Rolling chapter up. Will we make a memorable one? Probably not, but I'm fucking bored.You know the drill 1d10
Rolled 6 (1d10)>>65430512Sure, why not.
>>65430543Counter we were made to specifically combat something.d100 for founding.
Rolled 29 (1d100)>>65430571Huh, I wonder what.
>>6543062435th Millennium. 8-10th founding.Gene daddy. 1d100. Ultramarines are reroll.
Rolled 63 (1d100)>>65430657come on Salamanders!
Rolled 19 (1d100)>>65430657Ultras are pretty vanilla, but I think we could do something well with them if we stuck with that whole core concept of the old school ultras, what with the whole macragge-style "Fight the most stubborn fight in existence" kind of tactic.
>>65430672Space vampires.purity 1d10
Rolled 8 (1d10)>>65430693
>>65430684True but they already have a lot of successors>>65430702Altered Stockgib a d10 for the mutation.
Rolled 8 (1d10)>>65430714Something cool
>>65430743Do you guys want a reroll on that.
Rolled 2 (1d10)>>65430765What did it give us? I'll throw out a reroll just in case I guess.
>>65430765I don't, as far as mutation goes having one missing non-critical organ is pretty good. In fact, most SM chapters don't run on full ship
>>65430772It was a lost minor gene-seed like the acid spit or the super sweat. This one is sensitive eyes.Demeanour d10
Rolled 8 (1d10)>>65430803
>>65430797>>65430772So you guys want to keep a lost minor gene. If so vote on it the candidates are. Preomnor, Omophagea, Lyman's Ear, Melanochrome, Neuroglottis, Mucranoid, Betcher's Gland.>>65430811Suffer Not the Work of Heretics. We're on a warpath against heretics.Figure of Legend d100
>>65430852> Betcher's GlandMarines wear helmet all the time, this thing is near useless
>>65430913Rip Xenomorph aliens. And to be fair it's a good tool if you're ever captured.
Rolled 24 (1d100)>>65430949Fair point.>>65430852
Rolled 14 (1d100)>>65430852I think I'm good with Betcher's Gland, but I've the malfunctioning Melanochrome could be cool to give them a distinctive visual.
>>65430986>>65430993Chapter Master he did something cool.Legend d100>>65430993People keep mistaking them for T'au cause of blue skin and it pisses them off.
Rolled 80 (1d100)>>65431041
>>65431145>The hero was lost to his Chapter in a warp accident, yet his descendants have cause to believe he lives still and may one day return to them in glory.Sometime while we were fucking Chaos's shit up our chapter master got launched into the warp. But we believe he lives on kicking Daemon ass.homeworld d100
Rolled 36 (1d100)>>65431211
>>65431235Feral World. Oga boga dudes. We're born and breed clawing and fighting in a backwater world.terrain d100
Rolled 85 (1d100)>>65431293Nice, our feral savagery will make us legendary
>>65431314Dead. We'll rule that as death world. Probably what it means.Also I know it's early to throw out names and stuff. But I say fuck it we should have Chaos be our enemy and call ourselves the Spirits of Vengeance.Rule of homeworld d10
Rolled 1 (1d10)>>65431359Dead worlds usually mean "Their planet is completely barren of life/destroyed". Which could work really well with the whole spirits of vengeance idea. It'd also mean these rolls were how the world was before something happened that forever ruined it.
>>65431416>Bunch of feral worlders living on a dead planet>Living in a labyrinth of underground caverns, full of hazard flora and fauna>The geneseed mutation isn't from the space marine stock, it's a natural mutation of the chapter's human stock due to living underground their entire lives
>>65431416It actually would work really well. Maybe we found the world was being infested by chaos and found it better that it burn than fall. So now we're forever mobile.Direct Rule. We were in charge of the planet completely and our fleet.organisation d10
Rolled 2 (1d10)>>65431474>We have been here since the sun was lost from the sky. Since the winds grew and the night devoured the stars. Since the traitor-men and their monsters came from beyond the second moon and blighted our world. >Deep in the bosom of our ruined world, we hide. Our children grow on tales of the land before, when plants grew outside of rooms, where the stars held our heroes and monsters and the sun shined on the land. >And we hate. >We hate, forever, for what has been taken from us.
>>65431606Codex-adherent... Mostly cause we need that Death Company and Power Chains somehow.Combat doctrine d10
Rolled 2 (1d10)>>65431626
>>65431686Ranged Combat. We hammer them from afar before closing in for the killing blow with Power Chains. (That seems the least like us though. So in trying to preserve what we already I'll leave it up to you guys if we do this or vote for Terror or Shock and Awe.)Chapters' beliefs d100
>>65431776Could make sense, the scouring of the planet could've come or been hastened by charging into melee, being too aggressive on that front. if demons are what made us kill our world, it'd make sense that excessive blood shed would worsen the invasion.But, precise, quick strikes from afar would keep such a mistake from occurring on other worlds. Remove the serpents head before it strangles you
>>65431776Only those worthy of a warrior's death may die to our blades.Few among the heretics, the mutant, and the xenos are worthy of such a glorious death.Purge the unworthy from afar, so we may dance to death with a proper warrior.
Rolled 97 (1d100)>>65431776
>>65431822It could also deal with our particular means of hatred. Perhaps when our world was first attacked, we had a lot of melee encounters that ended with dead warriors to the hands of Chaos, or corrupted because they got in too close to a particular kind of daemon. This eventually evolved into a complete disdain for them. They aren't even worthy of a glorious death in melee. They don't fight with honor, they corrupt and pervert and warp. They deserve nothing less than the most inglorious death we could give them, face down in the mud with an arrow between the eyes, bereft of any hint of glory.
>>65431835This one I like this one.>>65431836Hey what do you know Esoteric Beliefs. Maybe along the lines of "We are the Emperors angels of vengeance. The wicked are unworthy of our might and should be extinguished from afar, but let those of strength be cleansed by the chain."Also metal chapter is metal as fuck.Chapter strength 1d10
>>65431933>>65431898>>65431835>>65431822https://youtu.be/w3bWR_aLlasthe theme that plays when these marines find a worthy foe
Rolled 7 (1d10)>>65431933Lets hope for something that isn't crippling
>>65431998Surprisingly fitting for the chapter.>>65431933A bunch of cave dwelling barbarians who are obsessed with their chainswords, but instead thin the ranks of their enemies with withering long range weaponry, forcing the enemy to come to them if they want to die a warrior's death.I bet they have a serious hatred for cultists of Khorne, and deny them instant melee combat. "No, you want my blood? Come and take it, heretic."
>>65432017Nominal. We're at full strength. Which just means we're ready to kick ass. Also throwing out that we name our Chapter Master Raguel possibly in honor of the former captain of the Blood Angels 7th captain and cause it's the name of the Angel of Vengeance.Chapter friend d100>>65432063Agreed, but when I mean power chains I mean Power Chains. That's to good to pass up.
Rolled 38 (1d100)>>65432063lets hope its freaky. Like the intergalatic house of pancakes
>>65432129We are ALL about that vengeance. Motherfucking cultists STOLE OUR STAR!And Power Chain is a bad ass weapon. Hell, even our melee weapon of choice gives us range. Only the finest of warriors can get through our rain of bolters, and walls of chains. If they actually manage to hit us? Well, that's when you just wrap the chain around your fist, and punch them in the face repeatedly.
>>65432129>>65432063https://youtu.be/pdlAZj5iDc8When the black rage overtakes them or if they just really get "into" melee combats and go wild
>>65432184The Eldar... I guess. Maybe they gave us the proof our CM was still alive. Also these guys Deathwatch company must be terrifying.So here's what we got.Why Was The Chapter Founded?: Counter.When Was The Chapter Founded?: 35th Millennium.Who was the Chapter's Progenitor?: Blood Angels.Gene-seed purity: Altered Stock.Chapter Demeanor: Suffer Not the Work of Heretics.Mutation: No Betcher's gland.Figure of Legend: Chapter Master Raguel.Deeds of Legend: Lost to his Chapter in a warp accident, yet his descendents have cause to believe he lives still and may one day return to them in glory.Chapter homeworld: Feral World.Homeworld Terrain: Dead.Rule of homeworld: Direct.Chapter organisation: Codex-adherent... mostly.Combat doctrine: Ranged for unworthy scum.What form do the Chapters' beliefs take?: Esoteric Beliefs.Chapter Strength: Nominal.Who are your Chapter friendly with?: Eldar.Chapter's enemies?: FUCKING HERETICS!>possible color scheme.Let the fluffing begin.
Now that we got a few basic of what the chapter is like, any potential color schemes you guys would like (try to stick with colors that complement each other) along with the specific pattern for the scheme
>>65432358I think a scheme that reflects the burning of their world, orange and red hues over a black and ashen base or something.Maybe they had a different scheme before their world died, a more vibrant one to draw attention of their foes on the field of battle.
>>65432316Maybe the esoteric beliefs could also tie into a belief of a Ragnarok style end of days, as well as the whole "the unworthy die in a hail of gunfire" thing
>>65432381>>65432358so instead of >>65432316 something more like>
>>65432487this actually works really well along with the last scheme
>>65432316Eldar Farseer: "So, we found... Someone... In the webway. We couldn't get close to them, because they were a whirling ball of glowing red chains."Our Dudes: There is only ONE whirling ball of red hot chains in the Imperium...Farseer: *Abruptly breathless at power armored hug.*Our Dudes: You have done us a great service, knife ear. For this, we shall tolerate your kind, and render aid to you in times of great need.Farseer: I think you broke a rib...Our Dudes: I would have broken your spine, xeno scum, but you did us a favor.>>65432381Molten magma. Black basalt, with glowing red and orange beneath. I am sure some Salamander geneseed got mixed into the bag, because I LOVE the idea of a rite of passage being forging your own power chain, link by link, using magma to heat it. Maybe have a splash of vivid green, as a badge to remember the verdant world they lost.
>>65432316also I say a good fluff idea for why they are allied with the Eldar is that they fought against a Khornate cult together
>>65432316>>65432487So Scheme 1 The Edge or Scheme 2 The Edgening. Or 3 neither.>>65432533>>65432546We're in the middle of fighting a Krone cult and losing when they appear because they've been looking to tell us about some ball of falming chains on a Bike ripping and tearing its way through the warp.
>>65432546Perhaps a particularly cool visual thing that happened during this fight was the farseer turning to see the chapter master, and his flames making him look like Kalea Mensha Khaine, There's something almost... transcendent, about the chapter master, and about the whole spirit of vengeance thing he embodies. Like he represents a concept that echoes across races and across mythologies. What you see in the flame is familiar.
>>65432692>>65432533So something like this.
>>65432698So he's basically starting to become the opposite of the Nightbringer. Instead of imprinting himself as the idea he's starting to become the embodiment of it.>>65432533Aspirants have to pass a series of Trials to become a candidate as a marine.Trial 1: The Aspirant must make their way across the lifeless surface avoiding machines and servitors the Angels of Vengeance put their to kill candidates.Trail 2: ???Trial 3: ???Trial 4: The Aspirant is strapped to a chair and forced to watch the death of their world on repeat and then the deaths of hundreds of other worlds and humans and the hands of chaos.Trial 5: ???When a Neophyte finishes their training they forge their Power Chain.
>>65432939Trial 1: The Aspirant must make their way across the lifeless surface avoiding machines and servitors the Angels of Vengeance put their to kill candidates.Trail 2: Delve into the lightless depths for a time, surviving with nothing but what you craft yourself or salvage from the corpses of other dead aspirants.Trial 3: Honor Duel with a marine. While defeat is inevitable, it's all about not giving up even when the odds are impossible.Trial 4: The Aspirant is strapped to a chair and forced to watch the death of their world on repeat and then the deaths of hundreds of other worlds and humans and the hands of chaos.Trial 5: A second trek through the blighted wasteland of the surface, with a quest to recover an untainted relic to return to the chapter.
>>65433134Such relics can even be small leftovers from the time when the surface held life. Such as a spear of petrified wood from an ancient tribe. (Don't want to make it impossible.)
Welp I'm going to sleep. Please don't die thread.
>>65433225perhaps any potential war gear such as recovering a battle tank and the chapter has a tradition were legendary figures become noticeable when they find an actual chapter relic
The firebearers, otherwise known as the Inferno Unchained.
>>65435908I think the brazen chains sound better, or maybe the Ashen chains
>>65436543>The Sanguine/Bloody Chains>The Chained Angels>The Avenging Angels>The Brazen Angels
>>65430852Why not roll which organ is missing?
Rolled 7 (1d7)>>65436905
Born in tunnels and caves, accustomed to cramped conditions, few escape routes, and navigating by nothing but the light in their souls. These Marines have made a name for themselves in a combat location few chapters would claim as their specialty. The hives of the Imperium itself. Crawling through sewers, scouring Hab-Blocks, searching out the mutant, the witch, and their greatest foe, the heretic. Within the centuries old halls, buried deep within the towering hives or massive manufactorums is where these warriors stalk their prey. For it is here that the greatest of heretics flee, their home, their nest... and where their taint can be cleansed most completely.Massed charges, artillery strikes, guerilla tactics, none of these can be relied upon when you fight between wall after wall of residences, streets, pipes, and access ways in such incredible disrepair that to plot a map through it is an impossibility for most, but not these natives to the caves. Be it natural stone channels or mechanicus crafted rock-crete habitation containers, they chart their course or make new ones. Turning the limitations of mobility against their foes in kind. Flamers, grenade launchers, storm bolters, and all manner of armor piecing rounds mean hiding behind a fortified wall is of little concern to these marines. For what better time to lay down a volley of holy bolter rounds, than when your enemies are trapped in a mag-train tunnel with you.You've nowhere left to hide heretics. The angels of death come for you in your homes, to make you repent for your sins.
>>65436576>>65436543>>65435908So far for good name choices is>Spirits of Vengeance>Ashen Chains>Avenging Angels>Brazen Chains>>65437214That's fucking sweet. You make that?
>>65436930Brutal.>>65437214Needs smoldering coals in the eyes.>>65437604I like Ashen Chains.
>>65432803>>65432487>>65432316Also don't forget we need a color scheme.
>>65437604>That's fucking sweet. You make that?Thanks. I got a skull logo online, recoloured it to bronze and replaced the BA blood-drop with it, after I added the bronze gradient to the wings ("Brazen Angels" or whatever)>>65437947I'll put that in now.
>>65437993I like >>65432803 for the colors.>>65433225>>65435114A relic is a relic. Even a simple dinner platter, or a candle stick, or an undamaged piece of cloth. All of them hold immense value, as each reminds the chapter of a time before the world was rendered lifeless and cold.
>>65436930I like this.I also think that cqc speciality makes a lot more sense than the long-range firepower thing, given their origins in cramped tunnels and caverns. The whole "only some people deserve the honor of melee combat" just seems like a bit of a reach, to be honest.
>>65438138So that means I think most people are settled on >>65432803 for color scheme.We also need to determine the name of our homeworld and what happened to it.
>>65438265(Ashen Chains is nice, but there are already a few "Ashen" chapters.)
>>65438265>>65438257>>65436930I like the thought that we're devoted more to cleaning up hives of scum. Could be why we specialize in range cause trying to whip around a power chain is more difficult in such close conditions, but when we can get into the open they're good for just annihilating waves of heretics.Seems like the name will be Brazen Chains.
>>65438305>>65436930Shotgun speciality, perhaps?
>>65438322Sure Astartes Assault Shotgun are a thing. So Storm bolters for longish range. Shotguns for mid, and chains for close.
Heraldry V2, now with fire in its eye-sockets
>>65438743I was thinking more "two small burning motes in the empty sockets, forever burning in anger" not "My eyes, they burn!"
>>65438305Brass Chains. To mock the very cultists they so loathe (Brass is one of Khorne's sacred metals)
>>65438803>>65438743>>65437214 Looks fine. Besides we don't want to make it to complicated.
>>65438837One of the definitions of Brazen is "made of brass".
>>65430512Things we've got done.-There preferred style of fighting and terrain. Close quarter urban.-Trials an aspirant must go through.-Color Scheme >>65432803-Heraldry. >>65437214-Where there aspirants come from.-Chapter name: Brazen Chains-Why we're tolerant of the EldarStuff we need to do.-Homeworld name.-Why our homeworld is a shithole.-Why'd our CM get dragged into the warp.-General writefaggory.-Notable events.-Deathwatch Crunch.-History through the millenniums.-What're they doing now.>Also possible terminator scheme
>>65439121If they're gonna be "brazen", I think it would make sense to have a brassy/metallic color somewhere - perhaps on the pauldrons?
>>65439155Well Brazen can also mean bearing a mark of shame. The green skulls on our armor are a mark of our failure to protect our home. (This is also already a really busy color scheme.)>>65439121We also need to fluff out our Death Company.
>>65439155(Or the fist?)
>>65439223Hm. I honestly don't think the green works too well - it seems discordant with the other colors. Brass on the skulls would be a little more fitting.
Putting this forward for deathwatch crunch.Characteristic Modifiers+5 Ballistic Skill and +5 WillpowerOrganisationCodex ChapterSolo Mode AbilitiesQuick reaction is the hallmark of this Chapter. While in Solo Mode, the Battle-Brother is considered to have the Lightning Reflexes Talent. At Rank 3, the Battle-Brother receives a +10 to all Dodge tests. At Rank 5, the Battle-Brother is considered to have the Rapid Reaction Talent. At Rank 7, once per game session the Battle-Brother may automatically pass any one Agility-Based test (for Opposed Tests, the Battle-Brother is considered to have rolled a 01).Squad Attack PatternsOath of Vengeance Action: Free Action, Cost: 1, Sustained: No. When any member of the Kill-Team suffers Damage, the character receives a +4 bonus to Damage rolls against the attacker. At Rank 5, this ability may be Sustained.Squad Defense PatternsOnly in Death... Action: Free Action, Cost: 3, Sustained: Yes. Space Marines from this Chapter are venerated amongst the Imperium for their ability to fight on through even the most grievous wounds. While this ability is active, the Battle-Brother and any within Support Range of him ignore the effects of any critical damage that would not kill them until this ability is no longer active. Once this ability ends, they suffer the full effects of any critical damage they received. This ability cannot be improved.Chapter Advance TableNo Respite For The Enemy.
>>65439323>>65439337Nice. Though maybe replacing the red with brass as well would be even better?
>>65439669Again, I think that melee/weapon skill is more fitting. I just can't see them as a long-range chapter.
>>65439323>>65439337Maybe replace the white with brass, and make the aquila+skull darker.
>>65439223Maybe we bind the death company with their old chains?
>>65439702Aright how bout +5 Weapon Skill and +5 Willpower.They're renowned for range because that's what they're normally forced to use in close quarters, but they prefer their chains and melee.>>65439685>Chapter Master Raguel
>>65439748Yes and yes.
>>65439733I like that.>>65439748Also, beautiful.
>>65439786Oh, that's nice.
>>65439748I personally like this one myself.
A third attempt at the heraldry. I added two dots and made the sockets more even.
>>65439121>Homeworld name.Orichalcum? It's Latin for brass. Nice name, I think.>Why our homeworld is a shithole.Someone suggested daemons early on. I think that full-on daemonic invasion right from the get-go is a bit boring.War in general seems like the likeliest possibility, given it's 40k. Perhaps the depredations of a Chaos ritual + extended conflict with Chaos cultists + a few summoned daemons, possibly over a very long time? Perhaps the chapter was gone (on crusade or something), and it was destroyed over decades while they were gone. Perhaps the Chapter Master was overcome with grief and all-consuming rage upon seeing the barren husk of the world, and charged headlong into a Chaos portal after slaughtering the cultists who summoned it.
>>65440084Perhaps it should incorporate the chain motif as well? The skull wrapped in chain, perhaps? The wings seem superfluous, given they're an underground/urban/close quarters chapter.
>>65440155(Same anon) Or possibly the Chapter Master chained himself to some chaos artefact or vehicle and was dragged into the warp, vowing not to break the chains until adequate vengeance had been wrung from those who killed his world (a very long time, possibly forever; time's fluid as molten brass in the ghastly forge of the Warp). Over centuries in the Warp, the artefact wore away, and only the chains remain.
>>65440192Well the wings kinda make sense because they're BA successors.>>65440253They weren't able to stop the summoning of a blood thirster in time but the Librarians were able to bind the Daemon to the CM's bike.
>>65440192>>65440313Chains are beyond my ability to shoop in and I can't draw for shit, but maybe put chains on the wings? Either hanging on or binding them.
Guys I really think >>65437214 is fine. It gets our point across, it nods to our parent chapter, and is still easy enough to draw on a mini.>>65440344Thank you for your hard work shop anon.
Anyone got an idea for our warcry.
>>65440589Yo I actually really like that. I wonder though if it'd be possible to add some folded wings like > but in a simpler style.
>>65433134>>65432939Now that I think about it that kind of a fucked up 1st and 5th trial. Oh yeah all you have to do is make your way around... while being hunted by murder bots.Probably gets them use to close quarters areas cause they can't walk across the desolate surface without being seen for miles.
So, what exactly would be the best way to represent chain whips on the tabletop? I'm drawing a blank here, asides from just bog-standard chainswords, rules-wise.
>>65441594I'd say maybe power swords.
>>65441933The more I think about it, the more I'm liking power mauls as the weapon of choice to represent a chain blade. It might not be the most optimal weapon to stick on marines in the game, but for a swinging whip made out of chains, I can only imagine these things would be a real rape blender for GEQs, while overall lacking the punch to get through power armor as well as more traditional weapons.
>>65442320True.Also we need to figure out what the planet was like before it went devoured.What we seem to have so far.We're made to fight heretics. Sometime in the [Error] millennium we were called away on crusade. While we were away a Khorne cult attacked our home, though the people fought they were ultimately losing. About a decade later we return to find the planet swarming with cultist and the sun practically covered with a warp storm.We show up as the head cultist are about to summon a greater Daemon and make the world into a Daemon planet. We don't stop it completely but weaken the daemon enough to seal it, Chapter Master Raguel volunteers his bike. To stop the Daemons from pouring out he mounts his bike and flies into the portal to buy the Librarians time.As for why the world is dead maybe the warp storm covering the sun never went away. So now it's permanently night with little sunlight and the surface a barren moon like surface with the frozen and petrified remains of what once was.
>To stop the Daemons from pouring out he mounts his bike and flies into the portal to buy the Librarians time.He's gotta chain himself to it. That's too fitting (and gonzo) to pass up.
>>65442493Also, I think Slaanesh would be more interesting than Khorne. I'm thinking the world was fairly paradisaical (hence Slaanesh - themes of paradise being unsustainable and comfort destructive). Plus, animosity with Slaanesh would help explain their friendliness with the Eldar.
>>65442602Meant to reply to >>65442602.
>>65442602Meant to reply to >>65442493(dammit)
>>65442709We've already developed their hatred of Khorne enough that their color scheme is established along those lines. I don't much like the idea of revising which chaos cult they most despise this late into the process.Besides, it wouldn't make that much sense for Marines to recruit from a pleasure world, would it?
>>65430512>filename isn't "magnus the rad"I am disappoint
>>65442602>>65443005Alternatively, having Doombreed bound into a slavering berserker's bike while he rips and tears his way through the webway for all eternity is pretty fucking lit.I still say we keep the Khornate rivalry.
>>65442493A suggestion for the planet's earlier climate: a very wet world with extensive shallow seas covering much of it, combined with volatile plate tectonics. Most of the inhabited regions were massive mountain chains that jutted forth from the seas, lashed from all sides by the tsunamis and storms provoked by the deep-sea volcanism and earthquakes that pushed the plates together in the first place.The seas are now sealed over by massive ice sheets, which hide the seething tides of corrupted life below the waters, where horrendous sea serpents and beasts even more unnatural tear each other apart and reproduce in an endless orgy of violence, and the former fishers of the world now live in massive, mined-out vaults within the mountains, forever pulling toxic metals out of the ground to feed the imperial war complex and wondering when they will dig too deep and too far, and unleash a flood of freezing water and burning hatred into their homes.
>>65443278FUCKI obviously need to get to sleep. I can't believe I wrote that botched abortion of a run-on sentence.
>>65443278I like it.>We've already developed their hatred of Khorne enough that their color scheme is established along those lines. I mean, the Brass thing was around before anyone connected it to Khorne. Other than that, it hasn't really been developed at all. I do think that Slaanesh is appropriate.>Besides, it wouldn't make that much sense for Marines to recruit from a pleasure world, would it?Not necessarily a pleasure world, but pleasant. Verdant and of great natural beauty.
>>65443278I like them having gone from feral world Tribes and Clans to living in these preservation vaults set up by the forces that tried to help the world, or perhaps from their past but rediscovered them in the fighting. Now the vaults are actually mostly clean and nice places to live, but can be busy like a forge world and dangerous due to all the mining. If you want to go to another you have to take sealed underground tunnels that are pressurized (nobody takes the surface except aspirants). Each one is assigned a guardian who oversees the vault and reports its condition to the Brazen Chains.
>>65443314Oh, don't be so hard on yourself. The description is rad.
>>65443545>feral world Tribes and ClansThat would explain why a fairly "nice" world is a recruiting world - fierce martial culture.
>>65440589So we going with this for our heraldry?Also someone please give me a decent warcry.
>>65443630"Bound by chains, freed by fury."
>>65443630>warcry"Brass and iron!""Brass and blood!"
>>65443314It needed some semicolons.
>>65443685That one's good, if a bit long.
>>65443690Or "blood and brass", that flows a bit better.
>>65443730>blood and brass>hates SlaaneshHa.
I mean full slaughter and invasion is more Khornes thing, why would they go full invasion instead of Slaanesh.
>>654442485/10 Blue is a color of piece brass and red are rage and vengeance.
>>65444294It's the power maul guy, back from a power nap. So, to summarize what we've got so far:>comfy water world called Orichalcum with severe weather but abundant food, natives were aggressive barbarians that fought each other a lot>Slaaneshi cults were a problem, and corrupted a large part of the planet while the Marines were all out on crusade or something>they are unable to save the planet from the chaos cults, and end up causing the surface to die>current denizens are miners who live in pressurized chambers inside their former mountain homes, and the Marines are bitter, jaded assholes with some conderningly Khornate motifs that refuse their Slaaneshi foes the honor of dying like a real warrior in melee>they're on surprisingly easy terms with the Eldar, since a Farseer let them know that their old Chapter Master is still alive, raising hell in the Webway on his demonically possessed bike 24/7I'm thinking there's a quest to recover their Chapter Master and permanently seal away the demon on the bike, and that some of their number work alongside the Eldar in this endeavor. The Eldar see the beginnings of Khorne corruption in their ranks, and are deliberating on whether to betray the chapter and have their entire host snuffed out by the greater Imperium, slowly weed out and assassinate the corrupted, or warn the heads of the chapter with a strong leaning towards the middle option, followed by the first if they get caught in the act.As for how the Slaaneshi cult got it's hooks into Orichalcum, does anyone else have a suggestion for that?
>>65445207>As for how the Slaaneshi cult got it's hooks into Orichalcum, does anyone else have a suggestion for that?Government officials had one too many sex parties and started worshiping Slaanesh
>>65445305I mean sure, but how did it expand into the larger population?
>>65445207>As for how the Slaaneshi cult got it's hooks into Orichalcum, does anyone else have a suggestion for that?The tribes grew too fond of the fruits of the land, and its bounty tempted them into loucheness and hedonism. They began to think thoughts of things more delightful than war, and the Dark Prince smiled upon them.
>>65445305We're the government officials it's a tribal feral world we rule.
>>65445613perhaps the marine took over after the last government was corrupted
>>65445608At first, it was unconscious - but slowly, through the traditional wines and psychedelics of the tribes, through their feasts on the fat of the land and the pleasures of the festival, corruption poisoned them. Their worship of the Emperor-Spirit shifted, thought by thought and prayer by prayer, to the worship of something more tender and more cruel, and, in the end, She Who thirsts drank their whole world.
>>65445734It's a feral world, though. It has tribes and chieftains. There is no planetary government as such.
>>65445207>>65445608>>65445738Some chance events played a part in the tragedy, too. A few psykers escaped the Black Ships, a few of the more upright chieftains died before their time. Such a pity. If only the Brazen Chains had been there, to make sure things were done right! But that's a guilt they'll just have to live with...
Five Trials [1/2]First the aspirant must leave their sealed underground communities and make their way across the surface to the fortress monastery. Unfortunately for most aspirants the surface is prowled by servitors programmed to try and kill would-be Aspirants. To traverse the barren surface safely many must rely on tight passages and maze like shallow tunnels and crevasses to safely reach their destination.Once the Aspirant has made it to the fortress monastery they are fed and given one nights rest as congratulations. The next morning they're stripped of everything and sent into a labyrinth of tunnels beneath the monastery where they must survive three months with only what they can find and craft. Many have perished at the appendages of the ancient warp touched creatures that lurk in these tunnels.If the Aspirant still lives they will be retrieved after the allotted three months. They will be given another nights rest and on the next morning they will be thrown into an arena with nothing but a combat knife. There opponent is an experienced marine of the chapter. Such a fight is of course impossible, but it is not about winning. The true purpose of this trial is to find the fight in the aspirant. If they submit or forfeit than they do not have what it takes to be a true brother. But if they fight, claw, and bite till the last moment refuses to submit than they may have what it takes.For their fourth trial the Aspirant will be dragged into a sealed chamber and then be strapped to a chair. They'll be forced to watch for a continuous month the death of Orichalcum and hundreds of other worlds at the hand of Chaos. This is to embed in them the hate of Chaos so prevalent in the chapter. Once they're driven to animalistic rage they're released and their hatred of Chaos is nurtured, here they will learn their mission as the Emperor's angels of vengeance.
>>65446990[2/2]For their fifth and final trial they must once again traverse the barren surface to recover an ancient piece of the planets history. Such items range from weapons, clothes, lost locations, and artifacts from the planets primal human past. To return with a great relic of the planets history is believed to herald the future of a legendary figure in the chapter. Those who do this are watched with great interest.Also I'm going to put together a 1d4chan page to keep track of this mess.
>>65446990>>65447012Hey Chapter Master, I've put together some rules to represent you as a special character in narrative games.Captain on Bike base template:>Chapter Tactic: Red Thirst, +1 to wound rolls after charging, getting charged or a heroic intervention (obviously)>Warlord Trait: Selfless Valour, can make heroic interventions from 6" instead of 3" (so the self-sacrificing glory hound can hound glory through self sacrifice)>swaps master-crafted boltgun for power sword, swaps chainsword for storm shield; final price 112 points>swaps power sword for Archangel's Shard artifact, gets 1d3 wounds vs. <MONSTERS> & 1d6 wounds vs. DEAMON MONSTERS (maximum rip & tear against big-ass daemons)Additional abilities for a Legendary Hero (3 total):>Inspirational Fighter, Blood Angels can reroll 1's to hit within 6" (gives him the standard Chapter Master rule)>Icon of Retribution, Blood Angels in 6" can roll to inflict a mortal wound on enemies that kill them on a 5+ (makes sense for a bunch of vengeful nutters to get even more vengeful and nutty around their chained-up biker-king)>Impetuous, can re-roll failed charge rolls (because someone who'll chain themselves to a demon bike & ride into hell on it is definitely impetuous, & because we gotta go fast)Overall, a choppy dude in his own right that makes his allies into a nightmarish rape blender of death when he gets into close combat with them - and he's twice as good at getting into close combat as your average hero is.
I have an idea for the current climate of the Orichalcum. What if the dead planet... wasn't actually dead? On the surface, things might be an eternal nuclear winter under a dim & dying star, but beneath the frozen-over seas, you have continued volcanism & superheated vents to generate heat and energy. Perhaps life evolved in the depths of this world, rather than on the surface, and most of the biosphere still persists in the lightless depths?
>>65448582That what I was thinking, some even lives in the tunnels. But its all been touched by the warp in some way.>also updated terminator
>>65448637Must really suck to live on a world with a flourishing biosphere that you can't interact with for fear of your soul getting eaten.I bet the Inquisition fucking hates us.
https://1d4chan.org/wiki/Brazen_ChainsHere. If we want to edit something say so and I'll do it so we don't have 50 people fighting over edits.This is basically what we've got grounded so far.
>>65448989beautiful I think we need some dreads or death company boys added into the lore
>>65448989Beautiful updating now.
>>65449052Maybe someone who was wounded in the Crusade and had to be interned in a dread.
>>65448793Seeing all that written down in one place has given me some ideas for new bits of lore, and I've revised the pre-destruction section to reflect them. To summarize:>the black ship crashed because some psykers escaped while they were about to load more on, and proceeded to corrupt the local religion into serving their dark master, Slaanesh>the keeper of secrets was actually the daemon prince Doombreed, and the bike was the only thing the space marines could bind him to, on account of his resonance to things that go FASTIf you don't object to any of this, I'd like to trade that whole section out for the following:Never mind, that's too much text for this post. See below for my potential edit.
>>65449385Orichalcum was a savage feral world of vast shallow oceans and soaring, jungle-covered mountain chains. It had no central government beyond the Brazen Chains, who sometimes served as mediators and negotiators between warring clans and tribes. Sometime in the 37th millennium, the entire chapter was called away on a crusade. During this time, one of the dreaded black ships of the Adeptus Astra Telepathica crashed into one of the mountain peaks of the world. The surviving psykers were taken in by some of the tribes, who considered them to be sent by the God-Emperor himself during a time of severe tribal warfare, which had claimed the lives of most who were wise enough to rule without the Brazen Chains’ assistance. Unfortunately for Orichalcum, it was not the God-Emperor who had led the black ship to their homeworld, but the Prince of Pleasure; a few of the psykers on board the vessel had been corrupted by Slaanesh during the journey, whose promises of comfort and rapture were truly tempting within the prison holds of the black ship. These were the saboteurs who had caused the crash, and they were the natural leaders who stepped forward to lead the Orichalci.After a decade of crusading the chapter returned to find their world almost completely enthralled by chaos. A massive warp storm had begun to envelop the sun, all but the most isolated and independent of the tribesmen had been converted to the supposed “True Emperor of Unity” and the former prisoners of the black ship were nearly finished summoning a daemon prince of Slaanesh. The chapter master and the first company were able to slaughter the cultists behind the summoning, but found that they could neither slow nor stop the emerging daemon. In a final act of valor, Chapter Master Raguel had the Librarians bind the daemon to his bike, which he then bound himself to with chains of sanctified metal.
>>65449397 He then rode the shrieking, daemonic motorcycle into the opening portal to stop anything else from getting through, buying the Librarians enough time to seal it shut.Fuck, mate. 2000 characters catches up to you quick.
>>65449443>>65449397>>65449385We should keep Doombreed out as we shouldn't throw in canon characters as such a major part cause that seems a little Mary sue. But I like the rest.
>>65449520Got it, and thanks. Edit out anything I may have mentioned about him in the text.
>>65448989Someone, get this man a purity seal!
>>65449397>>65449385To clarify, when I mentioned>Some chance events played a part in the tragedy, too. A few psykers escaped the Black Ships, a few of the more upright chieftains died before their time. Such a pity. If only the Brazen Chains had been there, to make sure things were done right! But that's a guilt they'll just have to live with...I meant that home-grown psykers had managed to avoid the Black Ships, not that offworld psykers got off of a crashed ship or something. I think it's a lot better if the corruption of the planet comes from within.
>>65449732Well if they're home-grown then the feral worlders wouldn't have much reason to trust them cause they knew the danger. Besides I imagine what ever Psykers there were would be recruited and there wouldn't be enough left over to cause such wide spread carnage let alone summon a greater daemon.
>>65449732Ah. The 1d4Chan page said that there was a crashed black ship, so I went with it.I'm personally a big fan of the prophets from beyond the stars being a bunch of sick fucks that specifically came there to ruin everything, but I'm pretty obviously biased on that matter.
Wait a secondWhat does the chapter monastery look like? Because I suggest it look like The Last Redoubt but with guns and shit.
>>65450110I was thinking a giant Chapel like pic related but built into a mountain with massive anti orbital cannons and defensive fortifications.
>>65450194Meet in the middle?
>>65450110Holy shit, yes. I fucking love the concept of the Nightland. I have no idea how I didn't see any parallels before this.
>>65450257Alright >>65450310also what's nightland
>>65450363The Night Land is a horror/love story written by William Hope Hodgson, in which the Earth (and the rest of the universe) is dead and nearly lifeless, what's left of humanity is in two giant pyramids that expand far into the dead earth, going outside a Redoubt means your soul getting raped to destruction and despite it all, one man seeks to save the love of his life. And does, surprisingly.
>>65450363It's the most autistic book ever written, and it's also a fascinating read about a hero travelling across a dying world to save his reincarnated love from true death in the darkness. It takes place millions of years in the future, when the sun has been extinguished for countless generations & all of mankind lives in one of two superstructures called the redoubts. Outside of the redoubt are naught but bizarre abominations and eldritch horrors that wait for the earth current to fail, and the last light to go out in the redoubts. Once this finally happens, humanity is doomed.However, there is a force for good in the universe called the earth current. It's both the geological heat that sustains what little life remains outside/powers the redoubts & the entity that directly intervenes two or three times to protect the protagonist.Overall, the original book is a slog to get through, but it's an unparalleled work of imagination. The Revised Nightland is definitely worth a read.
>>65450363If the chapter believes that the chapter master is still alive, would they still appoint a new one? Or would they have some kind of council of captains that make decisions?
>>65450511I fully belive WHH just wanted to write about his waifu.
>>65450571There's an honorary position that acts like it probably. Something like the Herald of Raguel.>>65450451>>65450511Cool thinks I'll check it out.
>>65450606Hope you like it.
>>65450606If I recall he was one of Lovecrafts inspirations, I've not read it yet, but it's on my list
How did they handle the Primaris? I mean I don't think they'd really care as long as they helped kill heretics.
>>65430512For those interested I'm gonna be dropping a Sisters of Battle Creation Thread soon. Nuns with guns in about 15
>>65451240I think they'd distrust them a lot. They don't share the group's emotional ties to Orichalcum, and they'd likely be rather upset about the friendliness* with the Eldar.
>>65451506We're friendly with the Eldar. So are Primaris because of the alliance, Primaris tend to be more tolerant to Eldar at least.
>>65451543'Spose I hadn't considered that.
I've got to sleep please don't die thread.
If it does will pick off next Friday. I'm to busy this week and need to visit family on the weekend.
>>65450110Love it.I'll revise some of the Chaos/fall of Orichalcum stuff tomorrow.
May also try to flesh out the "esoteric beliefs".
Also probably copy-edit that wiki entry.
Additional Writefaggotry:"Frozen seas and barren mountains are all that greet a visitor to the shrouded world of Orichalcum, forever silent beneath the world's lightless sun. But just beneath the lifeless surface, the oceans and caves of the world yet teem with life. Horrific beasts dwell in the deeps, fed by the constant heat of the planet's volcanoes and fueled by the contaminating miasma of chaos. Lurching mutants scrounge for fungus and vermin in the deepest mines and caves of the mountains. And in great, winding vaults in the mountains themselves, the surviving humans of the world stew in their own squalor and misery, constantly working to pull valuable metals out of the world they destroyed in service to the Imperium they failed.""Generations ago, these people were fishermen and hunters who traveled the world in great ships and on the backs of great domesticated beasts, but those days are long since gone. Now they toil in the depth of Orichalcum's mines, passing stories of a better time from parent to child. Many men and women endeavor to join the world Planetary Defense Force, in the hopes that they will get a tour of duty upon one of the great submarines that prowl the depths of the ocean, or a tour of duty upon one of the system's patrol vessels, although doing so accomplishes little beyond trading one sealed cage for another. For the truly brave, one may journey to the Brazen Redoubt, a great pyramid of adamantium that juts forth from a lonely mountain chain in the great frozen wastes of Kunakra.""For such travelers, the way is deadly beyond anything they will have faced before. The air is cold and thin, and there is no food or shelter to be found. Some may have to travel by submarine or by tunnel, and these environmental threats are merely put off in favor of some other danger; whether savage mutants or ship-eating behemoths, neither option proves much more hospitable to the pilgrims of Kunakra."
>>65452754"When one reaches the great mountains in Kunakra, they find that great, ruined cities and towering cliffs block their way, with only a searing light from behind and beyond these towering obstacles to guide them towards their final destination. Within these cities, nightmarish war machines still dwell - some are long-forgotten daemon engines, some are imperial tanks with maddened machine spirits, and others still are vicious servitors left by the warriors of the Redoubt themselves. All must be circumvented by those hopefuls who have made it this far, and in truth, they are arguably easier to avoid than some of the challenges that the aspirants will have faced already. So long as one has the courage to travel alone, and to stick to the narrow confines of the tunnels and back alleys in the broken cities and mountains, they will likely find their way to the Redoubt.""All those who reach the Redoubt are given lodging and medical care, and are promised a role in service to the great warriors of the pyramid as reward for having the courage to undertake the perilous journey here. But for a select few men, a greater destiny awaits: those youths who show the greatest promise are given the choice of joining the Brazen Chains themselves, to face the galaxy as their long-dead ancestors once faced the cruel seas and stifling jungles of their world, to walk among the protectors of man as equals, as brothers. Few of the candidates have ever turned down such an offer; they would not have been offered such an honor if they did not possess the will and drive to pursue such a life."
...A thought comes to mind. Nobody has expanded on the threat this chapter was founded to counter. The Eldar allies are up in the air, as well.I got nothing, just wanted to remind everyone/bump the thread.
>>65454376I suggest they be founded to deal with a minor xenos that nobody's seen in a few millennia. It's implausible to assume they were founded to deal with chaos, when their rivalry is hinged on something that didn't happen until several millennia into their chapter's lifespan, and having an existing threat be their reason for existing would give them too many things to focus on. Keep it down to one main antagonist, I say.
>>65454492Also, hitting the hay. I'd say goodnight, but everyone else besides a single Anon went to bed ages ago.