Stat sheet:
Feltara, Aedammir of Rhiannon
Half-and-Half Minotauress

Height: 15ft
Body type:
>Very Muscular (with extra aesthetics, according to the first time we drank the milk)
>Extremely Busty
>Covered in Mystical, Living Tattoos
>Fiery red eyes
>Enlarged Horns
>Enchanted Nipple studs

Spells known: (Must be concentrated on to use)
>Concussive Blast
>Iron Flesh
>Cleavage of Holding
>Storm bolts
>Empowerment

Passive Magic:
>Mesmerizing Appearance
>Elemental fluids(Currently Lava)
>Magma skin (Only visible when turned on)
>Gem Breaker(Gets physically stronger easily)

Scrolls:
>Ice Trap Spells
>Healing Spells
>Body Enhancement Spells
>Raw Magic Spells
>Glamour Spells

Equipment:
>Upgraded Tower of Rhiannon(Enchanted Heavy Plate armor and Holy Robes)
>Rhiannon's Will (Divine Hammer, no name officially)
>The Queens Fist(Powerful Right hand Gauntlet)
>Various Sorceress Robes

Thralls, Servants, and forces:
>Ven (Living Tattoos, Jester manifestation of Feltera)
>Two Ravenguard
>Hereshiel (castle-bound runeborn Paladin Elf)
>Verelio (???? Psionic Cleric Leader)
>Devrelia (ChainHeart Human Mage)
>Cereniel (Psionic Dormant God-Advisor)
>Current Followers/Residents: 480

Bases, Territory, and Locations:
>God-Built Magitech Flying Castle
>Infinite City Around The Castle
>Former Slave Bazaar With Surrounding Barrier

Misc. Effects:
>Actions manifest Godegg
>Impregnated (Keidran, Incubus)
>All milk from you and Ven sent to goddess
>Lava mode transforms clothes into fire

Archive: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive.html?tags=minotauress+quest
Twitter: https://twitter.com/seeker12789?s=09

>>39634552
>Go use the Dragonscales you have, stronger than steel and light

>>39634552
>Go use the Dragonscales you have, stronger than steel and light

Well i got two anons and i dont wanna stagnate, writing!

Also question. How was last thread? Did i pull off the fighting right? Did i go out of character for a moment? Did i do anything cliche/predictable? Any suggestions?

Just asking for review purposes, i want to fix any issues and change up any flaws i may or may not have in my writing and pacing.

>>39635035
You did pretty damn good last time, Nothing i can think of that you did wrong really, Except for what i said last time about Feltera not asking what happened to Ven

>>39634552

>Dragon scales with a layer of fescan for the rigid parts, ventrax for the mobile ones (if there is any)

>Make everything given the same color to fit with the rest of the armor

>>39635035

It was pretty good. There was a few issues, but nothing major. Just, don't forget that you don't have to give the players all the time in the world for chit-chat

>>39634868 here
>>39635129
this is good, adding my support to it

What was the color of the dragon's scales, again ?

>>39634552
>Dragonscales

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Well you should use those dragonscales you have. They are strong and light, two qualities with quite the appeal to them. You take out both Fescan and Ventrax, grab alot of leather, and set it down where your going to need it. This armor will be light and strong you hope, and you turn around to the three brothers before walking by them.

"Hey where you going?"

"To get a material i need. Dont touch anything or else."

You teleport out of the room and directly into the vault room. Stepping into a land of treasure, you immediately see the dragonscales that Hereshiel had organized through magic and walk across the gold sea towards them. You really need to see and speak with him after this, you two have alot of stuff to talk about. You arrive at the scales to find them ALOT bigger than you expected. You pick one up and find that it's at least half your size in height and definetly wider. Well the blood red scale will come in handy thats for sure, as you lift it up with no problem, and you turn and teleport back to the forge.

Walking inside you see all three brothers standing and chatting with each other, with Gehein smiling while Aijen simply looks annoyed, and of course Zarol standing there unemotionally. The three of them turn to you silently as you walk in with the dragonscale, and Gehein's face becomes one of slight surprise.

"Woah, where did you get that from?"

"The demon dragon i killed and have in my Vault."

Upon your reply Gehein makes a face of disbelief and opens his mouth with a hand raised before simpling shaking his head and waving his hand side to side.

"You know what, im not even going to ask."

You walk over to the anvil, set down your dragonscale, and prepare to forge.

>Kick them out. Its YOUR workshop, and you prefer some time to think and focus without constant distractions. They can see the finished product.
>Let them stay, you dont mind showing them how you work. Besides, they cant sabotage it or anything.
>Other

>>39635789
>Kick them out. Its YOUR workshop, and you prefer some time to think and focus without constant distractions. They can see the finished product.

>>39635789
>Let them stay, you dont mind showing them how you work. Besides, they cant sabotage it or anything.

>>39635789
> Let's them stay...
No reason be all secretive and shit.

>>39635789
>>Let them stay, you dont mind showing them how you work. Besides, they cant sabotage it or anything.

>>39635789
>Let them stay, you dont mind showing them how you work. Besides, they cant sabotage it or anything.

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>>39635789
>>Let them stay, you dont mind showing them how you work. Besides, they cant sabotage it or anything.

Ya got another anon! Finally got home.

AND found some interesting pics! This one's not AS feminine as the real thing, but, whaddaya think? Hershey back in the day?

>>39636181
My little Hersy-kiss CANT be this manly.bishe

>>39635789

>Let them stay
>Don't pay attention to them. Only to our work

>>39636181
I like it, maybe he can take up that look again when he proposes to us

>>39636194
>>39636181

He's probably more of a dandy now than back in the day.

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>>39636181
>>39636194
Okay...

Number 2!

I almost see this one as initiate Hershey.

>>39636239

I don't think it fits him

>>39636239
No but in all seriousness I thought the knight one was good, just memeing

>>39636239
>>39636277
>>39636324
I just thought the contrast between the two pics would be funny lol

>>39636181
Combine this pic with Zetol's Hershey pic (the green one), and I think we might have something.

You start to think about kicking them out, and then decide to let them stay. You dont have any secrets or anything, and besides you need to show them that you can actually craft. The first thing you start on is the actual parts for the chest armor. You turn back to then with a serious face before you begin.

"Im going to need to focus. So either shut up or talk low."

You turn away before they respond and begin your work. The chest will have to be rigid and tough, and it will be where the majority of the scale and other metals will be stored. You take the scale and start attempting to break it into a number of pieces. The pieces will be large and spread put through the leather, allowing the armor to stop blows in the right places, and they will have a thin layer of fescan on top of them. The scale is quite strong, taking both enormous time and effort to break into pieces. You use mostly raw strength and a hammer and chisel to break it into the separate bits you require, and after a couple hours of work you manage to get a number of pieces out of the scale. Done with that, you put them to the side and begin on the metals.

The metals were alot more complicated than you thought. They required alot more heat to melt, to the point where you had to use some of your own lava to make them molten. You melted them apart from each other of course, not wanting to risk anything, and soon you take out the molds you will be using to shape them. While your not exactly sure of how large the Hala is, she is certainyl larger then most humans at a height of around 7 to 8 feet. As such you use the larger molds, and pour the now molten materials into them and let them cool as you move onto the actual leather.

>Cont

Im writing out the next part, but i wanted to warn you all that despite my searching and looking up i found little in the way of shaping and making leather armor properly. As such i request you forgive me if a part or two either seems stupid or unrealistic, and apologize to any that i offend for my lack of leather armor writing skill.

>>39636718
Good thing we also have shrink/growth spells, just in case the size ain't quite right.

Luckily for you the leather is already good to be used, and only requires you to shape it. You take out some more tools, specifically the ones for learher working, and begin to cut out a large amount of leather. It will need to be in two pieces, the first layer which will be studded and hide the metal plates, and the second layer which will be more flexible and help keep the metal plates in place. You begin work on the first layer, boiling it until its soft and then closing it and preparing to tie it together.

The second layer is made of multiple pieces of leather, hopefully allowing it to be more flexible, and you sow the thin parts together in a specific shape. You then put the still soft and wet leather on a model with a particularly large bust, and leave it there to be shaped. You dont have much of an idea on how to shape leather or make leather armor, but you will have to improvise a bit and hope for the best.

Moving onto the actual top layer, this one will be far more complicated. You make pockets on the internal side, where you plan on inserting the pieces of metal inside and then sewing them closed. As for the exterior you shape it how you shaped the last one, except its thicker and larger. After making it you take some Fescan and melt it down before pouring it into multiple molds in the shape of large circular studs. When the first set of purple studs is finished you repeat the process until you have more than enough studs for the entire set, and then some. Time to put this chest armor together and move onto the rest.

>Cont

>>39636863
A word of advice, taking an hour describing the creation of armor even when knowing the process of how it would actually be done isn't really exciting or engaging and is kinda just a waste of time. Its nice to have a choice in what goes into it I suppose but combined with last thread's end its been like three or four hours just over this armor stuff when it could have been a simple one-choice post and one-description post

>>39637210
speak for yourself anon, I'm enjoying this, too many quests simply gloss over it all and just go "Congrats, you made X!" without going into what you actually did.

>>39637210
Yeah, it was going long yesterday and now we're spending an hour continuing it here?

Alright screw it ima just give you guys the choice.

>Tell us more about the(not really)fascinating details of making armor
>God damnit OP just finish it and move on already, i want my War/SoL/Preaching/Milk drinking/Clown girl/Hereshiel already!
>Other

>>39637210
I'm here for the word porn, whether that be spending time with Hershy, beating in the skull or a demon, or going into the details of making armor it's all good for me.

>>39637276
>>Tell us more about the(not really)fascinating details of making armor

>>39637276
>God damnit OP just finish it and move on already, i want my War/SoL/Preaching/Milk drinking/Clown girl/Hereshiel already!

I honestly can't see how you could make it somehow more drawn out than it is now

>>39637276
>Tell us more about the(not really)fascinating details of making armor
Don't stop now, the scene needs to be finished.

>>39637276
>Tell us more about the(not really)fascinating details of making armor

>>39637276
>>Tell us more about the(not really)fascinating details of making armor

>>39637296
Sorry anon, it seems everyone else likes word porn. Dont worry though, it will only be one more post ok?

>>39637276
> Tell us more...

>>39637296
The story would be more interesting if the quest author had the confidence and self-esteem to end the erotica and focus on action/adventure instead of what we're getting now.

>>39637860
he's been focusing on action/adventure the past several threads and now its downtime again, and theres still no erotica so no idea what you're reading, because it isn't this quest.

I love how literally everyone has this idea of what the quest is supposed to be and it all conflicts with one another

Clearly this will go places

>>39637860
Oh ffs get out shitposter
Zetol ignore this shithead

>>39637948
Because the strength of this quest thrives on the Zetol's shitty writing and inexperience, his/her lack of confidence in his/her own narrative, characterizations and development allows a greater flexibility in how the audience can shape and mold to ends that suit their head-canon.

In the end this style of quests drives out most of the people with radical different plans or simply do not like the direction the quest is heading, leaving only a population of insular and stubborn yes men comforting the quest author and reinforcing his/her own failings.

>>39638024
Those are some great drugs you've got, they are doing wonders for your perception of reality. You can fuck off now troll.

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>>39638024

>>39638042
>>39638050
>insular and stubborn yes men

You fit the bill perfectly, thank you for confirming my hypothesis.

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You move onto putting the armor together, taking the now hardened top layer and putting in the metal plates and scales into the pockets. You then sow them closed and put it over top of the lower layer, and sow it together as well. Last but not least you take some of the purple studs and insert them into the chest piece all around. When your done with the top piece, which took quite some time to finish, you put it to the side and begin work on the rest of the special armor. Your quite sure it will come out perfectly...

>Later

The armor is finally done. Through alot of work and magic you managed to make blessed white Leather armor for Hala. Your not sure if it will perfectly fit her, or if she will even like it, but in the end your sure that you will have made something to show your skill. You pick up the armor and turn around to show it to the brothers...and only see Zarel. The half metal man is just standing there, the only sound you hear being his wheezing and mechanical breathing. Confused you cock your eyebrow and look around before focusing back on him.

"Where are the other two?"

"They went to train their swordsmanship. Said they were bored and asked me to wait for you to finish."

Each of his words is deep and mechanical, and a part of you gets annoyed at the thought of them running around searching for a training area. You turn away angrily and put down the armor set as Zarel walks over to you.

"Do not be too angry with my brothers. They are simply a bit foolish and headstrong."

You dont respond at first, instead reforming your armor and preparing to leave before looking down at him.

"They wont have heads if they keep acting this way around me thats for sure. If they havent already then make sure they dont do anything else stupid."

You then grip your hammer and prepare to go searching for the two annoying men.

>Take armor to Hala first
>Bring armor when you search
>They can wait, do something else(insert)
>Go find them(roll)
>Leave and go sleep
>Other

>>39638265
>Bring armor when you search

>>39638265
>>Take armor to Hala first
Have her model it?

>>39638265
>Take armor to Hala first

>>39638265
>Take armor to Hala first

>>39638265
>Take armor to Hala first

Writing dont worry

Though your quite angry, the best thing to do right now is take the armor to Hala. You made it for her after all, and if those two arent around to see it then too bad for them. You take the enchanted armor, virtually weightless in your hands, and leave the room to go search for the satyr. Zarel follows behind you silently, and the two of you walk down the metal hall together, with him having to increase his walking speed to keep up.

"Are you going to search for them?"

"No. Im going to give this armor to the person who deserves it. If your brothers dont want to see it or how its made then too bad, i have people to see."

"I do hope you forgive them though."

You sigh and put a hand to your head.

"Im not one to keep grudges Zarel. Just keep them in line before i accidentally hurt one of them."

He goes silent at that, probably thinking about either you or his brothers, before speaking again.

"I will. But they arent children, and what i can influence is limited."

You can see that. Hopefully he decides to put them in their place next time they speak, especially before you do. The two of you go through another set of halls where you realize, for the second time since you've been in yhis castle, that you have no idea where the satyr's are. How great, just what you needed.

>Keep searching for them in hopes of finding them or running into one
>Teleport to their room(d100)
>Screw it. Go put this down and do something else
>Go search for the brothers
>Other

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>>39639418
>Teleport to their room(d100)

Rolled 39 (1d100)

>>39639418
>Teleport to their room

Rolled 81 (1d100)

>>39639418
>Teleport to their room(d100)

>>39639478
Nice

>>39639478
You've saved us from an unpleasant experience of teleporting inside of a wall. Thank you.

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Though you may not know where they are your determined to find the satyr's. There is no way that in your castle your going to be loss. You focus on the goats and your soon teleported through the castle and right in front of a door. Well thats definetly quicker than searching. You look down to see that Zarel is still with you and you give him a hard look.

"Stay put here and wait for me. Ill be right back."

Zarel nods and stands to the side out of view. You then knock on the door and it opens to show Farla in front of you with a cup of some hot liquid and a smile.

"Hello there darlin! Have ya come for my tea or just dropped by to say hi?"

"Im actually here to see Hala. Is she here?"

"Why yes she is, if you would just come right on in and see her."

She opens the door fully, and after shrinking yourself to fit you walk inside and then regrow. The room smells of tea, perfume and Hair products, and you see Darla in front of a mirror doing her hair while talking to Helina as she tries on a dress. On the bed sits Hala, who silently watches the two of them.

"Maybe you should use that cream we bought from that nice feller in the market. Im sure it would make that wig look better!"

"And maybe you should put your cloak back on, cause that dress only makes you look uglier than a dust rat!"

The two of them argue like always, and though it would be nice to chat or stick around you came for Hala in particular, who hasnt noticed you enter yet.

>Give her the armor out of thanks for her assistance
>Give the armor out of respect
>Give her the armor as a true sign of friendship
>Give her the arnor silently and go
>Other

>>39639991
>Give her the armor out of thanks for her assistance
>Give the armor out of respect
But mostly
>Give her the armor as a true sign of friendship

>>39639991
>Give her the armor out of thanks for her assistance

>>39639991
>>Give her the armor out of thanks for her assistance
>>Give the armor out of respect
>But mostly
>>Give her the armor as a true sign of friendship

This is good

See when it takes this long between updates you don't have time to spend a shit load of time on any one thing

You can say you 'like the words' or whatever as much as you want people will have better things to do if you're just gonna drag them along through mundane shit

>>39640515
Jesus you're still here? Don't you have anything better to do?

>>39640531
I'm trying to help. Yes I'm still here; doesn't look like much anyone else is.

Take it or leave it, I won't keep on it but don't dismiss me as just trolling.

Sorry anons but i am legit tired, hence it took do long for post. Bump till ornining please anons and good night.

>>39640600
Trying to help by referring to the writing as 'shitty', and jumping on the OPs self-esteem, doesn't win you any points, anon.

Critique is all well and good, but there's a fine line between critique and insult. People react badly because it doesn't sound like advice, it sounds like someone saying "I'm better, and here's why".

And it all loops back to the same question: why are you here, if you think the writing, in your own words, is shitty? Why is it worth your time? If you see potential, then don't be abrasive, it just pisses people off.

Just my two cents.

>>39641933
Because this quest would be a lot better if the quest author plans out events and decision trees beforehand with a structured beginning, middle and end point and actually pick up the pace because right now the story is meandering about focusing on meaningless character interactions.

None of this do an quest every other day or two, writing tired and exhausted nonsense.

Spend the time to plan and write general responses to your choices, Have the quest happen once or twice a week. Lorenth/Crystal Gunner/Kefka/Seeker/Zetol has a twitter to notify when quests begin. In addition number your quest threads so people who didn't have the chance to catch up with the current events can find the threads in chronological order and read them up in the archives.

In addition try not to break out of character just to console and assure the audience you're writing, we know you're writing. Use the occasional general Quest Discussion to ask for advice and suggestions, because there are veteran quest authors who can offer that help.

You know basic things about quests that have been refined since the era of ruby quest.

And this is 4chan its denizens can be as vicious and insulting as they want. If you want a nicer internet community go to reddit.

>>39642265

...Sorry, did you just admit you were viscious and insulting on purpose ?

>>39639991

>as thanks
>out of respect
>as sign of friendship

>>39642742
Not who you're replying to but that's a huge deflection about all of the other valid points in his post

>>39642742
Wow if you're this self conceited and petty, that you won't even consider someone's constructive criticism because you think every person who criticizes you to be the same group of shitposting trolls.

I can't help you at all. No one can.

>>39642806
>>39642813

I do consider the rest they said, and I admit there is valid points, but you got to admit that using "this is 4chan, I'm allowed to be a jerk" (or st least, this is what I understood, prompting my question to make sure I got it right) as closing statement kind of leave an impression.

>>39642904
It does leave an impression

An impression of your average, has-been-since-2000-era 4chan denizen

OP doesn't help by constantly breaking character and begging for approval or playing the woe is me card. That's a one way ticket to getting your teeth kicked in out here.

>>39642904
Because it was also advice, 4chan is a place where people are expected to troll and be trolled. To assume that people won't be jerks to you in place where people are expected to be jerks because of its ingrained in its culture is beyond retarded.

If you can't handle trolls, then go to a nicer internet community. Replying to trolls only feeds them, and makes you out as an even bigger target for trolling.

>>39642265
You are one hell of a pathetic faggoty troll and you have no idea how to tell a story, so fuck off already

>>39643002
>people are trolls so I'll be a troll huurr durr

Stop posting your opinion as fact, stop being a obnoxious cunt, stop being condescending and drop the attitude and then we might actually think your words have so merit, but until then, your just another of those trolls to ignore.

So either shut up and leave, or learn to speak like a reasonable human being and let OP run his quest without a hitting up his threads.

Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go back to patiently waiting for OP to come back when he's rested and ready to continue.

>>39643355
>calling the one anon that gave the best advice and constructive criticism in this entire thread.

No John you are the trolls.

>>39643427
> best
Far from it anon, there are many ways to run a quest and tell a story well, don't act like your opinion is the only one that matters

>>39643426
>ad homineming this hard

Man I'm not him but the way he got you guys so riled up and insular and then delivering actually useful advice knowing full well it will be ignored and yet will still get butthurt replies.

All I have to say is top fucking kek.

>>39643456
If you actually read the post, this is what all successful quests do already. He didn't impose his own belief on storytelling, he just detailed ways the quest author can improve.

If you're that booty bothered by him, you might as well wait and enjoy your shitty sub par quest existing in fucking vacuum.

>>39643520
>Man I'm not him
Yeah you are, your the same one troll that's been here for weeks and its transparent as hell, you're not fooling amyone

>>39643520
> this is what all successful quests do already
I run a moderately successful quest and don't do things like that, and neither do a lot of others...

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>>39643559
>he thinks I'm him

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Adventure Bump!

And now bed.

So, what are some constructive criticism we could give to Zetol to help him improve?

For the moment I have:

> it is not necessary to always separate dialogs and descriptions. The text flows more fluidly if the two are intertwined

>>39644524
Be careful of overusing words like however and meanwhile within the same paragraph, I see that a lot in other quests and it stands out, it's an easy habit to get into but try to expand ones vocabulary, this is one thing Zetol has been improving with that I like.

Another general bit of advicebia try to show things from the characters eyes and kind, rather than tell what is happening, show, don't tell, it really help draw me as a reader into the mind of the character and immerses me in the quest.

Outside of that I can't think of anything, not that much of a technical writer myself but I'm glad that Zetol is constantly improving in his writing

>>39644991
>characters eyes and kind
Mind*, ducking phone

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>>39644524
>>39644991
Keep it up, boys!

>>39645407
>>39644524

Another thing I thought of:

>Characters are not defined by one trait, mood or quirk. They're not archetypes existing in a vacuum.

You dont normally call people 'friends', and you dont have many of them. You also dont just up and decide your best friends with the first person you help or get help from, mainly since that is a foolish and stupid way to go about life. But you are willing to make friends, and you feel that Hala would be a great one to have. You walk through the room towards her, and see those cold determined eye's look over and bore into you. The sound of the other two sisters stops as you stand in front of Hala with the armor in hand.

Your eyes lock with her's for a moment before you take the armor in both hands and hold it forward. "I made this for you Hala, i feel that you deserve it for the assistance you gave me." Hala takes the armor from your hands, and you see a flash of shock in her eye's at its non-existant weight before the regular strength comes back. She looks over the studded white Leather armor with careful and contemplative eye's. Clearly she isn't one to take the first thing she sees. "...Thank you." "Your welcome, i do hope you enjoy it and the advantages it gives. Its my gift to you after all." At that Hala looks up at you and then nods with respect, and you nod back to her as well before turning away and walking back to the door as Hala goes back to studying the armor.

You walk out of the satyr's room with a quick thank you from Farla for assisting poor girl before the door closes behind you. You turn and see that Zarel is still here and hasn't left yet, something that shows his maturity and patience in comparison to his brothers.

>Teleport to the brothers(d100)
>Walk down to the city and go find Oleria
>Send Zarel on his way
>Go to the forge and begin studying the Tower shield from the demon knight
>Go find Velerio
>Go find Hereshiel
>Go get some rest
>Move all the adventurers into the castle
>Other

Rolled 83 (1d100)

>>39645866
>Teleport to the brothers(d100)
they need a tour of the main places

>>39645866
>Go find Hereshiel
>Go get some rest

>>39645866
>>Go find Hereshiel
We might as well explain about Ven to him now.
After that, follow up with a little snoo-snoo.

So since your heading to find Hereshiel, are you bringing Zetol with you?

>>39646032
>are you bringing Zetol with you?
Of course we're bringing you with us, but I assume you mean Zarel, in that case nah, we can let him go to his brothers

>>39646032
Might as well introduce him. Him and Hersh would probably get along well.

After introductions and some talk though, it's couples time.

Rolled 2 (1d2)

Alright ill just roll real quick.

>>39646032
Only for a brief introduction. After that, it's time to put Hershey to work, roleplaying as a paladin sent to defeat a cruel demon sorceress, using only his wits, his stamina, and his rod of wonder.

Alright, you have had a long week or two of adventuring and the one thing you would love to do right now is get some actual rest, and spend time with Hereshiel. You not only need to talk to to him about Ven but also about all these people that you saved. Turning away from Zarel you start walking in search of Hereshiel.

>Check the kitchen
>Check your room
>Check the library
>Teleport to Hereshiel

>>39646213
>>Check the library
Sup Zet, just got in

>>39646230
Sup anon

>>39646213
>Check the kitchen

>>39646213
>Check the kitchen

I've got to go, work's up soon. See you at lunch, Zetol.

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Your not quite sure where Hereshiel could be, but you feel that he'll either be in the library or the kitchen. Why you suspect the library your not sure, but you feel that it is quite possible for him to be there. He doesnt just spend all his time cooking you feel, he must have some hobbies he likes. You walk through the large castle and to the library area, to find the relatively large area entirely devoid of life. Well he isn't here it seems, so it must be the kitchen. The whole time you two walk, Zarel does not speak or do anything, the only sign that he is even with you being his mechanical breathing and his heavy metal steps.

The two of you walk into the kitchen, and as expected you find Hereshiel. Unexpectedly, instead of cooking or cleaning, he is simply sitting with a cup of tea and reading over a book. He seems a little focused on it, but the heavy steps of you two cause him to look up with curiousity, especially when he sees Zarel. He closes his book and stands up from the table before walking over to you two. "Hello Feltere, its nice to see you again. Who is this with you today?" Zarel puts a steel hand out and Hereshiel grips his hand silently as they shake. "My name is Zarel, and you are?" "Hereshiel. It is quite nice to meet you, but i have just one question." "Yes?" "How did you get your metal body?" When he speaks Zarel's voice seems just a bit sad, though your not sure how you can tell. "That is a story i would prefer not to recount, if its alright with you."

Hereshiel makes a face that could be called sympathetic, and nods to Zarel. "I can relate trust me." Zarel then takes a step back suddenly and looks between you two. "Well i must be going, for i have to find my brothers. Stay strong you two." He then walks away, and you finally have some time alone with just you and Hereshiel. He looks up at you with a smile. "So i see that you have been quite busy as of late. Mind telling me some stories?"

>Of course
>Sure, but in the bedroom
>Other

Alright so i took into consideration the tips you anons gave, how does the writing look in this style? Also should i keep separating paragraphs or write one large section like some others do?

>>39646498
>Of course

>>39646510
separating paragraphs helps with readability a lot

>>39646498
>Of course

Pick two to tell him about

>Tell him about Ven
>Tell him about The Satyr's
>Tell him about the Demon Knight you fought
>Tell him about your magma powers and form
>Tell him about Cereniel
>Tell him about (insert)

Or
>Tell him all of it. This removes any other actions for this day and sends you and him to sleep

>>39646692
>>Tell him about the Demon Knight you fought
>>Tell him about your magma powers and form

>>39646692
>Tell him about the Demon Knight you fought

>>39646752
pick two anon

>>39646797
>>39646752
>Tell him about the Demon Knight you fought
>Tell him about Ven

>>39646692
>>Tell him about Ven
>Tell him about Cereniel

>>39646692


>Tell him about Ven

Very important

>>Tell him about your magma powers and form

We'll talk about our feats of might in bed, later.

"Of course i dont mind telling you. Lets sit down though, we have alot to talk about." You and Hereshiel then walk back over to the table and sit next to each other. Looking down at his book, you see that its about knitting oddly enough. You start to ask him about it when he closes it and looks at you quickly with a smile. "So lets hear it. What special things have you experienced?"

"To start us off, i have a twin." You say this to Hereshiel and look for his reaction. His face eye's widen and his face starts to go blank. "Not a literal twin though, more like a manifestation of part of me."

"Does...this manifestation look and act like you?" He seems to sweating a little, which you find odd and uncharacteristic. "No. She looks and acts totally different from me. From the way she talks to how she fights its the exact opposite of how i do things." Hereshiel lets out a sigh of relief and wipes his brow before seeming to calm down. "Are you alright Hereshiel?"

"Yeah im fine, just thought of something...scary is all. But um, tell me more about her and how she came to be." He regains his small smile and you look at him suspiciously. "Ok...anyway, her name is Ven and she looks like a clown. After i got a high intake of energy she came to be, forming out of my tattoos. I dont know WHY my tattoos formed the embodiment of my subconscious and not another being, but they did." Hereshiel watches you fascinated as you speak. Apparently this is quite interesting to him. "So she is the 'repressed' part of you basically?"

You shrug at him and he nods understandingly before taking a sip of his tea. "Well i guess ill be seeing her soon enough. Now anything else you want to tell me about?"

>Cont

Rolled 1 (1d2)

Rolling

"I fought a demon knight." Hereshiel seemingly chokes on his tea when you say that, and you start to help him when he waves you away while coughing. When he stops he takes a deep breath and looks over at you as if he misheard you. "Im fine, im fine, but could you repeat what you just said?" "I slayed a demon Knight."

Hereshiel nods his head and takes a long sip of tea before looking back to you with a sad smile. "Please, tell me more would you?" Your not exactly sure you want to, especially considering the face he is making, but your willing to since he asked.

"When we were freeing the slaves, a small army of them was lead by a demon knight. He had this shield..." You show him the black shield you have in your hands. "...That let him knock back all attacks when its hit. He was quite strong, and to kill him i had to throw him in lava and then submerge him in it. When he died his shield remained, and i took it with me."

Hereshiel shakes his head while looking down, and he seems to be remembering something. "Are you alright?" "Yes, im fine. Just thinking about some things. As a matter of fact i have to go now!"

He gets up suddenly and then disperses into runes before flying out of the kitchen surprisingly fast. You wonder what was troubling the elf, or if your words reminded him of something. Hopefully you didnt bring back any bad memories...

>Attempt to search for him
>Go and find Oleria
>Take the shield to the forge and either attempt to melt it down or use it
>Go and get some sleep
>Pray to the goddess in thanks for your success in freeing the slaves
>Grab some food
>Other

>>39647356
>Attempt to search for him

>>39647356

>Attempt to search for him

>>39647356
> Attempt to search for him

Alright so any feedback on this way of writing im doing? Is it better, worse, doesnt matter? Just asking for review purposes.

>>39647533
I'm not seeing anything bad with it so far

>>39647533

Zetol, when I said "intertwine narration and dialogs" , I meant something like:

"This is a good day", said the elf. "Oh, really? And what about this situation make you say that?" asked the armored man, his mace smashing through a goblin's skull. The twelves remaining foes, obviously not impressed by the demise of their comrade, tried to surround the quickly tiring knight.


Not: "This is a good day." "Oh, really? And what about this situation make you say that?" . The knight's mace smashed through a goblin's skull.

>>39647601
>>39647567
Alright, thanks for the advice. Doing everything i can to get better

Your not sure where Hereshiel is going, but you do plan on finding him thats for sure. You stand up from the table and walk out of the kitchen, looking left and right down the corridors as your unsure of where to go. You first head down the right hallway, walking by many doors while listening out for the elf, and you hear nothing except the hum of the castle. Did you say something wrong? Accidentally bring back bad memories? You push those thoughts away and focus, you can worry about what you said wrong when you actually find him.

You keep walking through the castle, and at one point you arrive in a area you have never been. The walls seem to have stars on them, and the hum of the castle has dissapeared as you continue walking. You really dont know where you are at this point, and you attempt to turn back and only see darkness and stars behind you, then the same thing in front of you.

>Well this is weird, and you dont know where you are, so your just going to attempt to head back now
>A new area you've never been in it seems. Might as well check it out while your here
>Screw this. Teleport to Hereshiel(d100)

>>39647917
>>A new area you've never been in it seems. Might as well check it out while your here

Rolled 58 (1d100)

>>39647917
>Screw this. Teleport to Hereshiel(d100)
he needs some tender hugs

>>39647917
>A new area you've never been in it seems. Might as well check it out while your here

Rolled 84 (1d100)

>>39647962
This.

Rolled 2 (1d2)

Rolling

Rolled 56 (1d100)

>>39647917
>>Screw this. Teleport to Hereshiel(d100)
First in-quest roll

You would keep going, but you didnt come to see the stars you came to find Hereshiel. This room obviously doesnt have the elf inside of it, and you dont trust attempting to go back. As such you mentally focus on the elf, finding the act harder than normal for some strange reason. Despite how hard it is to focus on him, you close your eye's and mentally push on through whatever is blocking your ability to teleport. You finally see a opening in your mind, and you immediately teleport in an attempt to leave this place.

You have your eye's closed as you leave, and dont open them until the pressure from earlier is gone. You dont know why you couldnt teleport, just that you didnt like the feeling. You find yourself in a clean room, filled with stuff you have never seen before. The walls are painted white, and hung up all around is armor and swords and shields. Weapons, scrolls, and even symbols are neatly organized on shelves and racks. They all seem to have a aura to them, a calming presence that puts you at ease mentally and yet makes your heart burn with faith.

This room doesnt look like any other you have seen, let alone FEEL like any other. Everything inside of it is black and gold, and decorated as well. You see a closed door leading elsewhere, and another symbol on it as well.

>Check out the armor and weapons
>Examine the symbols
>Call for Hereshiel
>Go through the door
>Other

>>39648521
>Examine the symbols

>>39648521
>Examine the symbols
>Go through the door

I gotta get some sleep now, thanks for the thread so far Zetol, I'm looking forward to catching up in the morning.

>>39648521
>>Call for Hereshiel
>>Go through the door

Sorry my internet failed utterly. Sorry anons.

>>39648521
>>Examine the symbols
>Go through the door

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You walk over to the symbol on a shield and examine it. It is a black, segmented circle, outlined in gold with smaller circles on the inside and a large white center. It gives off a aura of both calm and fury, somehow making you feel at ease while wanting to go and bring righteous fury upon Rhiannon's enemies. You almost feel like touching it even, but you refrain and stand back up before looking around the room some more.

>Go through the door
>Call for Hereshiel
>Examine the weapons and armor
>Other

>>39649824
>>Examine the weapons and armor
then
>Go through the door

>>39649824
>Go through the door

>>39649824
>>Go through the door
>>Call for Hereshiel

>>39649824
>Examine the weapons and armor

God im sorry guys but real life keeps getting in the way today. Just hold on for me.

>>39650548
No worries, man.

>>39650548
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Bumping!

You would stay and watch the symbols more, or examine the weapons, but you didnt come here for sight seeing. You step back from the holy equipment and direct your sights to the door. You wonder what Hereshiel is doing beyond the closed doors, and you walk over to the closed entrance. You shrink yourself down even more so you can fit and then open the door.

Walking inside you smell incense, its aroma hitting you and making you feel even more at ease. The circular room is filled with candles and burning incense, and in the center there is area to meditate, surrounded by open scrolls on all sides. Two more doors are through here, one straight ahead around the circle, and the other to the left.

>Go through the straight door
>Go through the right door
>Sit and meditate in the center
>Other

>>39652491
>Go through the straight door

>>39652491

>Call for Hereshiel
>If he doesn't answer, go through the straight door

>>39652491
>Go through the right door

>>39652491
>>Other
Listen carefully to hear where he might be, then go through the corresponding door.

You walk around the circle and head towards the straight door. Its as good as the other to check so why not? You reach the door, which has the same symbol as the other one earlier, and see that its already open a bit. You peer through the crack, and while you dont see much you do see what appeats to be Hereshiel standing in the center of the room with his back to you. The elf is looking at something that you cant exactly make out, and your tempted to go see what it is.

>Walk in silently
>Just walk inside
>Keep watching through the crack
>Call for him
>Other

>>39653081
> Call for him

>>39653081
>Just walk inside

>>39653081
>>Call for him

>>39653081
>>Call for him

>>39653081
>Knock at the door

>>39653081
go gently hug him from behind

>>39653902
>>39653081
This.

You take a step back from the door and open your mouth to call for the elf.

"Hereshiel. Hereshiel!"

You hear some slight movement and you stand by the door as you wait for the Elf. Eventually after some time and some noises the door opens up to show Hereshiel, a frown on his face as he looks at you.

"How...did you find this place?"

"I teleported."

"Right..."

"Im here to make sure your alright. I wasnt trying to offend or upset you earlier, i was just telling you what happened."

"Dont worry you didnt. It just reminded me of something thats all. If you dont mind though, i would like to be alone. Ill be back in a little, please dont touch anything."

With that Hereshiel steps back inside and closes the door. He still had the look of sadness on his face, and you really want to know whats in this room. Considering all the holy items from earlier its probably something very special, but your not sure what to do right now.

>Meditate in the center
>Look around the room
>Go into the other door
>Stay until he comes out
>Attempt to sneak in(d100)
>Leave and go do something else
>Other

>>39654136
>>Leave and go do something else

>Let's check on Devrelia and then Oleria

>>39654136
>Leave and go do something else
Take a bath, fix Ven

>>39654136
>>Meditate in the center
I'm curious

>>39654136
>>Stay until he comes out
>Meditate in the center

>>39654136

Changing my vote from >>39654259 to >>39654260

You turn away from the door and look back to the Circle. You dont know why but it really just draws you in. You walk around the room and back to the cleared walkway leading towards the circle. The circle is formed by the placement of the scrolls and the special incense in the center, and the whole thing gives off a atmosphere that could only be called peaceful.

Curious you walk forward into the circle, each step feeling lighter and lighter, and when you arrive in the middle you let out your breath. You didnt even mnow you were holding it, let alone why you were holding it in. But now that your actually in the circle you feel better all around. You sit down and, though awkward, cross your legs and close your eye's.

You think about all you have been through. The people you have met, the demons you have fought, and the innocents you have saved. You're on the way to making a goddess, but soon you wont be able to do much of anything as your pregnancy kicks in. But luckily a religion is on the way to being created. Velerio will be forming a clerical order, and though the training may take years, you will be spending plenty of it with your children. Not only that, but if everything you saw indicates anything, Hereshiel may have been a paladin in ages past.

But then something else hits you. What about your holiness? You dont give off a holy aura, and you dont feel holy at all. You have never felt blessed except for a few times, and despite its words even your armor feels like its normal for some reason. You then contemplate all your work and everything you have done. Why is it that you dont feel holy? Is there some secret? Something more to it than just words and actions?

>Contemplate your faith
>Reach out to Rhiannon for guidance(d100)
>Simply meditate in the holy circle
>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition(d100)
>Leave the circle
>Other(Bonus points if Holy)

Rolled 25 (1d100)

>>39654900
>>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition(d100)

Rolled 28 (1d100)

>>39654900
>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition(d100)
oh boy

Rolled 3 (1d100)

>>39654900
>>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition(d100)

Rolled 30 (1d100)

>>39654900
>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition

>>39654991
Fucking fuck fuck
If there are no 90s, can we just have nothing happen, instead of 'YOU FAIL EVERYTHING FOREVER'?

Rolled 8 (1d100)

>>39654900
>fruition

Rolled 36 (1d100)

Well, we could change vote, but that's be cheating

>>39654991
>>39654900
I think I'll switch my vote for just meditating... rolling seems dangerous here.

Oh jeez, please let there be more voters...

Rolled 98 (1d100)

>>39654900
>Reach out to Rhiannon for guidance

Rolled 65 (1d100)

>>39654900
>Try to grasp your faith and pull it into fruition

>>39655300
THANK YOU, JEEBUS

>>39655300
>98
So you have two choices anons.

>Keep the old roll which will have either nothing happen or severe consequences
>Get blessed by teh goddess herself

>>39655336
>>Get blessed by teh goddess herself

NO QUESTION

>>39655336
> Get blessed
We have been a bit needy so far this thread.

>>39655336
>Keep the old roll which will have either nothing happen or severe consequences
cos' anon's vote the other

>>39655336
You writing, Zetol?

>>39655653
But of course.

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>Ill apply both choices

You sit with your legs crossed and eye's closed, reaching for something. You wish to find your faith, your belief, your need to serve. You try to grasp your faith and bring it into fruition, making it manifest both on you and in the world. The great paladins and clerics must be fueled by faith, for how could they carry out a will they did not believe in? Feeling and pulling on the strings of faith does nothing for you though, not giving you any satisfaction or belief. You start to feel discouraged, is your faith...weak?

As soon as that thought hits you the world shifts. The incense in the air ceases to exist, and the calm in your mind seems to become a physical presence. You feel something look both at you and in you, and your unable to resist opening your eye's. You look up, and see Rhiannon standing in front of you.

The goddess stands with a hard, serious, and yet simultaneously beautiful face, one filled with both strength and fury. She has long golden hair, swaying in nonexistant wind, and on her back are two mighty white wings that are spread out behind her. In her hand is a halberd, stuck into the ground, and above her head a blood red halo glows. She stares at you, and when she speaks her voice is filled with a mix of fury, patience, and knowledge.

"Rise."

That one word is all that needs to be said. You stand up tall and proud at your full height, and yet stilled dwarfed by the being in front of you both physically, mentally, and spiritually.

"Tell me my servant. Why do you doubt yourself?"

>I do not doubt, merely wonder my lord
>I am not sure of my course
>I feel unfit to be your servant
>I seem to...lack your holy power, and without it i lack glory. For your greatest servant to lack glory is almost heresy, and it disturbs me
>Other(Be creative and respectful)

>>39655852
>>I seem to...lack your holy presence... I am strong of body, but I question if I am strong of spirit, if I cannot carry the essence of that who I fight for.

>>39656073
Second, Deleting old vote

I guess all my other anons left. As such im writing now.

>>39656465
Cool your tits, I just got back home.

"I seem to...lack your holy presence... I am strong of body, but I question if I am strong of spirit. If I cannot carry the essence of the one who i fight for, then what do i carry?"

Rhiannon shakes her head as you finish before fixing you with her hard stare.

"My own Aedammir doubts whether she has my blessing and essence. I may not yet be manifest, and unable to give you the soaring heights of power seen in the followers of other gods, i am still with you."

Rhiannon then bends down so she is face to face with you.

"Tell me are you self-reliant?"

"Yes my goddess."

"Then here is a blessing from me. A blessing that stands for what i embody and you strive to be. Know that i am always with you, and let your faith never waver again my Aedammir."

Rhiannon then puts a hand to your head, and the world goes dark.

>Blessing: Halo of faith
>Blessing: Halo of Wrath
>Blessing: Halo of Glory
>Blessing: Bolt of Knowledge
>Blessing: Shield of Glory
>Blessing: Scroll of the goddess
>Blessing:(Insert)

>>39657038
>>Blessing: Halo of faith
Seems appropriate.

I like the shield too, but, we'll see if we can do anything with the tower shield

>>39657038
>>Blessing: Halo of faith

>>39657038
>Blessing: Halo of Wrath
Fit's us more than faith i think

>>39657038
>>Blessing: Halo of faith

>>39657113
(Same Anon)
Incidentally, we still haven't named the Hammer.
This could be the perfect opportunity! To show that she carries Rhiannon with her, always. Need an awesome sounding Welsh word, obviously (since that's the Minotaur language)

Halo of faith! Let the goddesses praise be known! So you all wanna name the hammer now or just have me write?

>>39657501
What about 'Manifest'? It's represents her will in smithing and smiting, on Earth. Plus, it can manifest into different forms.

Well in the face of overwhelming silence, im writing.

>>39657606
>>39657658
Rhiannon will give us inspiration for it when we need it.

I'm imagining Hershey's reaction to all this.

BITCH, YOU'VE BEEN VISITED BY THE GODDESS LIKE 3 FUCKING TIMES. I'M THE 3000 YEAR OLD PALADIN, WHEN'S IT GONNA BE MY TURN?

Dont worry im not sleep or dead, something stupid just came up...again. Sorry, writing

>>39658789
no worries OP

>>39658789
S'all good

>>39658789
Take it at a workable pace. No need to strain yourself.

After an indeterminate amount of time your eye's snap open. The area around you is still filled with incense and the scrolls still surround you, but you feel different. You feel like you jave been empowered, and around you a holy glow radiates. You look up, and above your head is a glowing yellow circle that makes you feel strengthened in every sense of the word. As you sit where you are you feel as if you could do anything, your inner strength pushed out for all to see. Despite the power you feel flowing through you, your not sure if you should keep meditating and see what else happens or get up and go.

>Keep meditating. See what happens
>Get up and go(insert)

>>39659475
>>Get up and go(insert)
go get some food and check on Ven, also make dinner for Hershy

>>39659475
>>Keep meditating. See what happens
Might as well wait for our Hershey.

I want's muh lewdings...

>>39659475
>>Keep meditating. See what happens

So since its only you three then i give you three the choice.

>Get a real holy appearance and benefits
>Keep our lava form

No we dont lose lava resistance but powers swap put for holy(unless we come to a compromise on something else)

Rolled 1 (1d6)

>>39659642
I say...

ROLL IT!

Evens
>Get a real holy appearance and benefits

Odds
>Keep our lava form

>>39659642
>>Get a real holy appearance and benefits

OH, HELL YEAH

>>39659642
It would be cool if we could do something like give our hammer the lava powers and have them come from the hammer, and get some of the holy appearance and benefits, but not a whole change

>>39659697
Them babies are gettin JUICED now.

Appear before Kedran

Light Form

"MY EYES"

>>39659713
That would be neat, and having a magmahammer kind of ties into our forging as well

>>39659713
>>39659795
So, the Hammer becomes a Magma Hammer, and we gain the Light Form, and whatever comes with it?

>>39659859
I think it would be better if our hammer could shift between it's current form and magma hammer form, like how we could

>>39659642
How about something like
Form 1 is Lava
"Level 2" form is Holy/Light
Fire and Light seem to be the domains Rhiannon fits most with, or something like the Lava Hammer/Holy form combo
also does Holy form mean our milk is now literal Mana in the holy sense?

So give all/most/some Lava power to the hammer and apply holy power to yourself? Or something else?

>>39659915
I think that seems to be the general consensus. It's like you said, we don't lose lava resistance by being Holy.

>>39659915
can the lava flow from the hammer onto Feltera like pseudo armor in battle?
also Elemental Fluids stay Lava or change to Holy?

>>39659915
that sounds good

>>39659994
that would be a cool upgrade to get for it

>>39659994
I imagine they'll be holy, now.

<years later, ceremony is held in Churches of Rhiannon, involving chugging a BIG jug of holy milk>

"This is the milk of Feltera? By Rhiannon, she must've been stacked to the ceiling!"

>>39659642
Maybe out lava form could appear more holy?

The form suit us pretty good

>>39659994
one slightly holy one slightly lava?

>>39660124
I fear that sort of compromise might lose us some benefits. Might dilute the upgrade.

So im writing about Feltera becoming a holy minotauress with a MagmaHammer and a Halo as we speak/type.

So what color is the halo?

Also daily reminder that our holy appearance will be in line with Rhiannon's holy colors(that is to say, dark/neon multicolor with an emphasis on black and gold)

So when she manifest, how many of Rhiannon's female followers get teh milk by her will, and how many get it by being influenced through being in the general home and area of a goddess?

>>39660335
>So what color is the halo?
I think something that is a little dark, purple/black, with a gold and white glow to it, and a question about it, can we hide it when we don't want it showing?

>So when she manifest, how many of Rhiannon's female followers get teh milk by her will, and how many get it by being influenced through being in the general home and area of a goddess?
How do you mean they'll get her milk, do you mean the honour of drinking it or will they get their own?

>>39660375
I believe he means the latter

>>39660335
Since we're talking fertility, I'd say that Mothers (who are paladins/clerics of exceptional nature) may produce blessed milk, to ensure the strength of their children. At that point, they would have proven themselves, and earned such a blessing.

>>39660335
I'd say Royal Purple and it looks like its dissolving into gold mist but never actually gets smaller

I gotta run and do some errands, be back later tonight, stay awesome OP and anons

>>39660505
that sounds good

>>39660335
>So when she manifest, how many of Rhiannon's female followers get teh milk by her will, and how many get it by being influenced through being in the general home and area of a goddess?
for followers I'd say it shows predominantly in those focused on Fertility with it showing periodically in those outside that aspect when they've caught her eye
As for those not counted as followers I'd say maybe a 1 in 100/1000 chance or whatever of it happening permanently and always happens with expecting mothers
>>39660505
nice

>>39660335
>So what color is the halo?
Golden center/ring, burning purple flame

>>39660335
I think a red-gold halo as though a piece of metal just out of the furnace with sparks coming out is the best.

>>39660652
I like this.

>>39660335

The followers don't get more milk than usual, but they never of it and their milk is particularly nutritous. However, body-modifying magic is available to those who wish to have bigger, milkier boobs

>>39660652
>>39660673
Strike while the halo is hot! IT'S ALWAYS HOT.

>>39660760
Is it also razor sharp and causes gastric distress when it's removed?

>>39660823
Just No.

>>39660823
Is it sad that I know exactly what you're referencing?

You remain in your meditative pose, deciding to focus more on your faith and the halo above your head. You unsling your hammer from around you and lay it in your lap while gripping it. You focus on the faith and energy inside you, and let it come to fruition and manifest inside of you. But even as the Holy energy fills your body it is stopped by the raw amount of elemental energy inside of your body. This quite annoys you, for you do not wish to rid of your lava energy nor lose out on your holy energy. As such you think on it for a moment, and then come to a compromise. You channel the lava energy into the hammer in your hands, while the holy energy flows into your body simultaneously.

In your hands the hammer burst into flames as it stores more and more of the energy. At one point the head of the Warhammer ceases to be flame or steel, instead turning into lava itself, followed by the rest of the hammer. It moves and seems to flow inside of its shaped holding, and you feel the raw elemental energy you loss inside of it.

Meanwhile your body was taking the holy energy into it and changing as a new type of magic took hold of your body. The halo above you turns a royal purple, and gives off red-gold mist as it seems to dissolve, bathing the area in purple light. As for your physical body the changes are far more radical.

Your skin becomes an entirely black color, but a glow comes from underneath it as light in a dozen colors and shades moves underneath your skin. Your armor regains its former physical look of white, purple, and gold with multiple different colored jewels...and then it seems to have energy move across it. You open your eye's, and they are no longer a furious red, instead being whatever you want them to be. Your body is now filled with a tiny portion of the holy power of Rhiannon, and yet it has a profound effect on your appearance, which is fully changeable at will.

>Cont

>>39660652
nah, the molten gold/purple flames are much better then that

>Change a facet of your appearance(be anything visual, skin color, hair color, halo, armor, eyes, etc)
>Name your Warhammer
>Continue meditating, see what else may happen
>Rise and go(insert)
>See how your breasts look now
>Other

>>39660865
>>See how your breasts look now
>>Rise and go(insert)
Proceed with cheering up Hereshiel.

>>39660910
First off
>See how your breasts look now
>Keep meditating. Hershey'll have a surprise waiting for him.

>>39660910

>Continue meditating

Then what anon here said >>39660952

>>39660974
"I'm sorry Feltera, thank you for wai-- OH MY GOD"

<Glowing Room, buddhist pose Feltera glowing like a prism>

>>39660910

Changing my vote from >>39660998 to >>39660974

Hmm. So no changes y'all wanna inact right quick? Just checking before i write is all.

Also question. Dem Big Black Minotitties though. How shall poor Hereshiel fair against THEM?!

>>39661149
So, she's black, but with white prism/refractive tattoos?

I imagine her with white prism eyes, and gold hair

>>39661149
Something like this, but with boobs.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y15NnGZIBuM

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>>39661193
Nips would probably also be gold, along with maybe leg fur

Also, as for Hershey? Two words: "THE BEAUTY"

>>39661303
At this point, I'm imagining we lactate burning liquid metal gold.

>>39661303
I was thinking the nips would be pure white to increase the contrast

>>39661374
True that. Just Gold Hair, then. Dunno about the horns, though... Prism White?

>>39661334
Drinking it probably wouldn't just increase his power. It might just also give him unfathomable levels of FABULOUS. Could you imagine it increasing his beauty (as if it could ever go higher)?

>>39661396
Yeah thats what I'm thinking

Rolled 10 (1d100)

>>39661149

Rolling to see how much Hereshiel will fail against them

>>39661950
THE TITS. THEY SPEAK TO ME.

>>39661956
I AM YOUR NEW GODDESS NOW, BRING ME TRIBUTE!

>>39661396
>>39661303
>>39661374

Golden nips would probably look better.

I propose our nails and hooves to be golden as well

>>39661973
>implying his subby-hubby ass wouldn't do so anyways.

We have been neglecting our booty, though

>>39662035
Ven gave the booty a SERIOUS upgrade.

>>39662002
Well, that was before he started creating an altar for ritual sacrifices in the bedroom...

Seriously, goat blood is a bitch and a half to get out of silk sheets.

>>39662035
It's much harder to check on our donkage visually.

>>39662059
"...Tell me that's not satyr blood."

>>39662110
>"Don't worry, o mistress of the cleft, they came willingly to worship at the altar of your massive boobage. I didn't tell them they needed to sacrifice their own blood, but..."

>"Darlin', how in tarnation do you manage to even MOVE with these?!

>>39662268
>>"Darlin', how in tarnation do you manage to even MOVE with these?!

...Magic (Not a lie)

"Did ya ABSORB your girlfriends', as well? 'Least ya didn't steal her ass..."

>>39662386
"Holy breast milk has an effect on... asses, it seems."

I'm guessin' Zetol hit the hay?

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>>39662903
Ah, well. Bump in the knight!

Sorry anons i fell asleep and out cold. Ipl finish rewriting in a few.

So have you all decided how we look or things you wany to add/change?

>>39663066
It would seem we're going for
1) Gold Hair
2) Black Skin
3) White Prism eyes
4) White Prism tattoos
5) White Prism Horns
6) Gold leg fur
7) Gold Hooves
8) Gold Nails

>>39663066
>>39663157
Whaddaya think? Work aesthetically?

>>39663066

We can change at will between this >>39663157 and our normal form, right?

>>39663205
We can look like whatever we want now, I think

>>39663066
>>39663157
And you realize that gold hair will have to be glorious/fabulous.

Should we have golden lips?

>>39663259
Nah, I think we're good.

>>39663066
Writin', Zetol?

Bumping

test

You keep meditating with your eye's closed. The changes flowing through your body are starting to settle down into a more even, but no less holy and glorious form. Your hair takes on the appearance of gold, giving off an air of riches and power that everyone would notice. Your skin becomes a impossible shade of black, the glow from underneath it dissapearing as one of the goddesses holy colors takes over.

In contrast to your skin, your eye's have become fully white, and they despite being energy they appear to be solid and reflective, giving off one color or multiple at a whim. The tattoos on your skin and horns on your head follow suit, turning a reflective white color that changes appearance every second yet remaining a shifting white.

Last but not least is the rest of your body. Your long nails, thick leg fur, and hooves all take on the appearance of gold. Despite you being three different colors, it all comes together perfectly. Your darker than black skin makes gold only look more glorious and the white shifting eyes, tattoos, and horns give off a supernatural holy air. All together, combined with your Halo, you look both glorious and holy, blessed by Rhiannon herself...just like you wanted!

You're about to see your breasts and feel them when you hear a door open. The door opener lets out a shocked gasp, and you hear footsteps as Hereshiel walks around to the circle entrance.

"Fel...Feltera?! What happened to you?!"

>Raise a hand and gesture him over to you
>Rise up, grab him, and teleport to the Bedroom
>The goddess has blessed me, now come so that the same may be done for you
>I drew closer to the goddess, for now i have part of her glory and might embodied in me
>Remain silent
>Other

>>39664652
>>Rise up, grab him, and teleport to the Bedroom
smut. now.

>>39664652

>Raise a hand and gesture him over to you
>I drew closer to the goddess, for now i have part of her glory and might embodied in me

>>39664652
>Raise a hand and gesture him over to you
>The goddess has blessed me, now come so that the same may be done for you

Rolled 1 (1d2)

Well ima rollin

You raise a hand and gesture for Hereshiel to come closer. Your eye's are still closed, but you can feel him staring at you, tbough whether in shock, amazement, or fear you do not know.

"I drew closer to the goddess, for now i have part of her glory and might embodied in me."

"Wait...she gave you some of her energy, like she would for a paladin, cleric, or any other holy warrior?"

"Yes."

"Then why are you black white and gold?"

"Why dont you come closer so i can show you."

It wasnt a question, and between the statement and your gesturing he finally makes up his mind. You hear the elf walking over to you and stop in front of you, still having to stare up despite you being in a meditative pose.

"Did she speak to you as well?"

You nod to him.

"And what did she talk about?"

"She wanted to know why i seemed troubled, and then she proceeded to bless me and go back to sleep. Do others get visited by their gods?"

"Well yes but most others dont change so much. Then again, each change is up to the god, so this is probably just how Rhiannon blesses her worshipers."

The elf then goes silent, most likely in thought, and you inwardly are extremely happy that Rhiannon has blessed you, even if it was the tiniest bit.

>Grab him and teleport to the bedroom
>Offer to meditate together
>Ask him to write you a holy scroll
>Take him right there
>Ask why he never told you he was a paladin
>Other

>>39665293
>Ask why he never told you he was a paladin
>Hug him close and tell him we missed him while we were out fighting
>Offer to meditate together
then when thats done we can go cook something up for the both of us and finally get some rest after some mindblowing sex

>>39665293
>Hug him close and tell him we missed him while we were out fighting
>Grab him and teleport to the bedroom

>>39665329
seems good to me

You reach forward without thinking and grab Hereshiel. The elf lets out a small cry of surprise when he is pulled into a hug by you, and probably surprised that said hug doesnt involve you stuffing him between your breasts. You hold him in as proper a hug is possible considering the size difference and your...proportions. You actually did miss the elf, especially since you havent seen him in almost two weeks.

"I missed you while i was out fighting Hereshiel, i want you to know that. Also, why didnt you tell me you were a paladin?"

You pull the elf back, realising that despite your best efforts he somehow still ended up with his face in your chest. He takes a deep breath as he recovers and his face is covered in a blush.

"I just didnt, never had a reason to. Now since you have reminded me that you are a beast, would you please drop me?"

"Do you promise to make me dinner?"

He mumbles something about only wanting food or sex and then says yes. You then teleport down to the kitchen, and let the elf go as he heads off and starts cooking dinner. You probably have a good 30 monutes to an hour before he is done, so what should you do...

>See if you gained any holy powers
>Take the Demon Knight's Shield down to the forge and leave it there for when you work on it tomorrow
>Attempt to help him cook(d100)
>Go find Oleria and quickly move her into the castle
>Other

Rolled 65 (1d100)

>>39665759
>Take the Demon Knight's Shield down to the forge and leave it there for when you work on it tomorrow
Then come back and
>Attempt to help him cook(d100)

Rolled 17 (1d100)

>>39665759
>Attempt to help him cook(d100)

Rolled 93 (1d100)

>>39665759
>Attempt to help him cook(d100)
>Take the Demon Knight's Shield down to the forge and leave it there for when you work on it tomorrow

>>39665293

let's go with >>39665329

He meditates in our lap, though

Rolled 1 (1d100)

>>39665759
>Attempt to help him cook(d100)
>Take the Demon Knight's Shield down to the forge and leave it there for when you work on it tomorrow

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>>39665827
I had to roll........

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>>39665827

>>39665827
god damnit anon, you went and wasted a 93 and a 65

your banned from rolling ever again

>>39665869
Technically the 93 counterbalances the 1 so we're stuck with the 65......However i'm not going to roll in the next 5 hours....AT ALL

>>39665884
I hope thats the case

Well while he cooks your dinner you should get rid of this shield. You've been carrying it around for a while, and you really dont need to have it in the first place. You plan to see if you can do a few things with it tomorrow, maybe bless it or make it larger in some way. You teleport out of the room and into the forge, where you hang the shield on a wall and leave it for later.

You teleport back to the kitchen, but instead of waiting around your struck with a thought. Why dont you help Hereshiel cook this time? After all he has cooked for you twice, and deserves a reward for all his patience and help. Well a prelude to the more...passionate reward you have for him.

You walk into the back of the kitchen, where Hereshiel is preparing some dish you have never seen before. Its a fish(?)with multiple spines, fins, and a gaping maw full of teeth. Its eye's are two black holes that seem to be alive, ehich they surely could not be. You walk over and stop right behind the elf as he takes a knife and puts it to the skin of the fish. He slowly and carefully starts slicing into it, and you feel like he is concentrating hard.

Normally you would leave, or wouldnt be here at all, but you dont want to touch anything without his permission. As such you decide to politely ask him what he is doing.

"Excuse me Here-"

He must have been really concentrating, because once you say his name he jumps hard in surprise. At the same time he presses down hard on the area he was cutting and there is a loud poof as the area is filled with purple and thick gas.

You take a breath of air, and immediately you feel a burning pain in your body as it starts to lock up. Its poison! Thinking fast you grab Hereshiel and run out of the Kitchen with him in hand.

>Cont