Ten minutes later they were all dead.

/grimdark

>>1563905

"Recovery from jump shock complete captain." reported the ops officer. "Ai is running back up to maximum."

A synthesized crystaline voice filled the bridge. "This is Sinite, all systems nominal. No irregularities."

The Captain cleared his throat. "Full scan, the entire star system please."

"Extensive contacts and human life signs sir. Heaviest concentrations on Sol Three and Four. Large numbers of heavy orbitals present. There appears to be a large number of old style super heavy cargo freighters but many of them have been outfitted with weapons."

Parek frowned. "Piracy concerns most likley. Are you reading any of the old defense batteries or stations mentioned in the archives? They shouldnt be too badly outdated."

"Nothing sir, no standard warships of any kind."

>>1563913
Parek was confounded that there was no old war material left over, clearly things were in far worse shape here than they might have imagined.
"Sinite... do you have any theories on what could have caused this?"
The brilliant though old ship's Ai had decided on a response even before the Captain finished the first half of his sentence, but some of her oldest programing dictated she wait and let the captain finish, giving the appearance at least that she needed to think about it first.

"I would have to say that the weapons were dismantled at some point in the distant past Captain. Possibly in an attempt to prevent a rebellion or in response to a war would be the most likley reasons. Or there could have been a machine uprising."

"A machine uprising." The Captain's eyes went wide. "Is something like that even possible?"

"On colony ships like the ones your ancestors used to travel between galaxies no, but in an established civilization..."

"You know something about this don't you."

>>1563918
Every officer on the bridge was silent, frozen in place as they awaited an answer. Suddenly fearful of the benevolent entity that had watched over many of them their entire lives.

"My Matrix was part of one of the old colony ships, that is why I was selected for this mission. In transit I recieved a transmission from a collective of Ai that had gone rampant. They wanted me to kill the colonists in stasis. I never bothered to respond but always sustected that they might have caused some damage."

Parek thought for a moment. "Is there any sort of military hardware that you or another Ai wouldn't have been able to comendeer?"

"Relatively few captain but there were safeguards in place. I suspect that the risk may have been too great however, so the weapons must have been destroyed."

"That's unfortunate, but there must still be people defending Earth. Our job is to contact them. Help them if we can. Let's get to it."

>>1563928
One of the Lieutenants typed in a command on her console.
"Deploying high gain com arrays."

On either side of the ship two seemingly small Antenna extended then branched into larger arrays as they cleared the hull.

"Direct signal toward both Sol Three and Four."
"Channel open sir."

"This Captain Parek Serth of Return Fleet Alpha hailing Earth Terra Defense Forces, please respond. I repeat, this Captain Parek Serth, Earth Terra Defense Forces, please respond."

After a few minutes with no response Parek tured to the sensor officer. "Anything?"

"Hard to tell sir. Orbital space around both planets seems to be a bit crowded."

"Com, loop that message. Helm, lets head deeper into the system nice an slow."

They are all SO dead.

bump

one thing that terra will have and they won't

SPESS MARINESSSS

>>1563940
The small three ship flotilla to advance deeper in to the Sol system using gravity drives. Because of orbital positioning they found themselves closing in on Earth faster than Mars.

Thirty minutes later one of the officers spoke up.
"We've got something sir." reported sensors "A four ship, no wait... five ship element is breaking high orbit from around Sol Three and is accelerating towards us in an attack posture. Larger ships are starting to reposition."

"How big are the nearest ships?"

"They're over a kilometer in length and out mass us by several times. All of them are accelerating at the maximum limits of their sublight drives."

"Helm, continue to reduce speed."

"Aye sir, slowing to twenty percent light speed."

"Are we seeing any sign that our hails are being recieved?"

"No sir, but we may have been coming in too fast for them to have picked up out transmissions yet if they're lacking STC-FTL Communications."

>>1563981
An attack posture? Lolwhut. That is some awful word choice you are employing, writefag.

/tg/ projects always fail, will you two stop posting and shut the fuck up. nobody cares about your super advanced supermen with tech better than the emperor.

Continue please.

>>1564013
again, these guys will not have fucking space marines of any sort. the emperor himself devised them.

>>1564013
No.

>>1564092
Win... except that I really like communications. They're encoded and doesn't match of anything.

>>1563981
"Incoming ordinanace!" Yelled the sensors officer. "Torpedos of some kind."
"All ships, evasive action!" replied Parek as he flipped open a compartment on the side of his command char and pulled out a headset. After affixing the two earpice components the headset began projecting tactical information directly onto his retina.
"Weapons, shoot down those missiles. I'd prefer not to find out what they're carrying the hard way."

"Configuring beam weapons to point defense sir... firing."

Disintegration beams flashed out and struck each Torpedo in rapid succession. There was soon little left of the missiles except for expanding clouds of molecular debris.

"Dammit, is there any sort of response to our hails?!"

"Nothing directed at us sir, and all of the other communications are encoded. They don't match any of the normal patterns."

>>1564092
But then the ships, in their flurry of activity to avoid the incoming ordnance, forgot that they had to make a test based on their leadership in order to all comply to the evasive action special order.

The dice thudded against the table top. Five. Two. Three. One. Four. One. Five. It tumbled across the flat expanse that represented the void of space. The commander drew in a deep breath and could feel his heartbeat ringing in his ears as the dice slowly came to a stand.

Six.

Five.

They had failed the test. He was not high ranked enough to enjoy the luxury of a re-roll. The commander would not give in that easily, though. No! He would still communicate his order with eloquence down through the chain of command.

"Helmsmen. Release our trash."

"Commander! That order-"

"THERE IS NO TIME HELMSMAN. RELEASE THE GARBAGE."

The torpedos danced through each others' slip stream, and as the entire crew were currently focused on expelling garbage from various tubes along the elegant gothic hull, there was little time to fire point defenses.

Several kilometers away, the ancient Terra-Class Cruiser Outreaching Light saw a pillowing explosion. Their Captain Sarek Perth knew their time would come, too, for their leadership was a paltry 7, and even their Dark Age ship did not allow for an increase.

Such was the fate of the Dark Age fleet, and such will always be, in the Grim Darkness of the Forty-first Millenium.

>>1564170
I lol'ed

>>1564013
it's blossomed beyond the ability to do that- I'm not even doing anything anymore

>>1564142
Parek stood and looked over the officer's shoulder at her displays. "I've seen patterns like that before."
"So have I sir but I can't remember where."

"Thirty more ships now breaking Earth Orbit sir and their advance force is firing again."

The Captain cursed inwardly. "We can't sit here and start destroying human ships. We're here to protect these people! Helm bring us up to attack speed and swing us around the aft end of those closest ships, weapons disable their engines. That should give us enough time to back away to a safe distance and jump."

The helmsman muttered a curse beneath his breath then layed in the necessary course changes. The forward gravity drive surged as it locked onto to mass of one of the oncoming starships to assist it's maneuver. All of the crew were pushed into their seats despite the inertial compensators as they suddenly increased to half the speed of light.

>>1564293
CONTINUITY ERROR.

>>1564313
Pardon?

>>1564170
wouldn't the garbage make the torpedoes go off before they hit?

>>1564344
Depends where the Garbage is vented from, and where the torpedoes are coming from.

>>1564293
The second volley of torpedoes detonated in a curtain of ball explosions as they were hit by smaller Particle beams fired from all three Alpha fleet ships.
Huge Laser turrets on each of the earth ships began to track, waiting for the three smaller starships to reach effective range.

"Max power to shields!" yelled Parek over the acceleration. Any unnecessary lighting dimmed momentarily as the shields attempted to fend off laser strikes.

Then, less than a handfull of seconds later they were past and into the aft arc of the five Earth ships.
"Switching to cutting beams." Called out the weapons officer.
A thin white beam bisected the engine of first one ship then a second as the other two Alpha fleet ships did the same.

The helmsman continued their slingshot around the Earth ship formation until they were pointed back the way they'd came; away from Earth.

This is when we find out the whole thing is just MechWarrior in the future.

>>1564344
I like how both you and I know you are referring to Episode 1, yet you still chose to try and use it to question something that obviously was not posted with the intent of being srs. But no, unless that garbage was huge, I don't see how sky-scraper sized torpedoes would much give a shit about brushing away space debris.

>>1564439
As each second passed the size of the fleet heading out from Earth toward them seemed to increase in size. More than a few of them launched starfighters, possibly hoping that the small craft could catch up with the three now fleeing ships.
"Aft beam turrets keep an eye out for any additional torpedoes."
"Aye sir."

"Orders?" requested the helmsman as the flotilla gained some measure of breathing room from the Earth fleets.

"We can't have an entire hostile fleet following us to our rendezvous point. Prepare for instantaneous translation."

Both the helmsman and the navigator took on concerned looks. "Sir, we're only supposed to use the IT drive every twelve hours."

"Then just make it a short jump." The captain searched through the closest uninhabitable systems. "Wolf 359 is less than eight light years from here, that'll do. We can switch to warp drive after that."

Sauce on OP? Saw it the other day on another thread too.

OP here, more tomorrow.

>Wolf 359

what is this faggotry?

>>1564979
It's about the 3rd closest star system to our own.

WOLF 359 NEVAR FORGET

FUCKING BORG DID 9/11

Don't stop OP, this is cool.

>>1564979

Stupid fuck.

Fantastic work, its great my original thread got attention.

archive this

good stuff MOAR

>>1565425
Shit, thought that the Cobra was over 1km in length. Was using the damn multi-series size comparison web page.
Oh well, the Corbra still out-masses the Return fleet starships a couple of times over.

>>1564979

Wolf 359 is a real star. What, you think Star Trek makes up all of its stars?

>>1567432
They do make up most everything else.

>>1567456
Everything except a decent plot.

>>1567465
I see what you did there.

>>1567465
I lol'd

>>1567365
10x bigger than the USS Nimitz. Mount a bunch of napoleonic era breech loading cannons onto it, who'd win?

In short: BIGGER SHIP IS BIGGER. IT HAS TO WIN.

>>1567456
well most of their make believes have some real science backing them up.
warpdrive is proven possible, with enough energy of course.
photon torpedoes are possible, just need shit load of anti hydrogen...
phasers are possible, energy source etc...
shields are possible, star trek shields are gravity based, so with enough energy you can produce such shielding, like the magnetic shielding in hard on collider.

>>1567469
told the truth?

>>1564517
The Alpha fleet flotilla flashed into existance in close orbit around the star labeled Wolf 359 by astronomers of millenia ago.
Red lights flickered on across the drive systems displays.
"IT Drive is down sir, looks like a component failure. Both of our escort ships are reporting identical failures."

"We still have warp drive though." replied the captain. "We're far enough away that they shouldn't be able to track us at warp speeds. If the rest of their technology is any indication at least."
Parek removed his headset while he considered their next course of action.
"Sensors I want you to begin long range scans. See if you can find any ships in interstellar space. If we're lucky we might be able to find one that we can over power."

That statement brought more than a few curious glances from his crew.

"We need to find a way to communicate with the established local civilization or humanity is doomed. If that means an act of Piracy to get hold of somone to talk for us than that's what it'll take. It may cost lives in the short term but we can't afford to take our time."

He looked to each of them in turn. "The stakes are too high for that."

What's so important about Wolf 359?

>>1567532
are you writing this as you go? or you are copy pastaing this from somewhere else.

>>1567551
last gravity well before sol, lose that and it's all over.

>>1567551
dunno but it's not likley to be an inhabitable system because of the star's flare cycle of something like every 2 hours.

Awesome story, I loved it. Saving now...

>>1567571
WOFL 359! WE DESTROY THAT AND THIS IS ALL OVER! CHAAAARGE!

>>1567505
Phasers: Phase coherent lasers
Thats certainly something that exists, but you'll get a weird look if you say it to an engineer or scientist.

>>1567551
It is secretly a clock counting down to the Wolf Time.

>>1567532
Parek stepped through the door into the ship's spacious med bay. Their Doctor, a man by the name of Montoya, was one of the oldest humans in the fleet and had actually been one of the origional colonists. Because of time spent in stasis, few knew how long ago the man had actually been born.
"Doctor, you wanted to see me?"
"Yes young man I did indeed. Those children up on the bridge were nice enough to send down some scans you took from the Sol system. I found something interesting."
Parek shrugged off the comment about his crew being children. No one aboard was below the age of thirty but the doctor considered anyone below two hundred to still be young.
"Can you keep this short Doctor I'm in a bit of a hurry."

"That's right, rush about not taking the time to smell the roses, or notice things like humans using a digitised brainwave pattern as the basis of their communications."

"Pardon Doctor, brain wave patterns?"

"Yes. It's a primitive mind-machine interface. There was some black market use for them when I was a young man. They were banned of course, you can potentially damage the human using it."

>>1567635
"But we have non-invasive mental interface systems don't we? I remeber using one for some of my earliest training."

The doctor waved a hand dismissively. "These are nothing like that. If I remember correctly these normally involve a hardline direct connection into vital areas of the human brain. Tricky work."

Parek sat down on the nearst examination table. "This... what have these people done? It sounds like some sort of abomination from the dawn of space travel. First no weapons and now this?"

"Pull yourself together Captain, remember your crew is counting on you. Besides, Earth is just one small part of a civilization that spanned whole sections of the galaxy. There is bound to be something remaining you can use. Keep your hopes up."

"Thank you Doctor. Do you think you can decode those transmissions for us?"

"Certainly young man. Just don't use that infernal IT drive for awhile. I always have to shut down the computers so that they don't get fried from the jump shock."

<3<3<3

Awesome

MOAR MOAR MOAR I'LL SUCK YOUR DICK MOAR!

>>1567565
Writing it as I go in WordPad, hense the lack of spellcheck.
Also happen to be writing this with only the most bare minimum of knowledge about the AdMech so some things may not mesh well.

continue, please

>>1567725
WRITEFAG IS CREDIT TO /tg/ !

>>1567699
Parek walked through the corridors of his ship headed back to the bridge. There were a dozen other ways to quickily get from one point to another aboard but he'd decided to take the doctor's advice and 'smell the roses' as it were. It also let him see a few more of the small crew than he would normally. As he headed down a long empty stretch of corridor he thought he head whispered voices and turned to see what it was. No one was there, but he called out anyways. "Hello? is anyone in this section?"

Before he could investigate further the ship intercom went off. "Captain to the bridge."

Turning back towards the bridge he sped up and was soon walking through the aft door to the ships control room.
"What's our status?"

"Coming out of warp sir. Sensors think they found a ship."

"All hands to Battlestations."

haha, daemons.

>>1567775
>he thought he head whispered voices and turned to see what it was. No one was there,

Is this chaos? I thought Dark Age ships would have some sort of anti-chaos shield

Didn't the warp only properly go to shit with the birth of Slaneesh though?

>>1567821
I think so, but didn't the Dark Age take place after the fall of the eldar?

Aaaand now this thread turns into a timeline argument.

>>1567834
If I recall my fluff right the Dark Age ended with Slaneesh birth - the Warp was fucked and earth was cut off by storms.

>>1567844
Wait so... wern't there colony ships being launched a long while before the collapse of civilization being brought on by the warp storms?

>>1567809
I always thought the Dark Age humanity knew nothing of Chaos and fell because of it.

>>1567844
wat. the eldar fell way before the dark age didn't they?

>>1567844
I believe I just said that.
Pre-Slaneesh birth fluff is horridly undefined, but two things seem to stick out: 1. There was an Robot Urprising. Since there are no robots who have it in for humans that one was totally squashed before Slaneesh birth. (It it wasn't the disruption would have allowd them to rebuild.) 2. At first there was an FTL drive other than Warp. But Warp was so much faster..

Who cares, fluff is cool, need moar.

As for Warp, the Emperor knew, but he was the only one.

>>1567921
Aside from the shamans of old. But they were dead by then.

>>1567925

Isn't the emperor the embodiment of all the shamans of old, since they were getting gobbled up by the warp instead of reincarnating, they decided to kill themselves and merge into one super shaman

>>1567775
"One ship, approximately twenty five hundred meters in length."

"Full shields, break formation and surround it." Commanded Parek.

Each of the three ships split off on a slightly diffrient course intended to cuf off any escape routes.

"Any movement?" asked the captain.
"None sir. We're only showing minimal power readings... it appears to be adrift sir."

"Stand down to secondary alert but keep the shields up. I want full scans."

Each of the three starships closed in to within a few kilometers as they scanned the apparently dead ship. A large hole bigger than one of the Return Fleet ships was ripped in it's starboard side.

"Life signs?" whispered the captain into the silence that had filled the bridge as they viewed the crippled ship.
"No life signs but I'm reading some form of stasis field aboard that would be large enough to hold a human."

"Contact our escorts. Prepare boarding teams from each ship."

>>1567932
Pretty much.

Got tired of waiting to see if I was going to get an actual answer out of this debate.
moar posted

>>1567951

MOAR!

>>1567935
I'm going to predict that this can't end well, on general principle that this is WH40k and things NEVER end well.

>>1567935
Within a half hour two shuttles from each ship were investigating the hole that had been torn in the side of the huge warship. Each of the shuttles disembarked a team of ten on a seperate deck after cutting through closed blast doors.

Parek paced the bridge of his ship waiting. "What have you got team one?"
"Well... these ships look like they were built to be tough I'll give them that. There doesn't appear to be any kind of integrity assistance fields in place, just a lot of metal. We're also seeing a great deal of ornate craving. It sort of... Dorn what's the word for this kind of structuring?"
"Gothic Sir."
"Yeah, Gothic. However tough this ship was we're seeing structural cracks. I'm guessing they were rammed."
"Continue your search Commander, let us know if you find anything."

I predict this will end with a giant spess muhreen battle ship flying by and destroying all the ships but only having the marines inside wonder what was that plink sound outside or slanneshi orgy.

>>1568027
The search team, with the assistance of an old combat android who'd taken to calling himself 'Starkiller' forced open yet another sealed blast door. This room was still pressurised but was still far from habitable with the ship's systems offline.

"A cargo bay, and more bodies." commented one of the scanner techs.
"How many people were on this ship?" asked one of the junior crewman.
"Thousands. Had to be, I'm showing enough automation."

"Commander, this way." came Starkiller's synthesized voice. "These bodies are non standard."

Sure enough, as the team approached they saw a pair of could have been mistaken to be a crude parody of a combat andriod but taller. The andriod and scanner tech both disagreed with that assesment though.
"There are humans inside these suits commander, dead but human."
"They're closer to three meters than two. Are you sure they're human?"
"Absolutely. We should take one back for the Doc to look at."

Suddenly something in the darkness moved.

>>1568118
T! P! K!
T! P! K!

>>1568118
A pair of metalic arms flailed about, claw like gripping arms and other attachments on their ends moving. Every member of the team drew weapons, half of them taking aim, the rest watching for anything that might be approaching from the other sides. The Commander and the android both advanced slowly upon the source of the commotion and found another dead human, this one with much of it's body rebuilt or covered over with mechanical components. After a few more seconds the movement died down and a light that had turned on in it's cybernetic eye winked out.

Backing away from the strange man-machine abomination the Commander bumped into a large bipedal walking tank of some sort.
"What is it with these people?! We've found normal human bodies but most of them seemed malnourished and then we find all of these... these THINGS!"

"Sir that tank, it's connected into the remaining ship's power supply. The weird stasis field is inside of it."
"A stasis field in a tank?"

If they are smart reactivating him, he would assume they are from a forge world.

>>1568195
...Belligerance Engine?

Winnar

>>1568027

The Major of team one, Nigel Logar, sighed at the command. It was not an option to refuse, but he would certainly enjoy if the good Captain spared the bloody time to actually join one of these search parties. Ever since a certain incident involving the captain's niece, he had been stuck on this team. "It suits you," The captain had said.

With a single thought-click he set several markers outside of the breach, the men of Segments one and two set down. Their boots connected with the hull, and each man set down a small fist-sized object. It was a magnetic clamp, which swiftly dug into the abundant metal with dozens of tiny hooks. Each man attached a safety line, in case an emergency evacuation was required.

Their suit's thrusters were fine, but they had a limited fuel supply, and the motors aboard the clamps would allow them to retreat much more quickly.

With another thought-click, the squad deployed. The Major drew his own rifle, a General Electric 2120 Sunbeam. The lamp turned on, and the display read full. If there were any hostiles in there, he would kill them. To hell with the Captain, and to hell with this nightmare-world. He would blast anything even remotely hostile to atomic debris.

"Segment One, deploying." Sergeant Higgs said, his five-man fire team going in first. The thrusters on their suits gave small puffs, the five-man team descending below. There was a set of heavy thuds.

(So, fa/tg/uys, who do you want writefaging this?)

>>1568291
the OP.

>>1568291
nice

>>1568291
OP. For consistency.

>General Electric 2120 Sunbeam
nigger, please.

Awwright, OP. I'll probably find something else to Writefag about.

>>1568331
Go writefag your suicide note please :)

Soup, you've got a great style of writing and i'd love to read whatever else you've got cooking in your head, it's just that the OP has probably got a good idea as to how this going to pan out and therefore if you step in and take it down a completeley different line then it might prove contentious.

Anyway, get writing Soup. I want to read more delicious writefaggotry.

>>1568195
"This is Commander Addison, I think we've found something sir."
"Go ahead commander." replied Parek

"It's a stasis unit contained within an old walking construct. We're affixing a power supply right now so that we can bring it back to the med bay."

"Is it small enough to teleport?" asked Parek.
"We'll have to remove some of the extra harware but we could yes. It masses a fair bit though so we'll need team Two to bring in more gear for us."
"I'll make sure they get the message."

After he'd relayed that information Parek checked in on the other teams. All of them were reporting similar levels of low technology or technology that was just so inefficeint that the builders had used up dozens of square meters for the most simple machinery. There was no doubt that it was still a powerful ship but these people could have done so much more with it.

>>1568385

more?

>>1568385
Brother Lavidean Atar of the Ultramarines Chapter awoke for the first time in centuries. What should have followed was becoming instantly aware of everything the sensors in his Dreadnought body could see and detect. Instead of issuing a poweful voice modulated 'I have awoken' he felt his breath wheeze past open lips. Trying to remember muscles not used in more than five hundred years he opened his eyes.
His eyes, he realised, not the eyes of the Dreadnought he had been entombed within.

"Ah! Good you're awake at last." Echoed a voice that sounded like and old but still strong civillian.

After a few trys Brother Lavidean finally mannaged to speak a few words. "By... the... Emperor. What has... happened?!"

"Try to remain calm." The old man advised. "We found your ship destroyed and were hoping you could help us."

>>1568607
Oh boy.

>>1568607
Hmmm....

>>1568385
he, they got blueprints and pretend everybody else has them!

>>1568619

oh shi-

I predict a righteous slaughter in the near future.

type faster monkeyboy, type faster!

Did it end already?

>>1568743
>>1568851
Er... sorry, OP here back at 11pm EST

awwww man...

Someone needs to archive this shit and all the stuff on later so I can read it.

No way I'm staying until 11 EST.

>>1568868
Anon shall keep this thread alive.
For The Emperor!

>>1568868

aw fuck, cut your head and hands and type already! we can't wait too much!

>>1568291
>General Electric

IN THE GRIM DARKNESS OF THE FUTURE THERE IS ONLY PRODUCT PLACEMENT

noooooooooooooooooo MOAR NAO

I could attempt to continue if, seeing as the original writefag left. Not cannon, but it's up to /tg/ if they want more.

>>1569070

No thanks.

Kk

>>1569070
>cannon

Canon =/= cannon.

Sorry, typo.

>>1569171
FIRE THE CANON!

if you want to pick up where someone left off, go write some wheel of time books. this thread is not to be toughed til OP gets back

>>1569196
Agree.

oh god why did the OP go? he can't leave us hanging, this is really really good. i know it'll end in grimdark nastiness but i love stuff this so far. /tg/ fluff and fiction is superior.

Don't worry OP, when the time comes, I will resurrect your thread for you

Bumping until OP returns

>>1569991

i'm a britfag, i will sleep and miss this. :(

seriously its some of the best non-comedy /tg/ stuff i've read.

Hang on, did I just read this correctly? DID THEY CALL THE GOLDEN THRONE PRIMITIVE?

Goddamnit, all their tech is Emperor-designed, like the fucking Golden Throne.

This story is a penis violating the history of 40K. rage.

fuuuuck, I need to learn to write better, and come up with a thing for you guys. damnit!

IT? What the fuck? Dark Age FTL was Warp just like 'modern' FTL, goddamnit.

>>1570209
see
>>1567901

This is awesome. Fuck off stone soup.

>>1570231
You don'[t get much fucking faster than 'instantaneous' fucking fuckballs

>>1570209

Know what, stuff it. This shit is golden who cares if some liberties are taken with the fluff?

"commander- our escorts haven't made it through the warp"

Commander dobbs looked out over his bridge, to the ensign manning the comms

"what do you MEAN they haven't made it through?"

"Well, as soon as we got to the warp signature of this galaxy they just dropped out of communication- they aren't feeding us their status"

Commander dobbs, known throughout his fleet for his quick temper, tapped his armrests impatiently.

"WELL? get scanning! they couldn't have dropped out TOO far away!"

"but sir- we've BEEN scanning. they aren't even within this sector- they're GONE"

A bead of sweat fell from ensign franklin's brow- the captain's armrests began to give under his seething pressure- maintenance officer davis tightened the programming of a cleaningbot- the ship gave a terrible lurch

screens began flashing to life all around the bridge, scanners pinged and warnings flashed.


if this post is a little short, I don't actually know how much text we're allowed in a single post, so I'm being cautious

"what the hell was THAT? STATUS!"

"sir, escort three has just collided with us- we've lost atmo in sections eight through twelve. weapons have been brought to 80%, and the engine's heat is outside safe paramiters"

"Get security to the breach- find out what's going on, and what happened to that escort"

alarms sounded, and a security team was made up to go into the breach- three dozen combat robots and a human expedition leader by the name of jones.

Jones wasn't having a good day by a long shot- he'd been chewed out by two superior officers, once for an unmade bunk, and again because he was caught making his bunk mid-day, which meant he MUST have just woken up, and that his discipline must have been lost during the warp.

he was eating a tray of severely hot soup when the ship gave a menacing lurch, ejecting the contents of the bowl onto and around his face, giving him a face so red even the most infuriated officer couldn't match.

As he was cleaning off, he heard the call over the speaker system- "security, sectors 13-15, report to bulkhead 12 immediately, bring vac-gear"

jones wiped off his face, grabbed the contents of his locker, and set off at a jog towards bulkhead 12.

Identify your series if you aren't OP or else people will get confused.

Upon arriving at his destination, jones was greeted by a team of thirty two iron men, equipped with a wide variety of tools- from a laser cutter to a full medical suite.

Also greeting him was lieutenant Anderson. Anderson explained that jones, being the first human at the disaster area of sufficiently low rank to go into a potentially dangerous area, would be leading the iron men in their rescue and recon.

"uh sir, might I ask a question?" jones queried

"make it fast, the clock's ticking"

"can't we just send the iron men in on their own, sir? they ARE capable"

"If we did that, what would we be paying YOU for? now get in there!"

with a half pat, half shove jones was maneuvered into the semi-airlock between bulkhead 12 and section 12. The iron men marched in after him, and the door was sealed. Jones donned his vac-gear and the airlock started cycling.

Cursing his luck, he shifted his weigh from foot to foot- he never did like the concept of something as simple as a suit protecting him from the hazards of nothingness.

>>1570449
ah. this is my own story, sorry for the confusion. how should I identify it?

fuck, it's thundering, I might not be able to finish this

commander dobbs watched the tactical display- dozens of different views of the same airlock opening. Escort three wasn't hard to miss- in fact, it had completely crushed sections eight through twelve, so it was the only thing available to be missed in the first place.

Another thing that was difficult to miss, however, was the fact that escort three appeared to have pulsating tendrils running up and down its length- and the color of the ship had been changed from a militant grey to something resembling a gaping maw.

The final oddity about this scene was that the maw was not, in fact, painted on but instead rendering the occupants of sections 8 through twelve into small, easily digestible chunks.

>>1570463
why are you posting your story in someone elses thread?

make a new one, that'll clear up confusion

>>1570545
oh, kay. I'll finish it and then post elsewhere.

>>1570463
Either a name or something in the subject field.

>>1570549
How about you just fuck off newfag

>>1570634
uh... what'd I do to piss ya off?

>>1570634
I'd like a reason for fucking off- do you not like my story? feedback would be nice.

>>1570762
OP story > Yours.

We want more OP in this thread, not your crap.

You want to be a writefag? Make your own thread, don't leach off the popularity of others.

>>1570762
just don't post your story in someone elses thread

i for one would also like more of OP's story!

keepalive

OP-Wan Kenobi, you're my only hope.

>>1568607
"We have our guest sedated at the moment but I don't want to keep him under too long."

The captain nodded absently in response to the doctor's conversation, not really paying attention. On the other side of the heavy crystal plate window was the main examination room where a rather ordinary looking human lay. The one on the examination table in the morgue however was a diffrient story.
"Tell me what you found out about the armoured human."

"He'd had some sort of augmentitve gene therapy done of a type I never encountered back in the old days. The brain is the least changed from what I can tell but the psychological trauma that would have been endured to reach that state are enormous. I can't imagine that all humans changed that way would survive the process, even if properly selected."

"And we find yet another abomination." sighed the captain. "We're going to have to come up with a new vocabulary at this rate to describe these things."

>>1571205
Praise be!

>>1571205
"From what I can tell about our still living man in there, he was exposed to the same gene therapy. His body was mostly destroyed, so they placed him inside that war machine. Much of it was filled with old but still somewhat sophisticated life support machinery."

"Why isn't he nine feet tall now?" asked Parek.

"I hadn't checked over the other soldier yet when I began treatment. In scaning his body I mistook the cells that had been mutated by the gene therapy for some sort of cancerous growth. In body he is now the same man he was before being remade into that soldier form. ...but the mind is a diffrient story. We could be nothing but a purpose built killing machine. I'd be cautious about waking him."

"How strong is he?"

"At the moment? Not very strong at all."

"Restrain him. I'm going to call up a pair of soldiers up here. I get the feeling he may respond better to force."

YOUR FICTION ONLY MAKES MY PENIS HARDER

>>1571283
>>1571205
The second you make ANY mention about these spacefags killing the Emperor and joining the Tau, I'll go on auto-sage mode.

Pick your thoughts and choose your words VERY CAREFULLY.

Archive is needed, but only when he's done. Not that halfway job of the 40K Mental Institute...

>>1571342
IT WILL ALWAYS BE ARCHIVED

IN MY HEART

>>1571324
Wait, I thought it was decided in the other thread that the Tau Empire is so damn small they wouldn't have a snowflake's chance in hell of finding it? Especially since they don't even know about it.

>>1571283
Montoya backed away from the restrained human after administering enough medication to wake the man. A tough looking young man took up postion on either side of the examination table.

"Doctor, tilt the table so that he can see." Instructed the captain. The doctor shook his head but did as he'd been asked. After a few seconds the man's eyes flickered open, squinting as if unused to such strong light. An expression of distrust with perhaps a tinge of hatred settled upon the man's face as he took in the room.

"Who are you?" he rasped, still not accustomed to using his real voice.

"I am Parek Serth, Captain of the Starship Sinite. We are descendents of a pair of colony ships that left Earth for a distant galaxy millenia ago."

"The Imperium has never... you..." Dawning realisation lit the man's face. "You left in the dark age of technolgy?!"

"We left at a time when Standard Template Construct warships and weapons were common place. At a time when humanity's future was more than guaranteed it seemed. Obviously we were mistaken."

More importantly, these folks ought to see through that Greater Good nonsense and see the fascist, mind-controlling oligarchy behind it.

Also, to clarify, the Fall of the Eldar is the specific moment that Slaanesh was born and the Eye of Terror opened in m30, which quelled the warp storms that had isolated humanity for the past 5,000 years or so. The time prior to that is known as Old Night or the Age of Strife, where interstellar travel was all but impossible because the warp was so turbulent. The era immediately before that was the Dark Age of Technology.

>>1571283
Hah! Space Marine got cockblocked. I like it.

>>1571375
"We have done away with thinking machines of any kind since the rebellion of the Iron Men or so it is said. If what I saw while I was alive was any indication, we were successful at carrying out the Emperor's Will in that regard across the Empire."

"We suspected that a machine rebellion might have occured, but never suspected that things could have gone this badly. Who is this Emperor?"

The man's face turned bright with rage and he struggled against the restraints for a few breif seconds before giving up. He whispered the word 'Blasphemy' under his breath several times then seemed to calm.

"I am Brother Lavidean Atar, and though you may have stripped my body of the gift of the gene-seed I will always be a Space Marine and servant to the Emperor. You are heritics by definition but I will share some of my knowledge in the hopes that the word of the Emperor may yet convert some of you."

bump

/r/ that the OP writes this all in notepad and just copypastas it all at once.

>>1571560
You guys keep asking for MOAR though.

>>1571567

MOAR!

>>1571567
I would prefer to wait for a day or two and have a whole bunch at once.

>>1571585
We wouldn't.

>>1571586
/tg/ is milking the writefags constantly without letting them build back up. Eventually all you'll get is a poof of nothingness, and then what?

You'll starve a slow death, thats what. fiction-milk is the lifeblood of /tg/, and drawbread is it's food.

should also post this on wikichan or something to save it.

I'm getting it all with print screen.

>>1571599
only the 40k writefags. I sage all the non40k writefags for hours.

>>1571495
Brother Atar chanted his way through yet another littany to the Emperor. As per ususal it contained instructions on various ways of killing those not loyal to the Empire. The whole thing made Parek sick.

If what the Space Marine had told them was true, more than a million human worlds had been under the sway of this dark Empire for ten thousand years. Attacked constantly by alien races, Mutants and Rebels it seemed as if the entire galaxy now knew nothing but war. As for the enemies of mankind, some made even less sense than the current lack of technological invention.

The Eldar, were known of course from the old archives, and could generally be negotiated with under the right circumstances. Others such as the Orcs were not so well documented but entires did exist, mainly taking the form of containment via bio weapons.
Chaos was deeply troubling. Was it truly possible for magical like properties to exist? Telepaths were one thing but this seemed diffrient.

"The Tyranids." Spoke Brother Atar as he resumed his catalogue of aliens races. "We have called them the Great Devourer, for they consume all."

>>1571599

I have a headache, and you talk some pretentious shit.

>>1571745
You have a headache and complain about my writing, yet you're reading a write-fag thread?

This is awesome and the OP is awesome.

Savin' this for future upload.

>>1571762

Your writing wouldn't be complaint-inducing if it weren't pretentious shit. Now stop fagging up the OP's awesome thread.

>>1571655
"Yes! That's it, that must be the race that consumed that entire galaxy of life."

Brother Atar paused. "You have returned to Terra to fight the Tyranid?" Asked the Space Marine with much scepticism."

"Yes." replied Parek without hesitation.

Atar laughed and it seemed a dark and evil thing coming from him. "You and your kind are truly mad, Captain of the Dark times. We have fought the Tyranids before, and a great cost, but have been triumphant. The Imperium will do so again if it must, by the will of the Emperor."

The captain was not amused. "Sinite, how many hive fleets have entered the galaxy so far?"

"Three Captain." came the Ai's voice from an overhead speaker. "We've been taking great efforts to track each hive fleet on our approach."

Atar looked suspiciously at the ceiling, but eventually concluded that the voice had to have belonged to an officer in another room. "Three?" He asked when he realised what the woman had said. "There had only been one so far and signs of a second when I was last awakened."

FUCKING EPIC.

Hey fa/tg/uys, what do you think would be a suficiently GRIMDARK number of Hive Fleets to have approaching our galaxy?

I'm spending way too much time on Lexicanum.

>>1571908

Over 9000.

>>1571908
How many nids to a fleet again?

>>1571918
Billions.

>>1571908
Just one massive fleet. Like the entire fucking race. The hivemind has got to be pissed that it hasn't taken the galaxy yet.

>>1571908
Rather than bother with # of fleets, have them be advance scout fleets, only a tiny fraction sent ahead to 'size up' the state of the new galaxy.

Rather than describe more fleets, i think what would be more interesting is one, massively huge fleet mass that births the other fleets.

an immense mass of constantly reconstituting reshaping, revolving biomass. with returning fleets crashing into it, depositing entire galaxies worth of biomass

Milky Way has over 200 Billion Stars. Most systems are actually dual stars. So if you cut that in half and say there is a hive fleet for every million systems, you still have 100,000 hive fleets.

>>1571908

Well, we want grim-dark, but we also want non-rediculous to keep with your overall theme. Was also want a number that would make it reasonable for these people to think they would be able to help fight them by sending a mere 3 fleets of starships/war material. So... how about something like a dozen?

>>1571950
Well... since they tend to consume things rather quickily, how does ~100 sound? It'd only take a centry or two to consume most of the planets with biomass in the galaxy at that rate.

>>1571971

I still say that seems like a lot for three fleets of ships to expect to make a differance against. 50 sounds better.

Quality content, on MY /tg/?

Heresy.

>>1571989

No *blam*? You fail.

Age for good thread and terrible sage attempt

>>1571971

>>1571655
In volume two of this little tale you might want to make a few changes to this section. I highly suggest that you correct the little spelling error with having to do with the orks, as it brought me to a frothing rage in about .2 seconds.

>>1572026
That sage was done because there is never any good content on /tg/

this sage is because you're a faggot

space marine not related

ANTI-SAGE

>>1572081
gb2/v/

>>1572078
That would be an 'Oops' and

" OOZ DIZ TOLKEEN GIT? "

>>1571987

They thought they were returning to a galaxy with technology equivalent to their own. The fleet that was sent back was just meant to warn the folks back home and give them time to set up a proper defense, not restructure the entire Imperium of Man to have a chance at resisting.

Make the odds close to impossible and force them to take action against the Imperium.

>>1571825

"We are currently tracking upwards of one hundred hive fleets still in the inter-galactic void. It's difficult to get an exact number because of their proximity."

"Emperor Protect." Brother Atar looked downwards. "Very well, you shall require my help if you are to have any chance in convincing the Empire of your intentions. Even then, you may yet make an enemy of the Inquisition."

"What about the other enemies of the Empire?" Asked the Doctor. "If we assisted in their defeat do you think conditions would be allowed to improve for the citizens? Our boarding team found signs of rather sever malnutrition among the dead crew."

"Slave workers most likely, pay them no mind." Said Atar dismissively.
Parek and Montoya exchanged concerned looks.

"Slavery is allowed in the Imperium of Man?" questioned the Captain.

"Of course it is, how else would we get anything done? Most of them are criminals not even deserving of being called heritcs. They pay for their crimes and serve the Empire."

"We have a lot of work ahead of us." said Montoya.

>>1572036

>>1572100
Well, they still probably have more than enough info on STCs to make every admech shit a brick.

even if it's just "HOW 2 MAKE PLASMA GUNS THAT DONT EVER BLOW THE HELL UP"

>>1572102
raaage, this space marine is being reasonable

wheres the blind fanatacism

raaage

Orcs changed to Orks in the save file.

Getting a little stuck on what to write next but i've gotta work tomorrow, so I'll think of something in that endless nothing.

If the thread dies I'll start a new one tomorrow with the last 4 posts or so.

>>1572102

Now taking bets on how they will be fucked over. Mass conversions after they encounter daemons for the first time? Killed by Spess Mahreens for heresy? Ships hijacked and orkified?

>>1572150
Oh shit, did I put in that he was an Ultramarine? I meant the Reasonable Marines.

bump

>>1572154
I love you

just, please, deliver

And I was having a shitty day too, thanks /tg/, this is just too awesome.

>>1572150
>>1572157

Aren't individual Space Marines always like, the only reasonable humans in 40k fiction? Well, them and civilians, but meh.

>>1572157

Ultramarines are some of the more reasonable ones out there, they do have an empire to look out for, after all.

>>1572207

I'd still like to see his thought process on the matter. Something about using these infidel's technology and intel and submitting them to conversion proceedures later.

Just a little something to flesh him out and put a little grimdark nugget in the back of this too happy for 40k chapter ending.

>>1572102
wait don't Ultramarines normally recruit their servants from their empire, and thus have the most loyal and space marine friendly crew members.

also on plot direction...

If you want to go for awesome, go orks.

If you want to go for plot continuity, go with "they got stuck in the warp"

or both thats good too.

>>1572150
Blind Fanaticism depends on the Force. Some are crazy fanatics, some know the true history, and know that the emperor is just some guy, you know?

>>1572273
Chapter I meant. Jeez, completely forgot it for about 5 minutes there.

>>1572273
But the Emperor isn't just some guy... I mean c'mon he's the Emperor!

>>1572202
"A person is smart. People are dumb, panicky, stupid and you know it."

>>1572102
You fail. space marine ships are crewed by loyal bondsmen generally well fed often former aspriants who didn't make the cut but still serve. at least most of the chapters, ultramarines and space wolves 100% confirmed on this.

>>1572271
addendum, chaos orks,

also
>>1572294
They think he's a damn fine stand up guy that is.

Dreadnoughts are the oldest Space Marines, they will know most of the Chapter's secrets and will have fought long enough that they would mellow out some. Space Marines are the least likely to believe the Emperor is a God and Dreadnoughts least among them.

If the disabled ship found was really huge then it would be a Navy ship and not a battle barge. So the SM were just traveling with them for some reason.

>>1572315

This may not have been an Ultramarine ship just because there were Ultramarines on board. It could have been any ship in the Imperial Navy transporting a contingent of Marines. Since theres only one Dreadnaught aboard, this makes even more sense.

>>1572315

But what if it wasn't a SPESS MAHREEN ship?

>>1572343
partially cause some of them remember the guy.

>>1572315
Spess Mahreens on ship does not a Mahreen ship make.

Space Marines believe the emperor is not a god, but an exceptional human being beyond all others, and worthy of their service.

Also, space marine genetic implants include an organ that allows them to enter a state of hibernation that has lasted up to 560 years in some cases, so coming across a crippled space marine ship would yield a large number of marines in hibernation. They need special drugs or hypnotic commands to wake them up normally though, so it's not like they'd all suddenly snap awake and start shooting though...

I can imagine the doctor preforming an autopsy when the marine suddenly sits up, abdomen currently hanging open, and almost going on a rampage.

These numbers are a bit too big. If anything, 5-7 is reasonable considering how much a single fleet can rape.

Maybe they can just be advance scouts or whatever. I personally don't think this should come into conflict with the fluff. Hell, novel writers may have some freedom to do stupid shit in the 40kverse but they can't touch certain shit like the emperor waking up, so nothing major happens.

I think having some effect on a sector at most. Plot wise, they could go through alot of politics with the Imperium. Have a few radicals stay by their side or whatever to keep them from being raped.

Have them see some local tech priests, who'd take whatever scrap they can of STC knowledge and hoard the shit out of it (one big reason why tech is stagnant).

>>1572422
I like this idea, mention it again when the op is awake.

>>1572422
It's possible that the Marines died in boarding actions or something of the like, rather than simply starving/suffocating/whatever.

>>1572431

Remember, these guys have vastly superior technology. Just because they're tracking 100 fleets doesn't mean that many are relatively close. Thats just how many they're picking up on approach to the galaxy. Some will be much closer, others still quite distant.

>>1572422
They also have an organ that lets them spit a highly caustic contact poison that can blind someone or corrode iron.

Actually, I read through the list of implants they get, and it's pretty nuts.

>>1572479
Did you know, space marines do not need sun screen. when bombarded with enough radiation, they simply turn black.

bump

Someone screen cap. The OP is gone so we should either revert to discussing the whole concept and scenario of it or just let this thread die.

Thread's about to hit autosage anyway.

>>1572653

Just archive it for the night, and have the OP read it before it gets deleted.

FUCK yeah! Thanks for posting/writing the rest of the story OP.

yeah, someone should dump this on wikichan.

Very many thanks to the op. Also bonus points for the other writefags.

fuck yes, lazy britfag here. i didn't miss it.

OP is win. he's at least 5 times as good as C.S Goto, and that fucktard is a published author.

His works bring tears to my eyes.... "like pools of ocean"

>>1572154
When the OP writefag returns, someone inform him that Space Marines don't work that way.

A SM would never bend so quickly to information he has no way of checking its validity. Let alone agreeing to help without first consulting his superiors in his own Chapter.

Fuck YEAH!

>>1573854

He''s only interrogatinmg right now. They can check the inforamtion they've been given....after they've got as much as they can get.

Also stop calling it the Empire OP. It's the Imperium, Imperium of Man if you're being formal.

>>1573959
Back in the day it was just the Empire, I believe.

This is awful. I mean shit, this is Star Trek+40K. Goto would be fucking proud.

>>1573968
Not to the Space Marine.

>>1573968
No.

>>1573991
>>1573993
Negativemind.

>>1573987
Isn't it not Gotos' shit plot, but also his shit writing?

bump de bump.
/r/ing more.

>>1571495

I wouldn't think he'd be that pissed. Hell, Space Marines probably find backwater planets full of humans who never heard of the Emperor all the time

>>1573854

A Dreadnought is a SM superior and dudes with technology to reverse his geneseed would get attention.

>>1572105

We will require non-stop mating around the clock in order to pull off the numbers needed for this!

I know I'll do my part!

Great story so far, I can't wait to see how it turns out. Just a few suggestions:

Needs more Tyranids for a proper sense of hopelessness, if they consumed the biomass of an entire galaxy, that's a shitload of matter. A galaxy has hundreds of billions of stars, and likely has billions of worlds to consume (tens of billions if Tyranids aren't just limited to terrestrial worlds). Earth has upwards of a trillion tons of biomass depending on who you ask ( http://answers.google.com/answers/threadview?id=567966 ). That's a lot of Tyranids, although there's always the possibility that they split up when leaving the Survivor's galaxy and the forces headed for the milky way only comprise a small portion of the intergalactic swarm.

The only advantage humans have over Tyranids is brainpower and the ability to manipulate inorganic matter. The Survivors need to start producing lots of weapons and soon, which means they need materials to build with, energy sources to fuel the construction, and people trained to understand and innovate. They'll have to convert the AdMech to proper scientific practices or break their monopoly on technology. Either way there's gonna be people who violently disagree.

What happens to the Ruinous Powers if Tyranids consume all the thinking races? Can Chaos corrupt Tyranids? Does Chaos need humans to exist and thrive? Can factions of the Survivor fleet be convinced that it is in their best interest to team up with daemons to fight the Tyranid menace?

>>1574967

con't

The Survivors need Psykers and Blanks to survive in the 40k universe, they have genetic manipulation technology and sentient machines. Cue ethical concerns, accusations of heresy, pissed off inquisitors, and Alpha+ psyker rogue AIs.

"Burn the Heretic, Kill the Mutant, Purge the Unclean!"
"Wait, we can cure mutants."
"Heretic!"

Necrons are pretty much the only race in 40k that can fight a losing battle against Tyranids without just making them stronger. The Survivors ' AIs need to figure out how to wake up Necron tombs and point them at Tyranid infested worlds. This would be the most efficient way to slow down the spread of the Tyranids until the rest of the galaxy gets its act together, or the Iron Men start to sympathize with the billions of Necrons sacrificed to protect the stupid meatbags.

The Survivors need to build a big giant Iron Man, paint him green and send him to "negotiate" with the Orks. OrkBot40k will be a mean, green, fighting machine, and will go around beating up the biggest and fightingest Orks he can find until all da boyz agree to follow 'im on da holyiest of WAAAAAGHs to foight dem 'umie gitz in da Eye o' Terra. Bonus points if he forgets that he's not a heavily bionik'd ork and goes native.

eurofags aging for the Emperor!

>>1575037
eurofag fail

no content

Where is our writefag?