Utterly immobile, before you stands Thunder Slam, the Golem Bard.

“Umm, hello?” you ask. It ignores you.

You try again, to no avail. Damn.

How do you wake the Golem?

>Try some magic
>Play music
>Loud Noises!
>Other (what?)

old thread >>41332733

>>41352250
>Loud Noises!

>>41352250
>Play music

>>41352250
Play music horribly, it will make him go crazy with OCD

>>41352250
>Please talk with me.

>>41352250
>>Play music

>>41352250
>>Play music

*Thunder Drum, not Thunder Slam

>>41352250
>Try some magic
>Play music

>>41352344
...

>>41352250
>Play music
COME AND SLAM
AND WELCOME TO THE JAM

>>41352344
So no basketball?

>>41352250
>Play music
Preferably off key, that way he'll be compelled to pay us attention.

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>>41352250
Sing a song.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0dcbw4IEY5w

>>41352344
dammit pally, was gonna make the jam joke

“Well, here goes nothing” you mutter. Searching through the storage room you find an old violin and a bow.

You stand before Thunder Drum, the Golem Bard and start to scratch out a tune, sort of.

Music was never your strong suit.

It takes only a few minutes before rocky hands reach up to hold a stony head and a voice booms out “THAT IS THE WORST PLAYING I HAVE EVER HEARD, DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA WHAT YOU’RE DOING? YOU’RE ALL OVER THE SCALE, YOUR TIMING IS OFF, THE INSTRUMENT IS OUT OF TUNE AND YOU’RE PROBABLY TORTURING THE SOUL OF THE CAT THAT DIED FOR THE STRINGS.”

“Ah” you say, as you stop playing “good, I was wandering if you would be interested in teaching-”

“IF I CAN STOP YOU PLAYING LIKE A HALF-MAD DRUNKEN IDIOTIC ORC WITH TWO FINGERS, BRAIN PARASITES AND A GRUDGE AGAINST MUSIC THEN I SHALL” vows the Golem “SURELY THIS IS THE TASK THAT THE GODS HAVE SENT TO TEST ME IN MY SEARCH FOR THE TRUE SOUL OF MUSIC FOR IF I CAN ENLIGHTEN ONE AS UNMUSICAL AS YOU, THEN I AM READY.”

You didn’t think your playing was that bad...

What do you do?
>Ask him to teach at the school (recruit)
>Challenge him to prove his knowledge of music
>Ask him what...bardly things he knows
>Other (what?)

>>41352738
>Ask him what...bardly things he knows
>Ask him to teach at the school (recruit)

>>41352738
>Challenge him to prove his knowledge of music

>>41352738
>Challenge him to prove his knowledge of music

>>41352738
>>Ask him to teach at the school (recruit)

>>41352738
>Other
Apologize for the assault to his hearing, then proceed to:
Ask him to teach at the school (recruit)

>>41352760
This

>>41352738
>Challenge him to prove his knowledge of music
>Ask him what...bardly things he knows

>>41352738

"I was under the impression that you were mothballed because your music lacked a soul."

1d20+11 please, you know why

Rolled 4 + 11 (1d20 + 11)

>>41353003

Rolled 16 + 11 (1d20 + 11)

>>41353003

>>41353003

A guess threat of Sallazar teaching music might be enough.

Also, from the votes only recruit got more than half the votes, so going with that only.

Which means the things it can do with music are gonna be a fun surprise later...

>>41353038
pls no magical realm

Rolled 14 + 11 (1d20 + 11)

>>41353003

>>41353061
Please don't get hypersensitive about this.

>>41353061
>no magical realm
>in a Pally quest
Anon...

>>41353061
But I want him to Rock us like a hurricane

“Actually” you say “I’m not the one who needs lessons”.

Thunder Drum snorts, a sound like pebbles falling, you keep going.

“My students however...” you explain about Egwen Girls Convent, and the dungeoneering club.

“IF I CAN SAVE THEM FROM YOUR MUSICAL INEPTITUDE” booms the Golem “THEN I HAVE A DUTY TO DO SO. ONLY THE MUSIC OF STONE IS SUFFICIENT TO THIS TASK, NOW WAIT HERE, I NEED MY DRUMS AND MY AXE.”

---

I hope you had fun, and please standby for A Day in The Life of a Nightmare.

I will next be running on Friday, around 8PM UK time, though exact time may vary – check twitter.

For your actions today you have gained 4XP and the club has gained 10XP

Others have expressed interest in perhaps running miniquests involving others of the girls.

I’m ok with this, however, to prevent people spoiling others fun I require the following from anyone who wants to do so:

i) An outline of what you plan to do: a thought map, a few paragraphs, some sort of idea of what you plan to do.
ii) Veto power: I decide what’s canon to the main quest and what isn’t.

You can contact me on twitter, I also hang out in the irc hugbox a lot, and if you contact me by ask.fm with an email address I will email you (and delete the question).

>>41353190

Thanks for running Pally, looking forward to our evil dungeon experience.


>Others have expressed interest in perhaps running miniquests involving others of the girls.
Why do I feel vaguely uncomfortable about this?

>>41353259
Because this is 4chan, they'll turn it into porn

>>41353190
I so love where this is going.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0XSaKQlBZuE

>>41353275
>Because this is 4chan, they'll turn it into porn
I trust Pally to veto that much, I'm more afriad of opinionated QMs pressing for their headcanon of their personal waifu.

I was glad the other QM seemed alright sofar.

>>41353259
>Why do I feel vaguely uncomfortable about this?
Because fluff provider exists

>>41353190
>Others have expressed interest in perhaps running miniquests involving others of the girls.
How about no?

>>41353190
>I NEED MY DRUMS AND MY AXE.”

No comment on the Axe yet either.

Just as well Calluna is not a bard. I can see the effect her music would have already.

>>41353362
The golem would literally stop working

>>41353275
It was very tempting. Discussing this kind of things with pally usually take weird directions.
>>41353311
Thank you, I'm trying my best to not disappoint.
This only makes me feel less confident now.

Anyway, mini-OP incoming.

>>41353362
you mean axe as guitar or axe as the deodorant?

>>41353478
>This only makes me feel less confident now.
Don't want to discourage you, but I think you know how anons can be and that it is a very real posibility.

I'm not even against them doing lewd stuff or whatever, just trying to force their taste>everyone elses taste.

Night all, see you next thread

Continuing from >>41339122
Winning votes were "A single helmet" and "Accept her help"

====

You don’t think your shapeshifting is complex enough to warrant lessons from a mimic (or anyone, really), but it’s true that they are still developing (apparently) and you don’t know how exactly they work, except for how natural it is. You are fairly sure it feels the same to her, but she is the shapeshifting stereotype.

Well, it can’t hurt. “Alright.” You say. “I wouldn’t mind you helping me figuring things out.” She beams. “Atta girl~. With my help, you will discover everything your body can do!” she says, her statuesque form dissolving and becoming an amorphous blob before you, to then change back into her usual appearance.

Not creepy at all. You hope you never have to transform that way.

“Right.” You lie (sit?) down, resting your four legs under you. Your horse body can stay up for many hours, but this position is still comfortable for you. “But only one helmet, ok? It’s enough and I don’t want to take them without permission like this.”
“Then ask for permission?” she suggests, sitting down before you. You shake your head quickly “I can’t do that! No one must know of this, ok?” It’s embarrassing to think of doing it alone, having other people know it too is just…

She shrugs. “Asking for help with this stuff isn’t that bad.” You look at her curiously. “In fact, I think it’s pretty hot~” you bring your palm to your face. You’re going to regret this, aren’t you? “I mean it! A young, growing girl, confused as her body and powers develops, asks her senior for help in discover just what is going on in her~” she sighs, almost daydreaming.

It does sound a bit romantic…Goddess, no, what have you gotten yourself into?

“*I* am your senior, not the other way around!” you remind her that you are, in fact, one year older than her and above her in the student hierarchy. But she just waves her hand in dismissal. “Details, details. I can be older than anyone in the school.” She says, slowly changing into the shape of a mature woman with slightly exaggerated proportions.

“So…how can I help you, my dear?” she asks with a sultry voice and lying down in a…an artistic pose. She changed her clothes to a long social dress that hugs her new body in almost impossible ways.

“S-stop that…” you say weakly. “Now, now, don’t be coy~” she sits up and crosses her arms under her breasts, pushing them up. “But is that a blush I see in your soft cheeks?” Most definitely not!

“Chame, stop that!” she giggles, but listens to you and changes back to her ‘default’ form. Except for the breasts. Her whole body changed AROUND them. “You are so fun to tease~” she says, looking you in the eyes. “It’s kinda cute how your eyes light up when you are angry. They also catch fire, right?” You glare at her and she winks before changing the topic.

“Anyway, I think we could try some transformations exercises first, a warm up, yeah, and then…” She looked almost exactly like Sister Josiam. You liked her. Like. She was strict and harsh, but she cared deeply about everyone. She didn’t treat you any different from the other kids. She did educate you more than the others, but that was for your own good.

You don’t like how Chame got so close to Josiam. Seeing her figure being that way bothers you, she didn't even get her right. Chame wouldn't escape without some good switching.

“Hey, you alright?” you look at Chame in confusion. Of course you are alright. “Uh, yeah, I’m fine, why?”

“You zoned out on me.” She stands up after you and scratches her cheek. “Sorry, I didn’t think this would bother you this much, since, you know…”

>>41353490

Depends. Looks like it is slang for almost amy instrument. Guitar is most common. Could mean like a Jazz sax too.

Who wouldnt want to see a golem play a saxophone?

You have a very bad feeling about this.

“Eh, you know.” she transforms into a green eagle. “You are kinda lewd.”

“What!?” you scowl, following her with your eyes as she flies up. “Yeah, I mean.” She lands behind you and you can feel something poking your hinder quarters.

“Your skirt isn’t long enough and you aren’t wearing anything back here.”

What.

>Panic!
>Kick!
>I don't believe you!
>Another reaction?
>Or something else?

>>41353702
>>Panic!

>>41353702
>Kick!
>I don't believe you!

>>41353702
>Panic!

>>41353702
>>Panic!
>Kick!

>>41353702
>Panic!
>Kick!

Writing!

You gasp in shock and rear up on instinct. Your lungs empty themselves of air as you let out a scream and as soon as your front legs touch the ground you run forward and away from Chame.

“Wait!” you hear call out as you rapidly gain distance from her. “Phaysis waaaaaait!” You gallop as fast as you can, but the mimic catches up to you in a bird form with a mouth instead of a beak.

“Go away!” you tell her, but she ignores you and flies beside you. “Phaysis, it’s ok, it’s ok!” she says.

“This is a prank! It has to be a prank!” you turn towards her, intending to throw her off. A fruitless endeavor since birds have better maneuverability than stupid naked horses. “Yes! Yes it was a prank, so please stop running!” Dirty, filthy liar, don’t believe her lying words. You don’t answer her with words, you only attempt to bat her away.

You need to get away from here. You can’t let them s-see you. You keep running away from the club and you see the school’s limits rapidly approaching and Chame is nowhere to be seen anymore. Maybe the fire your hair has become made her give up. That’d be for the better.

“Oh shit.” And then you lose all sense of weight, the momentum forward the only thing propelling you and, for the second time today, the ground rises to meet you. This time, it hurts a lot more.

You stumble a short distance away, the centauroid anatomy making this a much, much more painful event than it would be if you in any other form. One of your legs sends an intense wave of pain, forcing you to transform back into your human body.

Your leg hurts. A lot. But your torso doesn’t, and you swear it took a good deal of the brunt. You felt something crash against your back.

“Ah, man, this could have gone a lot better.” You hear Chame’s voice from behind you. You look back and yes, there she is, transformed into something round and soft, like a cushion. “Sorry I couldn’t take all of you in time.”

You grunt and slap her in the shoulder, trying to get up and away from her, but she pulls you down into a forced hug. “Let go of me!” you struggle, but she ignores you. “Yeah, nah. I’m not letting you go for a while, until you stop this.”


>Struggle harder
>Berate her
>Wait until she gets tired of you

Looking for where to put vote options and writing less is harder than I though. This was going to be a loooot longer.

>>41354488
>Berate her
>Wait until she gets tired of you
Its a decent point though, allows for shaping the nature of the relationship and the character by how she deals with this.
That sort of thing is important.

>>41354488
>Wait until she gets tired of you

>>41354488
>Struggle harder
>Berate her

>>41354488
>Berate her
>Wait until she gets tired of you

>>41354488
>Struggle harder
>Berate her

>>41354488
>Berate her

Writing.

“What were you thinking!?” you shout and struggle a bit, a simple token of resistance. “Let me go, damnit!” Chame grows a couple of arms and shifts them into being big, muscled and strong, holding you onto her with no chance of you breaking free. Kittrane would be proud of arms like these…why are you even thinking that.

“Why did you prank me like that!? You know I don’t like that kind of thing!” Who’s lying to who now? “I dunno.” She replies, looking to the sides in an attempt to seem uncaring. “You know how I am with that kind of thing.” You feel her entire body shrug.

You could escape by changing into your equine form, but you don’t want to…hurt her.

“You idiot. You stupid idiot. Never do that again, you hear!?”

“Do what? I didn’t do anything” Ugh, why is she being so obnoxious? Things were going…well, better.

“You know what! Stop. Stop touching me!” You say and leave it at that, still mad at her…prank. “You deserve a good spanking, you know that?” You can feel her stifling a giggle…weird. But thankfully she doesn’t say anything.

Silence hangs between the two of you for a while. You’re not sure how much (or little) time has passed when you finally speak up again.

“And…cushioning my fall.” You feel her relax and one of her muscled arms rises up and points an open palm at you. The hand then becomes a ball, that grows and becomes a head. No, Kittrane would not be proud of this. Or anyone else, for that matter.

“You’re welcome.” The head smiles, and the arm slides on her body to lies next to you.

“Can you let me go now?” you ask. “Did you calm down now?” she asks back.

“No. I’m still mad at you.”

“But your hair is not on fire anymore, so I will count that as a victory, even if you are not as hot as you were.” If only you had a switch. “Besides, that wasn’t even a good scolding, you need to be much more stronger than that.” Make it two switches.

She melts her arms back into her mostly amorphous body, allowing you to sit up. You look at her “Why? I’m much heavier when I change.”

“I know, I felt it. But then again, fists and stones my brake your bones, but I don’t have any bones.” She collects her entire mass away from you and into a single, almost perfectly smooth sphere, which then expands and changes into a…eew, a slug!

The giant slug’s eyes are actually two heads, and they both speak at the same time. “Besides, you own me one now, and I got to hug you. Not many girls can do that, I heard.” You can feel your eyes burn. Not even the switch will be enough for her.

A third head grows between the two existing ones and says “It’s a joke, a joke!” the other two laugh nervously or whistle innocently in a small cacophony. They have the same voice and it hurts a bit to hear them both speak at the same time.

You shake your head, and a fourth Chame grows from the slug body, turning her into a mini hydra. It looks at you in the eyes with a serious expression. “It’s aaaall a jooooke.” It whispers. The other three heads nod and start waving around.

You stifle a giggle, her act is not working, and this is stupid, right?

You try to stand up, but your right leg fails you and fall down. Your skirt is torn on the side and your shirt is wrinkled and dirty. The cloak was lost, but only a few paces away; the wind didn’t take it too far.

Your leg is slightly bloodied and your ankle sprained, but it’s not a serious injury (you have no medical knowledge, buy you did sprain the ankle many times before at the orphanage, though. You were a little pest~). Knowing the injury was caused when your leg was in horse form, you don’t change shapes, but try to stand up anyway.

Chame changes into a person again and helps you up.

“It seems your leg is hurt, princess.” She says, kneeling before you and holding your hand. “Would you…ride me back to the club?”

>Allow Chame to carry you back
>Just some support is fine
>You can do it on your own
>Something else?

>>41355577
>Just some support is fine

>>41355577
>>Just some support is fine

>>41355577
>Just some support is fine

>>41355577
>Allow Chame to carry you back

>>41355577
>You can do it on your own
Starting to dislike Chame

>>41355577
>Allow Chame to carry you back

She'll make some snide remarks about it, but she'll do that with any option. At least keep the weight off the sprain.

>>41355577
>Just some support is fine

Writing. Update may be delayed due dinner.

>>41355722
I'm sorry I'm ruining the character for you anon.

>>41355901
>I'm sorry I'm ruining the character for you anon.
I dunno, she seems completly normal to me.

More lewd and pushy a bit, I guess. But normally we see her from the perspective of a teacher, so that seems fine to me.

>>41355901
I didn't care for her to begin with so it's fine. keep at it man.

Dinner took longer than expected, sorry. Back and writing.

You shake your head, slightly amused at her exaggeration. “Just some support if fine.” You tell her. “Are you sure?” she asks. “I could, like, turn into a huge vulture and grab you with my huge claws and fly us back with my huge wings.” You snort.

“Or I could turn into a big elephant, wrap you with my huge trunk, put you on my huge back and wobble-“ you cut her off: “Really, it’s ok. No need for theatrics.”

“Aw, but it would have been so cool.” She stands up and moves to your side. “Imagine everybody’s faces when they see us getting back in style.” That’s it does sound cool, but…”But if we did that, we wouldn’t be able to sneak back without the professor seeing us and punishing us for being late and…pranking.”

“Hmmm. Maybe…but no shapeshifting? At all?” she pouts. “No. Don’t try to change into a puppy, no.” she giggles and takes your arm, supporting you in the traditional way.

As you both walk back (walk and limp, rather), you glance at Chame every once in a while. She’s humming a little song to herself, with a rather aggressive tune. Very different from what you used to sing in the church’s choir. And she also is keeping her form solid, no shifting, that’s good.

After a while, she speaks up. “You know…you don’t have to worry too much about that.”

“Worry about what?” you play dumb. “You know what I’m talking about.” She continues, the dumb girl.

“Look, it’s not uncommon for shifters like us to…no, I mean, there is nothing wrong in that.” You don’t like this subject, but say nothing. “I mean, I’m naked too, you know, all the time!” you frown. What does she…

“And hey, you haven’t broken any rules, right? Or else the professors would have said something, yeah?”

You take a while to speak up. “No one ever mentioned that to me. Ever.” You stare down, feeling a bit hurt.

“That just means it doesn’t matter. It’s not like the horse body is you.” You look at her, confused. “What?”

“Well, it’s you, but it’s not…YOU you. People don’t look think of a horse when they hear your name, they think of, well, you.” She grows an arm to gesture at your human body. “Like, this is you. The other two forms you have, they are more like limbs, but not your person.”

“Damnit, this is harder to explain than I thought. It’s shape shifter stuff, don’t worry about it, ok?”

You think you understand what she is trying to say, but honestly, it’s…a bit far fetched. “If you say so.” You then look at her in the eyes, until the turns her face to you. “W-what?”

>You are a real idiot
>Shake your head
>…what about you?

I think I can end this mini quest in two or three updates.

>>41356763
>Shake your head
>…what about you?

>>41356763
>…what about you?

>>41356763
>Shake your head
>…what about you?

>>41356763
>Shake your head
>…what about you?

>>41356763
>You are a real idiot

Calling and writing.

“If my other forms are just limbs…then what about you?” you ask her. “Is this yourself, or just a limb?”

She doesn’t answer immediately, but grins at you instead. You see her eyes shift, change to all the colors in the rainbow, and settle down on a pure black.

“That’s a very good question.” She says, trying to be ominous. “I will let you find that out on your own.” Her eyes return to normal (aka usual) and she laughs. “A girl gotta have her secrets~” Then her chin changes to a square shape and she looks manlier and manlier until she becomes a he. “Or maybe a boy?” You snort while she laughs and turns back into a girl again.

She doesn’t say anything more about it. You’re not sure if she was trying to cheer you up or if that was a (not) clever attempt at…you shake your head.

You don’t talk anymore and the two of you just walk/limp back to the clubroom. You ran a whole lot during that little incident and it takes you a long time to get back. But when you finally see the building and the others practicing (to no one’s surprise they also spot you), Chame speaks.

“Let’s not tell them what happened, ok?” You agree with her completely this time. Then she adds: “I think I have time tonight for a lesson in shapeshifting.” You don’t have time to answer this, though, as a certain displacer beast almost rams itself onto you two.

“Phaysis! What happened!?” she asks, watching your wounded leg and soiled uniform. Chame lets go of you and Nevyn takes her place, but stays around ad accompanies you two.

Professor Sallazar walks up to you all and crosses his arms when he’s upon you. “Girls. Mind explaining what happened?” You gulp, he looks mad.

“’S my fault, sir.” Chame raises one of her four hands. “I challenged Phaysis to a race and she tripped.” Smooth, Chame.

“Ah, a race. And how does that explain the club room being open before the time and the dummies outside? One of them is broken, even.”

“Oh, that. I was playing hide and seek.” Real smooth. Salla turn to you with a questioning look, causing you to gaze down at the ground. “I was running and tripped. Chame helped me.” He sighs.

“Phaysis, let’s get your leg fixed. There is still a little time for you to practice, Taynathil is waiting for you. As for you, Chame. You seem fine, so let’s have a talk after you train with the rest of the team.”

The rest of the day proceeds without any other incidents.

Taynathil had you train with the bow. You insisted on using the spear again, as it’s a much more intensive training, but she thought that archery would be good practice and help you achieve peace of mind. “Archery needs focus, while melee weapons, like claws and spear, rely more on an aggressive spirit.” You’re not sure if that is true, but it took you some time to put the day’s happenings away and start hitting the targets today.

Nevyn tried to get you to tell her what happened, but you politely declined her inquiries. This pissed her off, but you really weren’t in the mood for another talk like that. You have no idea of where Chame went or what happened to her, as you didn’t see her again. You kinda avoided the others, and Sallazar (and Kittrane, you noticed that) gave you worried glances.

The club meeting ends quickly enough, time passed in the bat of an eye, fortunately. You put your things away, and picked the hidden helmet up when no one was looking (you think).

Cleya pulls the professor aside to talk to him about something, and you take the chance to leave without risk of being found out. Nevyn follows you, being your roommate and all.

“Hey, I found out when that party the Julie talked about is happening. Do you want to go?” she asks you innocently. You're a bit cross at her, for leaving you all alone today morning because of this stupid party. Considering the time right now, it will probably last the entire night, and you aren't sure of how...legal, it is, something about loopholes, Julie said?

Before you answer her, you stop on your tracks and Nevyn does the same. You are outside your dorm building, and some distance away, you see Anabelle sneaking out of a window alone. You’re pretty sure it’s her, you could recognize that witch anywhere and anytime.

> Payback time, witch.
> Go check this party thing out.
> It's better to stay out of trouble.

Pick only one, please. Next update should be the last (I hope), and each option will lead to a different ending.

>>41357824
>Go check this party thing out.

>>41357824
> Payback time, witch.

>>41357824
> Go check this party thing out.

>>41357824
> It's better to stay out of trouble.

>>41357824
>Payback time, witch.
Ah, revenge. Is there any liqueur sweeter or more intoxicating than you?

>>41357824
>> Go check this party thing out.

>>41357824
>Payback time, witch.

>>41357824
>It's better to stay out of trouble.

>>41357824
>Go check this party thing out.

>>41357824
> Payback time, witch.

>>41357824
>It's better to stay out of trouble.
I don't see Phaysis doing anything that might get her in trouble.

>>41357824
> It's better to stay out of trouble.

>>41357824
> It's better to stay out of trouble.

Ok, ok, suddenly lurkers. calling and counting.

>>41358112
It's 4-4-4 assuming you use the same 10 minute voting period.

Otherwise Staying out of trouble won.

>>41358112
>Trip dropped.
This was likely to happen sooner or later.
>>41358128
Three way tie? I'm not sure of how to proceed, Pally hasn't had a tie like this in...forever?

>>41358156
Yes, QM chooses most IC option. Tie for X and y breaking for x etc.

>>41358156
Basically, you break the tie for whichever you think is interesting/in-character/you have an unreasonable bias towards.

We had like thirty ties during the thread where we were Cleya for a while.

>>41358156
You can either break the tie, or call FD for a more decisive solution.

>>41358177
>QM chooses most IC option
The power! It's funny, because this might be defining Phaysis' IC, if Pally likes it.

>>41358192
I think I will just...write everything and see what I like more. All of them are good to me, for different reasons.

Rolled 3 (1d3)

>>41358256
1 Payback time, witch.
2 Go check this party thing out.
3 It's better to stay out of trouble.
if you want.

>>41358349
Well it's neutral enough I guess.

>>41358566
I just wish I got a 1, oh well.

>>41358349
>>41358600
I'm actually surprised so many people voted to 1 and 2. I was so sure you would all unanimously vote 3, like when dealing with the bully in the morning.

And yeah, 3 is pretty neutral. I'm writing it now, but I think I can mix 1 or 2 with 3, but not both. Decisions, decisions~ What do you guys think?

>>41358768
I see no particular reason why Phaysis wouldn't go to the party.
She doesn't seem like 'that' much of a good girl to me.
I mean, I could also see her not going just as easily but that seems less interesting to me.

>>41358768
As long as it's not the party.

>>41358804
I'm fine with this

>>41358768
Honestly if you are undecided at a tie, call for FD to clarify things. It usually helps.
And then you can still flip a coin or something if the tie persists.

>>41358926
FDs are only called when votes are too convoluted or indecipherable, QMs break ties.

>>41358768
I don't really see the difference between mixing 1 or 2 with 3 and just having gone with 1 or 2 in the first place, to be honest. Staying out of trouble is kinda exclusive with the options that would probably get us in trouble.

>>41358954
>FDs are only called when votes are too convoluted or indecipherable, QMs break ties.
Yeah but he says he can't decide, so a FD would clear things up for him.
I mean he could also just roll a die or whatever, its just one of many options.

>>41358889
>As long as it's not the party.
Why do you find the party worse than the revenge option?

>>41358975
You are right, it should be exclusive. I was thinking of mixing them because I know what will happen. Technically, it's the lewdest of the three endings.

Thinking it over, this is all in bad form. I asked to pick one vote because they lead to different endings and should stick to it. Maybe I will write the other two for fun and pastebin them.

>>41359114
He's probably worried about something untoward happening.

>>41359010
I have difficulties trusting the motives of anyone that requests an FD.

>>41359166
>I have difficulties trusting the motives of anyone that requests an FD.
Yeah okay I can understanhd that, I hadn't thought of that, considering the PRQ experience thats a understandable sentiment.

But I meant no mischief with it, I just figured it would be a good way for anons to sort their priorities out since QM seemed uncomfortable with making the decision himself.

>He's probably worried about something untoward happening.
While I can understand the sentiment somewhat, I think this is really starting to go a bit too far.

Eheh, I'm actually interested in hearing what you guys think will/would happen in each of the options. Anyone want to take a guess while I write?

>>41357824
>Payback time, witch.

HOW IS NO ONE ELSE VOTING FOR THIS OPTION IT'S LIKE YOU PEOPLE DESPISE FUN

>>41359349
1) call the teachers
2) go to party and do party stuff
3) go back to dorm and do boring dorm stuff

>>41359381
Party time anon.
Seriously, seeing what sort of night time parties these girls have is way more interesting than punish the generic bully.

>>41359381
The vote was over like an hour ago.

>>41359349
I presume going back will result in experimenting with Chame.
I suppose the punishment will be scaring her with a prank or somesuch.
No idea about the party though, beyond the obvious.

>>41359471
>No idea about the party though, beyond the obvious.

It's going to be a snoozefest with some slight lesbian overtones.

>>41359508
>It's going to be a snoozefest with some slight lesbian overtones.
That would be the obvious.

>>41359349
I think 1 and 2 combined would've resulted in the succubitch managing to avoid punishment somehow and attempting to sexually assault our horsegirl at the party before something extremely karmic happens.

Yes, I am writing. This IS taking a while, i'm sorry.

>>41360591
Don't worry about it, good things take time.

>>41360591
We're not in the hexer zone. I think.

>>41360591

I thought you had literally, LITERALLY died.

It happens to mini-QMs all the time. They make a misstep, the main QM decides to disintegrate them in a flurry of arcane energy, you know the rest...

>>41360646
>good
>>41360757
Man, tell me about it. I have dodged, like, three laser beams so far.

>>41360854
>good
it is good, in terms of writing.

I'm gonna honestly say that maybe you would have been better off writing a shortstory rather than a quest, but the writing is very enjoyable.

>>41360888
>I'm gonna honestly say that maybe you would have been better off writing a shortstory rather than a quest, but the writing is very enjoyable.

Agree partially with this faggot.

The quality of your writing is top-tier, honestly. If you worked it around the normal pace / system of choices relevant to quest threads, you could very literally be the best QM on /tg/.

Don't get cocky kid. But you've got potential.

>>41361137
Your praise of his writing seems drastically excessive, almost to the point of parody.

>>41361137
>you could very literally be the best QM on /tg/
It takes more than good writing than that.

Bu he's sort of right, you can make a great QM once you figured out how to integrate meaningful choices, but frankly schoolgirl SoL is not the right thing to write for meaningful choices.

Maybe ask Pally if he lets you write on of the dungeon runs? That seems like it would help you to figure that out.

>>41361205
>Your praise of his writing seems drastically excessive, almost to the point of parody.
He is trying to be nice, I'm pretty sure.

And lets be honest here, the average writing skill in the QMing business is not that great.

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>>41361205
>Your praise of his writing seems drastically excessive, almost to the point of parody.

Your practiced apathy seems drastically excessive, almost to the point of no one giving a shit about what you think.

>>41360888
You are absolutely right. This would have worked better as a short story instead of a quest proof of that is the final updates with around 10000 characters. Mechanically speaking, this is akin to railroading, I think, as there aren't significant choices between the long updates.

That Kittrane vote was literally me realizing "holy shit, too much text, where is the vote?". When I was writing the scene following it, I kicked myself on the ass, I could have made it meaningful by suggesting different forms of showing thanks. A hug, an IOU, etc. Well, more significant than nothing.

I tried to add more choices today, but when some updates happened, they just...kept on growing and growing. It's somewhat frustrating to see this happen. I don't think I could ever run on /tg/ like this, maybe on akun with sporadic updates, but let's be frank, that's horseshit.

Anyway! Ending incoming.

You watch her go in silence. You should go on a witch hunt. It’s very tempting, to go after her and pay her back for what she did this morning. And she is all alone, so it would be even easier, especially in the dark. You even have some cool one liners to quote.

“Phaysis. Come on.” Nevyn wakes you up. “It’s getting late.” She says. She probably saw Anabelle too, but doesn’t want any trouble. Seems she took your silence as a negative about the party.

You ask her how her day went like and she tells you what happened. After you two separated and she went with the seniors to discover more about the party and missed the first classes trying to get some “cred” with them. She befriended an older student, another tiefling, and they let her “in the know”, despite being two years below them.

You wonder why she had to go through all this trouble to discover something that was mostly public. She just shrugs. “It was fun.”

In no time you reach your room. Julie, Rachel and Cybele are all dressed in typical punk gear. Torn pants, fishnet stockings, tight tops, spiky bands and makeup. They aren’t wearing exactly the same as each other, Rachel is wearing shorts, for example, but they are all in similar style.

“Hey girls. Going out tonight?” They turn and greet you two. “Yeah, going to that party. Nevyn found a way to get us inside and we have nothing to lose.” Wasn’t it open to the public?

The displacer beast girl looks at you. “You sure you don’t want to go?” you nod. “I have something else to do, you go with them.” She looks at you with obvious uncertainty, but the other girls urge to do it and she makes up her mind. You hope she will have fun.

As soon as she finishes dressing up and collecting her basic party gear, she leaves with the tieflings. Lilliana has classes in the night, so you have the entire place for yourself. Lots of privacy and space.

>>41361322
>I tried to add more choices today, but when some updates happened, they just...kept on growing and growing. It's somewhat frustrating to see this happen. I don't think I could ever run on /tg/ like this, maybe on akun with sporadic updates, but let's be frank, that's horseshit.

Don't sell yourself short anon. I tend to drop quests at the very first hint of weak writing. You have an audience here, even if you don't believe in yourself. If you really wanted to run a quest of your own on /tg/, you could probably do it successfully.

You close the windows and grab the bathroom’s mirror. It fell down a few weeks ago and no one has fixed it to the wall again, it’s somewhat convenient this way. Helps when it’s time to put makeup and someone is occupying the bathroom. You also move the rest of the furniture to the corners, you will need space for this.

You then retrieve the helmet you took from the club. You need to return it tomorrow, when you are done.

You sit in a chair, studying the helmet again today. You feel its metallic surface for a while; you expected it to be colder. Your clothes are in a condition as bad as the helmet. Worse, even, the thing is clean and your uniform is torn at places and dirty. You will put your pajamas on after you are done, possibly after Chame has gone already.

Speaking of, she should have dropped by by now. Ah, she won’t mind if you start without her.

Putting the mirror somewhere it will stay eye level with you, you put the helmet on and change into your centaur form. Yep, it changed into a bridle. For some fucking reason. Why!

Your breathing grows ragged in your frustration. Why did this stupid thing begin changing too? It never happened before the…adventurer’s club…

Are they related? The club and this…this change? Maybe the professor can help. Maybe he’s the culprit.

Your hair emits a faint glow, a warning that it will catch fire. You shake your head and push the thoughts away; they’re not why you are doing this. You grab the mirror and watch your reflection. How you look with this thing on.

It’s a bunch of straps connecting to each other and a little bar forcing itself into your mouth. It’s disgusting. You run a finger on the straps and bite down on the bit. It doesn’t hurt your teeth.

>>41361137
That's a very bold statement, hotshot

Actually, it feels rather comfortable to them. It doesn’t seem to be actual metal, it’s a tasteless soft material. You open your mouth and then bite down again, bringing your sharp teeth on it. You feel almost nothing. Interesting and weird.

You pull on the straps. It proves to be a challenge to do so, they mostly refuse to leave your skin alone. Pulling on one results in pulling on the entire thing and your head. This isn’t good, at all, if someone pulls on it with enough strength…

Yeah, not liking that train of thought. You look at your reflection again and realize how ridiculous you look with this thing on. But for some reason, you are stuck with it. You look back at your torn skirt; it covers most of your horse body, but it ends just short of what it should cover. You will need to replace it with something longer.

“…just a limb, uh?” You think why Chame said all that. Was it to make you shameless, or to genuinely cheer you up? Speaking of her, seems like Chame won’t be coming, after all. You transform back into a human and throw the helmet away.

You undo the tie and pull it off you, throwing it at the ground with the ribbons and the cloak. You can pick these things up tomorrow. Shit. Should have gone out with Nevyn.

“That. Was. Incredible.”

You jump and turn to where you threw the helmet away and yep, there is Chame standing on its place, looking at herself in awe. “How did you do that?” If there is any time for punishment, it’s now.

You clench your (human) teeth and close your hands into fists. “Chame. Why were you the helmet?” you ask, feeling your eyes starting to burn.

“I needed to hide from the Professor, and decided to kill two birds with one stone.” She smiles, still in awe. “But damn, I didn’t think it would affect me too! This is big! Let’s do it again!” she says, beaming with such weird joy that it confuses you.

“But you, you were in my-“ she closes the short gap between you two and takes your hands. “C’mon, let’s do it, let’s do it! What else can you do?” Goddess, you haven’t see the mimic this energetic in a while.

“This is why I came, right?” she says. “I can turn into various models of helmets so you can try them all without needing to borrow them from the club.” She says. “Just let me go through it again!” under this much enthusiasm and lack of ill intent (or tease), you give in. I-if only to see what other helmets do to you!

Chame changes into various kinds or gear, and they all have different transformations. A skullcap, for example, was very minimal and only became a bite. A full helm, on the other hand, covered your entire face, and when transformed, was still like a mask and covered your eyes. You actually panicked and thought you went blind, but there were two ting slits you could see through.

The mimic was ecstatic with every test. Whatever she went through, she always giggled when you two changed and she didn’t really explain what it was like. She tried, actually, but it made no sense to you.

Eventually, she talks, while you are testing another model.

“Remember what I said about you being you?” she asks. You groan. “Hear me out, I think I got this.” Her voice sounds like it’s coming from everywhere, when she is on your face like this.

“So, like. You are you. The human. And the centaur and horse forms are your limbs, a part of you but not YOU.” So far, so…good?

“The magic for your shapeshifting is affects YOU, but because you are a half-breed, like me, it only affects your things by half. And because the head is where people are people, it takes effect on whatever is on your head!” You admit this is decent logic, even if it seems kind dumb. But it gives you some hope.

Time to disappoint yourself.

“But what about when I change into a nightmare? All my clothes change when I do that.”

“Uh, that’s because you change completely.” She says, sliding off your face and running you down to the floor into a puddle. She recollects herself into her usual self. “So it also changes the YOU into a horse, and that brings all of your things into the new shape!” She circles you, running a hand on your quadruple body.

“And the hybrid form?”

“Right. In that case you only change partially, yeah? So you change, but YOU remain unchanged, and it confuses your shapeshifting magic. Somehow, your half form is confusing your shapeshifting magic.” Ugh, this is going to give you a headache.

You laughs, however. You never expected Chame to try magic theory, but here she is, trying her best to help you. “I don’t think that’s how it works, Chame.” You say.

“Man, I dunno. I’m just a student and I don’t into magic theory.” She shrugs and scratches your horseback. It tickles and makes you giggle. “That’s just my guess, anyway. If it’s right, which it should be because why would it be wrong, then hoozah! If it’s wrong, then nothing changes.”

She finishes circling you. You get the impression she is wearing less clothes than when she started circling you. “All we can do without help is get you stronger and see what happens when you can control your natural magic.” You stare at her and pay attention to how little she is actually wearing. It’s risky enough to make even Lilliana blush, and she wears transparent nightgowns.

“Chame.” You call to her. “Are those supposed to be your pajamas?” you think aloud and she shakes head. “Nah, I sleep naked. No clothes ever, remember?”

…right. Nevermind. Wait.

“You are not sleeping here.” You say, crossing your arm. “Eh, why not? We can continue this all night!”

“Absolutely not! We need sleep, and we have done enough tonight.” you scoff. She gives you the puppy eyes. Literal puppy eyes, how freaky.

“After all I did for you today…” Please, stop that, it’s scary.

“Egh…alright. But you are not sleeping on my bed, or the same room, ok?” She jumps in small joy. “And keep your hands to yourself.” You add.

“Whaaat, why? You already put me in your mouth so many times tonight~” you freeze. Your gaze slowly turns into a glare, and Chame takes a step back away from you. “It’s not like they were kisses…but they were exactly that.” She grins.

“Also, your hair is on fire.”

===

And finally, it's over. Jesus christ. It's almost 1 am, but I will be around for about 20 minutes or so. Feel free to continue the criticism, please, but try to not argue among yourselves.

tl;dr

>>41361444
That was ... I'm pretty sure it was lewd somehow.
I'm unto you!

Seriously though, nice ending, even if I didn't like the transformation explanation but its not that important.

I think everything that needed saying was said, the writing is good, but way too many words and too little choice for a quest.

Question just being what you want to do with that now, do you want to work on that and write quest yourself?
Or try >>41361208
>Maybe ask Pally if he lets you write on of the dungeon runs?

>>41361265
Eh, the excessive sycophantry, almost to the point of fanboyism, isn't really helping anyone, least of all the QM, assuming his confidence issues are similar to others I've met.

He's definitely above most QMs in ability, but his writing still contains a number of flaws, even ignoring the obvious issue of speed (which personally doesn't bother me). For example, the dialogue is sometimes written long at inappropriate times instead of flowing naturally to the character, making it feel stilted, though that's been appearing a a bit less frequently this run.

>>41361288
I can't tell if you're joking.

>>41361322
Akun is smutfags all the way down.

I'm only being partially facetious.

>>41361359
>>41361367
Posting in the middle of update clusters is a little rude.

>>41361568
Your mom is rude

>>41361577
She tells it like it is and doesn't take anybody's shit.

>>41361568
>Akun is smutfags all the way down.
I'm so sad that is so true now, I used to love that place.

>>41361445
Chame tried to magic theory and was lewd. Phaysis may or may not something lesbians something.

>>41361504
The explanation is intentionally bullshit. The truth is, there is no explanation.Chame might also be just trying to spend time with a fellow shapeshifter.

As for >Maybe ask Pally if he lets you write on of the dungeon runs?
Eh...maybe, I don't know. I'm not too involved with the quest's mechanics and powers. Would definetly be an interesting experience, for the case that I write something of my own in the future. I have many ideas that I have not developed due a fear of QMing.

>>41361568
If you could point out the flawed dialogues, I'd appreciate it greatly, it would help a lot. It's hard to spot your own mistakes.
Lay it on me, actually, I need the criticism.
One thing I am aware of is my limited vocabulary. Even in my own language I'm missing too many words. When switching to english, it's even worse.

>>41361699
Thank you

>>41361699
Well, in any case, I wnt to thank you for the nice bit of writing about one (several) of our girls.
Its nice seeing them fleshed out more and you did it very well with Phaysis, and even Chame.

>>41361699
Not that guy, but yeah. Just in general the dialogue you write seems stilted and does not feel right. To me personally anyway. Like they aren't humans who interact with each other, and more like puppets going through motions? Hard to put in words.

By the way, this anon >>41359471 was somewhat spot on.

The revenge option would have Phaysis go after anabelle and either invade her dream for a nightmare of apocalyptic proportions, or chase after her across the school and traumatize her.
The party ending would focus on Phaysis being more laid back and crushing on a singer and discovering her latent love for heavy metal.Yes, heavy metal is a thing, a rare thing but pally allowed it.She would also meet one of the girls not recruited yet.


>>41361742
You are welcome.

>>41361917
You are too kind, anon. My thanks to you, for tolerating me and enjoying this. Chame was a bitch to write.

Also, something that might interest you all: Pally said this little story could grant Phaysis a few XP. I hope to go over this with him soon.

>>41362022
That must be because of my own lack of understanding how people and socialization works. I will keep it in mind when trying to write again in the future.

>>41362119
I can't into spoilers too well.

Anywya, I'm going to bed. Good night and thanks to you all, especially Pally.

>>41362159
Good night.

>>41361699
Most of the time, it seems like it's just not making contractions (particularly I-based ones, such as I'll or I'm) when it would feel natural to do so. To me, that is. Since English isn't your first language, this is a completely understandable thing.

That's also not to say that you should always contract when possible, however.

>“You are not sleeping here.”
This is an example of not forming contractions being used properly, as she would be emphasizing each word.

>Like I am doing right now.”
This is an example of when a contraction would've sounded more natural.

There's also a few instances where words that are a bit extraneous get added to the dialogue.

>“I don’t have how to thank you, so I guess I will owe you one?”
"I guess I owe you one?" would serve just as well to communicate the same point and would sound more natural coming from a teenaged girl to me.

I'm ignoring the "have how" because that's the kind of fuckup that isn't inherent to what you intended to write and is just a thing the human brain does and because I didn't notice it until now.

The above examples are all pulled from dialogue in story posts and not things I wrote to illustrate a point.

I'm not very good at writing analysis due to my own mental conditions, but if I think of anything more, I'll pass it to you through Pally or post it in a future thread, depending.

>>41361699
>Phaysis may or may not something lesbians something.
I have another theory: she may be bondage sexual, and gender might not be as important.

>>41362255
That wouldn't really affect Chame at all, due to the mimic thing.

>>41362255
>she may be bondage sexual
...A bondage fetish doesn't mean you are bondage sexual.

She is clearly not sexually attracted to the bindings.

>>41362285
How would you know, have you checked?

>>41362285
It's not about the bindings, but the feelings the bindings give you.

>>41362452
But the bindings were Chame, so...does that mean Phaysis has feelings for Chame?

We've wrapped back around to lesbians.

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>>41362572
Well, there's the example of the sub from Sunstone, who never really knew she was into chicks, but went that way because she was looking for a really good domme.

>>41362722
That's a really bad drawing

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>>41362815
His work can be hit or miss depending on effort. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stjepan_%C5%A0eji%C4%87

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>>41362815
Barring any glaring anatomical errors (unless the characters in question are caricaturized and it's designed as such), that is completely opinion-based and objective.

The guy's art style doesn't do anything for me, but it's not "bad" by any means. Except maybe with colors- there's a bit too much red going on.

>>41362896
Barring. But we're not barring that. And it's designed to be realistic and wank material. It's just objectively awful.

>phaysis wants to be tied up and ridden

Hmm yes, delicious

>>41362967
>It's just objectively awful.
You use that word, but your dislike for it does not make it an objective fact. That is your personal opinion, and therefore most definitely NOT objective.

>>41364040
No no no. My dislike does in fact make it objective as I am authority and paragon of artistic guidance.

Good thread mate. Thoroughly enjoyed.

Has pally said what he will make canon?

>>41367242
Not yet

After discussing things with Pally and reviewing things, I have decided to award some experience points: 11 XP in total.

This XP is exclusive to Phaysis, since you played (or read) as her.

Two XP came from lesbian.

>>41371312
This has been added to the pastebin