The village hedge mage is dead.It's not such a big loss. The apothecary had been taking his customers for years now and the upstart wizard who just moved into town took what little business he had left.All that is left is divvying up the property of a sad, lonely old man. His herbs and reagents have already been gobbled up by his competitors, and all that remains is his empty hovel.You are just a poor, young clerk for the town's mayor. This doesn't even fit your duties, but the city wishes to condemn the building and has given you the task of checking the place one last time.It was supposed to be busy work. It was supposed to be mundane.But no one counted on you finding something. No one counted on you squirreling it away and waiting till you were back home in your tiny room above the tavern stables to look at it.And well, there it is. A simple book hidden under the floorboards.Dare you open it?
No. This was plainly hidden for a reason, and it would be foolish to get involved.
>>29977874No, burn it.
>>29977874Sure, why not? It'll be fun.
>>29977874So that's when I have been hearing those screams once a month and feeling compelled to tell the floor it doesn't look fat in that polish.
>>29977874Yes. Do it.
>>29977874Read all the forbidden knowledges. All of them.
>>29977874[x] Get some illiterate street urchin to open it.
yes, don't wait for the movie
YES.It might have his list of secret ingredients for Mage Cookies- what wonders!
>>29977874Well of course
>>29977874No. I've heard enough rumours about exploding wizard books to avoid this like the plague. Burn it.
For a moment, you can only stare at the tome. This is beyond you. You should burn it. Hide it away again.But...You may be poor, and you may have few prospects, but you do have knowledge. Knowledge enough to know what the title of this book implies. And you know what?Why not?You're likely to die a clerk to this trading post of a village. You'll only live on scraping a meager existence on what few coins can be spared from the town coffers. Why not decide, for once in your life, to take the dangerous path?You open the book, and you feel an unearthly rush of air in the room. Water all around you begins to tremble, and the candle burns brighter.And it is what you thought to be.Spells. Incantations. Potions.All revolving around the magic of women.Many are beyond your understanding, but the first few pages are simple enough.There's a brew that you can make. Just a perfume that is supposedly heavenly to a female.There's a small cantrip as well. You do not know what it means by summoning, but it says that it is one of the spells that a beginner may attempt.And of course there are other, more complicated works that you may have to concentrate to understand.It is still early in the night, and you only lit your candle scant minutes ago. Time enough to try something, at least...
>>29978419I smell magical realm shit.
>>29978419>All revolving around the magic of women.
>>29978419Let's whip up that perfume first.
>>29978419From the ground work our way up. Lets have go at the "cantrip"
>>29978419Cantrip. Fuck perfumes.
>>29978506Really now, do you?>>29977874>Dare you open it?That was why i suggested to burn it.
>>29978515>>29977874>Secrets of GynomancyYou made me chuckle m8.
>>29978515Not OP, nor am I giving approval, but what did you expect it's got the word gynomancy written on it for fuck's sake.
>>29978419>Brew the love potion>Get much pussy>Like some kind of pussy wizard.
>>29978596>implying i bothered to to read what was written on the image.>implying i even know what gynomancy is.
>>29978639You keep makin' me chuckle m8.Gyno-CologistGyno-MancyLook up Gyno..Also, why wouldn't you look at the image? He obviously put it there as the book we were going to read.Oi mate, yer funny.
>>29978680it is a generic magic tome image in a quest about a magic tome. why would i bother to enlarge the image and read it.
>>29978419Try the cantrip
>>29978740>quest about a magic tomegeeI wonder
You get the feeling that this book is actually reading you more than the other way around.You shake away that disturbing thought and concentrate on the single page in front of you.It's more or less what you would expect from a magic spell. There are diagrams and descriptions of hand waving. Gibberish words that promise to alter the word around you at a single breath. You try to see if perhaps you are missing some key element, but if this is all you have to do...You feel silly at first, twiddling your fingers around and mumbling breathily, but the sudden swirl of air and shimmering of the candle tell you otherwise. You feel the thoughts burning in your mind, as if the spell is making itself known above all else. But heartbeats come and go, and nothing seems to be happening.No succubus coming for your soul, no women made of clay coming from the ground. Nothing. Maybe you did something wrong? Maybe you..."Hello? You in there, tenant?"... hear a knocking on your door?! It's the voice of Giselle, the inkeeper's daughter.Was this from the spell? Should you let her in? Send her away? You think of what to do while she knocks again."Hello?"
>>29978612More like>Brew the love potion>Get all the dick>Dicks in the ass like feathers in a peacock
>>29978837"What, I mean, yes?"
>>29978837...Cast it again.Hope for threesome.
>>29978837Say "come in" in our most sexy voice
>>29978837"i am in here, need some privacy."
>>29978837"I'm in here. What do you need Giselle?"Try to keep our voice friendly and so on.
>>29978837>>29978966This Works. (plus hide the book.)
You scramble to your feet, only to sit back down.There is another rap on the door, and you find it strange to see Giselle be so persistent. You've barely spoken three sentences the entire time you've roomed here, and now she seems like she won't leave you be.Pushing the book underneath a few sheaves of paper, you brace yourself for whatever will happen next.You get up and open the door a crack, just enough to see Giselle's... worried?... face."Yes? What is it, Giselle?"A look of relief washes over Giselle's face as she sees you, but it quickly changes to confusion again."What... yes... I..."She pauses, and you can see her gathering her thoughts."... I think I just wanted to see how you were doing. How are you settling in here?" she says lamely.You can see her still struggling with her thoughts, but your own are racing at a breakneck speed.It worked!It really, really worked!But now you're left with what's here. Giselle doesn't seem to be going anywhere, but this is a peculiar situation and you don't know how long it will last.
>>29979257Tell her we're doing fine, even if work was somewhat depressing. It's good that she's here to cheer us up, really.Also OP you might want to put a '>what do' or similar as a prompt for actions, just so people know you're done writing, rather than wait for a second post.
>>29979257Tell her that you are thankful for her concern, ask her what the special for tonight is (to eat) and bid her a goodnight.
>>29979257Be a gentalman about it. And promise ourselves to use this power for good
>>29979257>>29979323(Solid advice)What will you do?
>>29979257"I'm settling in pretty well, work's been tough, but I'll manage. I appreciate your concern.What's the special tonight anyways?"
"It's as it is usually, thank you for asking. Things at work are occupying my time right now."Giselle smiles and nods, though she still seems like she's waiting for something. You feel the weight of the silence and clear your throat."Ahm... so... what are they serving in the main room tonight?" You ask. It seems to shake Giselle out of her reverie and she smiles back."Oh! One of the hunters gave father a good deal on a deer he caught yesterday. We still have that and stew for it." Giselle added helpfully, and you nod.Again the silence settles and the both of you look to each other uncomfortably, though Giselle with an air of expectation.Finally, she breaks the silence."Sorry. I... it's like I'm forgetting something. Did you ask me to come here? I feel as if you did, but I can't remember..." She trails off, then catches herself with a blush. "... but that just might be my mind playing tricks, you know? Too much time on my feet."You share a small laugh with her, and she seems to relax a bit again."So... I suppose that's it then. Is there anything else?" Giselle says, though she is already starting to turn away.Is there anything else?
>>29979632"not really. good night."
>>29979632"I want you." just whisper that.
>>29979632"No no, nothing more."Summon -> dismiss. Seems obvious enough.
>>29979632Seconding >>29979666The spellbook worked, let's keep reading to find better spells.
>>29979632"Not for now. It was nice to see you, feel free to come by any time.Good night Giselle."
Giselle looks at you for the longest time, as if she's searching for something."Alright. If you're sure there's nothing..." she says, and the wind seems to blow again, making her hair fan out in the breeze.You nod, and the wind stops. Giselle shakes her head, and her eyes seem to dart around for a moment."Huh..." she whispers, turning and walking back towards the inn, not glancing back at all.You watch in silence from your doorway as the young woman goes away, though the calm that you show does not reflect the storm of feelings that you barely contain.As soon as you see her go through the door, you shut your own and let out a breath you didn't know you were holding in.You did it. You actually did it!Trembling, you look to your hands. The hands that cast a spell and summoned her!The rush of power is immense, but also a sense of dread.A rustling of paper breaks the quiet of your room.The papers have flown away from the book, and again you see the red letters reflecting their waxy title against the candle light.The thick candle has burned a third of the way down now.There is still time in the night.But what to do with it?
>>29980046check out one of the more complicated works
>>29980046Strip down.Get under our covers,Cast it again.Pretend to be sick.
>>29980046masturbate to giselle.
>>29980046Read more of the spellbook
>>29980046Try and make the perfume, I'm guessing that if we start getting good at alchemy we can whip up love, or at least lust, potions without any trouble.
Again you get the feeling that you're doing the book's will more than your own. But the promise of power is so tempting now. Was this the feeling every evil wizard felt as they took their first steps to infamy?You aren't so far gone that you don't recognize the lines being crossed.But crossing those lines are as easy as opening the cover of a book...The words that you can understand are disturbing in what they suggest.Women as a source of power. Spells to control and manipulate them. To harness them.What deviant made this book, you wonder? And what kind of deviant are you that it resonates with you so?The potions are simple. There is no arcane language here, just incredibly rare ingredients. But everything imaginable is there. Love potions, poisons, potions to... make women into living bombs?! You flip again to the beginning, where the cantrips were. It seems there is a progression for this. A spell afterwards notes what you can cast to the woman you summon. Something along the lines of making her think better of you, to improve the impression that she has of you. You notice that the spell afterwards says something about affecting her decisions with suggestions of your own that she takes in high consideration. But these have to be done one after another on the same woman. Giselle...And then of course, there is the more arcane sections of the book. There seems to be a progression here... you can recognize how some words from the beginning of the book fit the scrawling of the author later on.Of course, the candle is burning lower now, and you know you don't have much time left if you are to sleep for tomorrow's day of work.Decisions... what to do?
>>29980464Go eat dinner
>>29980464Search for the spell that turns women into bimboified love slaves.
>>29980464burn this deviant object of satanist worship!
>>29980464Hmm, don't cast the spell on Giselle quite yet. We can wait a day, and we should make sure we grok it before trying it. Go get some dinner, chat with her if she's there, and then hit the sack.
>>29980464Dinner, bed, work.Female boss when?
A rumbling from your stomach reminds you that there are other concerns than the arcane.The smell of the venison is inviting.When you enter the tavern, it is fairly lively. Cheap meat and stew has brought in others from the village, and you can see that Giselle is balancing a number of plates and drinks. A pang of guilt strikes you as you wonder if you caused any trouble from summoning her away from all the bustle of the inn.You take a seat and the innkeeper puts a meal in front of you.You thank him and begin eating. While it is filling and a fair bit more palatable than the usual fair, you seem to be hyperaware of the females in the tavern now. Whether it's due to the book's influence or your own due to circumstance.Giselle is there, still looking very pretty even though she seems very frazzled.The wizard Anthena is there as well, all in black and furs and feathers. The townsfolk call her the raven bitch, and she seems like it. Her elegant demeanor seems to make it feel as if she thinks all of this is beneath her... is she staring at you? You can't tell...Selera the apothecary is here. You think she's friends with Giselle, but you've never spoken with her before either.There are other girls in the room as well, and you're left with your thoughts as you finish your meal.What now?
>>29980464Go to dinner and go to sleep.I want his decent into depravity to be slow and steady. Too many quests like this just go straight to sleeping with every girl they see with no build up or anticipation.
>>29980862Try talking to Giselle, offer to help if she needs any.
>>29980879Dude. Why would we use this power to sleep with women? We can use it to make ourselves mayor. Make ourselves king even! Then we can worry about fading to black
>>29980862eat dinner and get back to the book
>>29980862Dinner then sleep. Slow and steady is where it is at. we don't want to fuck it up and end up making someone explode accidentaly.And fuck, there is another witch in here? that could be trouble.Real trouble.Let's not use our powers on her until we are sure we can kill her/fuck her into submission.
>>29980862Eat then sleep. Make sure to prop a chair against the door.
>>29980976Honestly, easiest way to deal with Anthena that I can think of is to make some sort of love potion and have Giselle put it in her food and drink.Granted we need Giselle deep enough in our pocket to do this without question, but that's mainly a matter of time.
>>29980932Good point. Grimoire said there was a progression to the spells. Summon is technically before the enchantments but I imagine we can skip it if the girl is already there. We need to spam all the women with the "think better of you" spell. Even if he doesn't turn them all into slaves if the shit goes down later on they'll be more likely to give him the benefit of the doubt.
>>29981031I think it said that it has to be on the same woman in succession. >A spell afterwards notes what you can cast to the woman you summon.>But these have to be done one after another on the same woman. Giselle...
>>29981031unless they have magic protection, like Anthena probably doesShe might be able to sense or detect our spells toobetter be careful
>>29981020Probably. Spells require hand gestures that she will see a mile away. But she might have something on her person that will detect if her drink has been spiked. More research is required.
The meal is heavy and you can already feel drowsy especially after all the excitement of the day.You spare a moment of guilt for Giselle, and another moment at wondering whether Anthena was watching you, before exiting and going back to the room.Again the book is there, and you aren't surprised to see that it is now resting on the stack of books you buried it under previously. Nothing about it surprises you much anymore.You can feel its call, but your bed calls louder.As an afterthought, you turn the locks on the door and prop a chair on the handle. You don't know what a chair and a deadbolt will do against someone like Anthena, but it's at least a comfort to your sensibilities.You fall asleep as soon as your head hits the pillow, and your dreams are troubled and... something else.Women.All of them, tempting you, used by you.You feel strong, powerful. Of course they lay themselves at your feet. Why not? They are nothing but playthings to you, after all.And of course, those red, waxy words glowing against a book as black as night...You awaken with a start, sweaty and panting. The book is now right there, next to you on your pillow, and while this worries you, it doesn't surprise you.Dawn is just breaking, and you know you have a few hours still before work. You usually are still asleep at this time of day, and you do feel tired but...... there is the book...What to do?
>>29981233study it don't cast any thing
>>29981233Sleep more. We can fool around after the work is done, and we need to sleep to do our work. If we suddenly start taking strange hours and strange things happen in town, people will assume it is us.
>>29981233put book under your pillowgo back to sleep
>>29981233study study studymaybe head out and find some random chick to practice on
>>29981233Go back to sleep, those were some nice dreams.
>>29981233Memorize one or two of the simpler spells so that we can cast them later on in the day without bring the book with us everywhere.
>>29981449Go to sleep then memorize the spells. Can't drink about a new age of darkness without a good nights sleep.
>>29981477>Can't drink about a new age of darkness^bring
>>29981279Seconding this as much as one can second. Plus resisting the book a bit might be a good idea, if our mind is too weak it might lead to our downfall
You grumble. It's too early to think about the repercussions of black magic.You take the book and stuff it under your pillow. You're sure that it will show up later anyway, but you feel as if it was actually giving a small protest as you roll over and get back to sleep.No matter.The dreams are the same.Giselle, Anthena, Selera, Marr, Tandice...All the girls of the village, ones that you can name and those that you only barely remember if only for their beauty dance in your dreams.When you wake, you feel well rested and your thoughts are clearer.You look around, and you find that the book is no longer on your pillow. Panic touches you for a moment, but then you see the book tucked away in your satchel for work. You shake your head.Going through your morning routines is easy enough. Washing, dressing, breakfast of cheap fruit from Tandice at the market...And work.Hours of soul-crushing work.Copying and copying numbers without end. And for what? A few pennies? This is what caused you to go against your conscience and learn the secrets of the book. And each hour that ticks by makes you feel more and more justified for it.Thankfully Marr is there. The only bright point in your day. The head archivist of town records gives you a bright smile and pats your hand. She gives you an apologetic look as she hands you more records to copy, but you know it's not really her fault and just nod.The day passes and finally it is late in the afternoon when you leave for home. You're walking through town, thoughts heavy in your head again.What shall you do now?
>>29981619>Study the book>All the studying
>>29981645This, but for fuck's sake go home first.
>>29981669that was assumed, it's kinda hard to study and walk at once
>>29981619>StudyTry out the affection thing on Giselle
>>29981619Get home and study more. See if there's a way to specify the target of the summoning cantrip. And anything related to memory alteration.
>>29981619study the bookDON"T CAST ANY THING UNTIL WE KNOW ABOUT ANY SIDE EFFECTs
>>29981619I vote study... Apparently I'm a better student in quests than I am in real life.
You quicken your pace, the excitement of the book almost pulsing through your satchel.You give a wave to Tandice as you pass by her stall, and you're surprised to see that you can actually recognize a few of the herbs from the pictures in the book at Selera's store window.You look to your feet and try not to stare at Anthena's wizard tower, and again you wish that you didn't feel like something was staring right back at you whenever you're near anything connected to the woman.Finally you're back at your room, tossing the satchel to the bed and fishing out the book.Already plans are starting in your head, and you follow a thread of them as you flip through the pages of the book.The progression of the cantrip all the way to the end confirms your suspicion. Complete domination of the subject, from her physical form to her very soul. There is no ambiguity in the wording, and again you blanch at the power you hold. Dominion over even a woman's immortal spirit? It sends chills down your spine.You push the thought away for a moment, and you find exactly what you are looking for. Control of a woman's memories is a fair number of steps away from the cantrip. Perhaps eight away. You pick out that you need a personal item eventually from the woman you have in mind for many of the spells, and that if you had one to focus on the beginning of the cantrip, you could summon that specific girl. Again it disturbs you to see that if you had no woman in mind, the writer of the book made the spell to call the most attractive woman makes her home closest to your own. You suppose that makes sense, considering the other women in the tavern and why only Giselle was summoned.You're surprised when you notice that the light is dimming around you. Has two hours already passed? And still you are just learning from one section of the book. The potions and the darker spells still remain untouched.You consider what to do next as the sun starts to sink below the trees.
>>29981747Memory alteration is too advanced. He'd probably fuck it up and erase the last eight years of her life. No hiding that. Stick with low level shit like affection/likability spells.
>>29982061Go to Anthena about the book
>>29982111She might very well kill us, or at least try and take the book away.
>>29982061Look up the potions. Specifically ones with ingredients you can actually get you hands on.
>>29982061Go for an evening stroll, try the summoning/likeability combo on Tandice.You don't shit in your own bed. Fucking up with Giselle will at the very least get us kicked out of our room.
>>29982111Start learning more cantrips, once we show promise, and can demonstrate real power, ask to become her apprentice.
>>29982111You do realize this would end the quest right?
>>29982061Read up on potions, try to find basic ones that have ingredients we could find without too much trouble.And I think Tandice would be a good first start, she has access to a good number of herbs and so on.
>>29982061Read up on potions>>29982111Do NOT do this
>>29982111fuck no sonfuckno
While actually learning the next spell after the cantrip does tempt you, you realize that the potions section of the book is already completely open to you. The ingredients may be out of reach, but at least you don't have to brew one potion after the other in specific order or take hours to just figure out the first paragraph of this section.There is the potion for the perfume. It amazes you that just heating these spices by even the smallest flame can render such an apparently potent mixture.Only two other potions are simple enough for you to make.One is a tea that almost guarantees to put a woman to sleep. It actually states that it puts her more to be relaxed and that it isn't an unnatural sleep by any means, but more akin to her feeling bored in a lecture and just... nodding off...And the last is only fortunate by virtue of last nights meal. Stag flesh and bones. The potion therein is strange... it makes the woman feel that the one that gave it to her is powerful? You can wrap your mind around it, affecting her perception to make her think you're some kind of intimidating and influential presence, but again you question why the author of the book would make such a thing.Those seem to be the only potions you can make, and it's almost completely dark now.The first two potions are simple and would take no time at all to prepare, while the stag potion will probably take you well past sundown. Again there is the rest of the book, but you find that you enjoy learning as well.What shall you do?
>>29982551Try making the perfume, use it, then go out, call Tandice to us, and flirt with her on a nighttime walk.We could make the sleep potion as well for if she gets back to our place, we knock her out, and then have an open opportunity to cast the second part of the summoning cantrip. It'll even make us look like a gentleman to let her sleep the night.
>>29982551Summon Giselle and use the second cantrip.
>>29982551Jeez, none of those are particularly useful.Make the relaxation one I guess. We can try it out at work.
>>29982638This sounds good
>>29982638not enough time in the day.
We need to raise Anthena's flag.The book has spells that can raise the target's opinion of the caster, correct? We need to practice that, then try it on Anthena before approaching her.Or better yet, she comes to us.
You light a candle, as much for heat as well as the light.You wish that you had some vials like you see in the apothecary, but you make do. The first potion goes off without a hitch. In fact, you fill an empty wine bottle with the perfume. It's curious to you that it smells more like cheese than anything else, but the book specifically notes that only women will smell the pleasant aroma anyway.The calming tea gives you a bit more of a hassle. This one, you actually can feel supernatural forces at work. Unfortunately, all the wind and the flashing fires in your room makes you spill more than you would like of the concoction. You can only manage to fill a fourth of another wine bottle with this, and it isn't even a very big bottle either.The trouble that the calming draught gave you has eaten more time than you expected.You think it's around seven or eight at night now. You had given some thought to testing out the potions on... perhaps Tandice... and you suppose that you could catch her at a reasonable hour if you ran...And as always, there is the book...What next?
>>29982898>untrained mageling casting spells on an experienced witchyeahnah
>>29982957We should save it for a rainy day.Let's learn some more cantrips
>>29982957It's time to experiment, and take Tandice out. Get running!Or, interestingly, captcha: usewith vicar
>>29982898we would need to summon her first. The cantrip's require hand gestures and spoken words. She would realize she had been summon and that we where putting a spell on her righ away. We probably wouldn't be able to get one sentence out.
>>29982983That's what I'm getting at. We should do it, but we need to train.
>>29982957If we think that we could pull off the second stage of the summoning spell if we had an unconscious girl then summon Tandice and go for a walk to meet her outside so it's less suspicious, just two people on a late night walk.
>>29982957Do it to Giselle instead. It would be easier to lure her back to our room since she lives close by.
>>29982957Cast the cantrip to summon Tandice, then go for a stroll, and act surprised when we meet up.
>>29983018>>29983054Just a reminder that you'd need a personal item from Tandice to summon her. Otherwise doing the cantrip would just call Giselle again.
>>29983075Ah, then we'll put that off. We could summon Giselle, though she might be working at this point.
>>29983049Yes, but her father is our landlord.We need to figure out how he feels about us and how likely he is to beat us if he catches us with his daughter.It's hard to pronounce an spell through broken teeth.
Seems like this one might need a bit more of discussion from the players. I'll start writing again in 5 minutes when I can see a consensus.
We know that Giselle is attractive and about our age. But for all we know Tandice is a 40 year old woman with a husband and kids.
>>29983120It looks like these spells only affect attractive women, if I catch OP's drift. So she might be 40 with kids, but she'd be a milf.
>>29983075Go for Giselle. Summon, give her the tea, do the next cantrip, wake her up.
>>29983177We'll want to put the perfume on first if we do that. And get some chatting in before we knock her out.
>>29982957I would say Tandice if there was a way for the meeting to seem natural. Giselle would be easier to play off as her working to hard and falling asleep.>>29983111It's only an affection spell.
I think it is fast becoming clear why this book was hidden.Have we seen a single spell so far that is to the benefit of the target? All I am seeing are various forms of magical date rape or control.This may not be necromancy-tier black magic or anything, but I'm pretty sure that if anyone ever finds out we are practicing this stuff we will be thrown in whatever jail they have for magical crimes.I think the thing to do is to use it as a bargaining chip. All of these spells are of very specific use and poor morality. But we do seem to have some aptitude for magic. We cast a spell, if only a simple one, after only a couple of hours of light reading!Perhaps we can go to Anthena and propose a deal? Give her this book on magic without raising a fuss (it is still early enough to walk away from the book with our hands clean) but in return she teaches us real magic. Non date-rapey magic.
>>29983305>wanting non date rapey magiclets just make her our mind slave and force her to teach us normal magic
>>29983338If anyone is going to be able to catch us in the act or counter these spells, it is her. And she is way more experienced than us.Hell, it seems like she might suspect we are messing in something magical already. Remember that in order to do anything more complex, we have to work our way up the chain. The first thing we would have to do is summon her to us.But her showing up doesn't mean she wont turn us into a frog when she gets here.
>>29983305That's the point
>>29983417so we don't go for her until we are way bettergg nerd
>>29983305>Non date-rapey magic.Can't you see a smut quest when you see one. I literally looked at the first pic and went. "This is going to be a smut quest"
>>29983305>not wanting to enter the /d/M's magical realmYou came to the wrong neighborhood anon.
>>29983542Maybe if it wasnt so boring and fucking formulaic, I would give him a little more slack.
>>29983632your no fun, go be a wet blanket somewhere else.
>>29983632>boringWe're the ones that keep choosing to not use the magic to turn everyone into bimbos.
>>29983648OP is the wet blanket here, seeing as he is doing yet another diamond dozen mind control fetish fuckery.
>>29983670With good reason. Bimboification is a shit tier fetish.
>>29983676you say that, but what if it's well written?>>29983703yeah, well fuck you too
Looking at the potions you have in front of you, you feel a desire starting to stir.Use them.Again you have a feeling this is the book speaking, but for all the effort you made, you actually agree with the little voice. Tandice comes to mind as you stare at the calming potion. But that won't work. It's already well past nine, and you know that she sleeps early to open the stall the next morning as well. And you have nothing of hers to use to call her anyway.But Giselle...Using the spell is even easier the second time, and you worry about the way the words seem to actually float in your vision as you cast.You spend a few minutes mulling that over in your head when you hear the rapping on your door.This time, you don't even wait for Giselle to speak. You open the door and motion Giselle inside."Oh... thank you..." Giselle says, and again she looks confused. "Did... did we talk about meeting again from yesterday? I feel like I needed to be here, but I can't actually remember speaking with you about it..."You nod and tell her that it was so, hoping that she won't dwell on it for so long. You pull a chair for her at your little table and pour her a mug of the calming potion. She looks at it for a moment and seems to be a bit conflicted, but drinks it after just a bit of deliberation. It might be strange, but then again, tea isn't THAT strange.Almost instantly after finishing the cup, Giselle lets out a yawn. You ask her if she's had a long day, and she nods."Yes. Sorry, we had to clean and turn over a lot of rooms today. And we had to haul out that deer carcass and wash the dishes from last night's buffet." She explains, but pauses to yawn again. "... Haaaaaaahh... what about you?"You can already see the potion working on her quickly and steadily. It has only been perhaps five minutes, but she is resting her chin on her palm, and her eyelids keep drooping...con't...
>>29983725>what if it's well written?I dont see what that has to do with this thread.
>>29983738You begin to recount your day archiving, and it doesn't take long for her to start snoring into her palm...What now?
>>29983745I mean, what if OP writes his smut scenes well?
>>29983759How many spells do we think we can cast?
>>29983759Use the spell that will cause her to like us more.
>>29983770I highly doubt that will happen, given that he cant even tell a story well.
>>29983788>has to use magic to woo ladiesLook at this pleb.
>>29983794Maybe you're just biased.
>>29983794Gotta admit, that stings a bit, but I'm open to suggestions on how to improve my writing.
>>29983833Maybe I'm just bored. You know, because his quest is awful thus far.
>>29983788Not this. Its skeevy as fuck.
>>29983863I disagree, I'm pretty sure your only problem is the subject matter.>>29983882Thanks for proving me right.
>>29983703I'm not a fan of Bimboification either but mind control is OK with me as long as it doesn't turn them into a slack jawed zombie.I like the idea of her finding out she's been put under a spell. But by then she's so far in that she's ok with it and actively tries to help us with our world domination.
>>29983851For one, its drier than stale toast in the desert sun.
>>29983894I actually love MC and bimboification, OP just fucking sucks at if. I'm not >>29983882, either.
>>29983900Get the fuck out of here, moralfag, we are gonna turn her brain to paste.
>>29983851critics on this site never give ways to improve your writing, they only want to crush your spirit. Then they wonder why there aren't many good writing. >>29983759Test spells on her
>>29983969yeeeeeeee>>29983924Could you direct me to the works that have raised your standards?
>>29983759second testing some magic out on her. she seems a good test case.
>>29983759We should see if she has a token item on her. A necklace, a bracelet, a ring: something that might not be missed, that we could use to further our research into these spells.
>>29983988>he says, ignoring the criticism two posts above him>>29984000I would go as far as to say the Trombone Tooter could write better than OP
>>29983905That's fair, though you might have to point out specific examples. Only if you want to, though.>>29983924The only mind control so far is just summoning Giselle, so I don't see how I suck in that regard. Is it because of the lack of Mind Control so far? That might have more to do with the player choices so far.----For the other quest goers, please keep going with the suggestions. I'll try to improve, but I'm still happy to see others following and tagging along for the ride for the story.
>>29983738>>29983759You act like this is a moral dilemma in the slightest despite the fact that she has no personality or character to speak of.Just fucking bimbofy her already so you can stop railroading us.
>>29984045>that image text>writing better than OPYou got me going man. 8/10
>>29983905>>29983924>>29984045>Implying these are ways he can improve.Blind insults don't help anyone. OP could work on his descriptive language. When talking about the characters talk a little about what they look like. If she has black hair don't just say it's black say. It remind's you of a ravens feathers.>This is criticism.
>>29984138>>This is criticism.No, its shitty purple prose.
>>29984138No, that's constructive criticism. You can be critical of someone's work and contribute absolutely nothing while doing so.In other words, a shit post.
>>29984048I don't really see anything wrong with your writing thus far. Most people seem to be complaining because nothing super exciting has happened yet, which really cannot be called your fault since you've been doing what people ask. None of the writing actually feels clumsy, and it all meshes well together. So do not feel bad, I don't have any complaints.>>29984066If he had been railroading us, you'd already have your porn. He's actually been doing what we've been asking him rather than taking us directions not included in our requests. He's asking us what we're doing, and he's been going with the majority vote so far. If you want your bimbo, get the majority to vote on it.
>>29984190>If he had been railroading us, you'd already have your porn.Not really. He is oulling the Nintendo classic of >No>But thou must!>No>But thou must!>NoEtc. Sure, it looks like we have a choice, but if we choose anything but the one he wants, it leads us back to Square 1.
>>29984164Yes, he gave a crappy example.Still, better than anyone here has done.>>29984048OP, you could work on the characters descriptions. This is a smut quest, yet we have no idea what the females look like. Nor the main protagonist, for that matter.I want to know what I am fucking. Red heir? Black? Long or short? Is she tall? Her boobs, tell me about them. Butt too,let's not forget the butt, since we may want to fuck that later.Other than that, I thnk you are going fine.
>>29984048The best advise I can give as far as writing on this site is; Stop responding to ass holes. JRR Martin could run a quest on this site and these people wouldn't be happy. If you spend all your time reading there crap the story will never move forward. I'm not saying ignore everything. You should always be trying to improve. Just remember your probably a better writer than a lot of the people insulting you. There's a reason that they aren't running their own quests.
Again, there is the slight tinge of regret at seeing the promises of the book come to fruition.But you've already gone this far. Come hell or high water, you've cast your lot.Taking the book again, it is only with mild interest that you see you've opened to the exact page of the cantrips. You've already accepted that the book has a mind of its own, and quite possibly an agenda as well.You take a deep breath, trying to work quickly. Practicing the hand gestures this time, you notice that the difficulty seems to have doubled. You're only half certain that you have the passes down correctly, but you really have no way of knowing at this point.The words are more complicated as well, requiring you to roll your r's and speaking as if you're choking on top of keeping a breathy susurrus.But in your mind, the words are clear, and they burn with as much intensity as the last cantrip.With a bit of confidence, you combine the two, and the wind blows in your room once more, this time over Giselle as she sleeps.It calms down after a moment, and you are left there, feeling a bit drained, Giselle still slightly snoring.What now?
>>29984231That's nice. Close the tab this thread occupies in your browser or 4chan application on your mobile device, and hide the thread from the front page. That way you don't have to read it, and we can enjoy ourselves without you shitting on it. Thanks.
>>29984290Try to wake her up.
>>29984290Recast to make sure it took
>>29984274>Still, better than anyone here has done.No advice is better than bad advice.
>>29984290Destroy her mind.
>>29984290MAKE WIHT THE SECKSINGS
>>29984281True. You have more than 5 followers. That is more than most get at their first quest.And you have got positive criticism.And no one is talking shit about you and your thread on QTG, which is nice.
>>29984048chronic quest lurker hear, enjoying your quest, more descriptions of charters please, your doing good with the book, but my dick likes the girls more.
>>29984290wake her up. But, be nice about it.
>>29984349This.>>29984356>That is more than most get at their first quest.This is wrong>no one is talking shit about you and your thread on QTGActually they are.
>>29984374then stop and get a life
Well, quest threads are a bit different than books, given the time frame and how the content is generated, as well as the 2000 character limit per post.I'll at least give a description for Giselle since I really can't describe her naturally at this point of the story.She's the tavern owner's daughter of the same age as the character (whatever age you wish). She has wavy red hair that reaches a bit past her shoulders and one or two beauty marks on her face. You do think she is pretty, and she actually has a very warm and welcoming face. She is one of the biggest draws to the bar of the inn, and she dresses to attract. She may not be wearing streetwalker clothes, but her dirndl is very much low cut. She stands about 5'8" and has an hourglass figure. The perfect girl next door, really.(Don't worry, I'm still looking at the thread to see where you guys want to go next.)
>>29984390Are you seriously mad at me for correcting you? I'm enjoying this quest, btw
>>29984412>as well as the 2000 character limit per post.Then do multiposts, dumbass. Theres also no need to break after every fucking sentence.
>>299844121500.The character limit is 1500.
>>29984438no, it's 2000
>>29984444So it is!
>>29984438>>29984444Its around 1600-1800
>>29984290We need to get her back to her own room safely and secretly, along with getting a small token so that we can summon her up at will.That way we can later check on if she remembers much, and what if any effect our spells have had. Ideally we can also get her to either forget or not mention her visits, because I doubt her father would look fondly upon them.
You lean over the table and shake Giselle's shoulder. Again, you question the logic of trusting a book you found hidden underneath a floorboard. Giselle's eyelids flutter open and she gives a great stretch from her seat, and you feel some of those doubts lessen as she at least looks to be unharmed."Oh... oh... I'm sorry. Wow, I must be more tired than I thought." She says, rubbing her eyes. At first, it seems as if nothing has changed, but she looks at you for a moment then flashes you a brilliant smile."Thanks for inviting me, though! I don't know why we don't spend more time together." she says, and she actually reaches out to hold your hand in hers. "To think, all these months and I hardly know anything about you. I'll come over more often, alright?"You nod dumbly, as much in shock over Giselle's sudden switch in her regard of you as the accuracy of the book's magic on her.It passes and you realize the time. It's been more than half an hour at the very least, though no one has called Giselle yet. She sits across from you, still smiling. You have to admit, the quiet this time has none of the awkward air as before. It actually feels more like a companionable silence between two old friends.Still, there are other matters to attend to. What next?
>>29984423Hey, I>>29984356am not him>>29984390bro, but perhaps I didn't express myself well.There quite a few quests that don't get 5 ACTIVE followers on the first thread.And about QTG, must have missed it. Well, QTG shits on everyone, so its allright if they shit on you too, OP.
>>29984662Let Giselle get back to her duties.Read up on some of the deeper level spellsKeep an eye out for ways of countering magic cast by a woman.
>>29984662Escort her to her room then go to bed.
>>29984662Obliterate her free will already.
Indeed. I like the premise of the quest. A highly morally questionable source of power. Can the protagonist use it without becoming consumed by it and losing all his morals?
>>29984686>There quite a few quests that don't get 5 ACTIVE followers on the first thread.This is patently false.Also the main reason OO is seeing such popularity is because someone linked his quest in the QTG and called it a smut quest.
>>29984662Get her back to her own room, with gentle words about keeping this time between the two of you. Then it's time to burn the midnight oil with the book and look up some countermagic, and long term effects.Taking it slow with something like this is better than rushing.
>>29984707>morally questionableThere is nothing questionable about it, its just plain evil.>Can the protagonist use it without becoming consumed by it and losing all his morals?He just brain-raped a girl into loving him, he clearly had zero morals to begin with.
>>29984662Get her to her own room, then hypnotize her.
>>29984662It's groundrules time, we should at the very least try to skirt the slippery slope by making sure that Giselle, and any other girl we grab, is safe and happy at the absolute least.
>>29984783There is no slope, one rape is just as bad as another. Don't delude yourself into thinking there is a high ground to take.
>>29984783>try to skirt the slippery slopeSeeing as we already essentially killed the old Giselle and replaced her with a version utterly devoted to us, this is a nonissue.
>>29984707Nah, power corrupts man.This guy's going to change for the worse. Slowly but surely he's going to see how deep this rabbit hole goes.
>>29984662Ask her about herself, we can't rely on magic to do all the work for us. Make conversation, get to know her, the better we know her the better we can manipulate her. We'll study afterwards.
>>29984803There is the difference between using people as pawns to be thrown away at whim, and making the people we rely upon our knights and queens, to be protected and shepherded. Hence why information is key right now, did we just tweak her opinion of us, or outright murder her personality? We need to know, and to take things carefully.
>>29984827Hey, at least she's happy in her devotion, rather than miserable.I'd say that's slightly higher ground.
>>29984839>we can't rely on magic to do all the work for us.That is literally exactly what we can do.>Make conversation, get to know her, the better we know her the better we can manipulate her.Or we can just force her to tell us everything. You know, with magic.
>>29984864fuck yeah magic
>>29984860We can mind-rape her into being happy while we cut off her arms and legs and turn her into a living fuckpillow. Her happiness is literally whatever we define it to be, she is no longer a living being anymore.
>>29984827We made her like us. That is hardly rewriting her personality completely.
Giselle begins to chat with you about the state of your room and actually starts to show genuine interest in your job. You humor her and continue the conversation, wondering if she is even the slightest bit concerned over the time she has spent in your room. After a few more minutes of idle chat, you clearly see that you yourself will have to be the one to bring up the time. Only when you bring up the subject does Giselle seem to notice the time that's passed."It's been that long already?! Papa must be swamped by now!" She frets, but still she doesn't seem to want to bring up leaving. For the sake of her nerves and yours, you tell her that she should probably return to her duties."Well... only if you're sure..." she says, finally, still showing reluctance. You walk with her to the tavern and she embraces you at the door. "I'll talk to you tomorrow, alright?" she promises, then slips back inside to the raucous taproom.You are floored by what has happened. As soon as the door closes you turn and race back to your room. It's time to take a closer look at the book and see what else you can learn. Potions, spells, the cryptic codes, you have to learn it all!What next?
>>29984846>There is the difference between using people as pawns to be thrown away at whim, and making the people we rely upon our knights and queens, to be protected and shepherded.We are already using her like a toy. >Hence why information is key right now, did we just tweak her opinion of us, or outright murder her personality?You act like there is a difference. We already stripped her of her ability to choose the man she likes which is one of the most intimate parts of a human being, why is anything else suddenly over the line?
>>29984919We literally forced her to love us. That is really fucked up, no matter how much you sugarcoat it.And judging by the latest update, she is unable to make decisions on her own, either.
>>29984931>starts to show genuine interest in your job.I highly doubt that, seeing as we rewrote her brain to worship us.
>>29984931Stuff that protects against magic cast by women.
>>29984933>>29984952I'm not arguing that she isn't being manipulated, but it looks like she's only platonic atm. Nothing there that outright screams LOVE, and the book did say that it only raises the opinion of the subject, not the kind of emotions attached.
>>29984931Let's do some light reading in the book. Also, like another anon said, let's keep an eye out for possible counters or spells related to women who use magic.
>>29984931Spells, we need to know what we're doing, how, the whole of it.Counter magic is also good, and does the book mention anything about conditioning or the like?If that old hedge mage had this, how was he run out of business by two females?Giselle needs to be treated carefully right now, ideally we should get to know her and make sure we haven't changed her to much, the worry about her father shows that she's still got other concerns at least.
>>29984972well it's genuine now! lolololol
>>29984990Maybe that hedge mage had moralsunlike ushuehuehue
>>29984978>but it looks like she's only platonicShe is unable to leave our presence without our express permission. Thats a little more than platonic>atmYou act like this isnt subject to change.
>>29984990>the worry about her father shows that she's still got other concerns at least.It also shows that they are secondary to us. We have already rewritten her personality enough for her to place us above her own kith and kin.>>29984999I guess the old Giselle really is dead.
>>29984931We should see if there's any way to undo the spells.
>>29985062Then burn that page. Giselle is ours now.
>>29985052Or she's acting like any hormonal teen would with her first crush.
>>29985105The crush that we brainfucked her into having.
>>29985105>implying shes not in her late 40s, like the character
>>29985105That would be even creepier, since that would make us an old man who is brainfucking teens into fucking him.
>>29985139>You are just a poor, young clerk for the town's mayor.
>>29985139>implying we're not early 20s
>>29985188>>29985188>>29985211>>29985180young is a relative term>She's the tavern owner's daughter of the same age as the character (whatever age you wish).
>>29985247Either way, we totally rewrote her thoughts for our own selfish ends. No rationalizing around that.
You lock the door and push the chair up against the knob again, this time even more conscious of the fact that the magic you're dabbling in is very, very real and past the point of innocent dabbling.The book is there, again, sitting right on your desk, open and waiting for you. Again, an otherworldly breeze fills the room, and you swear that you can see the pages beckoning you to read them.Your spirits dampened by weight of the situation, you still make your way to the desk and start poring over the tome.You chuckle ruefully at the page that the book has deemed to let you read first."Protective salves against the spells of those you wish to dominate..."You can already tell at first glance that this is one potion that will take much, much more than you have at hand, you might ever have on hand, to make, but the message the book is sending is clear.It wants you take the spells and will do everything in its power so that nothing will stop you until you have done so.For now, brewing that potion may be out of reach. You focus on something else to learn instead. Perhaps another potion? There is always learning the next spell in the chain for Giselle, though you don't quite know how to proceed with that. And of course the untranslated chapters of the books still remain untouched...What to do?
>>29985247I wish for them to be 12.
>>29985277Learn more potions.
>>29985277get translating, obviously
>>29985277PUT THE BOOK AWAYwe have a hot girl now we don't need anything else
>>29985277 Now, this is a smut quest, OP, but there is an important fact you still haven't mentioned:How big is our dick and are there spells to make it bigger?
>>29985277Learn how to utterly enslave Giselle.
>>29985277Learn, work on the hand motions, see what we can memorize, but let's hold off on testing anything more until we've spent a bit of time with what we've got.Both in the magical sense, and the feeling out what Giselle thinks of us now sense. That the book was both found with a man who was ruined by females, and seems to have a will of its own are huge red flags for caution.
>>29985341>this is a smut questThis is probably the worst smut quest since Breaker when it comes to delivery.
>>29985371Hey, we chose this path. We decided not to go apeshit with the spellbook and study it carefully.Op is just going with it.
>>29985371some of us want story in our pornsorry you're the minority both here and in breaker quest anonmaybe you should just go over to literotica or something.
>>29985404>>29985431His inability to make all paths equally valid and interesting shows his failure as a QM.
Would the apothecary still be open?
>>29985439it's interesting to usagain, you're the minorityyour failure to realize this shows your failure as a follower
>>29985473We haven't even done anything yet and the thread is almost in autosage.
>>29985516Yeah, because of butthurt virgins."Smut? Not on my /tg/!"
>>29985553Then OP needs to man the fuck up and make a goddamn choice. Like that other anon said, he keeps pussyfooting around like Breaker Quest did and we all saw how that one went to shit.
Knowing you will probably have to spend a day's wages on candles tomorrow, you turn the pages to look again at the chain of spells that you have started on Giselle. A lump forms in your throat as you see the end result of the spells, of complete subjugation, but you push those thoughts from your mind. You're getting better at that, nowadays.You try to focus on the next part of the chain. You don't know exactly how your suggestions will be taken more into consideration by Giselle, given how she seemed to already hang on every word you say, but that is what the next step outlines.The actual casting gives you pause, however. It is ridiculous, the number of motions your hand must make, and now it seems there is a time constraint on top of everything. For anyone observing, there would be no doubt that you are practicing sorcery if they even spend a second watching you perform this particular spell.Sighing, you lean back, trying to do the waves, but only succeeding at cracking your knuckles. You wince, shaking the sting off and flipping through the book once again.As you are stretching your fingers and practicing the second spell's motions, you stop at a page of gibberish.Or, what used to be gibberish.You can only make out one sentence from the page, but it is definitely one that you can guess with certainty."How to read the thoughts of the feeble woman."You know it's late. You know that it will take you a very long time to decipher the rest of the page. And do you really need to do that right now?You still have work in the morning, and you notice just how tired and peckish you are.How do you proceed?
>>29985578Fuck offThe only reason Breaker went bad is because asshole anons like you kept harassing Humility.He never even intended to run the quest, the original OP took off halfway through the first thread. Humility picked it up out of the goodness of his heart, only to have people like you fill his threads with shitposts.I'm still mad about that.
>>29985439When you create a story, you usually have a path you wish you players to go. The path is not fixed and if the players decide to break out of it, they can.As a QM/GM/DM you wish that your players follow the road you created. If you force them back into the road, you are railroading, and that is bad. If you let them wander stray from the road and they arrive at nothing, the story is lost, and that is bad.The ideal is to make that all roads lead to the final goal, letting the players take their time, while favoring the options that further the story.Not all Quests must be open world. You have free will, but is limited. If the players want to be careful and you force them to do something they don't want, THAT's bad QMing. Just because a quest has smut, doesn't ean you can't have story. The more you care about the characters, the more you care about the fucking.But that's just my two cents.
>>29985637>The only reason Breaker went bad is because asshole anons like you kept harassing Humility.I just wanted smut from a smut quest. Theres no harassment about that.>He never even intended to run the quest, the original OP took off halfway through the first thread. Humility picked it up out of the goodness of his heart,I still think this was a ruse of some sort.
Why couldn't the book have been about controlling men?Just think of the possibilities.
>>29985630Get a quick snack, after securing our room and book.Then look into the thought reading, it'll be an easy way to see how much we've influenced Giselle.
>>29985630Don't read it just yet, go to bed.
>>29985439I don't get what you're saying.The spell chain is super valid, and we've been doing that already.The potion route is valid as well, and we've been using that to help with the spell chain.And the only reason why the translation route hasn't been touched (until now) is because nobody wanted to.I feel very in control of the story, so I don't know which quest you're reading, anon.
>>29985630Go to sleep.
>>29985643Sure, that's all fine and good, but when 275 posts have passed without so much as hint of a tease, OP has done something terribly wrong.
>>29985655uh no, when you keep telling him his quest is shit because no smut that's harassment.>>29985686no, nothings wrongthis is what the players wantedmaybe it's not what you wantedtoo bad! go somewhere else then
>>29985686Yeah... nah, you're a cunt.
>>29985709>when you keep telling him his quest is shit because no smut that's harassment.Its the objective truth that a smut quest without smut is a shitty smut quest.
>>29985674Then OP needs to speed things along.
>>29985731Go to /d/ for a smut quest. There's a couple running right now.
>>29985658Because OP has no vision.
>>29985771Or I can stay on /tg/, where the only mind control fetish quest is.
>>29985630We need a proper experimental subject..Is there any prison nearby? I would feel much better about this using all of this on a convicted murderer or other dropout of society.
>>29985731fuck itI'm done with youyou have no patience, no desire for storythere's no way to fix youyou'll be unhappy with every smut quest here just because you don't agree with everyone else in the thread on where you want the quest to goat the very least I'm going to stop giving you an excuse to keep up your shitposting with replies
>>29985658Because if witches wanted men, they would just magic themselves hot and say "Hey, do you wish to fuck?" that men would jump on her.But we could try our spells on men, just to see if it works.>>29985341And OP still hasn't answered this.
>>29985834Story needs balance if you're looking to create something sexually titillating. OP is taking way too long for the setup and doesn't even have well developed characters or setting to show for it. Its just a bunch of plotless, developmentless faffing about.
At least you still have enough control over yourself to know that trying to read an evil, self-aware tome on how to dominate half of the world's population on a sleepy mind is probably a terrible idea.You close the book and put it under your fruit bowl, grabbing an apple to eat as you change for bed. You're curious whether the book will appear on your pillow again or maybe somewhere else and it never hurts to see just what the book is capable of.Sighing, you close your eyes. Once more, the excitement of the day lets you sleep in peace, with dreams of women firmly obeying your every command.When you wake up, it's more or less the time that you usually do. You turn and check to see if your pillow has another occupant, and you are pleasantly surprised that your head alone is on the cushion.That is, until you look to the table.There the book gleams with its red lettering, propped up by a fresh set of clothes and your work satchel.Cheeky thing.Time for another day? Back to work? Something else? You still have about an hour. Or you may want to get a head start into town? What shall you do?
>>29985888see if we can't fit in some quick readingit did get our stuff ready for us after all
>>29985888An hour isn't enough to get anything meaningful safely done. Head start into town and work, chat up giselle a little on the way out if we see her. Breakfast and all that as well of course.
>>29985888head into town we can see if their are any other woman we might want
>>29985876There are a lot of ways to be titillated, dude. This is the most blatantly mind control centric quest I've seen, and it hits all the right buttons for me as an MC fetishist. I'm here for the control, and it's actually believable with the setup so far, my dick is already getting hard at parts of this story.
>>29985888Do some quick reading.
>>29985630Eat and sleep. We'll continue experiments tomorrow, by daylight when it won't eat precious expensive tallow.
>>29985943>it's actually believable with the setup so far>MAGIC BOOK LANDS IN YOUR HANDS AND SUDDENLY YOU LOSE ALL MORALS Yeah, nah.
>>29985943>This is the most blatantly mind control centric quest I've seenYet, nothing is fucking happening. BFQ moved at a faster pace than this. Had more mind control and bimboification, too.
>>29985964It is a magic book about mind control.a SELF-AWARE book about MIND CONTROL.What part of "the book is slowly controlling us" haven't you understood?
>>29985888OP, If I am not mistaken, the thread has just entered autosage. You may want to archive it and call it a day or start another thread, because this one is not going to last much longer
>>29986015he is literally going to complain for the entire questnothing you can say will stop him, or convince him that he's wrongI'm actually pretty convinced he's only using dissatisfaction as an excuse to shitpostReplying helps him with that excuse.
Grudgingly, you dress and stow the book in your bag, making sure you have everything for a day at work.Stepping outside, you see Giselle sweeping at the front of the tavern, and she gives you a wave."Heading to work already?" she asks, and you nod. "Wait just a second." she says, disappearing into the inn and coming back out with a bun wrapped in her handkerchief."Here. You can eat it now or later. Don't worry about the hanky, you can give it back anytime." she says, looking very pleased with herself as you thank her. "No problem! Have a good day at work." She says, picking her broom back up and you wave goodbye.The trip to work isn't very eventful, other than Tandice surprised to see that you already have breakfast on hand.Wait waits for you at work is another matter entirely, and your heart skips a beat.In the window, you clearly see Anthena and Marr speaking with each other. You step away from sight, but you're sure of what you've seen.This might not be anything, but you still consider what you do next with care.
>>29986107Noted, making a new thread.I can go for an hour or two still.
>>29977874do you even try?
>>29986107Fuck off, autosaged threads last for hours.>>29986139Not a smart idea, it will just lead to further shitposting.
>>29986107>>29986139Are you both really that new?
>>29986148>>29986162Well alright. I'll just shelve the blurb for the next thread.Anyways, what do you guys want to do now?
>>29986186Are they still talking? Try and eavesdrop.Otherwise head in to work.
>>29986220This.Knowledge is power.
>>29986118Try to inconspicuously listen to what they're saying.
Trying your best to press against the wall, you crane your neck to hear even just the smallest piece of their conversation.You can't hear much from the outside, the two girls too far away for you and speaking too softly for their voices to carry, but you can tell that snippets of the conversation include questions about the hedge mage, your name, and of any peculiar books.Then the sounds from within stop, and you wonder if anything else is happening.Your thoughts are interrupted by the tinkling of a door chime and you look to see Anthena exit the town archive with a brooding look.You step away from the wall and try to look as innocent as possible, bowing your head and hoping that the both of you just walk past each other.But your luck isn't that forgiving."You! Are you the clerk handling the old geezer charlatan's case?" she asks with her insulting, yet sultry voice, and you find yourself face to face with the witch.You gulp. You only have a few seconds, to answer.What do you say to her?(Since we're in autosage, I'll stop posting pics so that I can reply faster instead of dredging through DA.)
>>29986186Listen in. Carefully.
>>29986440Tell her about the book you found.
>>29986440Uh the hedge mage? Did you know him?
>>29986440Ask her what she knows about Gynomancy.
>>29986440Tell her you are.
>>29986440"Closer to handled, there wasn't anything to take care of, all his stuff was gone.Why, did you know him?"
>>29986490Thirding.>>29986457>>29986480Look at these votes, very similar, separated by about a minute. Funny how the spam filter has a minute timer.Please don't count these votes OP. It's just that one shitposter samefagging and trying to ruin things.
>>29986440"yes yes I am""do you need something because I am on my way to work"
>>29986457>>29986463Seconding these two
And Anthena's description as I write the next part.---Anthena is an intimidating woman, to say the least. She stands a full head taller than you, and while you appreciate the view of her deep, snow-white cleavage, looking up a few inches to her equally beautiful face is something that you feel cuts down on your life expectancy. Still, even through her scowl and what seems to be a permanently angry brow, the way her kohl-rimmed eyes and black-rouged lipstick gives her and even more striking appearance than just her natural good looks, high cheekbones, and straight hair tied up in a bun as severe as the looks she usually gives you. She wears a revealing robe made of black fur and trimmed with volumes of raven feathers, and you can see that her accessories are also made from said bird. If Giselle is a fit girl with curves in all the right places, Anthena is voluptuous to a fault, almost spilling out of her robes and with legs that go on forever as you can see from the high slit of her dress and accentuated by heeled shoes that probably give her another few inches of height above you.
>>29986440"I'm sorry. I'm afraid I know of nobody that fits that description."Seriously, insulting a dead person? Classy. We can use our offense at her horrible manners to avoid answering further questions. Because he really did know magic. Then do some research on a way to get her as soon as we can. The book is aware with an agenda, which is worrying, but in this case it will work in our favor.
>>29986520>if I don't like it, its a samefag troll!How about instead of shitposting and whining we just let your votes decide what wins?
>>29986533>these descriptionsThank you based OP. These are great!
>>29986533This...isn't how you should introduce characters. It's disjointed and ugly and...I don't even know, man. It's jarring, like the descriptions have been divorced entirely from their characters or the quest in general.
>>29986533>If Giselle is a fit girl with curves in all the right places, Anthena is voluptuous to a fault, almost spilling out of her robes and with legs that go on forever as you can see from the high slit of her dress and accentuated by heeled shoes that probably give her another few inches of height above you.Holy run-on sentences, Batman!
"You mean the hedge mage? I suppose, but a lot of us worked on that case. If you want something specific you'll have to put in an official request." You say, sidestepping and trying not to spend too much time with the woman."If you'll excuse me, I have to go to work, ma'am." You say, with a lot less confidence inwardly than your voice suggests.She looks at you with a bit of shock and much more indignant anger, but you just brush past and hope that she won't follow you inside."Stop! I'm still talking to you!" she says, but thankfully she doesn't seem to be following you inside.As you open the door, you see that Marr is looking at you with some concern, and Anthena is still calling you back in a loud voice, enough that even Marr hears her.You know that you'll have to deal with Anthena again, but you think you can just close the door and be done with her for the day. Or any other number of options, actually.Still, Marr looks at you with concern.What do you decide to do?
>>29986649Ask Marr what is up with the angry shouting woman.
>>29986440>>29986533>>29986649You abuse commas like a drunken redneck abuses his wife.
>>29986649Ask Marr if the witch has been bothering everyone or just you.Also>Description of Marr please?
>>29986592>>29986621Sorry, I'll do better with describing Marr. More natural and everything. I just want to get everyone a picture of the girls and just go on with the action, but that might not be the right fit.It's always just been strange to me that a character who knows what someone looks like for a long time takes the time to notice and describe everything about her. Still, I know how to do that at least, and I'll put it in as part of the text for the next part.
>>29986649"Marr, why is the resident witch yelling? I'd rather not have her turn me into a newt, or some other reptile."
>>29986677The character knows, but we don't. Plus I for one really enjoy the descriptions.
>>29986649Ask Marr what's up with the crazy lady.
>>29986677>It's always just been strange to me that a character who knows what someone looks like for a long time takes the time to notice and describe everything about her.For one, these are details they understand at a glance due to a bunch of shit about human memory I don't feel like getting into right now, but sufficed to say a paragraph doesn't even begin to do justice the things the human mind can take in at a glance.Secondly, this is OUR first time seeing them, so it would be fucking nice to know who or what we are looking at even if it is something the MC has seen before.Thirdly, you have yet to convey that these characters are familiar with each other. The dialogue and interactions are so stiff it feels like this is the first time they have met, maybe even the first time the MC has ever talked to another human being.
>>29986649Mind control Marr.>>29986686>>29986722Don't samefag.
>>29986748It probably is the first time the witch has talked to him. He's just a lowly scribe.
You slam the door and wince as Anthena still seems to go on screeching for another full minute before you see her tromping away.Marr looks tense as the exchange comes to a close. You know the head archivist has always been a delicate girl. While she is a year older than you, she barely looks older than a girl that's just finished her schooling. Given her short stature, faint brunette hair, and owlish glasses, Marr is the picture of frailty and a girl who lives for her books."What's wrong with her? Has she been harassing the department?" You ask, jerking a finger back to the door.Marr shakes her head, making her short bob flare out briefly as she replies to you."No, she just came in today with a lot of questions about the hedge mage and you! Did something happen while you were documenting the house?" Marr says in a frightened quaver.Your heart breaks a bit at Marr's display of innocence. Still, is it really a wise idea to say even the slightest thing about the book to anyone?Marr waits behind her desk for you to answer, and your satchel suddenly feels much, much heavier...(What next?)
>>29986677Its already too late. You just dumped her into our lap without any rhyme or reason. I don't know who this Marr bitch is, I don't know the MCs relation to her, how old she is, or really any goddamned thing about her, yet you want expect me to somehow react to her. You gotta give us something to work off of for fucks sake.
>>29986803Mindcontrol Marr into trusting us completely before we tell her anything.
>>29986803"I'm afraid not. Could you tell me what she was asking about?"
>>29986803Tell her everything went normally. You performed the one last check, and found nothing. Everything had been cleared and the house was fine to condemn.>>29986806Except she was introduced as head archivist in a previous post.
>>29986803"Not as far as I know, I certainly didn't see anything. What was she asking about anyways?"
>>29986848I had already posted before 4chan updated the page and my point still stands.
"There wasn't anything that I could tell. What was the witch asking about, anyway?" You say, trying to play it cool as you walk past and sit at your desk."I hope that's all there is to it." Marr says, already going back to her own documents with the scratch of her quill filling the air. "Getting this much attention even before your first year? It might reflect badly later, you know..." Marr says, but her gaze softens and the scratches start to slow. "She didn't ask anything past the people associated with the case. I hope you're not getting into any trouble..." she says, and you just shake your head no.You hope you're not getting into any trouble as well, but you seriously doubt that. Already the book has appeared underneath a stack of papers on your desk, mostly hidden but nothing short of a beacon to you.A stray, vicious thought is whispering for you to use your powers over what it calls "the tasty little book waif" and you know that you've slipped just a bit further when you feel a part of you agree.Still, that doesn't mean you go through with it, does it? It might be better to get back to work and not stir up another issue with Anthena only minutes away still. But maybe it might help in the long run. All these questions run through your mind as you wonder what to do next...
>>29987026Don't use them now. That wizard is probably watching.
>>29987026FORCE IT OUT OF YOUR HEAD WITH WILL POWERwe are in control not it
>>29987026Gotta get the waif in our pocket>>29987066>>29987074We already broke Giselle, this is no different.
>>29987026Play it safe and don't do anything for now.
>>29987026We could use her. She has connections.
>>29987074But anon, we are the book
>>29987085Giselle was some random barmaid. Marr is actually concerned for us sometimes.
>>29987085yes there is the book does what we want not the other way
Close race between options. Also, this is more of a note for all the great anons still following this little magical realm quest (thanks by the way). I'm keeping NEET time right now and will probably plow through for another two hours still. If there's an audience, I'll go through all the way till I'm tired since I'm having a lot of fun with this quest. Thanks again for all the suggestions for my writing and coming along for the ride.
>>29987137All the more reason to heighten those feelings and leash her to our will.
>>29987156Is your magical realm never getting to the fucking smut and disappointment? Because thats all I feel right now.I am so fucking close to dropping this shit
>>29987026Use the powers, but only when you are sure that the wizard is not nearby.
The temptation is too great and again you feel yourself take another step further down a dark path as you stand up and walk towards Marr."Marr, can I borrow one of your quills? The nib on mine is worn down or something." You ask, knowing very well that Marr treasures her hawk-feather quills and takes them home each night."Alright... but only for today. Be gentle, okay?" Marr says, taking one from her pot and handing it to you. You thank her and go back to your seat.Your leg is shaking as you do the first cantrip of the chain. The quill is in front of you, and the passes now come naturally. You hear the scratches of Marr's writing stop."You doing alright there? Do you need any help or something?" you hear her voice, and by the gentle breeze in the room you can tell that it's begun.You hide your hands under your desk and make the second ritual, and the quill in front of you shakes while the words burn in your vision."... I can't believe that Anthena, though... Coming in accusing you like that... You're one of our most promising clerks! How dare she raise her voice at you... she's a b...b... BITCH!" You hear Marr, and you can't help but smile. Marr never cursed. Never, ever, ever cursed. Now was the moment of truth, and you concentrate everything on your hands and the whispers. The feather is fraying and curling, but you don't stop even as Marr's rants now turn vicious and vitriolic. You can hear death threats in her voice as you finish the last spell with nimble fingers and darkening vision.Even though the windows are open and the sun is shining through, it's as if the office darkens. Marr's voice quiets down, and the silence returns."But what do you think?" Marr asks pleasantly in her normal voice.Nothing else seems different. At least not as far as you can tell. But the quill in front of you is twisted and frayed. And you know that short of the most depraved of acts, Marr would do anything you ask.You know that in your heart... what now?
>>29987340Was this the third spell or still the second spell?Either way, does our office have a door? If so, close it, and smut.
>>29987408Second the hand holding.
Any other suggestions before I start writing? Last call.
>>29987545Do it.The thread has aligned.It is time.
>>29987340Have her lock the door, make sure we have some privacy.Then strip for us, put on a show. Also, a blowjob would be nice.
>>29987340"Yes, she is, isn't she? I'd rather avoid talking to her again if possible. Can we throw up a prociderial stonewall on her questioning? Make her fill out some forms in order to get answers?"If she fills out forms, we can try using the forms as a link to cast spells.
>earlier post was bragging about how many players OP had>now he cant get more than twoLooks like ya blew it.
You know that the book is doing this. You know that it's reckless. You know that Anthena might just be outside the door, waiting for the perfect chance to blast you into a thousand magical bits. You know all of those things.You don't care.No one ever comes into the office this early of the day. Well, aside from the witch. You stand up from your desk and take the book in your hand. Marr looks at you with curiosity, though she does nothing to stop you. You lock the door and then look at the archivist."Marr, can I see you in the records room?" You say. Usually Marr would have asked you why. Usually Marr would never leave her work unless there was a good reason. Usually Marr wasn't under a curse that made you the most trustworthy man in existence. So, unusually, Marr only nods and stands, walking with you to the room barely bigger than a broom closet. You close the door and lock that one behind you as well."Marr, you like me, don't you?" You ask bluntly with a confidence that you know you shouldn't have."Of course I do! I think you're a great friend." She smiles. You feel the words being fed to you to twist that."I know... but I think there might be more to it than just that." You say."Marr. I think you might like me. You want me." You say, and only now do you feel the slight doubts form in your head. Mar looks at you for a moment of confusion, but then nods."You... you're right. I never thought of it that way, but o-of course that's what I'm feeling!" she says, conviction suddenly steeling her voice as she steps closer to you with a blush on her cheeks."It's alright, Marr. I know what you're feeling. You don't know it, but I can tell. It's alright Marr. Just give in. I want you just as badly."Her eyes become misty and Marr smiles back at you. Her breath is hot and you see her unbuttoning her high collared blouse and you hurry to undress as well.Clothes hit the floor.cont.
Marr is pretty. She may not have had the fuller figures of Anthena or Giselle, but her skin is smooth and has the shade of a white rose. She fits perfectly against you, and you can even rest your chin on her head if you wanted.But you want other things right now. She may not have flared in pillowy flesh, but the graceful lines of her body showed a perfect curved symmetry. Her breasts are high and capped with gentle pink nipples, and you feel like you own every inch of her as you run your hand from her shoulder down to her back and to rest on her soft rear."Marr... take me in your mouth." You rasp, and it's agonizing how her body and her bare skin slides over yours as she bends down and sits on her ankles.You tilt your head back as two soft lips wrap around your cock. Her mouth is hot and tight, and you know that the wet touches sliding underneath your tip are from Marr's eager tongue. Hand that have never had a day of hard work are the perfect texture as they rub and cradle your balls, and you don't know how long you can last as Marr's head begins to bob up and down your shaft.con't.
You gasp, looking down at the light brown hair and a pair of innocent eyes looking up at you from behind shining lenses. You run your fingers through that pixie cut. You want nothing more than to grab a fistful of it and just push her down and to make her take you to the hilt.But that isn't how you're supposed to use Marr. Both you and the whispers agree. You only press lightly, enjoying the feel of her wet mouth and how her lips are spread taut around your shaft.It's an amazing pressure, and it builds up tantalizingly with each second. You can hear Marr's own moans around your cock, and you can feel control slipping as she continues to lick and play.The first spurt comes as a surprise, just a little jet, and you lock eyes with Marr as she tastes you. You try to hold it in for just a little bit longer, but Marr's eyes are bright and her cheeks rise. You know she's there, on her knees, smiling as she takes every inch of you into her mouth, and that is all it takes.You still don't force her, but you put your palm flat on Marr's head as you cum. She never lets up for a second, taking ever increasing licks under your shaft and giving gentle squeezes on your balls.You hold her there for what feels like an eternity that isn't long enough. You feel yourself grunt, then your shoulder slump as you relax.You're spent, but even now the sliding lips that capture every drop as Marr draws back send tingles through your softening cock.Now she smiles at you completely, still sitting patiently on the floor."What next?" she asks.What next indeed, you wonder...
Well that was mediocre for the wait you forced us to go through.anal
>>29987966throw her over the desk
>>29987966Return the favor.
>>29987987>analThat guy was a dick but this.
>>29988008This, then maybe anal afterwards.
Calling it a night seeing as it's late and it looks like someone's dedicated to clearing this off of suptg. If I start up again, I'll make a link to the foolz archive so people can at least figure out what's going on.Anyway, I'll hang out in the thread till it gets bumped off. Chat with me if you guys like.
>>29988342Maybe next time you should deliver more than one half-post of smut when you make a smut thread.I didn't downvote your quest, but I almost agree with him.
>>29988342Yeah, it's probably best you use foolz. Not as clean but it can't be misarchived.
>>29988420That's fair. I honestly just wrote what I thought is hot when it comes to MC. I'm getting that a lot of people disagree with me. Still, I hope that some people found satisfaction with it. I'd like to continue with it anyway.>>29988476True enough.
>>29988508Good night, then. Thanks for the thread.
>>29988508dont be discouraged by all the hate , though the only issue i had was the lack of character descriptions and clear lack of objective at the start and through most of the thread realy, besides that i thought the pacing and content was perfectly fine and the smut was great, cant wait for future smut and plot. if you could give a few options to go with the wot do part it would realy speed things up i think, just stuff to keep the flow and give choices but always have writin as an option just as a reminder that its just a guideline nad not a railroad. looking forward to the next thread, this has potential but people will always get mad at smut quests no mater what.
>>29988828Thanks for the kind words. My ego is starting to recover and I'm starting to look at it objectively.I get that the sentences were disjointed and that most people want a more natural description of characters within the posts.One thing I'm still having trouble with is how I was railroading. I thought I was giving enough options to the players at the time, but should it be more than just "study potions, study chain, translate dark chapters, write-in"?
>>29988889well you could also add to cast a known spell or make potion, maybe even walk around town or talk to other characters, also i wasnt trying to say it was railroaded just that having write in there reminds people that its not limited to only the listed options is all, i also realy liked that the wispers wanted us to be gentle with her and not just ravage her, realy nice touch.
>>29988967Cool. I'll remember putting little reminders here and there, especially for stuff that's on hand like the cantrips or the potions if and when the main character has them on hand.
>>29988889I didn't really see any railroading going on.
>>29988992Thanks. I'll add in some solid options too, the next time around, as well as reminders of relevant things that the main character can do.
>>29988989I would also like to see the whole potions aspect be fleshed out and explained a little more, its just feels too vague to me is all, maybe a little list of reagents could be used as a something to make it seem more than just something we either can or can't make.I was thinking something based on how rare, valuable or hard to obtain a part of it would be simplified in a common, uncommon and rare catagory that each potion would require a number of each of these groups. For example the sleep tea we made could require 1 common reagent to make and the one we couldnt make could need something like 2 common and 1 rare depending on how hard it is to make just to keep track of what we can or can't make. We could get these from a stall that had some of the things we saw in the book if i recall, We could have something like cx3 ux1 rx0 as a simple way to keep stock. this is of corse entirely your decision to go with if you want to do it like this, its just a suggestion is all.
>>29989202Alrighty. I'll delve into making recipes for the potions as well.
>>29989216Just aslong as its not overly complex and doesnt take away too much from the plot it should be fine, maybe have the realy simple ones not even need anything to make if you thinkit couold work. If its toomuch trouble you can just keep it like it is, its not that big a deal anyway, just do what you think people will have the mot fun with.
>>29989428I'll be going about it like, how many doses you can make in your house or how many you have on your person.
>>29989508That sounds good. Looking forward to it
Last thing before we drop off the board.Anybody have specific time frames they'd like to see this quest?
Also, if this is for the final note, upvotes on suptg would be much appreciated.
>>29989678serioustly dont wory about votes on suptg, it got bombarded with downvotes because its smut related and most of them are bots, as for time just run whenever you its convenient and you have a few hours to run, but if you want the same general groupe then just stick to running at the same time but some day will just have less participents.
>>29989678>whoring for upvotes on suptgdisgusting