Nakatime upthreadPull the other one, it's got bells on.
>>45129299Crix, just leave.Your entire existence is a shitpost.
>>45129319No, I'd say the content of my post is pretty important.>>45129322>HE THINKS I POST AS ANONYMOUSIs this what happened? That people unironically think that I was posting without my trip? I don't have a problem with Nakatime. I think nakaposting in thread is fucking awful and Naka as a character is annoying, but it's still enjoyable to read.I've never had a problem shitting on things with my trip on to take it off to do it doesn't make sense.
>>45129266There's enough to know there's some kind of central intelligence which the signs point to getting a face at some point.Nothing wrong with that, just not my personal preference. It's not bad, either.>>45129267If you anonymized the Naka dreams and reframed it into a persona-style battle of the self thing rather than an external pressure being imposed upon her it'd work perfectly well with what I'm thinking.I'm likely not being very clear on what I'm actually about, I am not actually very good with words.Either way, taste and all that.
>>45129367>No, I'd say the content of my post is pretty important.kek
>>45129367Do we have to break out the writing analysis program Crix? Is that a thing that needs to happen with you now? 'cause, y'know, yeah. I think you're a whiny, backbiting coward.
>>45127732Can I toss out a pair of honest suggestions at you, deme?1. If you tease a fight, either deliver on it, or divert it with something equal in intensity. The double-interrupt followed by cliffhanger we got this time wasn't good.2. We're gearing up for major war action right now. I think, Crab hilarity aside, we could stand to maintain that tone until the actual engagement has come and gone. Jumping back and forth between action, drama, life, and shenanigans may be accurate to living the military life during wartime, but it makes for terrible pacing in fiction.Thanks and see you next thread.
>>45129386Go ahead, I'm sure this piece of software is ~very~ accurate.http://www.aicbt.com/authorship-attribution/online-software/
>>45128551E:Look at me Settle.S: ...E: I'm the admiral now.
>>45129372I guess I've sat through too many arguments where an infected character "just has to fight it" and other appeals to individuality. A Borg-like Abyssal is certainly doable, but even those got a face in the form of Borg queens
>>45129386Its happenedWe've reached to point where the need to shitpost and bash Crix is so great that there isn't enough real Crix to go around. We've started to invent our own Crix where there was none before. ARTIFICIAL CRIX!
>>45128953Thanks for the picture of competent destroyers getting things done (as opposed to most of the ships in this quest). If one wanted to read more of your writing, where would they go?
>>45129629Why a FAMAS?
>>45129546I want stick my dick into Edsall!
I always found the objections to character posting kind of weird. This is literally a roleplaying forum, questing is just roleplaying by commitee.(unless the roleplaying is bad, which it often is.)
>>45129768For the most part it's the people who are role playing characters in the quest who ARNT the QM or people he would like to. (ie nettle, naka, hate, and crab) I know for instance that the person RPing terror was not her writer, and that the person who RPs elly only does so after the planefag has ended.
>>45129648dunno>>45129768>roleplayingNo, it's for traditional games.>forumImageboardAlso I want to point this post out that people thought was me >>45128113>implying I read any of those writeups or could even list themtop fucking lol
>>45129768>>(unless the roleplaying is bad, which it often is.)This is mostly it.The tatsuta shit was like, bottom-of-the-fucking-barrel in terms of effort besides disjointed responses to other people that wouldn't be out of place in a preteen-filled freeform rp chatroom.The stuff like Hate and Naka is nice because it's used like a chorus to banter with the audience and keep them up to date on context.
>>45129819Nah, this >>45127801 and this >>45127901 and this >>45127962 were you.You backbiting, spineless piece of shit.
>>45129888But it really isn't. Why would you even think it's me? Because I said something like "naka please go" 5 threads ago? Is it that hard to imagine someone not enjoying it who isn't me?
>>45129912To the same bitchy extent yes.
>>45129912Others not liking it? Sure. We've got plenty of those folks. Others not liking it in that bitter, jealous tone, like Gollum snarling about stupid fat hobbitses? Nah, that's all you.
>>45129924>>45129942Both of you are retarded and deluded then. You sound quite bitter yourself, having to fucking fanboy for naka. ITS ALL THAT NASTY CRIX SPREADING THE HATE EVERYONE LOVES IT EXCEPT FOR HIM
>>45129976Yeah, most people do seem to like it, but they're just going batshit
>>45129976> Acknowledge that there are plenty of folks who don't like Nakatime> Get accused of saying only you don't like itBut hey if your victim complex makes you feel better I've got some fresh razors for your wrists ready to go. Make sure to swipe 'em sideways so you live long enough to shit up the next thread.
Circle of life:>Some retard blames negative sentiment as being crix>Some other retard (crix) shows up later to faff around at said blame and complain that he doesn't like thing
>>45129299>I post on 4chan with a tripcode and people keep responding to me in the context of my established reputation rather than to the individual content of my postsGee I wonder what could be done to resolve this problem of yours
>>45130210Aside from therapy?
>Rereading the last story and naka updatesChrist. I'm not tired of it, but it definitely makes me tired emotionally. Time to sleep.
>>45127344You know that feeling you get when you get something going, it looks fucking set, and so you fuck off to finish other shit only to turn around and that first thing has fucking derailed and you're back to square one?WHY CAN'T SHIT JUST FUCKING WORK
>>45129976Oh boy Crix is being an attention whore againHe probably would have gotten to stay in the cabal if he wasn't such an abrasive piece of shit