>>30165598
I really don't know how to respond to that.

>>30168363

Really I'm just looking for cunstructive critism. I'm not enjoying myself unless you guys are pleased with it.

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>>30169263
Well, compared to Ruby Quest, which I assume this is an homage to, I feel that there's too little exploration.

Ever since we came across Axel and Gracie's campsite, the majority of what we've accomplished has occurred there, and the majority of what we know we've learned through flashbacks and conversations. Apart from our encounter with pelicanman at the dock, exploration has yielded little reward other than a couple of fights which haven't had much in the way of consequences.

In comparison, Ruby didn't have much access to exposition except for Bella and maybe Redd. Tom didn't know any more than Ruby did, and nobody else they met was really capable of giving information. Instead, players had to solve puzzles and read notes in order to figure out what was going on. Everywhere they went, events that drove the plot along occurred, even if they were just obstacles that Ruby had to go past to get to the next area. What made, and still makes, Ruby Quest so special compared to other quests is that there weren't any real dull moments. Just my opinion.

Rolled 3

>>30165598
I only caught one Able quest, where we hid in a box. Seems like we're lacking direction. We found the things in the box... Then.... Went to sleep after figuring there wasn't anything else to do.

Do you have an overall idea of the plot in your head?

>>30170459
thankyou for your input it's been enlightening

>>30171823
Yeah I have plot it's just getting it in writing and presenting it to you all that's hard

So here's what I gathered from reading >>30170459 and thinking. Need to have less places to roam (as in we need better direction) less talking with characters who know about what's going on because it's slowing things down, solving puzzles is interesting, everywhere needs to be important to the plot ( this is the hard one). So I need to take some more time to think oh how to make the areas I have laid out already, matter.

That is honestly really hard for me....means I need smaller areas with objectives and goals, am I right?

>>30173255
I dunno man. I liked it as is, but what do I know?

Can we just start the quest?

>>30173255
The NPC interaction wasn't really a problem, except there wasn't much else to do. Now that we have some direction, things should go pretty well.

>>30173953

I'm working on a a bunch of pages to start like I did when I was beginning.

>>30174138
I'm going to try and make sure there's obvious options so that you guys won't feel lost at all

>>30173953

Also though the more we talk the easier it'll be to concentrate on making the quest right now

>>30174875
Fair enough. I hope you'll be glad to know that this quest made me re-purchase animal crossing.

>>30175066
hahaha that's fantastic

who are your favorite characters?

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Suddenly Axel and Grace start clutching their chests and slumping over.

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They stand up and focus on you.

Both in unison- "HE'S WAITING FOR YOU....."

then they snap back to their senses a bit frazzled.

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Grace- "Oh god it happened again......"

Axel- "What was that?"

>>30175659
Well, that's ominous. What exactly did it feel like? How are they now? Do they remember any time they might have been infected?

If they're feeling fine for the most part, we might as well keep carrying the raft while we talk.

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>>30175893

They tell you that they pretty much just felt weird and then blacked out but remember doubling over beforehand so they find it weird that they're on their feet all of a sudden.

Grace- "Well the snakes are everywhere Able... We should get this boat into the water"

>>30176071
Do a quick check for snakes hiding in the boat before you set sail.

Also, tell them what they said while they were possessed, and mention that we've had our eyes turn purple occasionally when we're feeling particularly aggressive.

>>30176071
Do we have a way to row or are we just going to paddle until we get there?

If we have an oar, then yes, let's get the fuck out of here. if we don't, grab a long stick or something like that.

Say goodbye.

>>30176343
But how do we know that our eyes turn purple
>>30176353
We have an oar made out of a shovel.

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>>30176343

No snakes in the boat. After you tell them what they said they turn to you and say

Axel- "Then please be careful."
Grace- "Don't do anything rash. You'll always have a place here."

>>30176353
You pull out the shovel as they push your craft farther out into the water.

You'll miss them even after their weird possession thing...so much it seems that your stomach is upset or maybe it's the water.

>>30176503
Wait, is the water black now?

>>30176684

It's to have a distinction between the water and land

>>30176503
"Thanks for all your help, I really appreciate it. If I find anything important I'll come back to tell you about it."

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>>30176814

You wave goodbye, they wave goodbye, and for a moment you feel like you don't want to leave but you steel yourself and start rowing.....Before you lose your lunch over the side...

check inventory

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It's still all there

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Sing a sea shanty.

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>>30177351
"The king and his men stole the queen from her bed...."

>>30177476
"and bound her in her bones..."

>>30176962
Is there anything strange in your vomit? Like blood, or chunks of a snake?

>>30177235
The doll's missing.

>captcha: shall Terofi
I'm not exactly terofied yet, but it is getting ominous.

>>30175428
I'd have to say Kapp'n. And the Able sisters of course.

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>>30177868

You didn't actually look down in you vomit before the waves took it away.

the doll is there it's just hard to see haha

>>30178039
That's a city.

That's a city of people.

As a side note, Grace and Axel's eyes were the same color of that pelican's. I betcha that has something to do with lack-face.

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Things are pretty silent besides the waves.

>>30178552
I don't trust it. Once you make land, take cover, and hope no one has seen you.

>>30178552
Ooh, what's that thing to the right of the gate

>>30178607
The guardhouse or the pile of what appears to be rocks?

Up to the dock or the beach? Left or right? Remember it's still night so there's a good chance you haven't been seen.

Also It'll take me awhile to get all this drawn up so I might just spend the rest of the night doing scenery. So that tomorrow it's easier to focus onto the story.

>>30178661
>>30178736
Search the pile of rocks, see if you find anything interesting.

>>30178736
Try to row around to the side. Up against the dock, but out of sight. Tie your vessel down if you can't see or hear anyone. Then take cover alongside the wall, so that the right shack is between you and the gate. That should hide you from anyone looking out the gate or out from the wall. Then move slowly up to that shack.

And be as quiet as you can.

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>>30178788
>>30178831

You hide your boat right under the dock where no one can see it and move to get the shack in between you and the gate. As you climb aboard the dock you see.....

Good night everyone I've got alot done already for tomorrow it should be fun

as always keep the commands going so I can use them tomorrow

>>30180152
Oh no. Thems is bones. Like, so many bones.

>>30180152
This would be a good time to have kept the panties.

>>30180152
There hasn't been much happening in any given session, has there?

>>30184028

Not today or yesterday because I've either been preoccupied or been trying to figure out how to get things done. Also unlike normal text based quests it takes time to make things and I have to wait for responses to draw up things. On top of all that I don't spend a large amount of hours on these unless it's a weekend when I have off.

But today when I'm back I'll have all the scenery done so that I'll I'll have to do is characters and placement and boom things should progress alittle faster though I'm in no hurry to just finish this.