First Thread: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/27693404/Second Thread: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/27726570/Third Thread: http://suptg.thisisnotatrueending.com/archive/27759119/Pastebin: http://pastebin.com/QXuSBgGpDear Journal,That day we began preparation for what Aimée insists on calling "The Great Palace Raid." I have begun to suspect that the poor girl may have some disconnect with reality. She seems to believe on some level that she is living in a fairytale or a bardic epic. I found her chain shirt. It was tucked neatly away in her pack and looks almost like new. I say almost like new, because while it was apparently never actually worn, there was an aborted effort to cut the shirt to display the wearer's midriff. I suspect that when this attempt failed, Aimèe switched to wearing the leathers I have frequently seen her in. I tried to speak to her about this decision, but she simply laughed and said that if she was injured she would be healed by Martina anyways. I need to speak to her soon before she gets herself seriously hurt, or even killed. She’s a sweet girl and I can’t shake the sense that if anything happens to her, it will be my fault.
>>27796924Unfortunately when Aimée returned from running errands (she is the one best suited for remaining unnoticed), I was distracted from my impending lecture by the news pamphlets she brought back. The headlines on these ones read, “CAPTAIN RINA VOWS TO HUNT FOR BRIGAND RAIDERS!” The illustration on the front was clearly of Mr. Aldric promoting the Guardswoman to the rank of Captain. The article went on to say that Captain Rina personally vowed to “hunt those scum down wherever they may hide and put them down.” It was official, there was a manhunt for us now. It would be harder to move about the city unnoticed after this.On an unrelated note, I should really do something nice for the girls. When I was stuck in jail, they really pulled themselves together and got me out of there. I know what they want… but I don’t think I can give it to any one of them without the other three getting mad. So I’ll have to think up something else in the meantime. It will have to be somewhere secluded, after all we’re still wanted men and women, but still classy enough to be considered nice and rewarding. Hmmm… what to do?
KotR is back, all is well with the world.
And... I just realized I'm an idiot for starting this now, I need to go work for an hour or so. In the interim post questions and comments and other stuff as you will. I'll be back to continue the story soon.I've decided to take an annon's idea from an earlier thread and set up a twitter account to post my writing schedule on. I'll get that dealt with when I get back too.On an unrelated note, does anyone know anything about this Nanowrimo thing?
>>27796955My apologies for the delay.
>>27797099Was never upset, sir knight, just glad to have you back.
>>27796995NaNoWriMo - NAtional NOvel WRIting MOnth. Basically, you have the month of november, starting on the first and ending on the thirtieth, to write a novel. 50,000 words, or more. No drafts. No editing over and over. No extensive checking. Just WRITE. There are literally no other rules, apart from not overtly plagiarising other works. No plot? No problem! Just WRITE. At a loss? NINJAS! If nothing else, you can get a good one thousand words out of the characters pointing out how completely absurd their situation is!On another note: Captain Rina may be grief-stricken, but she's still clever (I hope). Surely she'd be able to see how fishy this whole thing is and how strange it'd be that her father was (supposedly) killed by the people he'd shown dignity, honour and kindness towards? If I recall, she directly witnessed some of that and how Sir Knight held no ill-will towards HIM, as much as Adric!
>>27797099No apologies needed, Sir Knight.Been keeping an eye out for your return.Nanowrimo, National Novel Writing Month.Basic idea being to try and hammer out a full novel during November.
>>27796924On another note: If Aimée insists on dressing impractically, coupled with her show-off nature, all of /tg/ is going to insist she take a near-mortal wound for it, at LEAST. She may be lucky, but she can only push that luck so far. Everyone else is taking their quest seriously, while she treats it almost like a game. I, for one, am going to ENJOY seeing her be forced to grow up. Even Felicita is at least willing to learn (now, at least), from her mistakes and try and grow as a person. Aimée is fast sinking from second-favourite to last place, in my estimations.Then again, as I may have said before, I had my fingers crossed for her staying as a squire, rather than filling the 'rogue' role. That's just personal taste though and I don't count that as critique.
>>27798184>At a loss? NINJAS!HA. The funny thing is, when I can't think of what I'm writing I literally type NINJAS in caps. I do this often.
>>27798278what about PIRATES?
>>27798254Honestly, I can see her turning into a bloodthirsty Yandere if she goes to far/Sir Knight spurns her advances.It seems like a logical progression, to me.
>>27798184>NaNoWriMo>50,000 words in an entire month>Check word document copy of Fookin' Princesses>Word Count of 31,740 over the last six days>Not bad
>>27798184>>27798254>If Aimée insists on dressing impractically, coupled with her show-off nature, all of /tg/ is going to insist she take a near-mortal wound for it*Snerk* And you think that I won't?>Even Felicita is at least willing to learn...True, but each of the woman that surround the Knight have to grow in their own ways. Although the Knight would never steer her wrong, Felìcita's sudden devotion to his every word is just as unhealthy as her rejection of any other person's advice was before.>Captain Rina may be grief-stricken, but she's still clever...True. However there may be a missing sense of... call it personal agency that could be involved here.
>>27798709>>27798784Oh, I'm back by the way.
>>27798709You say that, but would you really class this as a 'novel'?Don't take this the wrong way; for an imageboard, what you've done here's nothing short of spectacular, but a novel, this ain't. There's the stylistic differences, just for starters, not to mention the short instalments and the lack of descriptive prose, necessitated, by the lack of space you have to work with.As I said, loving the story so far, but this isn't a novel.Still, I wish I had this kind of work ethic. I've not written anything for the last thing I was working on in nearly two years...Fuck, that's a depressing thought. Goodnight, everybody.
>>27798832All it takes to get back in it is a single decent idea. After that it kind of takes you wherever it wants to.And your criticism/commentary is always appreciated and well received. Thanks for it!
>>27798832Meh, with some formatting, and a proper editor, this could easily be transformed into a true novel.
>>27798832>implying there haven't been 'novels' in journal form.Hell, all the only solid definition boils down to "book length fiction that usually follows characters".
>>27798784>personal agency>implying yet more mind controlAnd everything this bastard Adric does, makes me enjoy relishing the mental image of him choking to death on a sword blade through his mouth and out the back of his skull all the more!I REALLY hope his demise doesn't take too long, Knight! And I hope to the GODS that it is both messy and painful when it comes!>FelicitaOooh, yeah... Didn't consider that angle. Still... Progress? All the same, my point about liking Aimée less and less still stands. She started out looking like the reasonable, relate-able, human, girl-next-door-for-want-of-a-better-word one of the pair. Now she's about as far from that as I am from Calais - Not impossibly so, but still a bloody good distance and a stretch of open water away!
>>27798954>All the same, my point about liking Aimée less and less still stands. She started out looking like the reasonable, relate-able, human, girl-next-door-for-want-of-a-better-word one of the pair. Now she's about as far from that as I am from Calais - Not impossibly so, but still a bloody good distance and a stretch of open water away!Its not that she's unreasonable herself, she just held unrealistic expectations of how man-on-man combat worked. The chain shirt was never that much of an advantage to her with her usual methods, and she became convinced that it really wasn't necessary to succeed, her childish side comes in when she discarded it for the sake of impressing the Knight.>And everything this bastard Adric does, makes me enjoy relishing the mental image of him choking to death on a sword blade through his mouth and out the back of his skull all the more!Ha ha ha. You're going to hate me/him by the time this is done.
>>27799172>Ha ha ha. You're going to hate me/him by the time this is done.Death flags. Death flags, everywhere.
>>27796940Dear Journal,I think I’ve decided what to do with the girls. However, for it to work we would need to leave the city for a few weeks and I’m not really comfortable about leaving Aldric at my back for that long. I was thinking of low key areas and the idea of stargazing in the wilderness came to mind. I then remembered that the Druidic Groves to the northeast of Albero Città were supposed to be lovely during the Winter Solstice. It is only a few days boat ride away from the city and would be an easy way to reward the girls. There was even supposed to be a natural hot spring there to relax in while there.However that is still something to look foreword to in the future. For now we need to deal with the current problem, Aldric. Aimée reports that guard patrols are becoming more and more frequent and I’ve been on the opposite side of this situation enough times to know it won’t be long before they begin systematically searching buildings like this inn. Later tonight we are going to come up with a rough plan of attack for the palace, but first I need to have a little talk with Aimée.
>>27799421>Give me a bit longer for this one, I'm trying to create a realistic moment of personal and interpersonal growth here.
>>27799534Take as long as you need you glorious bastard. You've motivated me to write again, and given me ideas to go along with it.
>>27799879He's actually kind of making me want to start writefagging as well.I want to try a Dark Souls quest. The only problem is that it may not be appropriate for /tg/, and /v/ blows.
>>27799421>hot springOooohh boy
>>27800010/tg/ is known to make exemptions for vidya./v/ is a shithole tho
>Sorry, a minor family emergency came up. Be back soon.
>>27800455Hope it's nothing major, sir knight. We'll keep this thread alive until your return.
>>27801141No. Just a small dispute. I'll be back to writing in a bit.
>>27801229Damnit I have a Midterm in 8 hours.I wish sleep was better than reading this thread.
>>27799534>>27800455>>27801229Damn it. I lost all the momentum and feel for this bit I was writing. I'll try to regain it but no promises on the results. >>27799879>>27800010I'm glad to have played a part in this. Let me know how the results are!>>27801707Sorry about that. If it makes you feel better, I usually stay up late writing when I have work tomorrow.
>>27800216Yeah. That may be a Pastebin story.Next bit is almost up!
>>27799421Dear Journal,After I finished writing in you last time, I went to find Aimée. As expected she was downstairs in the tavern as though nothing was wrong. A quick word that I wanted to talk with her privately was more than enough to get her away from there but it may have raised her expectations of what was to come too high. She bounded after me, full of energy but when she entered our room and saw me sitting at the table with the chain shirt laid out she paused and a confused expression crossed her face.“Err… Sir Knight? Why are you… What’s going on? Is something wrong?”“… Yes Aimée, something is wrong. Can you sit down for a moment?”Aimée sat down timidly, and I was reminded for a moment of the nice young maid who she was deep down. I gave her an encouraging smile to try to put her more at ease and she returned it, still worried but not on the verge of panic anymore.“Aimée, when I bought you that mithril chain shirt do you remember why?”“You said it was going to be my armor, so I could be safe when fighting. But I haven’t needed it so-““So what? So you thought that because you were lucky so far that you would keep being lucky? Didn’t you think that I gave that to you for a reason? Hells, I wear my armor, and far heavier armor at that, all the time! Even when I’m not in combat or likely to be! Because relying on your own luck to see you through isn’t a good idea!” Aimée started to say something but I cut her off.“And if you were going to change out of your armor, why did you choose those leathers? Yes, leather can be made into armor, but that’s when its been cured and fastened into a stiff leather protector! The stuff you’re wearing is for showboating fools who care more about display than substance! Why would you choose that?”“I-I wanted to look good for you…”
>>27802491And with those words all my righteous anger was dissipated and I was left with a sinking sensation of guilt. At that moment I felt about an inch tall. I quietly pulled my chair up alongside Aimée and sat down.“I- I’m sorry, Aimée. I didn’t mean to- I mean-“ I stammered, lost for words.Aimée sadly got up and began to walk away, the tears in her eyes beginning to fall to the ground.
>>27802515At this moment I said the only thing I could think to say, “Aimée I just don’t want to see you get hurt ever again. You mean too much to me.”Aimée turned around and looked at me, tears were still in her eyes but for an instant her expression lifted. Softly, I walked over to her and the two of us embraced quietly together in that small little room.“Aimée, I’d never be able to forgive myself if something happened to you and I could have stopped it. That’s why I got you that armor, because I wanted you to be safe. And Aimée, you don’t need to try to look good for me.”Aimée pulled back from me for a moment and looked me in the eyes. When I looked back down at her there was the brief hint of the clever young woman I met in Martina’s lair rather than the wildly playful but increasingly reckless girl that had been around for the last few weeks. She chuckled to herself, “I suppose I’ve been acting really childish lately, haven’t I?”“Heh. A little bit, but it wasn’t too bad until you started risking yourself.”She blushed, “Yeah. I really should have known better. But this is your fault too you know!”“Huh? What are you talking about?”“Yeah, think of the way you’ve been stringing us ladies along lately! A girl is bound to get desperate!” With a cheeky grin Aimée prodded my chestplate, “You, Sir Knight, need to start thinking through your actions better! I think you owe us all an apology at the very least!”“Well, actually I may have just the thing for that…”
>>27802552After sharing the news about the Druidic Groves Aimée became quite excited, a familiar twinkle in her eye was back, but this time more… tempered than before. We quickly decided not to share the news yet with the rest of the girls, thinking that they would appreciate it more as a surprise.We were still standing there, chatting quietly when Felìcita knocked on the door quietly and looked into the room. “Umm…” she said hesitantly, “I’m not… interrupting anything am I?”I chuckled, “Not at all Felìcita. Come on in.”With a sigh of relief the elf did so. “Good, I heard in the tavern that you asked to speak with Aimée privately and… er… well…”At this point of course she caught sight of Aimée’s eyes, still red from crying and perked up, “Oh. Oh! Ha ha ha. You too? What did you of all people do to warrant a discipline lesson?”As I placed my head in my hands and groaned, Felìcita skipped off to be “helpful” and bring Aimée some ice.
>So how was that part? A little bit of drama on my end caused me to lose the flow for a bit, but I hope it came together okay.
>>27802686I can see no deprecation in quality
>>27798184I'm leaning towards she's under enchantment magic or she's searching for them to ally with them and kill Aldric.
>>27800010Hey! I'm participating in your quest right now!
>>27802652Of course the other girls (with the exception of Felìcita who became rather clingy all of the sudden) spent all afternoon trying to guess what Aimée “did.” On the plus side it kept them from jumping to the other possible conclusion about what a man and a lovely young woman could be doing together in private. On the minus side it really made it difficult to get them focused on planning for the palace. Eventually however I got everyone settled down, even including Siegbert who had spent the entire day negotiating with the bartender in the hopes of getting him to stock beer, any form of beer at all, in his tavern. The first thing I did was to start appointing roles and tasks. Felìcita was placed in charge of making the general map of the palace from memory. Aimée, now wearing her chain shirt and a comfortable but still pleasantly snug pair of trousers, was placed in charge of finding any local criminal connections that the manhunt for us hadn’t yet shut down. Siegebert was to spend his time crafting alchemical compounds for us to use in entering and moving about the palace while Sieghild was going to spend her time analyzing Felìcita’s map for potential structural weaknesses we could use somehow. Finally Martina would spend her time performing invisible reconnaissance checks while in telepathic communication with me.
*Sigh*Alright /tg/. I've got to admit. I've got work tomorrow morning and I need to go to bed soon. I sincerely apologize for the mere 1,696 words I've been able to pack in today. If I can't sleep, I may return to writing but don't count on any more major spurts today. However tomorrow is another day and I can try again.In the interim, as usual, feel free to ask any questions you have, posit theories, complain about me flaking out today, complain about me forgetting about the twitter feed until its too late to do anything, etc.Here, have one of my most badass knight pictures by way of apology.Good night and thank you for bearing with me,Knight of the Realm
>>27803491thx for the story. good night.
>>27803491It's no problem, pity I've got work too or I'd do another while we wait one.
bump to stay alive
>>27803491good night man.and seriously you need a long rest one of this days.
>>27803491Yeah! How dare you *only* write 1696 words worth of interesting and fun story for the denizens of /tg/, whilst asking nothing in return! I'm absolutely insulted that you would dare to interact and ask for feedback from the audience so often and recieve criticism so well. You're absolutely despicable!>captcha: being mohosticyes captcha, i am being mohostic. which i assume is a synonym for sarcastic
Bampin' for the knight
>>27807350I suppose I was too to some degree, however I was hoping to do at least 3,000 last night. I have a few free minutes spread throughout the day. Not enough to write, but I can always answer questions.
>>27808337I will be back to writing at around 4:00 today.
>>27803246>So I lied. I had some more time. Dear Journal,Aimèe came to me with some good news today. Apparently she had found a way for us to get into the palace itself for reconnaissance. A local criminal organization known as the Sussurri Notturni had managed to avoid the guards sweep of the city so far. For a price, this group will take two of us into the palace itself and show us some secret ways in. The obvious first choice for this mission is Aimèe, she has all the skills needed for this job. However the second candidate is in the air. As I already tasked everyone else with important work, I'm afraid that I am the only option.
>>27809169>I'm writing this on my phone by the way. I apologize for the reduced quality. Dear Journal,Since I last wrote in you, a lot has happened. Dispite the protests of the girls, I decided to accompany Aimèe to meet with the Sussurri Notturni. I reasoned that if it is a trap like Martina and Sieghild suspect, then I'd be walking right into it, however if it is a trap, then I certainly can't let Aimèe walk into it alone after the talk I had with her the other day. Eventually the girls gave in and Martina even made a spare bottomless bag for me and half filled it with healing potions and supplies, "To ensure your success" she said. Felìcita wished me well and begged to be allowed to accompany me but quieted down when told to. Sieghild gave me a jade dwarven ceremonial good luck charm usually reserved for family members and wished me good fortune. Siegbert gave me a few alchemical draughts and apologized for not having more. Evidently he's been sleeping poorly of late. After saying my goodbyes me and Aimèe set off to meet the Sussurri Notturni.
Any one reading now or should I wait for later today?
>>27809751I am here.This should be archived.
>>27809751I'm reading right now. Not much else to do. I look forward to more, as always.
>>27809751whatever you feel like man.
Hey. My posting schedule will be erratic until this afternoon. Sorry, I'm writing in between busy spots at work.
>>27809751I am reading but do what ever
Oh by the way. Is the quality of my story still to your liking? Everything is still good?
>>27810446Last two entries were kind of curt.
>>27810446cant see and anomalies as of yet
>>27810521otherwise is going good
>>27810460The curse of abridged writing time/ability caused by work and a mobile phone.
>>27809515>Good news, I got off work early today back to writing for me.Although the city's arboreal nature precluded the use of horse and carriage, I had sort of expected that the Sussurri Notturni would send something like the driver used by the Schatten Gilde to bring us to some hidden headquarters. Instead, Aimèe led me to another tavern, this one was carved out of the interior of an overlarge branch of one of the trees that Albero Città is based on. It was named "The Robin's Nest" and had a friendly looking atmosphere. It didn't look like a great place to stage an ambush but on the other hand it didn't look like the lair of a dangerous gang either.I said as much to Aimèe and she shrugged and simply said, "Well they're not actually.""What do you mean they're not?""They're less of a gang of criminals and more of a band of thieves really. You know the type, showboating who care more about style than substance.” Seeing the look on my face, Aimèe laughed and continued “Don’t worry. Evidently they have more than enough actual substance to them. They’ve apparently pulled off some pretty impressive heists before and many people in the underworld suspect they may have robbed the palace once or twice before.”
>>27811929I suppose I had to trust her word on that and so I entered “The Robin’s Nest.” I was immediately struck by the colorful nature of the place. Whereas our inn ensured our anonyminity by being a place where people looked the other way when things were out of place, this tavern could ensure it by being entirely out of place. There was no common element to anything, and the clientele suited it. I could see elves, humans, dwarfs, and even stranger races such as the occasional orc or goblin and I even think I saw an effrete and a genie talking to each other in the corner but they disappeared before I could get a better look. Finally Aimèe led us to our contact who turned out to be a young elven woman. In my personal opinion the woman looked more like an exotic dancer than a hardened criminal but I remember enough stories of similar thieves trying (and sometimes succeeding) to make their fortune to believe Aimèe’s stories of her reputation. Of course, these are also the type of people who inspired Aimèe to try similar types of shenanigans so I can’t put too much trust in them because of that.
>>27812311 The woman gracefully stood and gave a bow that was clearly designed more to show off her body than to be polite. Ah… this must be the famous Knight who has this dull little town in such an uproar. A pleasure to meet you finally.”The woman watched as I sat down and ordered a drink and waited until I was having my first sip before leaning foreword with a sly grin and asking, “So is it true that you kidnapped our little Princess Felìcita and have been ravishing her each night since?”Naturally I choked on my drink when hearing that. Fortunately the bar was too noisy for people to easily overhear the woman’s words nor my reply. “What? No! And I’m a little disturbed that you would still offer to help us if it seemed like we were the type of people who would do that!”“Relax your Knightship, I didn’t actually think you were, although from what I hear the stuck up little bitch could use it,” before I could voice my disgust the woman continued, “and I base my opinion on the fact that these here ‘authorities’ heard of your alleged crimes before those of us who keep our ear to the street did. If you were half the murderous monster that this Mr. Aldric fellow keeps claiming you are, word of your actions would have passed through the underworld before.”
>>27809515>Siegbert has been sleeping poorlyThe attraction enchantment is beginning to work on him too...
>>27812403The woman watched as I sat down and ordered a drink and waited until I was having my first sip before leaning foreword with a sly grin and asking, “So is it true that you kidnapped our little Princess Felìcita and have been ravishing her each night since?”Naturally I choked on my drink when hearing that. Fortunately the bar was too noisy for people to easily overhear the woman’s words nor my reply. “What? No! And I’m a little disturbed that you would still offer to help us if it seemed like we were the type of people who would do that!”“Relax your Knightship, I didn’t actually think you were, although from what I hear the stuck up little bitch could use it,” before I could voice my disgust the woman continued, “and I base my opinion on the fact that these here ‘authorities’ heard of your alleged crimes before those of us who keep our ear to the street did. If you were half the murderous monster that this Mr. Aldric fellow keeps claiming you are, word of your actions would have passed through the underworld before.”Well that seamed reasonable at least so I decided that the woman, even if she had expressed some opinions on discipline that were at best sarcastic and at worst rather vile, was at least worth going out on a limb for, “Alright then so you trust us. Why should we trust you? All I’ve got to go on is a group name that my friend here has heard of. I don’t even know who you are or anything about you.”With a thud I looked down to see a knife embedded into my chair between my legs. She had thrown it there, underarm, without me seeing it. As I watched, she stretched her legs out to reach the knife handle with her feet and began to slowly toy with it with her almost bare feet. “Sir Knight,” she said with a sensual grin, “I am Velia, and I run the Sussurri Notturni.”
>>27812606>MFW I accidentally created another elf girl love interest.
>>27812645>Well, potential love interest. We'll see how this turns out.
>>27812645The harem grows!
>>27812645It's alright, she seems likely to want to stick with the city anyway. Unless she trades places with Felicita...Felicita being a princess and all.
>>27812645That's fine. There's no such thing as too many elf girl love intrests. Bonus points if she's a brown elf, as well.
>Man my entire writing process is basically a war between what one part of my brain thinks would be cool and the part of my brain that is at least somewhat logical. The problem is that without the latter I couldn't write at all, without the former I'd have nothing to write about.
>>27812968As long as you don't go LOL RANDUMB, I think we won't really care.
>>27812968and thanks for writing
>>27812968The last few minutes were basically this>Cool brain: Hey! Hey! Check out this idea! Awesome huh?>Logic brain: Huh? This is terrible! It would only exasperate problems this story is already having! >Cool brain: Oh really? Then you think of a better idea, Mr. "Logic">Logic brain: ..... Not that one?>Cool brain: That's what I thought. >Me: WHY????>MFW
>>27812606After a few more drinks and some intense negotiation between Velia and myself, we came to an agreement. She led me and Aimèe out of the tavern and to a nearby warehouse. There I met the rest of the Sussurri Notturni. There were only six of them total, including Velia and much to my surprise (although by this point it really shouldn’t be) they all were young females. Velia took care of the introductions. “This,” she said pointing to a felinid woman in those ridiculous skin tight leathers I had recently persuaded Aimèe to cease using, “is Agata, she handles our second story jobs and is an excellent climber.”Another elf, this one was in the process of changing out of some courtly garb and into her own ridiculous outfit was next up. “This is Oria, she normally only works confidence games and cons but she will be with us tonight in case we need to sweet talk any guards.”The next was a human girl who was packing variety of wires, picks, and other strange tools I couldn’t identify into an innumerable amount of belt pouches. “She is Gabrielle and she handles locks and traps of most sorts. She will be our best friend tonight.”A halfling girl who looked almost normal, if a bit shifty looking, was next. “This is Amyas, our primary pickpocket. Don’t worry she won’t swipe your stuff while you’re employing us, it makes bad business.”“And finally we have our problem solver, Catriona!” An orcish woman stood at my height in front of me. I noticed that instead of some ridiculous suit she preferred leather armor, actual leather armor rather than the form fitting leathers that the other members of Sussurri Notturni wore.“I take it that she is your strongarm or bodyguard? Basically the person who handles actual combat?”“Why yes, yes she is. Very astute of you.”
>>27813363For what its worth, many of these aren't expected to be reoccurring characters unless they are unexpectedly successful or popular.
So who is still here and how much of an idiot am I for that last post?
>>27813437still here. Harem fuck yeah
>>27813437I didn't see what was so bad about it.
>>27813437Still here. introducing new characters is fine and all, but i'm afraid that, with more people in the harem, character development and interactions will be spread thin
>>27813549Which is why none of them will make it into the "harem".'Nother guy, by the way.
>>27813363Once again I found myself surrounded by deadly and beautiful women. It’s been happening often enough lately that I should really start a collection or something. I was musing on this so Velia’s next words took me by surprise.“Lets get you out of that armor now.”“Sorry, what?”“That armor is fine if you’re walking into a war, but for skulking around in dark places? No chance.”“Hey, this armor has saved my life in many battles!”“If you wear that on this mission, it will be a battle!”“Well… I’ll need something else at least. I’m not entirely comfortable without any form of armor.”“Don’t worry we anticipated that. Here, take this. You can keep the sword though. It suits you.”
>>27813670Why do I get the feeling that Martina is scrying right now?
>>27813670Velia handed me some leather armor to wear for the mission. I donned it and stowed my plate mail in the bottomless bag that Martina gave me and we set about waiting for dark. Once night fell, we headed out along back alley paths and using smugglers tunnels that ran through the branches of the trees themselves to reach the Noble Quarter and the palace itself through one of the cellars. As the last of us entered the room, we suddenly had to hide as a guard patrol passed by. I turned to Veila, “So what do we do if the guards spot us?”“Oh that shouldn’t be a problem with the rout we’re planning.”“Alright, I’ll trust you on that, but what if things don’t go according to plan and we’re spotted anyways?”“We run. Same as always.”“…Right. And if we’re cornered?”“If that happens we usually surrender. We aren’t fighters and we aren’t stupid.”As Veila said those words Aimèe turned and gave me a sheepish little smile, I felt unexpectedly comforted, at least these people wouldn’t get Aimèe to turn back to her old bad habits.Once the guards were gone, we headed up the stairs and into a side room. The room appeared to be an ordinary sitting room with a portrait of some long dead king against the wall. I was looking around confused and wondering what possible purpose Velia could have had in leading us here when she walked up to the picture and kissed it on the mouth. After several seconds of this, the picture swung open to reveal an entrance secret passageway.I looked at Velia quizzically, “So… how exactly did you find out about that particular entrance?”With a roll of her eyes she led the way into the tunnels.
>>27812968>>27813336You have just encapsulated the very crisis that every single writer in the world, especially of fantasy and science-fiction, has to face, every singe day! It's a constant battle to try and keep ahold of the reigns to this mad horse!Except in my case, the horse has sat down and isn't inclined to move for anything short of a rocket strapped to its ass.YouseewhatIdidthere?>>27813363FINALLY, a thief in ACTUAL leather armour and not some stupid cat-suit!At least one of them has to turn out to be a traitor, you realise. And if it's more than one, one of them has to be offed by the other. Standard package when dealing with an organisation of 'honourable thieves'; there's always at least one who's a little too much of the latter and too little of the former.
>>27813834As we walked along the passages I could see lots of small pricks of light along one wall. Velia explained that these were peepholes that old kings used to use to spy on those around them and look for disloyalty. She was quick to assure me that they were no longer used and that as far as she can tell, no one even remembers they are here.“In fact,” she went on, “these tunnels have been a major boon to our little gang here. You’d be surprised who will suddenly start talking about important treasures being moved or valuable items that were out for cleaning or repair. Here, watch these two guards,” she said pointing to a peephole.I looked through it into what appeared to be a break room for the palace guards. Two royal guards were lounging in the room idly chatting.“So, Adriano,” the first said, “have you ever heard of the Golden Saber before?”“Nope. Not a word, but apparently the high and mighty Mr. Aldric has. In fact he trusts them so much that he decided to replace the entire inner guard with them and the king says nothing about it! We’ve had a perfect record of guarding the king for over a century and a half and we get replaced at a moments notice? What’s wrong with this picture, Eustorgio?”“Heh, loads. I’m surprised that there wasn’t a major outcry over the change though. I mean, this new advisor comes in and replaces us within a week of his arrival? Mr. Aldric must have kept it on the down low to avoid that. But hey, at least it took a lot of work off our hands.”
>>27814062You'll note that there is only one in actual armor, and it is the only one who actually fights things. And you can always resume writing. If you want I'll even help. You've given me enough constructive advice before that it would only be fair.
>>27814082“Those guys could do our entire job for us and give us their salaries and it wouldn’t make me like the swine any more. They’re arrogant, they’re rude, and they treat us like we’re incompetent imbeciles. Yesterday I cleared a delivery from a baker who crafted this grand cake for the king in gratitude for a decision he made a year prior. Something about a legal case where he would have went out of business or something. As I was bringing the baker and his cake to the king’s chambers, these Golden Saber bastards stop us and demand that I return to my post with the ‘intruder.’ I tried to explain what was going on with the baker but they wouldn’t have a word of it. They threatened to have me fired and the baker arrested if we didn’t leave now. And I can swear that I saw one of them wiping some of that cake’s frosting off his face as he left their break room! Why do they even have a separate break room anyways? And why is it better than ours so much? I don’t like this Eustorgio. I don’t like it a bit. I don’t like this Mr. Aldric, I don’t like these Golden Saber bastards, and I especially hate their Gods damned commander.”“Heh. Tell me about it. With that armor you’d think he was a Deathknight instead of this guy we’re supposed to be looking out for. Anyways, I’ll catch you later, my break is up. Ciao!”This left the one guard alone in the room. Seeing as he was unlikely to continue to expose his grievances about Mr. Aldric and his staffing changes to the empty room I left him and turned to Velia and inquired, “I don’t suppose any of these peepholes show the men this Golden Saber group do they?”“We haven’t used them since before Mr. Aldric arrived, but we can find out.”
>>27813336Your writing has entertained me and your behind the scenes has amused me. Keep up the good work.Also:Sounds like my brain when GMing as well.
I'm late to all this and haven't seen all of the threads, what's the knight supposed to look like?
>>27814435Remember the rank and file soldier?
>>27814435A fellow with armor and a sword. Not an old veteran but not that young either. Probably white as he is a knight that hails from noteurope.
>>27814454Kind of like this?
>>27813409They will all fall in love with the knight and follow him.
>>27814435>>27814729Sir you are awesome! Thank you!
>>27814981I find myself thinking of the rain god trucker who doesn't know it and is forever followed by rain.Replace 'rain' with 'dangerous women'.
>>27814200>And now that everyone's feeling good about the all girl thief team, I need to raise everyone's hackles with more of Mr. Aldric's wacky antics!>This time featuring his equally deplorable minions!Sure enough of the myriad peepholes that showed assorted rooms in the inner palace grounds, several showed the Golden Saber guard rooms. There were surprisingly many of them, evidently large parts of the inner castle were converted for their use. I found out several things from this for one, I would have been able to correctly name the Golden Sabers from their logo alone, it was unsurprisingly enough a golden saber on a black field. The second thing I found out was that they were crude bastards but incredibly disciplined on the job. In the barracks and recreational rooms where soldiers were off duty, they had all sorts of chaos present. People were fighting, girls who were presumably also the palace’s maids were being… well used is the only right word here, however in the rooms where soldiers were on duty, they had cleaned them up to military precision before they left them, presumably in case someone comes by for inspection. When we saw the Golden Saber soldiers on duty they were almost perfectly silent, only relaying orders and commands. It was rather uncanny to be honest. However we did have a small stroke of luck. Two Golden Saber Officers, high ranking ones by the look of it were chatting casually in a small out of the way room that according to (the by now quite disgusted) Velia was once a temple to the Elven Gods. “So, Evgeni. What does the General want from us tomorrow? Are we finally to be in the city hunting this Knight or stuck in the castle watching over this doddering brainwashed fool?”
>>27815387“Bah. You should know better than to ask that by now Kuzma. We’re always on palace duty. And we had better do a damned good job too. Remember this ‘doddering fool’ has broken free of the Mr. Aldric’s headband before. Last time he nearly got around to attacking Mr. Aldric himself. The General had to threaten to beat the queen senseless in order to get him to put the headband back on. Of course he did it anyways, and made the old man watch too, so I don’t think that will work again; that’s why we need to be careful with him.”“Speaking of the queen, has she healed enough to perform another ‘dance’ for us, eh?”“Heh, heh. I think she has. Do you want to use Mr. Aldric’s collar or not?”“Eh. Only if she won’t be intimidated into doing it. The collar makes her look to happy”“Yeah, her tears really add to the experience for me. Nothing like watching a proud woman broken to get you in the mood, right?”As the two monsters in human flesh continued their walk down the hallway I stood there, seeing red. Eventually I felt a hand on my shoulder. I whirled around, quite prepared to beat whoever dared touch me, and stopped when I saw Aimèe looking quite concerned.
>>27815419“Sir Knight, are you okay Sir Knight?”Even Velia was looking concerned. “Are you feeling okay Knight? You looked like you were going to break down that wall and kill those two men with your own bare hands. I’m not saying they don’t deserve it, but well is this the best time? I mean there is probably a time when we aren’t surrounded by enemies who outnumber us that you can do that, right?”I stopped. Took a deep breath. Took another deep breath. And kept on taking deep breaths until the urge to start killing everyone in this palace until there was nothing left that even hinted of Mr. Aldric’s evil went away. It didn’t go away but it at least subsided enough that I could think rationally again.>Sorry about that. I'm worried I went a bit overboard on the "These Guys are Bastards" bit.
So what do you think about that last bit?A) Too far! Way too far! You can make people evil without making them vile.B) Just far enough. You didn't actually describe anything happening, but you let us know it was happening so we knew how evil these guys were.>Technically there should be a "Not Far Enough" option here, but I don't feel comfortable with writing that sort of detail in general, let alone without getting /tg/'s buy in first.
>>27815597It's an ok amount of evil. People will abuse power when they can, especially when it's mind control and shit.
>>27815597C not far enough I want a past bin cry/dance/rape seen please
>>27815597Eh. Pretty standard faire for bad people. Not the worst, certainly not nice.
>>27815597I can see people doing that in similar situations. The mind control makes it too easy, even.
>>27815597Honestly we could go a bit more farther with this, because honestly the feeling I am getting from Mr. Alric is that he is capable of doing much more worse things fro the sake of power>>27815635Going full on NTR on this one eh?
>>27815597B), it did a good enough job of making me want to murderize them without going into any details that may or may not be true
>>27815176I love you almost as much as I love Douglass Adams, anon.
>>27815841I also vote to murderize them heavily.imma fanfic nao>Sir Knight bristles with power and the god on anon pour their righteous fury into him and he does indeed burst through the wall with a mighty "OH YEAH" followed by a more normal "And at ye!" and the Great Murderization of Evils at the Palace (as the ballade would later be known) had begunSigh, if I lived in Editors setting I would very likely hang my hat with the Fixers and ruin many stories with beating evil in the face much sooner than they should.
Be back in a moment. Please keep voting on the micropoll though.
>>27815929That may just be the highest praise I have received in life so far. Thank you, anon.
>>27816009>and at ye>have at yeYeesh, I really am the terrible fanfic writer, did even worse than intended.
>>27816013Not mad just disappointed
>>27816035Consensus is "just far enough."
>>27816035I think you hit the good middle ground. Not so graphic that it's in poor taste, and we know they are bastards. Going any further would be taking away from the story and in bad taste.
>>27815597Maybe laying it on a BIT thick there. That's the kind of behaviour of the Army of Evil™ that's just managed to break into the city and is now in the process of looting, pillaging and raping anything with a pulse (or without... Ew).A garrisoned force is generally a bit more sedate. It's less of a frantic, "one-act-of-unspeakable-evil-after-another" and more "A little rape, slack off, play some poker, abuse the defenceless populace, drink myself blind, recover, fuck a slave maybe, have some lunch, mock the deposed king by throwing chicken bones at him..."Also, it's a little confusing as to just what these guys are. Are they vile thugs, barely classed as 'civilized' and merely wearing its trappings? Or are they actually a well-drilled, almost mechanical machine of war and oppression, so disciplined they probably sleep, standing at attention? I'm seeing kind of a mixed message here.They make for effective obstacle-mooks though, so props in that regard, at least; you know the protagonists have to avoid them, rather than thinking, "Wait... Why don't they just kill their way through?"
>>27813670>not entirely comfortable without any form of armorYou've reminded me of Hallgerd's Tale and now am somewhat concerned for the harem.http://www.uesp.net/wiki/Lore:Hallgerd%27s_Tale
>>27816362I think it fits that a wizard well versed in enchantments would use them to offer up slaves to his men. Keeps em sated even when they're garrison troops.It also seems he was bribing these ones to guard the palace specifically, since they might be tempted to go off or attack something otherwise.
>>27816405Why would that make you concerned? She certainly enjoyed it.
>>27816406All of which seems to lean towards the, "Foul, unwashed horde," flavour of evil minion... But their on-the-job attitude is more, "Elite, unswerving vanguard of evil," variety. And if they're just mind-controlled on the job, why waste the resources to keep them sated in the down-time, when the same resources could be applied to keep them permanently combat-ready? Either Adric is not as smart as he looks, or there's a plot hole around here somewhere. Watch your footing.Either way, off to bed. Looking forward to more come morning. Night-night, /tg/! Love you all. Yes, including you, strange person in the corner. You're loved too.Unless you're That Guy. No-one loves That Guy.
>>27816362They're supposed to send mixed signals, to let you know something is up. We don't know what, but I'm sure the Knight will find out.
>>27816464I'm uncertain of our Knight's skill in heavy armor, and the harem count is rising.
>>27815419Well congratulations, my urge to kill has been raised, groomed and trained to go after Mr. Aldric and his bastard minions.You should be proud of yourself.
>>27815512I turned to Aimèe. “We’re going to kill them. That’s a given now. There is no way we’re leaving this city until Mr. Aldric is driven from here and faces justice.”Aimèe patted my shoulder, “I know, but getting killed here won’t help anyone. We know about these tunnels, we know the king is under mind control, and we know the actual palace guards don’t like Mr. Aldric. If we can get the king out of there we can use him to get the guards and the kingdom on our side. That way we can purge these Golden Saber bastards from the palace for good.”With that we continued on to the peepholes that Velia said looked in on the royal throne room although it wouldn’t be fair to call it that now. It is more of a headquarters. Instead of the long but otherwise empty hall with a throne at the end of it, now tables and chairs were everywhere and maps of the entirety of Albero Città covered the walls. Small pins representing guard and soldier positions pockmarked these maps and shaded areas evidently representing the search for me and my party were beginning to cover the large map of the city. From the looks of things, it wouldn’t be long before the search found our hideout at the inn, a few days at most. The throne itself was still there but in the King’s place sat a massive armored giant of a man, taller and broader than even myself. Before him a massive table was set before him with troop reports and other intelligence for him to review covering the surface. As I watched, a black mist sank into the room from somewhere in the ceiling and coalesced into the form of Mr. Aldric. He strode foreword towards the armored hulk who immediately leapt to attention along with the rest of the room.“Room ‘ten-chun!” the man bellowed with the volume of a siege weapon striking.“Stand down, General Zinoviy.” Mr. Aldric said with a hiss. “Its time to hear from our pet Guard Captain.”
>>27817087>Captain RinaPrepare for rage.
>>27817087As Mr. Aldric said, the two door guards parted way to allow Captain Rina to enter the room. Her helmet was held at her side and around her head was a strange gold circlet. She moved as though she was in a trance and fell to her knees before the throne and the figures of Mr. Aldric and General Zinoviy before it. Still kneeling Captain Rina began to speak in a dull voice,“I am sorry my Masters. I have deployed every guardsman and guardswoman I can, but the search still has found no trace of the Knight or the Rod. I remain a failure to you. I beg for forgiveness but deserve nothing but your scorn.”Mr. Aldric hissed again, “So you do. So you do. By any chance did your search go any better General?”The armored man shook his head, “No sir. I patrolled every inch of that park and jail and found nothing that would allow you to scry the location of the Knight or his allies. The fire itself and firefighting efforts ruined my attempts in the park and in the jail.”“The jail too? There was no fire there…”“I know sir, but it appears that the then-guardswoman Rina ordered a bucket brigade readied for the jail as well in case of any traps set by the Knight’s allies. Regrettably a bucket was spilled on an otherwise promising blood splatter.”Mr. Aldric turned to face the prostate elf. “General, as punishment you may do with the elf as you see fit. I go to prepare our contingency operations.” With that he dissolved into mist again and left the room through means unknown to me.General Zinoviy turned to Captain Rita. “Elf wench. I omitted one detail from Mr. Aldric about what I found at the park. Can you imagine what that could be?”
>>27817399>bucket of water accidentally spilled on crucial evidenceAldric doesn't seem that smart.
>>27817087>>27817097If something happens to her, I'm going to have to go outside and shotgun the pumpkin I was carving. Then blast some holes in my fence until I stop seeing red.
>>27817399“No Master. I cannot.”“Of course you can’t. I did find one thing at the park, it was mud. Lots of mud. Those damned firefighters poured so much water over that place that it is still muddy. It quite ruined these new boots.”There was a general chuckle from the assembled soldiers of the Golden Saber. “So naturally I want you to clean them for me. No, no. Stay on your knees, you’re more useful that way.”The chuckling in the hall turned to general laughter, I had to strain to hear what the General said next as he leaned down to whisper something to Rina, “Oh, and I want you to have a degree of self awareness. Still obey me yes, but deep down I want that fiery woman who fought so hard when we forced that circlet on her head to know what she is doing right now. To taste every single drop of mud that her tongue removes from my boot. And I want her to be aware of what she is doing when you look me in the eyes, thank me for the privilege of cleaning my boots, and beg to be of further use to me. Do that.”At that moment I had to turn away as tears began to roll down Rina’s face.
>>27817435>happensPretty sure we're about to get a sex scene with her.
>>27817425He's more angry with the person who gave that order.>>27817435Watch out for your neighbors and obey your local laws. I don't want to cause any arrests!
>>27817469For a second I had thought the General was covering up evidence, but it appears he's a dick too.
>>27817444>The rageIf this guy doesn't get his just desserts I'm going to flip a table.
>>27817495Better start flipping.
>>27817469>>27817444Goddamnit, now I'm going to have to explain to the family why the pumpkin is now covering the yard. That and the fact the fence will now resemble a pile of toothpicks.
>>27817495>>27817541Out of idle curiosity, is there a time limit to justice?
>>27816485Not a plothole, its perfectly reasonable for his evil goons to be incredibly disciplined on the job, but really wound up off duty.Add in mind control, no accountability and lots of fine elven tail around and you get a bunch of bastards.
>>27817574>my diiiickGood times.And I think Sir Knight would agree that he wants to administer Justice right fucking now.
>>27817574I can only hope you get it done by tonight, other wise I may just go on a killing spree as my inordinate rage spills throughout my being, bending my will into an inordinate demon of wrath.
>>27817574It should be swift, brutal, and so devastating that hell looks like a tropical vacation.
>>27815042No, thank you for writing this awesome shit
>>27817444I wanted to kill that bastard. Since I couldn’t do that I wanted to leave as soon as possible so I wouldn’t have to watch what he was doing to that poor girl down there. However we had to stay a few moments longer, only to record what we saw on the tables. At least that was worth it, the information we obtained there was enough to enable us to avoid the guard for the next few weeks at least should worst come to worst. I am ashamed to say I thought I was building up almost a numbness to the horrors I saw. Whereas before it would send me in a blind rage to see an attractive elven woman dressed in a dancing outfit being dragged into the room and forced at sword point to wink at everyone through her tears and announce that she will be offering special dances all evening, now it just made my simmering rage even hotter. I was able to hold it down until Captain Rina finished with General Zinoviy’s boots and crawled up to him. She placed her hands on his knees and head almost in his lap, looked him in the eyes, and said in a sweet voice, “Master is there anything, and I mean anything, else I can offer you?” At this I almost got physically ill. I just couldn’t hold my rage in any more and was about to get sick as a result. Then unexpectedly I was saved by the arrival of Mr. Aldric (a sentence I never expected to write and hope never to have to use again).“My apologies but you will have to cut your amusements short with your toy,” Mr. Aldric hissed as the General and his men suddenly leapt to attention. “It has come to my attention that one of my other agents may have news for me. She’ll be in shortly.”
>>27817829Christ, I'm physically shaking from rage and a desire to feed those bastards their own organs.
>>27817829this is starting to get to skeleton quest levels of anger here its a good thing there is no god directly backing us or realities would be broken to make them suffer.
>>27817829>other agentThis gonna be good.
>>27817829>MFW MY RAGE MANIFESTS
>>27817829When the agent did come in, it gave me a start. To my surprise it was Nadja, the dwarf assassin from the Schatten Gilde in Hammerburg. I had written her off entirely, let that be a lesson to me. I stood there and listened to what the dwarf had to say, “Ahh. My agent arrives. Miss Nadja, I believe you found something?”“Alright Mr. Aldric. I’m not your agent. I’m only helping you because of what that dragon enchantress bitch did to Guildmaster Vinzenz. But, yes I did find something. So you know that Knight’s other woman? This Aimèe? Right, so after finding ridiculously little useful information on the Knight himself or the dragon bitch I turned to her. Turns out her father is pretty famous in the underworld. So I stopped tracking her as though she was a ladies maid and started acting like I was hunting a rogue member of the Schatten Gilde back home. And there I started finding trials. She’s been trained by one of the best, but she hasn’t got a lot of experience and that’s where I got her.”“So you have this Aimèe in captivity?”“No, I don’t actually have her – have her, but I know what she did recently. You see she contacted this small thieves group named the Sussurri Notturni about help with a mission. These six ladies evidently specialize in different crimes. It appears Aimèe contacted them to help the Knight.”General Zinoviy laughed a deep bellowing laugh, “So this Knight fellow is out there running around with six ladies in some sort of undercover mission? Well that’s-”Nadja interrupted him, “Seven if you include Aimèe, as well as you should. With probably three more waiting for him at their base when you count the runaway princess, the dragoness, and the dwarf wench. So ten women total.”The General laughed again at this. “Ten women! A man after my own heart. I’ll have to thank him for collecting them for me when I run him through!”
>>27818330So we're burning this place to the ground, right?Right now?
>>27818330I felt Veila pat my shoulder, “Steady on there Knighty boy. I’m sure you’ll get him when the time comes.”Before I could retort about not calling me “Knighty boy” or something, Nadja continued.“I don’t even know why I’m telling you this, I did my part to help you get the Knight when I shot that damned dwarf boy. He surrendered after that didn’t he? So how did he get loose again?”The General sighed, “He got loose through the incompetence of elves. Isn’t that right Captain Rina?”Rina, still kneeling nuzzled her head against Zinoviy’s knee and answered, “Yes Master, it is. I’m so sorry about my failures. Can’t I just make it up to you somehow?”As the general patted her head and told her to wait until later, Nadja, clearly uncomfortable with what she was seeing came to the point.“Right so as I was saying, the mission that Aimèe appears to have contacted the Sussurri Notturni about was the breaking into and infiltration of this palace.”
>>27818543>ohshitAlso, when is he gonna mind rape Nadja?
>>27818543That stopped the General’s laughter, “YOU DUMB LITTLE WHORE! WHY DIDN’T YOU START WITH THAT! THEY COULD BE HERE LISTENING TO US RIGHT NOW!” He turned to Mr. Aldric, “Sir, as my patron I must advise you to evacuate the area, I can provide an armed guard should you-““That will be unnecessary General. Find them. Now.”With that Mr. Aldric disappeared into smoke again and left the throne room.General Zinoviy was on his feet in an instant, he kicked the still kneeling Captain Rina out of the way and bellowed orders to his men. “Golden Sabers! Relay these orders to the men! All off duty Sabers who are still capable of action are recalled to duty now! Lock the palace servants up again so they can’t escape in the confusion! Double the garrisons on the entrances and exits and station men near the larger windows in the palace! The remainder of the men start searching for secret passages! Tap on the walls to sense if they have hollow points! Use the sledge hammers and the portable rams to break into any you find! Get moving now!”
>>27818459>>27818469>>27818291>>27818117>>27818080>>27817667>>27817619>>27817596>>27817569>>27817541>>27817495>>27817435Get on my level guys.
>>27818543>inb4 she knows that the operation is happening right now.
>>27818584>inb4 she throws a knife at our eye hole
>>27818570As the men were leaving and hustling off to carry off their instructions, Nadja turned and looked at our eyehole, she said outloud, “Yes, you guys go and do that. I’ll be off searching the town in case they’re not caught here. I’ll probably start with a seedy tavern near the warehouse district if anyone needs to find me.”Then she simply walked off, I immediately turned to Veila and said, “We need to go. Now.” To her credit, her girls were already packing up and getting ready to leave. We ran out as fast as we could but as we were nearing the exit the wall caved in in front of us. Two Golden Saber soldiers stood there in full battle regalia, and here I was with leather armor and my sword. I didn’t even have a real helmet. Fortunately the orc Catriona was prepared and quickly threw a smoke bomb on the ground, we ducked past the flailing guards and into the open corridor.As we ran, I noticed that there were only six of the women with us now, “Where is Catriona?” I called out.“She’s our strongarm and bodyguard! Let her take care of the soldiers! She can handle it!”I looked back to check on her anyways and managed to catch a glimpse of one Golden Saber handling her attention while the other went around to flank her and proceeded to cut her head off. “She couldn’t handle it ! She’s dead!” I bellowed at Veila.“What? Oh Gods above! We’ve got to get out now!”Behind us the men we were running away from were beginning to sound the alarm. Within moments more men would be upon us.
>>27818927And so the expendable thief squad crumbles.Sorry ladies.
>>27818117>skeleton questYou nigger, why'd you have to remind me.
>>27818927I'm guessing that maybe Nadja isn't so bad after all. She did tip the knight off about them knowing where the rest of the party is.
>>27818956>all those plus 90 rollsHuh.
Hey, if anyone sees blindslug can you tell him to get off his ass and get writing again? His ban should have been over weeks ago.
>>27818927Unfortunately we couldn’t get away in time, soon we were seeing men approach from multiple directions and it was becoming harder and harder to lose them, Veila made a tactical decision, “Split up girls! Divide try to buy each other time! Knight boy, Aimèe, you two come with me. Don’t worry, I’ll get you out of here.”Trusting in her for some reason, we headed off with her, she pulled us into another room and started to open a secret passage way, fortunately this time no portrait makeouts were needed and we were able to get into the tunnel quickly. We started running down the passage way after Veila when we heard Agata the felinid begging for her life, Veila stopped and turned to us, “I know that we’re in a hurry to leave, but can we check and see if we can help Agata? The poor girl doesn’t deserve to be abandoned to these sick scum.”
>>27819077she's not a catgirl, it's just a rare drop headgear
>>27819077 We quickly looked through the eyeholes, Agata was indeed there, cornered by two Golden Sabers with crossbows. She was trying to surrender, “Come on guys, I’m harmless! What could I do to you?”The first Golden Saber walked casually to get a better position for a shot. “A lot actually if you put your mind to it.”The second one nodded to back him up. “Well… I can put my mind to a lot of other things too. Things that can be fun for both of us! Would that help convince you to let me live?” As she spoke her tail twitched nervously. The first Saber nodded at the second, “You know it just might…” he said slowly.The second nodded, “How about you get to your knees and open your mouth wide for us?”
>>27819180Bolt to the face. Clever men.
>>27819180Agata looked hopeful for a moment, she did fall to her knees and opened her mouth wide, winking at the men and asking, “Is this better?”The first Golden Saber smiled said, “Much. Thank you.” Then he shot her in the mouth with his crossbow. Agata barely had time to look surprised before she fell over spasming as she died. The two Golden Sabers laughed together. “Dumb whore. What did she think was going to happen?”“Come on. Lets see how many of the others we can make fall for the same thing.”With that the two ran off away from our view.
>>27819204>Damn it! Curse you /tg/ and your cleverness!
>>27819238It's what I would've done. Logic is easy to predict.
>>27819221So much for helping the catgirl. I have the distinct feeling that all of our plucky band of girl thieves will be dead, except for one, who was the traitor. Veila, probably.
>>27819256>it's what I would have done>not capturing a prisoner>with our fucking mind control circlets
>>27819269Which are shown to not be 100% reliable.You don't capture a rogue you can't keep contained.
>>27819269Only worth it on important prisoners. These thieves are basically just redshirts, and the bad guys probably know it.
I'll be out for an hour. Be back after that though.
>>27819221:( killed off the catgirl yet we keep adding elves to the party...
>>27819441I doubt any of the thieves are going to live long enough to get added to the party.
>>27819441Thieves are not likely to join.
>>27819441killed off the orc girl too
>>27819441>>27819535Sorry about that. For what its worth I'm sure I'll accidentally add another one to the story before this is over and it'll probably be too developed to throw away too.
>>27819221Veila stepped away from the peephole, stunned. “Th-th-they just killed Agata. They just killed Agata. They just killed Agata! THEY JUST-“I cut her off by placing my hand over her mouth. “Not now. We’ll get through this later, but now we need to run. It’s the only way we’ll get out of here alive.”And so we ran. As we ran we could occasionally hear the scream of another unlucky girl as she was caught or the crashing of another wall as the soldiers broke their way into another section of the secret passages. However we did eventually get to the cellar with the smuggler’s passage. Veila stopped and waited by the entrance for a moment, I could tell she was hoping that some of the rest of the Sussurri Notturni would show up alive.
>>27820283As we were returning to the warehouse we started from, I decided that with the alert out about our presence, now would be a good time to change to my standard armor. Midway through the change, when Aimèe was just about to start helping me with my sabatons, I heard the click of a crossbow and looked up.There was Nadja, standing there with a loaded crossbow aimed at us. “Well, well, well. Looks like I caught the rare Knight in missing armor. What a find.”Feeling rather embarrassed I said, “You know, I probably shouldn’t have absolutely trusted you when you said you’d meet me back at our inn.”“Yeah. Probably not. But it its any consolation I did intend to until I remembered that you have a touchy dragoness and a touchier dwarf maid in there too. And evidently some elf princess. But I’m not here to talk about them. I need to talk to you about what happened to Guildmaster Vinzenz. I need to know how he died.
So, uh. Who's still here?
>>27820763here.I know I said keep the harem small, but I didn't quite mean eliminating the competitors...Feeling mighty sad now.
>>27820763i'm still here, murderboner still raging hard
>>27820763Shitloads, don't worry.
>>27820801It's all your fault. You should feel sad. You need to learn that there are consequences to your actions and that not everything always turns out peachy.
>>27820801I think its fine, gives a story a bit more oomph to have the generic band of plucky, charming thieves slaughtered when they encounter guards who actually know their shit.
>>27820763Just got here.
>>27820831Nope, sad time is over. Now I'm glad they're dead.
>>27820871Well then I hope you don't mind when I vote for us to kill the women and children in the Dark Souls Quest.
>>27820673And so I told her. I told her about how I was unconscious when the rest of my party found the bodies (I tactfully didn’t mention how that was because of her actions), I explained about the last words of the one man who wasn’t entirely dead yet, I described how each man had a gem and the magical effect that Martina found on the “reward” that Mr. Aldric had sent, and how similar this is to the way he treated others around him and how she saw he had powerful enchantment magics of his own. As I finished explaining, Nadja nodded slowly and said, “That does make sense… it would match some unusual aspects about his death that were puzzling me.”Aimèe looked up with a smile. “That’s right! Now that you know, you might consider-““Hah. Consider what girl? Joining up with your lot? I’m sure that I would probably have some sort of deep interpersonal revelation that leads to me falling in love with your boyfriend there like the rest of you girls, while taking him to bed sounds fun enough, I don’t think I’m going to be giving up my ways to follow him any time soon. Though for telling me about Mr. Aldric I’ll let you live for now. Just remember that I didn’t have to do that though next time you have me at your mercy.”She then turned to Veila, “And seriously woman. Get your act together. You called your little band a criminal element? You’re just lucky that none of those Gold Saber bastards have an ounce of criminal training. You could hear your girls moving around in the damn tunnels from where I was standing!”
>>27820890Wouldn't really mind
>>27820899With that she left as quietly as she came. Veila decided to head out, she claimed that she would try to find us again but that she needed to do a little bit of thinking first. And so me and Aimèe were left alone in the warehouse. As she finished helping me with my armor she said, “I really have been meaning to thank you since we got out of there. I didn’t want to say this in front of Veila, but the way that I was acting would have gotten me killed back there just as thoroughly as those other girls were. I owe you one.”“Relax Aimèe. You owe me nothing. I owe you some backlog from all the times you’ve helped me out with my armor and such. The least I can do is prepare you well for life.”Aimèe smiled a sad little smile, “All right then. For my favor I want you to kill all those bastards back at that palace. Okay? I’ll even help you do it.”I beamed back at her, “Sounds more than fair to me. Lets do it.”
>catgirl named Agata>deliberately killed offIs this just a coincidence or are you taking a stab at THE ONE WHO MUST NOT BE NAMED?
>>27821090Huh? Did I miss something?
I think the best opportunity our heroes would have at slaughtering lots and lots of those goldsabers would be taking advantage of their debauchery.Pull a red wedding and kill a bunch at some sort of party or festival once they are drunk.
>>27821132You know who I'm talking about.
>>27821162Actually, no. No I don't. Can you please enlighten me?
>>27821162Nobody know what you are talking about.
>>27821262Not ringing a bell
>>27821262Googled Agata Colette and Colette Agata. Got nothing.
>>27821320Only some retard spammer comes to mind.
>>27821320A what? You best be sticking to the core rulebook here laddy. We don't deal in any of those mary-sue races. Arrrgghhhhh.
>>27821040Dear Journal,The next day we got down to business. Everyone was horrified to hear what we saw in the castle and we got to work with a renewed effort. Several options have been presented thus far (Although Sieghild cautioned me against writing down my plans, I think I’ll ignore her just this once. After all, I’m storing this journal in my bag with Isocrates’ Rod so if I lose it we have far bigger problems anyways.) the first is to stage an uprising of sorts. While this is obviously impossible with the few of us by ourselves, we can always start trying to free certain officials from Mr. Aldric’s control. For example if we can get near Captain Rina (she has returned to work, for my peace of mind I didn’t check the date she came back on duty), we can probably physically restrain her long enough to remove that circlet from her head. With her testimony and the city guards on our side, we can move in towards the palace whereupon we can try to talk the royal guards around to joining us. If that works we will have every one of the Golden Sabers surrounded and can push in to destroy them. The second option is reusing the secret passages. While the Golden Saber have definitely found the passages within the palce, they may not have found the smugglers tunnels that lead under it. If not we can utilize those to create a surprise attack on the defenders, especially if they are fortifying against the main attack by our hopeful uprising. Both of these are good ideas and look like they could work out.
>>27821338As for things that are not proceeding so smoothly, Veila hasn't returned to us yet and Siegbert is significantly behind on his alchemy work. Sieghild says he’s still suffering from nightmares and poor sleep but is trying not to complain of it. She has tried to talk to him several times but he hasn’t been willing to share with her. Martina says that Sieghild has been so worried about her brother that she is starting to slip behind in her work too. I told them that I would talk to Siegbert this evening.
>>27821320I have no clue who that is still. Sorry.Though from that description I have to ask you not to enlighten me any further.
>>27821396>>27821337>>27821335The worst player to ever come from /tg/.Don't you know the story?
>>27821358Is he going to get a good spanking as well?
Rolled 88>>27821358Aww sheeeiiiiit, you'z getting mind controlled, Siegbert tell someone!!!
Alright. I'm going to take a break for a bit to recharge. Hopefully I won't just pass out but if I do please keep the thread alive/archived for me!Thanks again for reading,Knight of the Realm
Still resting. Just thought I'd share a little good news. Only a little bit more of the "Mr. Aldric and his men are the most evil scum on earth" journal entries before we can get back into the more enjoyable territory of relationship building and such. I just can't go back and forth between them. It gives me and presumably the reader mood whiplash and I can't see the characters relaxing after what Mr. Aldric and others have done. Thanks for bearing with the doom and gloom,Knight of the Realm
Alright /tg/ I'll admit. I'm bushed. I've got to crash. The good news is that I got a good 6,851 words in today.I'll pick this up tomorrow. In the interim please keep the thread alive/archived. Thanks again for your loyalty and support,Knight of the Realm
>>27822013Holy shit, more from the puppy kicking brigade?! I'm already foaming at the mouth and calling for a vengeful crusade powered by hate and rage. I've already caused damage to vegetables and 2x4s, I'm running out of replaceable things.
>>27822404By "a little bit more" I intended to mean that the party was about to have their major battle against them. I don't think I'm up for writing another tour of their atrocities for a while.
>mfw reading Time to cry havoc, and let slip the hogs of war.
Alright, that's it. Time to bring the hammer down.Congrats, KotR; it might just be because I'm LETTTING myself get invested, but I'm REALLY looking forward to seeing Adric and his minions get eviscerated in the most brutal way you can possibly imagine.Fire and the sword is too good for them. I want to see some real harm befall them! Why oh why doesn't the party have a cleric? Or a paladin? I want to see some divine wrath! Summon the GOD DAMN FAIRY LAW! I WANT THEM DEAD!>Britfag.exe is currently experiencing an overload of rage. Please stand by.>Theme tune for the coming divine retributionhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x6qaCutkcsM
I second the britfag.We need some DIVINE RETRIBUTION here.I'm guessing the knight doesn't approve torturing people, but Aldric and that death knight deserve the slowest death possible. Therefore torture doesn't cut it. We need a barbarian brawler who would quite literally beat people into a pool of blood and scrap metal.
Divine retribution is too good for these bastards.However, since it's all we have, it will have to do.
>>27823965bumpin once more.
>>27821338>>27821358i bet feliceta needs some talking too, well if the knight told her about her mother... then again i think he didn't.bah whatever.>>27823655agreed.
>>27823655>>27823810>>27823965You guys are forgetting Martina. I think turning some of those shitbags into a dragoness' chew toy would be a fitting death. And I'm sure if Seigbert can shake whatever he's dealing withmind control, he can whip up a few NASTY poisons. And there's always gut wounds.
>>27824834to be fair, we haven't seen too much from martina besides "still bein' a dragon, doo be doo" for a little while. My money's on some party fallout when her years give her a more jadd response than everyone else to aldric and his men's atrocities. possibly followed by her taking some of the matters into her own hands. or maybe knight's gonna have to convince her
>>27825239nah, Aldric has tried to kill her and the Knight.No way is she not going to care about that
>>27824834>>27825239>>27825248The issue is the balistae and those wingbinder spells. A dragon's scales are tough as steel armour, but a balista can punch through them relatively easily. Normally, this would be countered by a dragon's aerial mobility, but with the wingbinder spells, Martina would be forced to the ground and swiftly turned into an over-sized salamander pincushion.Still, take those out of the picture and draconic wrath's almost as good as divine, with the added bonus of coming from a large creature with teeth as big as your arm!Say... Who here thinks Seigbert can whip up something extra-nasty for the Golden Saber? Medieval sarin nerve gas would be sweet and delicious justice.
>>27825300>Say... Who here thinks Seigbert can whip up something extra-nasty for the Golden Saber?That's why he's been slipping, he's trying out new and extra interesting ways to repay Mr Aldric.calling it now.
>>27825343I say they go all Night Lord on those fucktards
>>27826079They'd have to do some seriously nasty stuff, though, to outnasty the Golden Sabre fuckwads. That being said, eviscerate, strangle with their own entrails, gouge out eyes, sever fingers and place in eye sockets, cut out tongue, stuff eyes in mouth, stuff tongue in stomach cavity, skin 'em alive, sever gonads, shove up nostrils. Y'know, for starters.
>>27826292C'mon, we have magic and alchemy. This kind of torture is easy.We get a clod of dirt, and we make it cherry red with heat. Then you just enchant it so it holds that heat indefinitely, and something to stop it leaving their body.And healing potions to keep them from dying, ofcourse.Good times.
>>27826292skinning. You forgot skinning. And maybe force feeding them their camarades' entrails.
>>27826316>>27826387Does anybody else not want to descend to their level?I mean, I want every last one of the fuckers dead. But I don't want to be them.
>>27826391I'm also up for burning them alive on the pyre of our rage.But Aldric will suffer.
>>27826399I kind of want to make them beg for their lives first before slaughtering them all.
>>27826391Knightbro would never let it happen.And nobody wants to risk losing out on the dick to challenge him on it.
>>27826079>>27826292>>27826316In case we've forgotten, Sir Knight is a good guy. And I thought we were as well. There's a fine line between swift, brutal and sweet justice; and turning as bad as they are.By all means, I'm hoping they all die horribly and messily, but not through torture. No-one deserves that. Hang, draw and quarter them; behead them; burn them at the stake; let Martina indulge herself... But those are relatively quick deaths.
>>27826399Yeah, I'd be ok with that. But a quick gutting is all the rest of them deserve. We have better things to do with our time. Though, gutting doesn't mean they die quickly. Bleeding out is a horrible way to go.
>>27826411>implying we're giving Mr. Aldric the sweet release of deathHe really doesn't deserve it.
>>27826420speaking of which, I've heard that shooting someone through the liver give them a slow and painful death
>>27826430Gut shot is best. Usually the stomach I think.They'll bleed out slowly while screaming like a stuck pig the entire time.
>>27826411I'm hoping that a psychopathic/sociopathic character is introduced specifically just to do all these things, but then I guess that would be necessary and probably detract from the Knight's story, huh?
Maybe the alchemist could mix up some napalm or greek fire?
>>27826487>necessarySorry, meant Unnecessary
>>27826500>Implying dragonfire is not enough to do the jobMoving away from brutal justice... Is anyone else of the opinion that Martina's really not done a whole lot of dragon stuff? She may as well just be another caster. I mean, I get that stealth's a priority here, but now we're actually starting to move again, I'm hoping we get to see her show off some of those key features that set a dragon smack-dab above humans and the other races, even in their humanoid forms!Basically, for a story of a knight who saved a dragon from a princess, we're seeing all too much not-princess and not enough big, scaly, majestic, powerful, awe-inspiring, fire-breathing, flying king of the sky, here.
>>27826561This is true. She got wingbound right after the dragonmoot, and basically hasn't shifted since.
>>27826410>>27826411Yeah, I know he is. The skinning and severing was just me running with a "Sir Knight is actually Sir Night Lord" idea. I'm sure Sir Knight will deliver swift justice to all. Except maybe Aldric and Zonoviy, theirs will be slower, but I'm sure not torturous(at least by Sir Knight, Seigbert might want some revenge...)
>>27826561yeah, i feel as if we don't get enough of her dragon form and all
Alright I'm back. Story will resume momentarily. >>27824832>FelìcitaSir Knight has told her about her mother. It wouldn't be right to keep that from her, however Felìcita hasn't fully... processed this fact yet.
>>27821358Dear Journal,Well that was a long evening.It started with Siegbert. I found him at his desk, absentmindedly grinding up some alchemical component. A bottle of beer sat by his desk, untouched. He was staring ahead with a thousand yard stare that wouldn’t look out of place on a traumatized soldier.
>>27827205Dear Journal,Well that was a long evening.It started with Siegbert. I found him at his desk, absentmindedly grinding up some alchemical component. A bottle of beer sat by his desk, untouched. He was staring ahead with a thousand yard stare that wouldn’t look out of place on a traumatized soldier. I walked up to him quiety, “Siegbert, you’re beginning to worry all of us. You aren’t sleeping, you’re not working, you’re not even drinking. What’s wrong?”He was silent for a long moment. Then he turned to look at me. I could see from the shadows under his eyes that he hadn’t slept in ages. He looked me in the eyes and plaintively said “Why me?”“I’m sorry? What do you mean by-““Why did Mr. Aldric choose me? In the cell, he only took one look at you to figure out that pain wouldn’t work on you, but me he hurt.”“I’m sorry, I know its unfair but-““No! No. It’s fair. I don’t care about that. But why did it work on me? Why am I so weak? Everyone else around me is strong and capable, but all I’m good for is the occasional drink! Even Sieghild and Martina can mix my alchemical components when I’m gone! What good am I?”
>>27827307Stop reminding me in an amazing thread that another amazing thread won't be happening for weeks!
>>27827391Time to paladin it up!
>>27827391...Well fuck, now I need a drink. A strong one. This is hitting way, WAY too close to home and today of all days, I really do not need it.
>>27827536Sorry about that. If it helps, I've been through similar and am just beginning to reach the other side of it. Maybe the resolution will help a little? No promises though.
>>27827391Ah. That was it. He was feeling guilty about being a “weak point” in our little team. “Siegbert, you’re not weak. You’re just not… You know what? I’m going to let you in on a little secret. Okay? It’s about pain and why it’s useful sometimes.”He looked at me confused so I continued, “I learned this from a Knight-Commander named Theodore my first year as a squire. The thing about pain, suffering, and most miserable experiences is that they make you stronger on the long run. You don’t wish them on someone for any reason, but when they are through with them they are a stronger person for it. In training a young soldier can take hundreds of embarrassing and sometimes painful blows with practice swords in order to perform well when faced with the real thing. Sometimes the practice blades are weighted to be heavier than actual swords so the real one feels light in the soldier’s hands. Commander Theodore called this idea ‘The Strenuous Life’ and he tried to live it every day.”Siegbert looked at me, “But what does being miserable have to do with strength?”“Its not about misery. Being miserable is about failure. What it is about is being challenged. I’ve been challenged by pain before, and I came out stronger for it. You weren’t experienced with physical pain so he tried to use it on you.”
>>27827865Siegbert looked down miserably, “But I failed that challenge. I keep seeing him in my sleep, in my dreams…”“That’s not failure. That’s fear. Fear is remembering being miserable. Stop that. Remember being challenged instead. Think about what you faced. Think about how it came to be. Think about how it was resolved. If it wasn’t to your liking, think about what you can do better at next time and work towards that.”As I was about to stand up, Siegbert turned to me again and spoke in a timid and concerned voice, “But that challenge wasn’t aimed at me. It was aimed at you. He wanted you to turn the rod over, and you almost did. What are you going to do better next time?”“That’s easy. I’m going to shove a sword up his rib cage before he can lay another finger on one of my friends.”
>>27827536>>27827564Might not exactly be applicable to your situation, but I hope you at least feel better soon.
>>27828181Thanks for thinking of me, at least.But this isn't a Britfag pity-party thread. Come on! I want to see Adric choking on his own blood, his minions slain, his spells defeated and wondering how all his plans had come to an end at the point of a vengeful knight errant's sword!
Sorry, writing Felìcita's response to hearing about her mother is harder than I thought.Have Knight-Commander Theodore by way of apology.Has anyone archived this thread yet? I need to leave a bit early today and these threads usually die on day 3. I would archive it myself but that feels a bit vain.
>>27828914>these threads usually die on day 3I'm not sure we realize how cool that is.
>>27828936Huh? Why is that cool. I thought that threads just got pruned around that day at the latest.
>>27829133No. Threads can be alive for weeks as long as they get bumped.
>>27829133The fact that they last that long without getting pruned, and that you've been running this nearly straight for four threads, is awesome.
>>27828159“That’s easy. I’m going to shove a sword up his rib cage before he can lay another finger on one of my friends.”And with that I left Siegbert to think for a while. I went to find Felìcita. I needed to make sure she was taking the news about what happened to her family well.I found her sitting on the roof of the inn, looking over towards the palace and the star’s above it. I sat down next to her and she turned and smiled at me. “Hello Master Knight. Can I do something for you?”“Felìcita I was about to ask the same question. Are you feeling alright? I know that hearing about your parents today must have shaken you up a lot inside, but you’re barely showing it. Is there anything you want to talk about?”
>>27828914Foolz saves all /tg/ threads, doesn't it?
>>27829225Or 4pleb. But only for so long, typically.
>>27828914Archived for you, Knight Of The Realm. In return, I demand a sacrifice of blood. Villain's blood, to be precise. Preferably Adric's. Make it happen.
>>27829182“No Master Knight, I mean yes, I mean no…”I looked at her confused and she continued, “I mean there are a lot of things I’d like to talk to you about and ask you, but I want to wait on them,” she looked me in the eyes at this next bit, “Asking you for these things with my mother and father captive now wouldn’t be right. However I’d like to speak with you about me staying… staying with you after this is done.”She blushed bright red as she said that last piece. I nodded slowly and replied, “You aren’t talking about just joining me on my quest to destroy Isocrates’ Rod, are you?”She said nothing at this, only blushing harder, so I continued, “Waiting for your parents to be free speaks well of your discipline, and of you in general. Once we get your parents out of Mr. Aldric’s grasp, we’ll talk more. But I want you to know this, if you continue to improve the way you have, it will always be a pleasure to have you at my side.”A bright smile beamed across Felìcita’s face at this. “Thank you Master, I – I mean thank you Master Knight, I would be honored to join you.”I decided to ignore that little slip for now, “I just wanted to make sure that you’re okay. You will tell me if you feel upset about what’s happening, right? No scratch that question. You will tell me if you feel upset about what’s happening, and that’s an order. Is that clear?”Felìcita immediately perked up, “Yes Master Knight! So far, I’ve been trying not to really think about what happened. I know what happened and it makes me angry as you can expect, but I’m really, really, really trying not to picture the details. It just makes me uneasy and I’d prefer to avoid that.”I sighed, “Alright Felìcita. Make sure to let me know if anything changes. You should get some rest. In the next few days we’ll be getting your parents free. You have my word on that.”
>Quick question. How are my "serious" interpersonal issues going? Are they realistic and serious enough or should I not even bother?
>>27829360Leaving Felìcita for the time being, I went down stairs into the inn to deal with the last personal issue of the night. Aimèe was a bit surprised when I came up to her and she asked if there was anything she could help me with.“Yes. I need you to find me Veila. We’re going to need her help for this next bit.”We went back out into town again; fortunately the information gained from the palace was of immense help to us in avoiding the guard patrols. We slowly made our way back to “The Robin’s Nest” and asked around about Veila. Evidently no one had heard of her, so Aimèe had to try a few of her father’s tricks again. Soon we had a location that Veila evidently used to bunk down a few times. However, of far greater concern to us was the news that two men in black armor with golden swords on the pauldrons were also after her.
>>27829863As such we hurried as fast as possible to the location where Veila evidently made her home. To our dismay, the door was kicked in and we could hear voices upstairs. As quietly as possible we crept our way upstairs and prepared to act.We overheard three people in the next room. One was Veila, the other two seemed likely to be the Golden Saber solders we heard about before. They were busy interrogating her.“Come on elf. Why are you being so damn difficult about this? There’s no reason to hold out on this.”“You sick swine killed my friends! They were like family to me!”“Yeah, yeah. But really apart from that what? I mean, what were those guys and girls really doing for you?”“G-guys and girls? What do you… Oh Gods no, tell me that you didn’t…”“Oh yeah. Your little mate down in the slums? We found him. For what its worth, if he ever told you that he’d die for you, he was telling the truth. Unfortunately you were foolish enough to leave a hair brush at his place. Those stray hairs really helped our mages track you down. Poor, poor, foolish whore.”“But… but why? Why are you even telling me this? Do you think I’m suddenly going to spill everything when I have nothing left to lose?”Suddenly there was a hard edge to the soldier’s voice, “Listen here you little whore. You have so much left to lose that you don’t even know about, alright?”
>>27830040Suddenly however he was calm, “But no. No I don’t think you’ll give this up voluntarily. That’s why we brought this lovely little collar here. You see, once we put it on you you’ll be begging us to let you tell us everything you know; and trust me, the fun won’t stop there. However you can spare yourself all that, if you just tell us where he is voluntarily. Then we’ll merely kill you and go on our merry way. Come on, what will that stupid Knight ever do for you anyways? Its not like he’ll stop what’s about to happen to you?”I couldn’t help it. I stormed into the room and said in the calmest voice I could, “Well now gentlemen, that’s where you’re wrong. Dead wrong.”
>>27829496You're doing great so far!>>27830040Kill them! Kill them! Kill them! Kill them!Let the blood of the guilty be spilled! Here starts the rebellion! GLORIOUS JUSTICE IS AT HAND! LONG LIVE THE DRAGON KNIGHT!>Excuse me, I need to re-boot my brain, seeing as it's apparently suffering from an over-dose of bloodlust and enthusiasm.
>>27830060Now, the Golden Saber is home to some of the worst creatures still within their mortal coil. I could never adequately describe the disgust I feel for every man who wears their colors. However, I will say one positive thing about them, they know how to fight. Before I even finished speaking, they were up and had their weapons and shields drawn and facing me. Reacting through training instilled instincts they both charged at me, attempting to flank me. I stepped back into the stairwell, accepting the poor balance and elevation as a fair trade for their momentum and flanking, this allowed me to parry both their strikes with my shield and sword. My attempt to return the blow was foiled by their teamwork, one would work on blocking and holding my blade while the other attacked and their combined efforts were beginning to get to me. Aimèe was franticly darting back behind me, looking for an opening to move around behind the Golden Sabers and flank them, but the narrow stairwell wouldn’t allow it. Realizing that this fight wasn’t going my way, I looked around and saw a lamp hanging above the entrance to the building. At that moment I had an idea. I called out to Aimèe to fall back and retreated down the stairs. The Golden Sabers followed with renewed energy, sure they were coming close to victory. As they were passing through the entrance way, I lunged and struck the lamp over their heads spilling its oily contents on them. To my dismay, they remained standing upright and didn’t even slide on the oil puddle as they forced me further and further into the street.
>>27830357The first one laughed at me, “So this is the famous Knight. I had heard good things about you and your combat skills, but I must say, I’ve been disappointed. I expected better. I think I’ll just kill you here and go back to torturing that whore upstairs.”At this moment I saw red, I remembered a fight that seemed like ages ago, the fight against that first ambush by Mr. Aldric’s mercenaries. I remembered what I was feeling then, the need to protect Martina and Aimèe. I focused on that again and expanded it. I thought about how not only would Aimèe and Martina suffer this time, but so would Siegbert, Sieghild, Felìcita, and even people I barely knew like Veila and Captain Rina. I concentrated on those feelings, dwelling deep within my chest and pushed them away, down my arms and into my blade. Suddenly, as when fighting that wizard, the blade burst into flames. I struck out with the blade of fire, hitting my oil drenched opponents and watched as they burst into flames. As they shrieked and dropped their weapons and shields, I plunged the tip of my sword into the gaps in their face plates, ending them immediately.
>>27830378shouldn't have wasted the effort. Just let them burn.
>>27830378The street was silent for a long time after that. Finally Aimèe broke it with a low whistle, “You know, after something like that, you can’t expect a girl not to think she’s in some bard’s epic. You should have let them burn longer though.”I shook my head, “Justice isn’t about inflicting pain on others. Its about alleviating suffering as best as possible. While leaving them alive would have sated a thirst for vengeance, it also could have impeded justice. What if their flailing had led them to the puddle of oil near Veila’s house? What if the resulting fire killed the girl? What if their screams attracted more of their friends who finished what they began? No. You always kill as cleanly as possible. Creating suffering in others never ends well, a lesion the Golden Saber will soon learn. Now come, lets get that poor girl out of there.”
Blood for the blood god!Er, wait, that's wrong, isn't it?
>>27830112Oh god, I know that outfit and hair.
>>27830468Veila took a bit of time to get going. It turned out that she had a lot of her own treasures in her home that she wanted to pack before she abandoned this home for good. Aimèe spent the time recovering what she could from the Golden Saber remains; she had a good point when she pointed out that it could possibly be used as some form of disguise in the upcoming attack.Finally we were leaving. In the distance we could hear the calls of the city guard stumbling on the scene and calling an alert. Veila turned to me and asked, “So, Knighty-boy. Do you make a habit of rescuing women from trouble?”Before I could tell her off again about the nickname, Aimèe interjected, “Yes. Yes he does. All the time,” and with that she proceeded into an abridged version of our adventures so far with Veila hanging on to every word. By the time we got back to our inn Veila had reciprocated with some of her own tails of her escapades and the two were practically sisters. I have the feeling that our little party has just increased by one.
>>27830712The harem grows.
>>27830712Shouldn't she be in depression or suffering from PTSD? She seems to have recovered rather quickly.
Alright, I need to go. I've got some errands I need to run before tonight's weekly game. With any luck, I'll be able to update the story or at least get a bit of writing done later tonight.I'll see you tomorrow afternoon at the latest though.
>>27830748fare thee well, Sir Knight.
>>27830712What >>27830744 said. Plus, with Mr. Adric's time in this world drawing ever-shorter, I'm thinking the king's going to need a new royal advisor soon. Neatly resolves her plotline and keeps the party coughharemcough from growing larger through repetition. We already have one elf chick. Two is pushing it, unless there's a gimmick, like twins, or something. Yeah, I know it's nonsensical and realistically, she has an even chance of joining, or not, but narratively, she needs to stay out.
>>27830938>>27830744Adrenaline is a hell of a drug, but it would make sense for her to crash after they get back to the inn.
>>27830938They could be cousins or something.That works
So I finished packing for tonight and decided to check this before I left. Quick question /tg/. What do you think of the following characters overall?A) Veila. I originally meant for her to be the counter/foil to Felìcita with the two taking an antagonistic stance/rivalry towards each other in a lot of things. However she has more drifted towards Aimèe so far, but then again she hasn't met Felìcita in person yet.B) Captain Rina. Not a lot of character development yet, but you can expect her to be what Felìcita was supposed to be as a commander in the border guard.C) I guess any of the thief girls I gave a line or two of description to? Did any of them really appeal to you or something?
>>27831312I kinda miss the acatgirl and ork.
>>27831312>VeilaShe's alright, as a character, but I'm not sure if she's perfectly portrayed. You might want to try another PoV of her, to give another's perspective. Felicita might well be a good angle for this, if she's jealous, or if they get along begrudgingly well. As yet, we don't have much to go on.>Captain RinaMUCH more of a compelling character, I'm sorry to say. It's the interesting juxtaposition of her present, helpless state, unable to even struggle against it and the hints of a capable, intelligent woman, behind that. I'm eager to see what she does when that circlet is off her.>The other thievesWho?Seriously, we have even less on them, than Veila. To form an opinion, they need to be made memorable in some way. I feel like this story has so many attractive, capable female characters, they're all starting to blend together somewhat. You need to make the new ones stand out, if you want them to stick in our minds. Given that this is hardly a visual medium, their actions, rather than their appearances, will usually be what readers remember.
>>27831533Would love to see more of Rina
>>27831617So would I, but not like last time. I'd like to see her going all Judge Dredd on those bastards.
Good (for you) news everyone! Due to illness in my gaming group, tonight's game is cancelled and I will resume writing soon.
>>27832617I'm sorry, mate.
>>27832617That is indeed Good news!Also Good news everyone, is that I read all that in Professor Farnsworth's voice!and you all did too.
>>27832714>>27832617But seriously, bad luck on the game night and I hope the people in question get better soon.
I'm kind of sad that Martina has been a non-presence in the story for a while.
>>27832713>>27832737Its okay. Sorry its taking so long to get back. >>27832784She'll be back soon.
>>27832784she has been on the spotlight at the beginning you know.>>27831617Rina will need A LOT of work IF she does join the group.>>27831312Veila would be good for Aimèe, she will be a constant reminder of what would she have become if she doesnt have more control of her abilities (over the top thief shenanigans).love too see more of her.Rina... well i am just hoping her PTSD's wont slow the group down if she does joins...C.) i want more cat girls.
>>27832714So did I and I said it...
>>27833279careful what you wish for, he may introduce a whole tribe of them after this arc.
>the hot springs arc is on the way after this whole aldric debacle is over with I think that'll be a good opportunity to expand on some of the finer points of the characters, and how they can be distinguished besides their particular race and class.As for >>27831312Veila i really can't see staying with the group, as it is she already expressed a non-interest in knight, and on top of that had a leadership position; I doubt she'd be interested in being another follower. How you resolve her dramatoc losses could have a heavy influence on this though.Rina could be an excellent addition to the party, though i feel it would be an either/or of her or felicita staying in elf-ville to assist the king after this is all done. considering felicita's heavy involvement with the knight at this point, i suspect she'd win out over rina.The other theives are dead. they might of been interesting characters, but they weren',t written for in the end. perhaps next time you introduce a rival squad of people, they might not die, and they could become an interesting diversion /side story.
>>27830712That evening, I sat down with Veila and explained to her what I intended to do. I asked her about ways in and out of the guard stations where Captain Rina could be found and how best to get near her without getting in a fight with the very guards we’re hoping to recruit. She said that a few of the guards could be relied on to look the other way for a sufficient amount of gold, but not enough to reliably provide a way in. Then the discussion took a different turn.“However,” Veila said leaning back in her chair and planting her feet on the table, “we don’t have to take her from a guard house…”“What do you have in mind?”“I was thinking… an ambush? With the Capt’n personally leading the hunt for us at Mr. Aldric’s behest, she’s probably doing a lot of moving throughout the city. If we can grab her in the middle of one of those moves, we can bypass a lot of the troubles involved with breaching a guard compound.”
Is this thread already in autosage? Its already on page 10...
>>27833937Yes, new thread time
>>27833959All right then. I'll post the new thread and what I've managed to write once this one finishes dying.
>>27833971Just start up a new thread and link it here, we'll follow