>>38699730

>Nearly shit myself when I opened up notepad++
>Icons and everything had changed, and it tried to tell me the latest version of my files was from september
>Spent 30 minutes trying to locate and recover files
>God bless backups and computer literacy


Announcements: twitter.com/REQMX

Q&A: ask.fm/REQM

Character Sheet and Misc:
http://pastebin.com/u/REQM

Archive:
http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive.html?tags=Re-Monster
or
http://archive.moe/tg/search/tripcode/!!7fb3j+Ac+pZ%20/type/op/
or
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rD-MZe51wYI63xxl-tG8dsxj-RWVtJu3S6Gzd6OTJSw/edit?usp=sharing

>>38699730

>You could totally try.

Mostly because I'm pretty sure the relax option is code for "She's standing right behind you."

>>38699730
>>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?
We really should just get it over with

>>38699730
>>The sun is up. The weather is nice. Just relax. Let your injuries clear up and calm down.

>>38699730
>You could totally try.

>>38699730
>>You could totally try.
We could go check out that mine we found and see what it looks like now... this totally isn't an excuse to get away from the village.

>>38699730

> Go see your mother, Lyra.

>>38699823

If people want to figure out if Ezzy has magical talent, that's the place to go, also a great place to bring our little sister, who I would have hoped would be here already.

>>38699730
>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?

>>38699730
>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?
>The sun is up. The weather is nice. Just relax. Let your injuries clear up and calm down.

that terrifying moment when you hit submit and see your trip is still on. thank goodness captcha stopped me

>>38699730
>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?
LETS FACE THE MUSIC.

What music yes?

>>38699787

Seriously, I don't think this is a "get it over with" type deal. Mom knows Lyra is injured. She actually bent over backwards (well, bent other people over backwards) to make sure Lyra could rest and recuperate. She isn't about to beat us into the ground.

She's in Mama Bear mode, speaking of which, I can't believe she hasn't been trying to stuff us to the gills until we feel better.

Looks like seeing your Mom and a side of sunbathing?

Writing!

>>38699730
First time catching a live thread so I must say. Curse you OP, for making me read yet another light novel in addition to a quest.

>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?

>>38699730
>>You can't actually dodge your mother forever. Right?

Rolled 49 (1d100)

>>38699893
Rolling for anal circumference

>>38699894
Well, it's apparently getting an anime now. And the manga is coming along, albeit slower than fucking molasses.

So as long as you're armed with patience, you can skip it!
Although it appears you might have started, so Im just gonna go ahead and assume you're a masochist anyway.

>>38699894
Why would you do that to yourself.

>>38699892
Honestly, I'm surprised she hasn't found us already.
She's in town, right? It's not that big a place. And there's a giant stone tree overlook she could use to spot the VERY OBVIOUS giant red spider.

>>38699992

I guarantee you, she's yelling at the armorer and the merchant lady trying to get something to keep us from getting injured again. Mikhael probably got in a shouting match for at least a day over the armor that got bitten to pieces by lousy wolves.

>>38699944
Wow, One-Punch Man, Food Wars, Monster Mususme, and this one? Is every manga I've read becoming an anime?

>>38700133
Jistu wa watahi wa, Overlord and Ore Monogatari
as well

So, our hair has been bugging us ALL last thread.

Let's check now.

DID THE WOLVES BREAK OUR RIBBON?

>>38699944

I don't think it is getting an anime, you have a link on it?

>>38699894
>Curse you OP, for making me read yet another light novel in addition to a quest.
Did you skip all the extensive discussion about how the LNs are trash in the early threads?

>>38700318
Yes, since when have I listened to other's taste? Especially on 4chan? Should have listened LN is basically garbage but the manga isn't half terrible.

>>38700377
Anin, it didn't even require you to blindly trust others' taste. There were extensive listing of what is bad in it, you could have applied your own taste.
Why didn't you listen.

Also manga didn't get to the point of LB going off the rails last time I checked. I really wonder how the hell are they going to handle the rapecamp.

>>38700407
Because I'm apparently a 'tard. I really needed to see it for myself, and I have this thing where I just don't let myself not finish reading things. It is both a blessing and a curse!

>>38700407

Probably lightly glossing it over. Seeing it in action is better then reading it as a diary of how awesome he was.

The lack of real dialog hurts it, it moves too fast and no real character interaction.

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>>38700407
No no Anon remember? It wasn't a rape camp. The MC Explained and everything!

IT'll be hilarious watching manga him justify it though

>>38700553
They'll probably simply remove that part.

You briefly consider running.
In your current state, you most certainly have no chance of actually keeping away from her- but if you were to hide, you could...
No, no. It would never work. The caravans come into town. All she'd have to do is watch them, and you wouldn't be able to escape.

You condemn yourself to your fate, and start looking for your mother.

It isn't hard. Between Sheszka and yourself- and the fact that there is only 3 arachne in town, one of them being you- you follow her scent easily.
She spent the night at Lia's house, apparently.
Which is completely expected. Chances are she didn't know that you'd built Elle a home already.

You knock at the door lightly. With the loss of feeling in your chitin, you're not willing to take chances with people homes and things.
You idle outside as you wait for an answer. An excuse, maybe? You can probably get out of any training with the injuries, even if it isn't too bad.

"Come in!"
Your friend's mother's cheery voice defies your mood, and you pull the door open, entering the cabin.

Your mother is sprawled on the floor, a solid looking glass of amber liquid cupped in her hand, her cheeks tinted red with the heat of drink.
Lia and Jared are on the bed, sitting easily next to each other, their faces in much the same state.
Though Jin's human parent has to hold both glasses.

"Lyra?"
"Mom."
Her face clouds over as the brings herself to her feet, liquor swirling dangerously close to the lips of her cup. She manages to remember to drop it onto a table before she clatters towards you.

"You- you!"
"Um-"

"What are you doing up, you little idiot!"
"I- what-"
She seizes you in a hug the second you're in range, your ribs creaking under her strength.

You wheeze out an answer despite the pressure.
"I was- There is lots to do, yes?"
"And lots of people to do it, you, you eight legged fool!"
"You have eight legs-"
"I have a brain atop them!"

>>38700632

"I-"
"Sit."

Your legs fold beneath you at the tone alone.

"Not there! Come inside!"
Your friends parents are trying very hard not to laugh, though not entirely successful. Lia keeps snickering under her breath.
You can hear it though. You can hear everything. Damn elf ears!

You half scuttle, half drag yourself inside. Nin skips to the table and takes a seat, while Sheszka takes something like a guarding pose next to you.
Jin starts chirping to her mother in harpy speak.

And your mother glowers.

>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!
>Other (?)

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
Let her get it all out of her system.

>>38700654
>>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-
WE WERE FRAMED!

>>38700654
>>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!

>>38700654

>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

We're in it now, might as well come clean and hope that the only extra injuries we get are from hugs.

>>38700654
>>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

WE DIDN'T DO ANY WORK THEY WOULDN'T"T LET US!

WE DIDN'T EVEN GO HUNTING! AND WE WERE HUNGRY!

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.

>>38700654
>>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!
Evade evade evade!

>>38700654
>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

>>38700654
>>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-
then, when that goes horribly,
>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!

>>38700654
>>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!

>>38700654
>>Try and topic dodge! Ask her about her morning! Anything!

>>38700654
>>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.

Not a whisper.

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
Trying to make excuses or change the subject will only make it worse

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
>Other (?)
But despite all else, we kept the town safe, no regrets!

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
At least we wont have to do training today...

>>38700654
>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

You know guys, mom's a little wasted now we could probably trick her. We should just dramatically point at her and shout "I KNEW IT!" and just kinda go off ranting to see if we can keep her distracted while we escape

>>38700794
GENIUS! LETS FUND IT!

>>38700654
>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

>>38700654
>>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
>>Other (?)
More hugs.

>>38700794
>>38700811

Oh our poor mom.

We don't hassle her enough anyway

>>38700654
>>Try and explain your point! All you did was walk all over town and take down the wall and try to see the prisoners-

>>38700654
>Stay quiet! Let's be real, you're only going to make this worse.
it's like getting pulled over by the cops, let them tell you why they're mad at you and then start answering questions with more then yes or no so you don't further incriminate yourself.

Counting!

>>38700863
AM I BEING DETAINED!?

It looks like stay quiet crept by with a single vote victory.

Writing!

>>38700884
by the way REQM, you have to help me, I made a horrible mistake in an unrelated RE quest and now have had to go into exile to flee from my shame

>>38700961
WHERE THE FUCK IS THE SMUT BAD END YOU PROMISED

>>38700961
>>38700978
SECONDED!

>>38700961
reqm can't help you.
Redemption has to come from inside, anon.

Now, a good start would be writing smut.
Get on it.

I want lyra to grow up, so I can see some awkward spidergirl smut.

>>38700961
What the hell have you gotten yourself into this time Hue?

>>38700961
Step 1: Stop namefagging

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>>38700961
WHERE THE SPIDER OVIPOSITOR GENTLE RAPE YOU PROMISED HUE!?! GET OVER HERE!

>>38701029
Tiny snake x Spider mom oviposition smut. for RE: snake quest.

>>38701029
HE GOT HIMSELF INTO A NICE SMUT WRITING SESSION IS WHAT

>>38700961
YOU CANNOT ESCAPE, HUE, WE ARE ALL HERE TOO

>>38701045
This is truth. Anonymous delivers. Namefags just shit things up

>>38700961

Yeah, I was kind of surprised that the other RE was spawning that sort of content.

>>38701056
Meep, nope, you're on your own Hue.

>>38701223
not hue just saying what he ran himself into.

>>38701269
I was contemplating giving him a hand

>>38701191
It's just the result of being tiny weak snek.

>>38701279
Please do, I have no idea how to properly write smut, I literally am throwing shit at a wall and hoping it sticks in a slightly appealing manner.

>>38701340
That's how it actually works.

>>38701340
Like i said i would like to help, but i wont touch oviposition...
Might want to check out some scenes from Corruption of champoins though, if i remember correctly there are some.

>>38701421
Yeah, but with this you gotta include some size difference, which means shoving in one (relatively) huge egg by abusing the snake's stretchy mouth rather than dumping a clutch in the ass.

>>38701340

Everybody has divergent tastes, and you won't please everyone all of the time. Be content with that from the start, because otherwise you'll never be satisfied.

From there, first person or omniscient third person perspective is probably your best bet, because that particular view allows you to focus more deeply into the world of the participating characters' sensations and thoughts, which can matter as much as physical feelings, so don't be afraid to explore the character's state of mind.

Beyond that, remember that writing is a storytelling exercise. It can be helpful to imagine that you aren't writing at the keyboard at all, but rather telling someone a story with your own words in person. Think of how you would keep them entertained, tickle their interests, and how much detail they would really need to feel like they were there.

That's my two cents at any rate. I've written some 300 pages of smut since mid January with mostly positive feedback, for whatever that's worth.

>>38701488
I understood some of the words and phrases you said.

>>38701511

I'm somewhat confused how those words could confuse anyone, especially with the provided context clues.

I think we scared REQM away...

You swallow your excuses, folding your frontmost legs before you, leaving your hands resting in your 'lap'.
Your mother- well, it's not really pacing. The cabin simply doesn't have room for the angry roaming he clearly wants to be doing. That slow, burgeoning silence as she marches from one side to the other, your head following her around, the the suspense building till you need to stare holes into the floor, unable to take it-

In any case, it's denied to her.
So she makes due with what she has, folding her arms over her chest and glaring down from above you.

"What were you thinking! You were fighting and you were injured- you passed out in the street! And when I manage to get you into a bed and assume you are safe-"
She releases her elbows, arms unfurling as she waves them around, trying to work off her excess anger as she speaks.
"-This, this, all of this- Why did you not stay in bed?"

She stand over you, waiting for an answer.
You swallow again, tongue wetting suddenly dry lips as you open your mouth to speak.

"I, I could not- I couldn't just stay, yes? The town, and everyone-"
"You could not stay why?"
"I woke up."

She steps close, one arm reaching out to prod the chitin of your hands.
"And you are not feeling dull? Slow? Tired?"
"Well-"
"Do no even try, yes."

You go quiet again.

"You are hurt. More than that, your shell is cracked, yes? So you are hungry and slow and tired. You feel strange. And for some, some reason that I cannot even imagine, you think that this means that you should get up and walk around and do things!"
You look down, lips pursed, keeping your eyes on your legs. You aren't going to cry.

>>38701511
Tl;dr:
Don't try to please everyone
Write as if you are one of the characters or as a voyeur.
Tell a story.

>>38701902

Your mother takes a long look at your bowed head, one of her hands brushing her hair from her face, resting on her forehead around closed eyes.
She lets out a deep sigh.

She folds her legs, lowering herself in front of you, hands reaching out to brush your hair from your face.
She cups your chin, drawing you to face her, thumbs rubbing gentle circles into your cheeks.

"Lyra. Dearheart. Please look at me, yes."
Your eyes slowly shift, trailing up your mother's arms till you reach her mouth.

You pause, hesitant.
You push it aside with a sniffle, meeting your Mother's eyes.

Her face is a mirror of your own.
Brows pushed to meet, worry written across her features. Unshed tears beading in her eyes.
"Lyra. Please. I understand, yes? That you are grown. That you will make your own. But this... Take care of yourself. Please, please, little one. If you are hurt, there is no shame in recovering. Listen to your body."

Her hands slip down to your shoulders, pulling your forwards, resting her forehead on your own.
"I want to see you grown and strong, little one. And I am scared... that..."
Her voice trails off, and you are dimly aware that your friends- all of them, and even one's parents- have escaped the small, silent cabin.

"Promise me. Please."

>Other (?)

>>38701916
Lets promise never to take on a whole god damn army again alone... that will probably reassure her.

>>38701511
For smut, a very important aspect is a boner.
If your writing isn't giving you a boner (or female equivalent) then it's probably not going to cut it.

Write what turns you on.

>>38701916
>Promise to rest untill your healed

>>38701916
"I promise. Sorry, mom."

>>38701916
"I promise, I'm sorry mom."

>>38701916
> "I promise. Unless my friends' lives are in danger. Or if my family is in danger. Or if other people are in danger. Or if there's a really tasty looking bear- uh. I promise. Yes."

>>38701916
>Promise to rest more after being hurt

>>38701916
> "I promise. Unless my friends' lives are in danger. Or if my family is in danger. Or if other people are in danger. Or if there's a really tasty looking bear- uh. I promise. Yes."

>>38701916
I can't actually promise that, but heck, we can try.
Then sit there and rest for about 10 minutes while getting progressively more anxious.

>>38701916
"I promise to take better care of myself, yes. But... Could you tell me how? How do you treat a cracked shell? Or do I just wait, and how long?"

>>38701916
>Other (?)
We promise we will stay and let our body heal. Can't promise we won't get hurt again but we will try.

>>38701916
>>38702003

I'll second this, but as an added note, we should go down into that mine and try to get some better raw material for our mostly destroyed armor

Writing!

>>38702098
We can already purify metal to however degree we want, so mine won't actually have anything special. And any stones from it we can just /buy/ (loads of cash, remember)

>>38702341
Also it benefits the town to not be in crippling debt to us... even if we never cash it in.

>>38702368
Eventually, silk is going to become worth much less.

>>38702413
Regardless, we can still make enough of it to not give a shit, plus we're a giant spider which means we automatically win at haggling (you don't want to get caught ripping a giant spider off)

>>38702413
Nah, remember the town isn't the one actually buying the silk, merchants are. And there aren't many spiderbutts willing to trade their silk. One family isn't going to even dent the demand for it.

>>38702413
I doubt it. A local surplus just means exporting it to a wider market. Elles silk will be traded far and wide. Meaning the demand won't drop and the price will stay about the same. Probably.

If LOTS of Arachne follow her example, the price might drop, but one will only ever be a drop in the ocean.

>>38702413
It's still the nicest quality silk people know about, and there's only one spider actively producing it for sale. Not even Crazy Elle's Silk Emporium will be able to produce enough to truly keep up with demand.

>>38702341

Might be magic metal down in the magic mine.

>>38702531
Best reasoning ever. Lets go spelunking!

>>38702475
>Crazy Elle's Silk Emporium
Someone needs to photoshop an advert for this.

An Arachne outside a shop window holding a roll of fabric and a title banner reading; MY PRICES ARE SO LOW, I MUST BE CRAZY!

Mother tells us to rest.

We decide to go exploring a long abandoned mine.

>>38702604
That is resting.. it's just a mine. Not a dungeon. And I highly doubt that pack of wounded wolves running for their lives would seek shelter in such a place!

>>38702604

This can be a long-term plan.

And we wouldn't really be doing anything, just looking for something that can be used.

And it's really not that long a walk.

And... And Mom can come with us?

>>38702707
>lyra squirming when forced to sit still intensifies

>>38702413
No. The local market is going to be saturated, but that only means this small village is decked in silks.

The caravans will keep flowing until Elle moves to the big city herself.

You let your head fall to one side, pulling your Mom closer, muffling your sniffles with her shoulder.
She holds you like that, for a little while.

Eventually, you pull back from her shoulder, scrubbing at your face with your sleeve, trying to clear away the mess.
You're mostly successful.

Mom is red nosed and red eyed, but the sadness is gone from her expression. Her smile is wan, but her eyes look soft.
"You look a mess, little one."
"Mmm."

You sniffle again, trying to clear your nose.

"I promise, yes? Not that I will not- will not ever take risks, or that I won't ever be in danger-"
"I wouldn't ask you for that, Lyra."
"Yes. But I, I- I will let people help. I won't try to do everything myself, or alone. I can heal and people can fix things, and it will be okay."
"Mhm."

Mom strokes your head again, combing some of the worse tangles from your hair. You dip yourself towards her, letting her work in silence. For a little while, at least.

"I think we chased them all out, little one."
"It was probably you. Even the guild people were scared, yes."
"Oh?"
"They tried to stop me doing anything."
"That is good. I won't need to do anything drastic if they kept their promises-"
"Mom!"

She chuckles, working on a stubborn knot.
"I am your mother, yes. It is allowed."
"I- Fine."
"You will find out yourself, some day."
"I have a lot of things to do before then, yes."
"Good."

>>38702865

You snort, and she pushes your head to one side, working on another length of your hair.
It's relaxing, like this. Quiet, only your family for company.

"Will- Will healing take long?"
"What you did to your arm will take a while, yes? But your chitin should be fine before the week is through."
"It feels dull, yes?"
"It will do that. Let it heal, dearheart."

You feel her fingers pull free from your hair, combing it out to something less resemblent of a mane.
"There. Now stand up, little one. There isn't room for us all here. There isn't room for you all in your friends room, either, but she doesn't complain as much."
"Mhm."

>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>Ask Mom more questions. (About?)
>Figure out some sleeping arrangements. (Lann? Elle? The inn?)
>Other (?)

>>38702889
>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.

>>38702889
>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
If we're doing nothing else, I guess do this.

Also, we were retarded for not making the bath open air. We can't go rest there while enjoying the day, or the stars. Shit. Hindsight.

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>Ask Mom more questions. (Stories about her adventuring try to see if she did anything like this.)
>Figure out some sleeping arrangements. Elle? It being a spider sized house and all.

>>38702889
>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>Figure out some sleeping arrangements. (Elle)

>>38702889
>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
Also we still can oversee some snek training. We can't keep leaving her under a pillow whenever any action happens, can we?

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>>Other (?)
More hugs for everyone.

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.

>>38702889
>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>Other (?)
Take mom to see Elle's house, we can bathe in our grossly incandescent sun there.

>>38702889
>Ask Mom more questions. (About?)
ask if she has seen Elle's new home. If she hasn't, then we have to show her...

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.
>>Ask Mom more questions. (About?)
>>Figure out some sleeping arrangements. (Lann? Elle? The inn?)
well since we're not going to be doing anything I say let mom know about your sister's new house, ask her what she was like in her adventuring days, see if you can't figure a way to spread out the monsters so you all don't just crowd one place (Like Jin sleeping at her own house since we're all staying in town), and then just sunbath the rest of the day away. Unless that get's boring, then we can try smithing again since I'm not sure if we've done that in awhile.

>>38702889
>Other (?)
Hey mom, have you seen Elle's new house?
She's not even woven the nest on it yet!

>>38702596
Can't forget the waving inflatable arms flailing tube Arachne!

>>38702889
>>Head out, grab your friends. There should still be time to sunbathe.

Friends, snoozing, imposing on your sister for space?
Writing!

You mother stands first, pulling you up after her.
Which you are grateful for, even if you don't vocalize it.
You both smile at each other, though.

You walk easily through the door, out into the sunlight. It's past its apex, starting its daily decline- Late noon or something like it.
You've got time, though.

Jin is currently engaged with her mother, trying to convince the older harpy to convince her father to share their drinks.
Her father, for his part, is wearing a look that tells you in no uncertain terms that he will drink every drop of the liquor before he allows Jin any.

He shoots you a smile full of gratitude when you pick up the errant owl, saying quiet goodbyes and thanks to her family for their patience.

Sheszka uncurls herself from her spot beneath a tree, and Nin stands up as well, following along after you as you march away.

All in all, maybe not as bad as you thought?
Emotion-wise, you're feeling... drained almost. There's a definite sense of relief beneath it all, though.
You manage a light smile to yourself as you walk, searching out a nice clear spot to lie down in.

"So."
"Nin?"
"What happened?"

You blink, shrug.
It isn't really the sort of thing you can summarize, is it?

"We talked, yes?"
"And?"
"And I promised that I would rely on people more. And not try to do everything myself."
"And not get up hours after you've been injured and walk around looking for work?"
"...Yes."

She nods, and your wolf follows suit.
"Good."
"You too?"
"You have a pack. We should be working. I am strong and fast, and Jin is strong and fast. You can-"
She frowns, shaking her head.
"I do not know the word."
"Maybe-"

>>38703847
"Hey!"
"Hey, what?"
"What about me!"
The white haired wolf nods again, keeping an even stride next to you, loping along.
"Nin is soft. And small?"

The moth sputters, crossing her arms as she frowns, and you let yourself smirk a little as you pick out a nice even patch of sunlight.
You call up a perfectly shaped stone and sink onto it, giving it a little burst of flame powered heat to start you off.

You sigh as you spread yourself out. Sunlight is a magic all it's own.
Your friends arrange themselves as best they can around you, wings flapping and shifting to make room for one another.

"This is nice."
"Yes."
"Are we staying in town again tonight?"
"Mhm. I think we will bother my sister instead of Lann."
"Well, there'll be no shortage of space then."
"No beds though."
"There aren't any at home, either."

You smile again, wider this time.
Home.
Not just to you, but to your friends as well.
It's a good feeling.

>You should probably check with Elle about the whole crashing thing.
>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.
>Your friends aren't injured. You should send them out to hunt on their own.
>Other (?)

>>38703876
>>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.
Lyra's basking like a pro here. There's a certain lizard out there that would be proud, I'm sure.

>>38703876
>>You should probably check with Elle about the whole crashing thing.
>>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.
bring it up while you get her food, it's much harder to be mad when there's good food in front of you.

>>38702596
I'm considering doing this drawfaggery (I've been here before), but I'm also thinking about smut. Did reqm say anything about not wanting to have smut written about Lyra until she's canonically older or anything? Also would that go here or in a WST?

>>38703876
>>You should probably check with Elle about the whole crashing thing.

Where's Ezzy, by the way?

>>38703876
>>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.
Also, we forgot our snake somewhere.

>>38703876
>>You should probably check with Elle about the whole crashing thing.
>>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.

>>38703934
Oh shit, yeah. We forgot about Ezzy.

>>38703876
>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.

>>38703934
>>38703938
>>38703950
She's probably still under Lann's pillow.

>>38703920
Please, for the love of god, don't bring it to the thread whatever you do. I don't want this 'cute monstergirls doing cute things' premise marred with shit that belongs on wst. If the waifu bullshit that goes on every other thread is anything to go by, that is the LAST thing this quest needs.

>>38703876
>Your friends aren't injured. You should send them out to hunt on their own.

Lazy friends.

>>38703876
>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.

>>38703876
>>You should probably check with Elle about the whole crashing thing.
>Swing by the guild for food! Easy, laziness and company, all in one.

>>38703876
>Other (?)
Bring lots of food to elle's and throw her an involuntary surprise dinner. not quite a party because mom would get mad at us if it was a party.

>>38703989
>'cute monstergirls doing cute things' premise
Thats not really the premise, even if I agree about the smut.

>>38703876
>>Your friends aren't injured. You should send them out to hunt on their own
Fly, my birdies, fly!

>>38703920
Drawfaggery is welcome. Lets leave the smut to wst. I like this quest the way it stands.

>>38703988
Lann is going to get a surprise later.

>>38703988
I can imagine it now. Lann flops down on her bed to relax and her pillow starts to shift and Ezzy pops out face-to-face with her. Cue screaming from both sides.

>>38703920
Pretty sure he said it was fine when someone asked eons ago.
(or about 3 days in quest)

I'd say pastebin it and wait till a thread is over to post.

Check with your sister, acquire eats!

Writing!

>>38704023
we spend more time doing cute monster girl things/social stuff than any other activity.

>>38704116
Food delay!
I will return shortly.

>>38704053
Don't mind me, I'm just a guy with a stylus in one hand and his dick in the other. Don' wan' no trouble.

>>38704262
Time for our 2 hour break it seems.

>>38704064
Yeah, this is probably the best way to go about it.
[Because as strange as it may sound, not everybody goes to the wst threads.[/spoiler]

>>38703876
I think this is like the first time Nin and Shezska have actually talked to each other.

I'm really happy that you are taking feedback on board REQM

>>38704806
Sheszka also talked in whole sentences.

>>38704806
>>38704848
Yeah, I liked that too. I feel like I'm seeing the beginning of all new character development. It's exciting.

>>38704262
REQM, I would suggest you start using a little descriptive text to show who's talking.

As long as it's just Lyra and another taking turns speaking, it's fine with just dialogue text, but with more people talking it can become unclear who is saying what.

>>38704969
>As long as it's just Lyra and another taking turns speaking, it's fine with just dialogue text, but with more people talking it can become unclear who is saying what.

This is important. During that last exchange I had trouble telling jin nin and shezka apart.

>>38704969
A good point. The 'confession booth' style works fine when it's just two people, but beyond that requires a little change in style.

My apologies.
I had to run around picking people up from bars, but now I'm back, and I have food at my computer, which is sort of a plus?

I'm glad people liked the conversation. I'll keep in mind the tags for next time.
Should I be using things like 'says', or is there a better way to go about it?

>>38705421
I see three ways to go about it, more verbal-quirks to identify the speaker by, which is hard but rewarding.
Putting in [Name] behind the line.
or describing the conversation more, and going with variations of "says X", basically describing from where the line comes.

>>38705421
When writing dialogue, I like to make a rough list of preceeding statements such as, 'X cuts in' or 'X says' or so on. I find it helps things flow with little extra effort.

>>38705421
Proofread. Just run through the conversation in your head a couple times to make sure it's clear who is speaking at any given time.

Using 'says' every other line would be a mistake, there are a lot of ways to differentiate between multiple people in a single conversation. Description of facial expressions before the speech, description of posture, that sort of thing. 'says' and variants are alright, just don't overuse them. Maybe also use names more often, 'she' only gets so far when every participant is female.

That said, your writing is already good, just these little issues that need addressing.

>>38705493
>>38705570
Combination of these two, basically. Mix it up a little to make sure words don't get stale.

>>38705421
In most cases, the way that feels most natural in the flow of a conversation is to add a short description before or after the dialogue.

>"Hey!" The little moth squeaks indignantly.
>Sheszka faced the little moth with a sly smile, "hey, what?"
>"What about me!"
>The white haired wolf nods again, keeping an even stride next to you, loping along. "Nin is soft. And small?"

>The moth sputters, crossing her arms as she frowns, and you let yourself smirk a little as you pick out a nice even patch of sunlight.

Just adding 'said' is fine sometimes, but constant use can become grating.

>>38705743
This is how it should be done.

>>38705743
Pretty much this. Don't feel the need to go over the top with it until you feel comfortable, though.

>>38705421
Line breaks yo.

Line breaks work great.

It's with more than a little regret that you pull yourself off the stone, yawning and that's it.
Stretching is making your chitin make weird noises.
So you'll skip that step.

It takes a little longer to pry your friends from the rock, but you're on your way to Elle's house in no time at all.
You knock twice in rapid succession, waiting for a muffled yell from your sister before you push your way in.

"Ellllle!"
"Lyra."
"Hello."
"You're back soon."

"Yes."
"Is that it?"
"No? Can we stay the night?"
"All of you?"
"Yes."

"Sheszka, Nin, Jin and You?"
"Ye- No? Ezzy too. But she takes no space, yes?"
"The lamia? She isn't here, yes?"
"What?"

You grope for your neck.
There is no scaly necklace in place at your neck.
"Whoops."
"Did- Did you lose your friend?"
"No! No, no. I am, uh. Very certain, yes? She is under Lann's pillow."

Your sister looks to your friends with a pitying look on her face.
No, stop that!
"Lyra, there are limits to being scatterbrained, yes?"
"I am not that bad! Right?"
Your friends have turned away.

"It's- I know where she is! This doesn't count!"
"You can stay if you'd like, yes? You built it."
"Oh. Ah, thank you."
"But I will count your friends at the door before I let you in."

You flee blushing.
Nin's giggling doesn't help.

_________________________________________________________


Thirty minutes have gone by, your face is full of food, but it isn't helping.
"I can't believe you forgot her under my pillow."
You try to protest through a mouthful of food, but you're fairly certain that noone is listening anyway.
"Ssssshe laid down on me!"

You manage to force yourself to swallow as nin looks away to laugh.
"You didn't bite her, yes?"
"That issss not the point!"
"You're hissing again."

>>38706631
She just hisses outright at you.
Jin has a spot on the bench down the table, sleepily poking at food.

You catch her by the back of her shirt before she pitches straight into her plate, replacing her on your shell.
"I am sorry, yes? I thought I had you on my neck."
"What would have happened if you had forgot me?!"

Lann pushes some greens around her plate with a fork, then looks up.
"Would you have even woken up all day If I hadn't laid down?"
The snake opens her mouth, but looks doubtful as she raises a finger in complaint.

You press the advantage.
"You do sleep a lot, yes?"
"You are covered in ssleeping people."
"That is fair."

She sighs, her tongue flicking out as she lies on the table.
Nin takes a shot at comfort.
"It is getting cooler. Staying warm is, uh, normal."

The lamia props herself up on her elbows, her face scrunched in concentration.
"Hnn. I wasn't thinking about the time- It is getting close."
"Getting close?"
She nods at you.
"We sleep through the cold. I... might not even have still been active by now if I was not riding you everywhere."

>Will you be okay staying with us? Do you need to go back home?
>Do you need to sleep like that every year?
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?
>Other (?)

>>38706669
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?
It is very warm there.

>>38706669
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

>>38706669
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

>>38706669
>>Do you need to sleep like that every year?
>>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

>>38706669
>Will you be okay staying with us? Do you need to go back home?

>>38706669
>>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

It's warm

>>38706669
>>Other (?)
Tiny snek coat time.

>>38706669
>Will you be okay staying with us? Do you need to go back home?

>>38706669
>Do you need to sleep like that every year?
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

>>38706669
>>Do you need to sleep like that every year?
>>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?
we have long ago accept our roll as a mobile bed

>>38706710
>>38706712
>>38706729
>>38706739
>>38706758
>>38706783
>It's warm under the skull.

You know how much stuff we get into. If she was asleep on our butt for a few months, unable to escape or defend herself, she'd be dead in no time.

>>38706890
I find it more problematic how he would jut be lying on our butt for months not doing anything, whats the point? It just puts her in needless danger, when she could be at a warm hearth at home.

>>38706669
>Do you need to sleep like that every year?
>Maybe you could stash her under the skull?

I can only see this leading to hilarity.

Suggesting butt stuff!

Writing!

>>38706669
>>Will you be okay staying with us? Do you need to go back home?

>>38707031
~kinky~

>>38707031
L-lewd!

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>>38707031
QM has been compromised. The Moth has dosed him with lewd powder. Damn you Nin, you won't get away with this!

>>38707031
Nin pls.

>>38707031

We're heading south, yes? It'll be warmer there, she'll probably be more able to be up-and-at 'em than she is as far north as we are.

We are the most friend irresponsible.

>>38707460
I think we need to look at snakes at the moment.
Do they need to hibernate, or is it just what they do to survive the winter?

>>38707531
Depends, in captivity many can brumate, but often will just slow down a little and stop eating/stop eating as much without becoming fully inactive. There is debated arguments as to how healthy this is to not hibernate them however.

>>38707580
I thought it was necessary for breeding/lifespan?
Though it varies heavily by species and location, right?

>>38707531

Snakes actually bruminate (become less active) rather than hibernate (go totally asleep) during the colder months.

So I'd guess that we're far enough north that the lamias bruminate so intensely as to effectively hibernate, while the cockneys on the Elflands probably just get a little sluggish.

>>38707621
Tropical species do not brumate... Temperate species however (lets assume these are the ones we are talking about), do usually brumate and there is debate of whether or not there system can support them 365 days of a year, some say this contributes to metabolic issues if you don't, others debate this fact. Regardless, usually most temperate snakes stop eating up to two months of winter period and will be a bit less active, usually not significantly so... although they are incredibly hungry afterwards.

>>38707621
>Though it varies heavily by species and location, right?

Yes. For some breeds, that live over a wide territory, it can vary by location. A Northern snake might hibernate or go semi-dormant over the winter, while his Southern cousin will stay active all year.

We'll have to talk to the Tiny Snek to figure out what she'll do if we take her to warmer climates.

You leave your food uneaten.
For the moment, anyway.

You're still hungry.

"Well- What if we kept you under the skull, yes?"
"Huh?"
"It is warm and dark, right? Would that be what you need?"
"I don't think so?"

She coils up, one hand on her chin as she relaxes into her own spiralling tail like a cushion.
"I think it is the cold that puts us to sleep? And we group up so we stay just warm enough."
"And my shell isn't enough?"
"Your shell is too much. If I am not cold enough then I won't be able to- to...."

She snaps her fingers and taps her tail against the table at the same time.
"Hibernate! It is hibernating!"
"Mhm. Then, do you need to?"
"I- I do not know?"

Well you have something approaching a half answer?

Yeah, that doesn't help at all.

You make a dissatisfied noise, slightly muffled by the fact that the instant Ezzy stopped talking, you put more food in your mouth.
You chew your way through the latest piece of dinner, and clear your throat to get some attention.

"We will find out, yes? It seems important."

The snake nods, and tears a piece of your meat free from your plate.
Your eyes narrow.

You will forgive her.
Today.

>>38708071
>And it's going to end here today!
>Next thread will probably be monday, around 3PM EST!
>Comments, questions and Concerns, answered in thread.

>>38708095
Email still the best way to bother you?

>>38708115
Happening status: Its.

>>38708095
Thanks for running REQM, really liked seeing more interaction and dialogue between party members.

>>38708115
Sure.

>>38708144
Thanks.
I'll try to keep moving forward with the conversations!

>>38708185
That's all we can ask.

Thank you for your continued efforts.

>>38708355
Thanks for the support and advice.
To everyone. It means a lot to get so much help.

>>38708434
So, what is there to do while resting?
Shall we have weaving time with elle?

>>38708540
or we can try smithing. I mean it's been awhile and I'd hate for us to get rusty. plus since we're a living forge the fire wouldn't even really be a problem and seeing how strong we are I don't think we need to worry about lifting something to heavy for us.

>>38708643
I think we're supposed to NOT be lifting heavy things, even if it's easy, for a few days.

>>38708540
We could probably do quite a bit of earth magic, its not especially taxing on us physically (its mentally taxing, and we did not suffer head trauma)

Must run from no good Dirty Harry old mother ****er bigliped meany from stalking me

>>38708643
There's a fine idea, perhaps we could start trying to use our natural forge abilities to lessen the physical strain involved in smithing. It's not like Michael gives a damn what spidermom has to say about it either.